Smogon's First "Create a Pokemon": Poll 10

[GengarCrysis92]

Oh. Lol. I guess I didn't understand that part. So, is it now good?

[Sunday]

Ok, almost perfected...

1st: Due to living in such rocky areas, this POKEMON has develop an extremely hard ice-shell

This is alright to me, it's the second one that's troubling me for some reason...

2nd: They lives in harsh blizzards that never stop. Thanks to this, it has developed extra eyes used to scout for prey.

Not really much better, but having a "due to this" in both sounded pretty strange...

[GengarCrysis92]

2nd: Due to living in constant, harsh blizzards, this POKEMON has developed an extra set of eyes to help its survival.

What about that one?

[Sunday]

Then both would start with "Due to", how about:

2nd: They lives in harsh, blinding blizzards that never stop. To combat this, it has developed extra eyes used to scout for prey.

OR

2nd: They lives in blinding snowstorms that never stop. To combat this, it has developed extra eyes used to scout for prey.

[Sir_Lu]

It would look odd with two "Due to" beginnings. I'd go with the old, "This POKEMON has developed extra eyes accurately scout for prey, even in the harshest blizzard.

[GengarCrysis92]

2nd: They lives in blinding snowstorms that never stop. To combat this, it has developed extra eyes used to scout for prey.

This one is the best out of the two that you just posted.

Edit: I actualy like Sir Lu's even better. Except add "to" after eyes. That was probably a typo though. Also would we be sending 2 entries or just one?

[Sunday]

1st: Due to living in such rocky areas, this POKEMON has develop an extremely hard ice-shell
2nd: They lives in blinding snowstorms that never stop. To combat this, it has developed extra eyes used to scout for prey.

How do these two sound next to each other? I would really like to keep the "they" in there as a reference to the fact that they are indeed pack insects (or whatever, lol)

[GengarCrysis92]

Originally Posted by Fat Lord_Sunday

1st: Due to living in such rocky areas, this POKEMON has develop an extremely hard ice-shell
2nd: They lives in blinding snowstorms that never stop. To combat this, it has developed extra eyes used to scout for prey.

How do these two sound next to each other? I would really like to keep the "they" in there as a reference to the fact that they are indeed pack insects (or whatever, lol)

I think these two are the best:

1st: Due to living in such rocky areas, these POKEMON have acquired an extremely hard iceshell.
2nd: These POKEMON has developed extra eyes to accurately scout for prey, even in the harshest blizzard.

Edit: I changes this - these in the first one and second.
Edit2: 1st has been changed to acquiered. That spelling does NOT seem right. Added "to" to the 2nd.
Edit3: Pre-evo's Entries:

1st: This POKEMON searches for food in groups and will not return to the colony until food has been found.
2nd: While searching for food in packs, and adult [Insert final Evo name here] accompanies this POKEMON incase of any danger.

[sanjay120]

Extra eyes TO scout for prey.

Also now they both have developed in them D:

Maybe replace one of them with 'acquired'.

Pre-evo:

It works for the colony from its birth. It dives into avalanches to become strong.

[GengarCrysis92]

Ok i edited my post to use acquiered for the first [spelling?] and "to" for the 2nd one.

[sanjay120]

Delete the first e.

Need help on the second pre evo entry. Maybe:

It searches long distances for food. It will not return to the colony without something to eat.

Change these back to this.

[GengarCrysis92]

Ok, i edited in the Pre-evo's Entry. Tell me what you think.

[sanjay120]

Mmk. It's spelled accompanies, and delete the hyphen between ice and shell.

The thing about an adult coming with them kinda defeats the theme I was going for, in that these Pokemon aspire to become great and high ranked members of the colony. They're very competitive and probably won't accept help.

[GengarCrysis92]

Ok. Went back and edited them. Sanjay, were you saying you like them, or they arent good?

[sanjay120]

I like them, but I'm nitpicky.

Damn the b button on my keyboard is breaking.

[Hyra]

Originally Posted by Fat ~Trogdor~

How about this:

"[Insert his final name here]s live in high altitude places and in snowy areas. The prey on any defenseless pokemon such as Delibirds and Snowrunts. When the weather unsuspectingly heats up they will form a cocoon that traps all of its -C body temperature."

