I loved that story GK! If that were a book, I would have buyed it right away after reading the preview. You kept the personalities intact (which is IMO, one of the most important things in reading), and you made it funny, which made it easy to get glued to. Overall, I think you did a nice job. A nice enough job to continue the storyline!
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