Okay your commentary is simply stellar. I don't think I could ask for anything more from it. Looking down your warstory it seems like you say more at the start and less at the end, but it honestly is no issue at all.
Probably my biggest qualm is the endgame being not as dramatic as I expected due to the misplay on your opponent's part with Ditto. You played the Shandy revelation very well however, and I'm glad you explained why the hax in your battle, annoying as it was, didn't matter so much. Also although the battle wasn't the most epic I've ever seen, your writing made it seem like it was.
But yeah aside from the minor misplays it was an almost perfect warstory and I look forward to more from you! Don't really have a request - just keep playing with unusual non-gimmicky stuff (like Nido, who is very useful yet somewhat rare) that you like and you'll surely get some more good material.