This was awesome. Now, my question is this... you're new, and this is your first warstory, how were you able to manage to make it really good? It seems everyone else that is posting their first warstory isn't able to do this. =P
Haha, with that said, excellent read dude. The K-fucking-O bit with Heatran made me giggle, and the comments were very detailed, I felt like I could see inside your head. You explained yourself well. Easily one of the best 5th gen stories to date.