Originally Posted by Fat capefeather
Regarding Banette: Yes, I'm aware that there are species that are kind of treated as if they didn't evolve from something and/or don't evolve into something when they do. However, the specific usage of hatchlings is what gets me about it. Banette's entry is merely implausible, while Mollux hatching when it has pre-evos would be simply ridiculous.
Then go with the "baby" form explanation with Sea Incense, Wave Incense, or another made up Incense. All of a sudden, most Mollux probably are born as Mollux, but we still get a prevo to play with. There are so many perfectly viable ways to "fix" such issues that I just have a hard time believing that it's a legitimate objection. I just don't see that as a good reason to shoot down any entries.
Maybe it is just subjective, but I think that flavor portions of CAP like this should be as open as they can possibly be or else we're just going to miss out on a lot of very creative ideas and end up with an uninspiring slate. Criticisms like yours (no hatchlings, no interaction with other Pokemon, nothing scientifically exceptional) just read to me like a list of how to needlessly restrict entry creativity.
Either way, the reason that I respond isn't to have an argument. I think we both know we don't need that. The reason that I respond to sweeping criticisms like yours that apply in a big way to a lot of existing and possible entries is just because I don't want those submitting entries to get the idea that they're generally agreed upon just because nobody has voiced disagreement. For that reason, I suppose it's also fair that you voiced your disagreement with my own rather sweeping criticism. It's probably best that we just leave it at that.
Regarding the science thing: Yes, I'm also aware that Pokémon flavour butchers science all the time. paintseagull loves to point out how ridiculous Hurricane and Hail are, for example. That does not, imo, make it okay.
Then it's a good thing that the species name is open to various interpretation (exactly why it's awesome), many of which do not butcher science at all. ^_~
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Anyway! I told myself that I was going to do this, so here's some mass feedback:
In alphabetic order by poster name...
Birkal: I like this entry. As I've already said, I think the black entry especially is brilliant in how it describes Pokemon-human interaction.
bugmaniacbob: Hahaha. You cray. Seriously, though, the first two sets are great, and I like them. I like the second set better, though I might change "idiot" to "fool"? That would seem less harsh of a word and more fitting for a Pokedex entry, in my opinion.
Bull of Heaven: I like entries where it turns out the Pokemon was the answer to a mystery, but it seems left a little vague. Maybe remove the second sentence of the first entry and replace it with the first sentence of the second entry? That might give you more room to better describe the former mystery
capefeather: Besides my earlier criticisms, which you're already familiar with, the first and second entries seem to conflict on how Mollux obtains its sustenance. I could infer that it works like a camel's hump or something like that, but it might be nice to see that described in more detail.
CiteAndPrune: I like where you're going with describing aspects of the toxin within its shell, but I think maybe you should keep that to just one of the entries. It seems off to me for the two sentences of the first entry not to relate to one another while the two sentences of the second entry do?
Darklatias92: I like this entry, especially the first one. The only thing I might worry about is the scientific accuracy of the second entry, just because I have no idea what pure liquid phosphorous actually looks like or how closely it matches the artwork.
DetroitLolcat: I like this entry. It might come off as somewhat basic considering some of the other entries, but it's definitely still solid.
Drifblim: I like this entry. Your white entry especially is adorable, and I love it. My only criticism is that I might use a word other than "expresses" in the first entry just because that's of a more sentient intention, maybe something more like "denotes", "indicates", or "reveals"?
Eagle4: I like this entry. Though, your Black and White entries seem to conflict on its preferred environment? I suppose it can simply be deduced that its life cycle begins deep in the ocean before it eventually ventures onto dry land to play with Shuckle.
Eszett: I think that you should change the "to" in your first entry to "and" for clarity, but I otherwise like it. Though, I don't understand what your second entry means by "illuminate surroundings for territory".
Flarephoenix332: I would like your White entry a lot were it not for the fact that Mollux is so large. If it were smaller, like a foot tall, then I think it would be a lot more believable for it to be bred en mass like the entry suggests. Maybe instead of making an excellent lamp it makes an excellent something else useful to humans?
fryfrey: I think it's a cute idea to relate its health to how much toxin is in its shell. I'd like to see the white entry be a bit longer and more descriptive, though.
