(5th Gen) Attack of the Pranksters - Page 3

rippersteveM5 · Dec 21st, 2011, 12:00:35 AM

I approve of this battle, because it had Murkrow in it. That thing is amazing ;)

But great warstory; interesting teams and a good battle made for an enjoyable read. Your commentary especially (though crude at times) it was quite reflective of what you were going through in the battle, and it made the read all that more enjoyable.

**Pocket** · Dec 21st, 2011, 12:07:26 AM

To be honest, the battle could have been better. It seems like you lost your momentum early on and have been on the defensive since then, without really gaining it back. The originality of the teams presented does not make up for this shortcoming.

Quality formatting and commentary, though! This is impressive for your first thread! I would read your future warstories :)

~~Byrne~~ · Dec 21st, 2011, 12:26:41 AM

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Originally Posted by Fat Pocket

To be honest, the battle could have been better. It seems like you lost your momentum early on and have been on the defensive since then, without really gaining it back. The originality of the teams presented does not make up for this shortcoming.

Quality formatting and commentary, though! This is impressive for your first thread! I would read your future warstories :)

Well I thought that this is what made the warstory good. The fact that I had to change my playstyle and really think about how to fight against a team that uses strange, yet powerful tactics. I wasn't trying to show a down-to-the-wire duel, I was trying to show that the metagame has an incredible number of possible playstyles that can be just as good as another, and how one might cope when one of these surprise styles shows up in a battle and has the upper hand against your team. Unfortunately for me, I wasn't quite capable of coming up with the win here.

Thank you for being constructive though! I really do love it when people give me something to think about the next time I do something. I'm glad you liked my commentary :D

Sy123 · Dec 21st, 2011, 5:36:03 AM

Great battle, awesome and insightful commentary that made me smile
What I also love about this warstory more than others is the fact that I learnt something, that would help me on the battlefield

Thank you for an excellent warstory!

9/10

Professor Lamb · Dec 21st, 2011, 8:01:38 PM

Wow, this was an excellent warstory. The battle was awesome, the teams were unique (especially your opponent's haha), and the commentary was absolutely fantastic. I could clearly follow your logic in your commentary, and that's a huge plus. I look forward to reading your future warstories! :)

Yamata no Orochi · Dec 22nd, 2011, 5:23:47 AM

Ahahaha, I've been waiting for a nice warstory like this for quite a while. I wish people would make more warstories faster, but it will be in low quality. The battle was great and the commentary is interesting. I wish I could see stuff like this more often.
I give it a 9/10.

dragonboy52 · Dec 22nd, 2011, 5:25:25 AM

Nice Warstory!
9/10

DSM01 · Jan 1st, 2012, 10:55:48 AM

What stands out to me the most in this Warstory is that it seems like you're trying too hard with the commentary. With a good battle, the battle will speak for itself. Remember, Warstories should showcasing the battle first and the author's wit second. Warstories are definitely subjective (as I can attest), but unfortunately I’m not a fan of this one. I’d give it a 5/10; the battle itself was mediocre at best and the commentary was forced. A commendable effort, but it's not my cup of tea. Haters gonna hate, but if you enjoy doing these then by all means keep it up!

Challenger · Jan 2nd, 2012, 12:52:31 AM

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Originally Posted by Fat Byrne

Thank you very much everyone. All of this positive feedback certainly makes me want to write another someday. If I ever find the right battle with this much unique charm and intrigue that makes you think, I'll be sure to start writing about it!

A bit off topic but sometimes I worry that the negative feedback given on new warstories will cause people to stop writing them. I haven't seen a new one on here in a couple weeks.

Then again, I get that it's probably no better to read a thousand bad warstories.

This was a very good one, imo. Some flaws, obviously, but still.

~~Byrne~~ · Jan 2nd, 2012, 1:19:16 PM

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Originally Posted by Fat DSM01

What stands out to me the most in this Warstory is that it seems like you're trying too hard with the commentary. With a good battle, the battle will speak for itself. Remember, Warstories should showcasing the battle first and the author's wit second. Warstories are definitely subjective (as I can attest), but unfortunately I’m not a fan of this one. I’d give it a 5/10; the battle itself was mediocre at best and the commentary was forced. A commendable effort, but it's not my cup of tea. Haters gonna hate, but if you enjoy doing these then by all means keep it up!

