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Furais · Nov 30th, 2012, 11:03:58 PM

I haven't been posting here for awhile, mostly because I've been sick...and writing chapters takes awhile...I've progressed far along the game by now, but my chapter writing is lacking. Maybe I should just stop playing and catch up on my chapters. But anyways, this isn't much, but here's chapter 2.

CHAPTER 2

Strolling through Route 1 merrily with Caim (Who still dislikes me, but we put up a business-like relationship, mainly he leaves me alone and vice versa.) I happened to encounter my first wild Pokemon. It was a tiny rustle in the grass, but before I knew it, a Rattata jumped viciously at me! Surprised, I flinched, but was even more surprised when I saw Caim shoot embers at it! Not only did Caim learn ember, but we had food! (Uhh…I wonder if it’s legal to eat fried Rattata?) Well, anyways, Caim and I definitely developed a better relationship after that.
So, as we continued on, I met a Pokemart employee. Like all the other advertisements I usually see on TV he was offering me a free sample of a potion followed by persuasive words to visit his shop. Nodding and smiling, I took the potion and left.
Arriving in Viridian city soon enough, I made a quick stop by the Pokemon center and decided to traverse the city first. Uhh…First thing I see is an old man lying on the road.
Shouting in a lunatic’s voice, he cried, “This is private property, I forbid you to go through here!”
A woman who appeared to be the old man’s granddaughter approached me, “Sorry, he hasn’t had his coffee yet…”
“And that is causing him to lie down in the middle of the road?” I inquired. Creasing my brow, I sighed. Whatever. Off to get Prof. Oak’s package it is. Entering the Pokemart was a sight to see. All sorts of goodies lined the shelves, including Pokeballs, potions, and a variety of battling items.
A distant voice called me. “Hey! You from Pallet town?” I nodded. “Well here, take this package to the professor there.”
Accepting the package, I headed back to Pallet. I guess my quest is done. Well my dream was short lived...but maybe not!
"Ah, Furais! Back with my package? Well, give it here. Thank you for the help." Opening the package, he revealed a custom Pokeball. "Ah, yes, this is it." Tucking away the Pokeball, he looked at me strangely. "Why, Furais, you seem different already. And your Pokemon!"
I looked at myself and Caim. Strange, there's no difference.
"You and Caim have grown quite close together, haven't you?"
I looked at Caim, and he snarled at me. "Err...I guess so?"
Right then, guess who'd drop by?
"Gramps! I almost forgot! What'd you call me here for?" Gary's voice rang out loud and clear. Not even looking, I could tell he was right beside me.
"Oh, right! Here, I have a task for you two." Walking over to his research table, he beckoned us. "Come, come! Look here." Approaching his table, I saw two high-tech encyclopedias? "This is my latest invention, the Pokedex! It records data on Pokemon you see or catch. Furais and Gary, each of you take one. I'd like you both to fill this Pokedex with information on each Pokemon. See who can fill it up first?" Prof. Oak chuckled.
Gary and I looked at each other. Challenge accepted.
"Here are some tools to start your journey." He handed us each 5 Pokeballs. "And while you're at it, you might like to participate in the gyms they have in each city? Try to become the best at Pokemon training?" He chuckled again.
Challenge accepted. Again.
Prof. Oak sighed. "You know, to get information on all the Pokemon in the world...that was my dream. But as you can see, I'm too old to get the job done...So I want you two to do it for me! Get moving, both of you." And with that note, he left an encouraging smile.
"Alright, Gramps! Leave it me! Furais, I HATE to say this, I really do, but you should really give up. I'll borrow a map from my sis and I'll tell her NOT to give you one. HA!" And with that, he left.
Stopping by Gary's house anyways, Daisy gave me a town map anyways. Hmph...take that, Gary.
And now, my journey truly begins. I'm off to fulfill dreams!

Current Team

Boxed

Passed Away

Also, I'm wondering, is my story too draggy? I feel it's going along at an extremely slow pace, even for a mini-story. I'd like to know if someone thinks I should change it or something...