GRs Cousin: I like this entry. I like both your Black and White entries above your extra entry, so keep those. This seems to be one of the only entries discussing Mollux's demeanor to actually feature it as friendly, and so I'm a big fan of your White entry.
Jirachi6: I like this entry. The Black entry is a great example of a Pokedex entry describing how a Pokemon impacts its environment. The only thing that I'm unsure about is the other entry calling out its typing, which I don't think is done in any real Pokedex entries, though I could be wrong.
Kaprikorn: The Black entry seems a bit too vague for my liking; maybe mention an area that they hope to apply it? "Secreted" may not be the word you want to use for the White entry; I like the general idea, though, so just playing around with the wording and word choice may be enough to make it a winner in my book.
kevlarscale: The first entry is fine, but the second entry is confusing. The initial clause doesn't seem to logically lead to the second.
kickmeimirish: I like this entry. I generally worry that attempting to justify Dry Skin through Pokedex entry would feel somewhat forced, but I think you pulled it off. The only change I might make is to the second sentence of the black entry, replace "they" with "these colors".
Level 51: I like this entry, especially the seriously scientific wording you've used. It's different, and some people may not appreciate it, but I do. It may still hurt you when it comes to the voting rounds, though.
Meganium Sulfate: I like this entry. The second one especially is very cute, and cute always wins me over. My only change would be to combine the first one into a a single sentence, but that may just be a personal sentence structure preference.
Midnight Show: I like this entry a lot. The only criticism that I could come up with is that I might change "hypothesize" to "theorize", but other than that, they're pretty much perfect. They're fantastic examples of a Pokedex entry demonstrating a Pokemon's relationship with other Pokemon and with humans.
Nyktos: I like this entry. It might come off as somewhat basic considering some of the other entries, but it's still solid.
nyttyn: I like this entry, but it seems short. It leave me wanting for more detail, especially the second one, though I'm not sure if you intended that.
Project_Mars: As somebody else said, it feels odd to use the "despite" wording for both entries, but it's nothing that rewording can't fix. Otherwise, I think that you're onto something in that second entry about the shell material being a great insulator.
Pwnemon: I like this entry, and I've already told you that and explained why both in this thread and over chat. =)
Quanyails: As you may have guess from my earlier sweeping statement, I'm not much of a fan of your second entry because it just describes what cone snails do. I like your first entry, though.
R7Rules: Ooh, I like the second entry describing how it makes its poison. The first one, though, feels pretty basic, which may be a good or bad thing depending on how you look at it. Also, I'm pretty sure the TL already set the height, weight, and gender ratio for Mollux.
Sound: The second entry feels pretty basic, which may be a good or bad thing depending on how you look at it. The oil spill thing, though, I think is a very neat and dramatic idea.
srk1214: The first entry is adorable, but unfortunately, it's not very believable considering how it conflicts with the height and weight set in stone by the TL.
SubwayJ: Instead of saying "slightly softer than diamond", I would suggest "almost as hard as diamond". I think that's a cute way, by the way, of using the Pokedex entry to justify it not getting Shell Smash. About the White entry, I think I already told you over chat, but Pokedex entry mysteries that could be solved by simple dissection aren't quite to my personal liking.
The Reptile: I like it. This is really the sort of entry where you have to read both of them together to get the full effect. As first I thought these entries conflicted because the liquid could reach temperatures high enough for its own shell to melt, which would be bad, but then I realized you were going for an explanation for why it's hurt by heat.
TheStarRapper: I like this entry... but... that second one... is so sad. ;_;
Urza: I like the second entry a lot, but I just don't get the first one. Is it some joke that's just flying over my head?
...And that's everyone! ^_^
EDIT: Quick response...
Originally Posted by Fat Darklatias92
well, the connection with Combee is unexpected, like the relationship between Spoink and Clamperl. Interesting fact, but I don’t see the point. Why it loves wax? Is there a particular reason? If there is one you should explain it, or simply say “nobody knows why…”. Anyway, good entries!
It's a lava lamp. That stuff that you see floating around in lava lamps is wax. =)
Anyway, thanks, I'm glad you like my entries!