I actually thought my commentary seemed the exact opposite; in that it was incredibly laid back and natural. But thanks for the criticism anyway!

skymastergamerpt · Jan 2nd, 2012, 2:51:34 PM

Really enjoyed the warstory and there were both great teams. And it also shows how much good Taunt is in competive battle. Can´t wait to read another of youre stories Byrne.

Prankster · Jan 2nd, 2012, 4:13:16 PM

Hooray my name featured in this warstory! My army is unstoppable!
Now to read the warstory.

freedom2 · Jan 2nd, 2012, 5:30:13 PM

Nice warstory. The commentary was fantastic, and the battle was really good.
9.5/10

Face Stabbity · Jan 4th, 2012, 1:15:39 AM

I haven't read many war stories, but this has been my favorite so far. Great commentary style - I loved it.

mostwanted · Jan 4th, 2012, 1:24:15 AM

awesome warstory. Excellent commentary and game. 9/10

Epic OU · Jan 11th, 2012, 8:01:18 AM

This Is an amazing War story It's a very creative choice!!!

Gregar · Jan 11th, 2012, 10:45:58 AM

I absolutely loved the commentary! It shows understanding of the game and is an absolute joy to read.
The battle itself was a rare gem too. How many times do you encounter a Tailwind Team that works and gives you a run for your money!

Great job, and please, please post more warstories!

Lockeness · Jan 11th, 2012, 9:10:09 PM

Great job. The writing was particularly good. I enjoyed reading the whole way through. I hope you write more warstories in the future. 10/10

~~Byrne~~ · Jan 12th, 2012, 3:29:22 PM

It's great that people are still finding enjoyment after this warstory even a month after I wrote it! Thanks for all the nice comments, guys.

Max212 · Jan 14th, 2012, 2:39:44 AM

Excellent battle and commentary. Cant wait to see more warstories from you! :)

Aurora. · Jan 14th, 2012, 3:32:43 AM

This is a very impressive battle; good tactics from both sides made it an impressive read.
Looking forward to seeing more warstories from you on my doorstep.

Dec 21st, 2011, 12:07:26 AM	#52
Pocket Bakuman ;< Moderator Join Date: Dec 2004 Posts: 7,170 Bergenfield	To be honest, the battle could have been better. It seems like you lost your momentum early on and have been on the defensive since then, without really gaining it back. The originality of the teams presented does not make up for this shortcoming. Quality formatting and commentary, though! This is impressive for your first thread! I would read your future warstories :) __________________ Dark Horse Project: Conquer the Ladder! \| Word of Wisdom for Trainers \| Smogon Doubles: Let's Make It Official!

Dec 21st, 2011, 8:01:38 PM	#55
Professor Lamb Join Date: Oct 2010 Posts: 184 New York State	Wow, this was an excellent warstory. The battle was awesome, the teams were unique (especially your opponent's haha), and the commentary was absolutely fantastic. I could clearly follow your logic in your commentary, and that's a huge plus. I look forward to reading your future warstories! :) __________________ http://www.whoishussain.org/ Last edited by Professor Lamb; Dec 21st, 2011 at 8:02:39 PM. Reason: tense

Dec 22nd, 2011, 5:23:47 AM	#56
Yamata no Orochi http://pastebin.com/s3p3efrV Join Date: May 2011 Posts: 258	Ahahaha, I've been waiting for a nice warstory like this for quite a while. I wish people would make more warstories faster, but it will be in low quality. The battle was great and the commentary is interesting. I wish I could see stuff like this more often. I give it a 9/10. __________________ Loli Hadron Collider

Dec 22nd, 2011, 5:25:25 AM	#57
dragonboy52 Join Date: Sep 2009 Posts: 1,964	Nice Warstory! 9/10 __________________

Jan 1st, 2012, 10:55:48 AM	#58
DSM01 Join Date: Oct 2010 Posts: 8	What stands out to me the most in this Warstory is that it seems like you're trying too hard with the commentary. With a good battle, the battle will speak for itself. Remember, Warstories should showcasing the battle first and the author's wit second. Warstories are definitely subjective (as I can attest), but unfortunately I’m not a fan of this one. I’d give it a 5/10; the battle itself was mediocre at best and the commentary was forced. A commendable effort, but it's not my cup of tea. Haters gonna hate, but if you enjoy doing these then by all means keep it up! __________________ "If you ain't got haters, you're doing something wrong."

