I wanted to make a followup post, since I felt like the analyses still wasn't ready for QC checks. I ended up deleting my post because I came to a realization that I was plaguing me from the start. Sorry but this analysis is not at the acceptable level. I certainly didn't want to break my promise to you (allowing this to go the GP phase) but I just couldn't ignore the symptoms; the unnecessarily bulky bullet points, multiple logic errors, and redundancies scattered throughout the analysis. The posts you directly copied from me while acceptable, didn't really inspire confidence either. Overall, I just don't think you're ready to write up Infernape.
The only appropriate action to take in response to this thread is to shut it down. I'm really sorry about this, but it just wasn't meant to be.
The original followup post
A lot more needs to be done before this is ready for QC checks.
To start, you didn't have to expand your bullet points (in fact i'd say that they're too large atm). Disregarding that, I still have a few issues with the written content. The current overview places too little emphasis on the CB set's effectiveness in on the sun, too much emphasis on Choice Scarf, (which has incorrect information btw, Choice Scarf Infernape cannot OHKO Haxorus). The line that ginga pointed out needs fixing as well.
On the CB set, you mention Latios under "defensive threats 2HKOed by Infernape." Its a bit nitpicky, but can remove it?
Offensive Tentacruel doesn't need a mention. It doesn't exist in BW OU.
I think you should tone it down with the Infernape vs Terrakion comments sprinkled throughout the analysis. It does not need constant mentioning, a single mention in the overview should suffice.
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What makes Choice Scarf Infernape a better candidate for revenge killer than Terrakion is that with Fire Blast you can easily OHKO Steel types like Forretress, Ferrothorn, Skarmory and Scizor. Plus you still are able to out run Venusaur under the sun and OHKO it, which Terrakion can not do. With a Choice Scarf and a Hasty or Naive Nature you hit 518 Speed which helps you speed ties with Scarf Terrakion. While this set lets you out speed other Pokemon under Base 108 with a Choice Scarf this set is not designed for sweeping through your opponent's team but as a good late game sweeper when you have weakened your opponent's team.
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I beg your pardon? Choice Scarf Infernape can't outspeed standard Venusaur in the sun.
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The teammates & counters section doesn't exist. Teammates are mentioned in the AC of each set. (counters are also mentioned in AC, in addition to being mentioned in teammates & counters).
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While Infernape might have a Base 108 Speed that doesn't mean that Infernape is untouchable. If you're not running a Choice Scarf on Infernape, Pokemon with priority moves like: Breloom, Azumarrill, and Scizor can stop Infernape in its track. Other revenge killers to non Choice Scarf Infernape are Terrakion, Rotom-w, Tornadus-T, Landorus-T.
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This sentence doesn't make any sense. Even if you are running a Choice Scarf, the Pokemon you mentioned can bypass with priority. In addition, Scizor is not a reliable Infernape revenge killer because Bullet Punch doesn't come close to taking it out. I also don't feel like mentioning Azumarill is worth it, since its not commonly seen in OU.
Don't worry, i'm allowing you to keep Mamoswine. Focus on fixing the mistakes made in this thread.