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Old Jun 18th, 2012, 5:57:50 PM   #56
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Apparently my previous entries weren't very interesting, so I submit these instead:

Mantle Pokemon

Black: Its tongue can move faster than a human can blink. Scientists are researching ways to apply this discovery.

White: The fluids in its shells are secreted about once a month, and are often used as a super-powerful glue.

Again, feedback is much appreciated.

Feedback for others:

SubwayJ: stick with the diamond one. It's more easily recognizable.
ProjectMars: remove one occurence of "despite." It's an awkward repetition. Nice White entry.
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