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Old Mar 18th, 2013, 9:54:53 PM   #26
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As per the new procedures, you must change your skeleton to prose form before the final qc check. Please place your skelly under hide tags for reference
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Old Mar 18th, 2013, 10:54:22 PM   #27
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As per the new procedures, you must change your skeleton to prose form before the final qc check. Please place your skelly under hide tags for reference
So it is on the third. I thought it required a 4th. Alright, I'll write this up.

EDIT: Alright, it's written.
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Old Mar 27th, 2013, 1:14:44 PM   #28
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Still looking for that third QC check.
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Old Mar 30th, 2013, 8:44:21 PM   #29
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Okay, a few problems I'd like you to fix before I give you the 3rd check:

1) Your analysis needs more substance. This is especially true for the first set, where there is very little information given. Basically:

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<p>Because of its typing, Fire- and Fighting-types are huge bane to Abomasnow, making partners like Heatran, Jellicent, Gengar, or Reuniclus serious options to consider. Abomasnow's crippling weakness to Stealth Rock is also something that needs to be considered, making Starmie and Tentacruel solid partners to Abomasnow, as their access to Rapid Spin and STAB combinations, which resist the two above mentioned types that threaten Abomasnow, are a boon to Abomasnow.</p>
Can you please expand on these teammates? What do they do (apart from switching into these weaknesses)? For example, what else can Heatran do? What else can Jellicent do? One really crucial thing I think you seemed to have missed is that when you talk about Abomasnow, you do not JUST talk about Abomasnow, but you also have to talk about Hail teams. What qualities do these Pokemon (that you mentioned) that you mentioned have that are good for Hail teams? If you think about it from that way, I'm pretty sure you can come up with a lot more detail for this analysis. This applies to the second set as well.

2) There are number of problematic Pokemon that haven't seemed to addressed enough. Scizor, Terrakion, Jirachi are all problems for Abomasnow and hail. I know you're running enough Speed to outspeed most Scizors, but fast Scizors do exist, and getting free U-turns off Abomasnow is not fun for you. If you mention these, I'm pretty sure you can expand on your AC sections as well. Abomasnow requires a lot more detail than you'd expect.

3) One small thing, but:
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The same goes for Choice Scarf Abomasnow, which used to be rather effective at one point in time.
Why was it effective? Please add a small mention of why it was effective. My post earlier highlighted its (relatively small) niche (outspeeding and OHKOing all Chlorophyll sweepers apart from Lilligant, as well as revenging Sand Rush mons).

Fix these and I'll approve.
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Old Apr 8th, 2013, 10:23:29 PM   #30
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Alright, I expanded on the Additional Comments for the two sets, further elaborating on teammates and checks. Lemme know if I should go deeper on specific things or if I'm missing anything. Besides that, this should be ready.
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Old Apr 9th, 2013, 12:41:20 AM   #31
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Good.


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Old Apr 9th, 2013, 2:20:30 AM   #32
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Old Apr 9th, 2013, 6:57:05 PM   #33
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Amateur check; this is nicely written, just some small mistakes.

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Old Apr 10th, 2013, 12:10:11 AM   #34
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Implemented the amateur check. Thanks!
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Old Apr 10th, 2013, 1:50:20 AM   #35
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just thought i'd pop in and comment on some stuff.

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Old Apr 17th, 2013, 1:02:05 AM   #36
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pasting this for crux because of stuff

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Old Apr 23rd, 2013, 7:26:12 PM   #37
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Just posting to say that I haven't forgot about this - life just got in the way a bit. I'm leaving for a short trip tomorrow morning, so I won't be able to finish this until Monday. However, once I am home, I'll implement the GP check(s), and get this finished as soon as possible.
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Old Apr 29th, 2013, 11:21:18 PM   #38
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Old Apr 30th, 2013, 4:56:01 PM   #39
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Amcheck:
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ignore all of the inserted semicolons from the above user's check when you implement it, almost none of them are correct

the other changes look ok
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ignore all of the inserted semicolons from the above user's check when you implement it, almost none of them are correct

the other changes look ok
Sorry, I'm still new to this. I edited my previous post, removing all semicolon mentions.
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GP Approved 2/2

"may" is a vague word; other than that there were comma issues and the odd bad sentence structure

There were a lot of errors in Rohail17's check, which is why I didn't bother to work over it.
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