Dec 21st, 2011, 12:00:35 AM	#51
rippersteveM5 Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 91	I approve of this battle, because it had Murkrow in it. That thing is amazing ;) But great warstory; interesting teams and a good battle made for an enjoyable read. Your commentary especially (though crude at times) it was quite reflective of what you were going through in the battle, and it made the read all that more enjoyable.

Dec 21st, 2011, 5:36:03 AM	#54
Sy123 Join Date: Dec 2009 Posts: 1,034 Orbiting the Sun	Great battle, awesome and insightful commentary that made me smile What I also love about this warstory more than others is the fact that I learnt something, that would help me on the battlefield Thank you for an excellent warstory! 9/10

Jan 2nd, 2012, 2:51:34 PM	#61
skymastergamerpt Join Date: Dec 2011 Posts: 24	Really enjoyed the warstory and there were both great teams. And it also shows how much good Taunt is in competive battle. Can´t wait to read another of youre stories Byrne.

Jan 2nd, 2012, 4:13:16 PM	#62
Prankster Join Date: Jan 2011 Posts: 360	Hooray my name featured in this warstory! My army is unstoppable! Now to read the warstory. __________________ http://pokemon.aesoft.org/replay-Pra...ug--2011-11-11 This is an over 1000 turn battle against one of my old friends. Enjoy! (19:52:33) *** Shoujiki Hakurei muted Prankster for 10 seconds. (20:43:14) +blarajan: i should honestly ban you for too much stupid. Last edited by Prankster; Jan 2nd, 2012 at 4:35:09 PM.

Jan 2nd, 2012, 5:30:13 PM	#63
freedom2 Join Date: Apr 2011 Posts: 95	Nice warstory. The commentary was fantastic, and the battle was really good. 9.5/10 __________________

Jan 4th, 2012, 1:15:39 AM	#64
Face Stabbity Join Date: Jan 2012 Posts: 14	I haven't read many war stories, but this has been my favorite so far. Great commentary style - I loved it.

Jan 4th, 2012, 1:24:15 AM	#65
mostwanted Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 938	awesome warstory. Excellent commentary and game. 9/10

Jan 11th, 2012, 8:01:18 AM	#66
Epic OU Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 40	This Is an amazing War story It's a very creative choice!!!

Jan 11th, 2012, 10:45:58 AM	#67
Gregar Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 115 Netherlands	I absolutely loved the commentary! It shows understanding of the game and is an absolute joy to read. The battle itself was a rare gem too. How many times do you encounter a Tailwind Team that works and gives you a run for your money! Great job, and please, please post more warstories! __________________ Known as RGRaGe on PO. Don't be afraid to say hi or challenge me to a Challege Cup match;)

Jan 11th, 2012, 9:10:09 PM	#68
Lockeness (e^(i╥))+1=0 Join Date: Oct 2009 Posts: 307	Great job. The writing was particularly good. I enjoyed reading the whole way through. I hope you write more warstories in the future. 10/10

Jan 12th, 2012, 3:29:22 PM	#69
~~Byrne~~ Banned deucer. Join Date: Dec 2011 Posts: 1,466	It's great that people are still finding enjoyment after this warstory even a month after I wrote it! Thanks for all the nice comments, guys.

Jan 14th, 2012, 2:39:44 AM	#70
Max212 Join Date: Jun 2011 Posts: 245 California	Excellent battle and commentary. Cant wait to see more warstories from you! :)

Jan 14th, 2012, 3:32:43 AM	#71
Aurora. Join Date: Oct 2011 Posts: 289 Sydney, Australia	This is a very impressive battle; good tactics from both sides made it an impressive read. Looking forward to seeing more warstories from you on my doorstep. __________________ +te_hy: ey yo aurora, go back to the agora, if you ask me you about as hot as sora LeBaron: Whenever I want a double helping of intelligent commentary I read the PS chat while watching Fox News. curryboy was muted by TheFourthChaser. (aldaron shut up)