Nov 30th, 2012, 11:03:58 PM	#1564
Furais Join Date: Oct 2012 Posts: 5 In the deepest reaches of my mind	I haven't been posting here for awhile, mostly because I've been sick...and writing chapters takes awhile...I've progressed far along the game by now, but my chapter writing is lacking. Maybe I should just stop playing and catch up on my chapters. But anyways, this isn't much, but here's chapter 2. CHAPTER 2 Strolling through Route 1 merrily with Caim (Who still dislikes me, but we put up a business-like relationship, mainly he leaves me alone and vice versa.) I happened to encounter my first wild Pokemon. It was a tiny rustle in the grass, but before I knew it, a Rattata jumped viciously at me! Surprised, I flinched, but was even more surprised when I saw Caim shoot embers at it! Not only did Caim learn ember, but we had food! (Uhh…I wonder if it’s legal to eat fried Rattata?) Well, anyways, Caim and I definitely developed a better relationship after that. So, as we continued on, I met a Pokemart employee. Like all the other advertisements I usually see on TV he was offering me a free sample of a potion followed by persuasive words to visit his shop. Nodding and smiling, I took the potion and left. Arriving in Viridian city soon enough, I made a quick stop by the Pokemon center and decided to traverse the city first. Uhh…First thing I see is an old man lying on the road. Shouting in a lunatic’s voice, he cried, “This is private property, I forbid you to go through here!” A woman who appeared to be the old man’s granddaughter approached me, “Sorry, he hasn’t had his coffee yet…” “And that is causing him to lie down in the middle of the road?” I inquired. Creasing my brow, I sighed. Whatever. Off to get Prof. Oak’s package it is. Entering the Pokemart was a sight to see. All sorts of goodies lined the shelves, including Pokeballs, potions, and a variety of battling items. A distant voice called me. “Hey! You from Pallet town?” I nodded. “Well here, take this package to the professor there.” Accepting the package, I headed back to Pallet. I guess my quest is done. Well my dream was short lived...but maybe not! "Ah, Furais! Back with my package? Well, give it here. Thank you for the help." Opening the package, he revealed a custom Pokeball. "Ah, yes, this is it." Tucking away the Pokeball, he looked at me strangely. "Why, Furais, you seem different already. And your Pokemon!" I looked at myself and Caim. Strange, there's no difference. "You and Caim have grown quite close together, haven't you?" I looked at Caim, and he snarled at me. "Err...I guess so?" Right then, guess who'd drop by? "Gramps! I almost forgot! What'd you call me here for?" Gary's voice rang out loud and clear. Not even looking, I could tell he was right beside me. "Oh, right! Here, I have a task for you two." Walking over to his research table, he beckoned us. "Come, come! Look here." Approaching his table, I saw two high-tech encyclopedias? "This is my latest invention, the Pokedex! It records data on Pokemon you see or catch. Furais and Gary, each of you take one. I'd like you both to fill this Pokedex with information on each Pokemon. See who can fill it up first?" Prof. Oak chuckled. Gary and I looked at each other. Challenge accepted. "Here are some tools to start your journey." He handed us each 5 Pokeballs. "And while you're at it, you might like to participate in the gyms they have in each city? Try to become the best at Pokemon training?" He chuckled again. Challenge accepted. Again. Prof. Oak sighed. "You know, to get information on all the Pokemon in the world...that was my dream. But as you can see, I'm too old to get the job done...So I want you two to do it for me! Get moving, both of you." And with that note, he left an encouraging smile. "Alright, Gramps! Leave it me! Furais, I HATE to say this, I really do, but you should really give up. I'll borrow a map from my sis and I'll tell her NOT to give you one. HA!" And with that, he left. Stopping by Gary's house anyways, Daisy gave me a town map anyways. Hmph...take that, Gary. And now, my journey truly begins. I'm off to fulfill dreams! Current Team Caim the Charmander (Male) Lv. 10 Ability: Blaze Nature: Careful Moves: - Scratch - Growl - Ember Boxed None. Passed Away None. Also, I'm wondering, is my story too draggy? I feel it's going along at an extremely slow pace, even for a mini-story. I'd like to know if someone thinks I should change it or something... __________________ Leafgreen Nuzlocke First ever attempt at a Nuzlocke...