Height 5' 7"
Weight 182.3 lbs

Originally Posted by Fat Lord_Sunday

I can just hear David Attenburough's (sp) voice now:

"I am here in the most frigid environment anywhere in the world. The reason I am enduring these sub-zero conditions is the chance to catch a glimpse of the extreeeemly rare Vespoidea Formicidae. Otherwise known as the Aufylus.

The Auflyus blends in perfectly with the frigid environment. It's crystaline structure allows it to become almost... invisible... against the icey backdrop. This allows it to sneak up virtually un-noticed on unsuspecting Delibirds, it's natural enemy.

Here we see a Aufylus about to pounce on the unsuspecting avian. But this will be no easy task for the juveniel Aufylus. The Delibird has developed an extreem defence mechanism - Despite it's four times rock weakness it has the ability to spin it's body at high speeds, clearing the field of entry hazzards, leech seeds and moves such as "wrap". But that's not the only trick Delibird has up it's sleeve. As a last resort the Delibird will expose itself and present the Aufylus with a... "present" Normally, this present will contain enough crystalised sugar to sustain an entire colony of Aufylus for a week. This is often enough to convince the Aufylus to leave the Delibird alone.

But on extreemly rare occasions the "present" has been known to explode in the Aufylus's face. This causes it to become enraged, and it will then proceed to tear the unfortunate Delibird limb from limb. The Aufylus then calls other members of it's colony to help transport the Delibird carcass to it's nest, often as many as 30 miles away."

Originally Posted by Fat Jibaku

Attempts of making a dex data that would incorporate its abilities and the "order" moves

[insert pokemon's name here] is a fairly rare pokemon found in the world's most freezing mountains, thriving in castles made from ice crystals. With its highly developed vision, blasters and hand to eye coordination, it can easily snipe prey from afar. Upon extreme conditions, this pokemon shields itself in a block of ice, effectively trapping the freezing air inside it.

[insert pokemon's name]'s protects the castle it thrives in with an army of underlings and a veil of freezing air. It does not need to move from its spot to snipe prey from afar. After it does so, the underlings are then sent to fetch the stunned prey to the castle, where a merry feast begins afterward. This pokemon only resorts to physical combat if the enemy draws too close.

Here are some ideas from the last poll. TBH, I prefer all of these to anything suggested so far in this poll. Not trying to be insulting, but this have a spark to them.

[Sunday]

All of those are too long for a D/P dex entry, expecially the second one ;)

[Hyra]

Well, obviously too long. I meant take the themes and ideas discussed there and shorten them into a dex entry.

[GengarCrysis92]

The Dex entries are fairly long. If you probably split one of them into two:
1st one:
1st: While thriving in freezing mountains, this POKEMON builds its own ice castles. Once the weather conditions become too harsh, this POKEMON creats a durable ice shield that protects it from incoming damage.
2nd: This POKEMON has been living in such blinding conditions that it has grown an extra set of eyes that help it catch its prey.

2nd one:
1st: This POKEMON lives in such large colonies that if an invader enters the castle, it is swiftly finished off.
2nd: since this POKEMON controls the ice castle, its highly developed eys are used to snipe intruders. then the [insert Pre-Evos name] go and fetch what is to become dinner.

Edit: Well everyone beat me to posting they are too long. But i got the entries! lol.

[sanjay120]

That's not Pokemonish though. But I'll try.

"This POKEMON will snipe prey from afar. It orders its underlings to fetch the food."

"This POKEMON lives in a colony made entirely of ice. It will defend its home with its life."

"This POKEMON's ice crystals allow it to be completely camoflauged. It will stalk a herd of prey in groups and snipe it from glaciers."

[andersatan]

That reminds me, is there a prevo picture/info gonna be made

[~Trogdor~]

Originally Posted by Fat andersatan

That reminds me, is there a prevo picture/info gonna be made

Yeah there was but idk. I could try to scratch a larva pre evo for a rough draft.....

[GengarCrysis92]

I dont really like these newer Dex Entries. Now im not being biased, but you cant reall make the ideas Pokemonish.

[Hyra]

Originally Posted by Fat GengarCrysis92

I dont really like these newer Dex Entries. Now im not being biased, but you cant reall make the ideas Pokemonish.

Uh, how is eating Delibirds and Snorunts not Pokemonish? I would love for though to be included at least in one of them.

[sanjay120]

"This POKEMON loves green Deliham and will eat it wearing socks in a box with a fox."