Ambipom Saves The Day!

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  1. Sephiroth32194

    Sephiroth32194

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    Trying to get my ranking up for the Deoxys-S test thing, I decided to get a random battle on Shoddy. This is the battle that ensued...

    My Team: [​IMG][​IMG][​IMG][​IMG][​IMG][​IMG]

    Screen's Team: [​IMG][​IMG][​IMG][​IMG][​IMG][​IMG]


    Sephiroth32194's moves will look like this.
    Screen's moves will look like this.
    other text will look like this.
    Rules: Ladder Match, Sleep Clause, Freeze Clause, OHKO Clause, Evasion Clause, Species Clause, Strict Damage Clause
    Sephiroth32194 sent out Ambipom (lvl 100 Ambipom ?).
    Screen sent out Tyranitar (lvl 100 Tyranitar ?).
    Tyranitar's Sand Stream whipped up a sandstorm!
    A sandstorm brewed!

    Hm, this isn't the best matchup. I only have one move that hits for Super Effective, so I might as well use that...

    Ambipom used U-turn.
    It's super effective!
    Tyranitar lost 31% of its health.
    Sephiroth32194 switched in FearMe (lvl 100 Suicune).
    FearMe is exerting its pressure!
    Tyranitar used Dark Pulse.
    FearMe lost 43% of its health.
    The sandstorm rages.
    FearMe is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    FearMe lost 6% of its health.
    FearMe's leftovers restored its health a little!
    FearMe restored 6% of its health.

    WOW, I did NOT expect that. I was thinking it would be just a normal CBtar, but now I hit a Boah. Hm. Well, since Dark Pulse won't KO, I'll take this advantage to set up.

    ---
    FearMe used Calm Mind.
    FearMe's special attack was raised.
    FearMe's special defence was raised.
    Tyranitar used Dark Pulse.
    FearMe lost 29% of its health.
    The sandstorm rages.
    FearMe is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    FearMe lost 6% of its health.
    FearMe's leftovers restored its health a little!
    FearMe restored 6% of its health.

    Just as I suspected, it didn't KO. Now I have a SpAtk and SpDef boost, so I can deal some heavy damage with a STAB Surf. XP

    ---
    FearMe used Surf.
    It's super effective!
    A critical hit!
    Tyranitar lost 69% of its health.
    Screen's Tyranitar fainted.
    The sandstorm rages.
    FearMe is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    FearMe lost 6% of its health.
    FearMe's leftovers restored its health a little!
    FearMe restored 6% of its health.


    Hm. Well, a crit helps, but... hooray. Now I'm up 6-5.

    ---
    Screen switched in Gengar (lvl 100 Gengar ?).
    Gengar used Shadow Ball.
    FearMe lost 25% of its health.
    FearMe used Surf.
    Gengar lost 78% of its health.
    The sandstorm rages.
    Gengar is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Gengar lost 6% of its health.
    FearMe is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    FearMe lost 2% of its health.
    Sephiroth32194's FearMe fainted.

    Well, Shadow Ball didn't KO me, but Sandstorm did. >_> At least Surf took a hefty chunk out of Gengar's health.

    ---
    Sephiroth32194 switched in OHAI THAR (lvl 100 Scizor ?).
    OHAI THAR used Bullet Punch.
    Gengar lost 16% of its health.
    Screen's Gengar fainted.
    OHAI THAR lost 10% of its health.
    The sandstorm rages.

    You can always count on Scizor to get the easy revenge kill! :D

    ---
    Screen switched in Regirock (lvl 100 Regirock).
    Regirock used Fire Punch.
    It's super effective!
    A critical hit!
    OHAI THAR lost 90% of its health.
    Sephiroth32194's OHAI THAR fainted.
    The sandstorm rages.

    Hm. Well, I didn't see that coming, both him being faster AND packing Fire Punch. Damn, there goes my awesome Scizor for the battle. X_X

    ---
    Sephiroth32194 switched in Joch (lvl 100 Infernape ?).
    Screen switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
    Gyarados's intimidate cut Joch's attack!
    Joch used Grass Knot.
    A critical hit!
    Gyarados lost 85% of its health.
    Joch lost 10% of its health.
    The sandstorm rages.
    Joch is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Joch lost 6% of its health.
    Gyarados is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Gyarados lost 6% of its health.

    Again, crits always help, but I didn't think the Gyarados would come in. Now I can easily KO it with another Grass Knot.

    ---
    Joch used Grass Knot.
    Gyarados lost 9% of its health.
    Screen's Gyarados fainted.
    Joch lost 10% of its health.
    The sandstorm rages.
    Joch is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Joch lost 6% of its health.

    Hooray. :D

    ---
    Screen switched in Regirock (lvl 100 Regirock).
    Joch used Grass Knot.
    It's super effective!
    Regirock lost 68% of its health.
    Joch lost 10% of its health.
    Regirock used Stone Edge.
    Joch lost 58% of its health.
    Sephiroth32194's Joch fainted.
    The sandstorm rages.

    Damn, I didn't think that would live. Oh well, I took out a potential threat to my team. (Gyarados)

    ---
    Sephiroth32194 switched in RAWR (lvl 100 Salamence ?).
    RAWR used Hydro Pump.
    It's super effective!
    Regirock lost 32% of its health.
    Screen's Regirock fainted.
    The sandstorm rages.
    RAWR is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    RAWR lost 6% of its health.

    Specsmence FTW. Let's just hope Hydro Pump doesn't miss next turn.

    ---
    Screen switched in Heracross (lvl 100 Heracross ?).
    RAWR used Hydro Pump.
    Heracross lost 42% of its health.
    Heracross used Stone Edge.
    It's super effective!
    RAWR lost 89% of its health.
    The sandstorm rages.
    RAWR is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    RAWR lost 5% of its health.
    Sephiroth32194's RAWR fainted.
    Heracross is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Heracross lost 6% of its health.

    That's a shame. It didn't miss, but it did absolutely NOTHING to that Heracross, which is odd. Now my special sweeper is gone.

    ---
    Sephiroth32194 switched in Ambipom (lvl 100 Ambipom ?).
    Screen switched in Azelf (lvl 100 Azelf).
    Ambipom used Fake Out.
    Azelf lost 40% of its health.
    The sandstorm rages.
    Ambipom is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Ambipom lost 6% of its health.
    Azelf is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Azelf lost 6% of its health.

    Um, okay? I was hoping that the Heracross would take the Fake Out, but I guess this is better. Now I know what Pokemon he has.

    ---
    Ambipom used U-turn.
    It's super effective!
    Azelf lost 54% of its health.
    Screen's Azelf fainted.
    Sephiroth32194 switched in Transvestite (lvl 100 Blissey ?).
    The sandstorm rages.
    Transvestite is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Transvestite lost 6% of its health.
    Transvestite's leftovers restored its health a little!
    Transvestite restored 6% of its health.

    Wow, I didn't think U-Turn would kill that. Oh well.

    ---
    Screen switched in Heracross (lvl 100 Heracross ?).
    Transvestite used Protect.
    Transvestite protected itself!
    Heracross used Close Combat.
    Transvestite protected itself!
    The sandstorm rages.
    Heracross is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Heracross lost 6% of its health.
    Transvestite is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Transvestite lost 6% of its health.
    Transvestite's leftovers restored its health a little!
    Transvestite restored 6% of its health.

    Protect + Sandstorm + Blissey = Stall. :D

    ---
    Heracross used Close Combat.
    It's super effective!
    Transvestite lost 100% of its health.
    Sephiroth32194's Transvestite fainted.
    Heracross's defence was lowered.
    Heracross's special defence was lowered.
    The sandstorm rages.
    Heracross is buffetted by the sandstorm!
    Heracross lost 6% of its health.

    Meh. Now Ambipom can Fake Out for the win.

    ---
    Sephiroth32194 switched in Ambipom (lvl 100 Ambipom ?).
    Ambipom used Fake Out.
    Heracross lost 40% of its health.
    Screen's Heracross fainted.
    Sephiroth32194 wins!
    Sephiroth32194: gg
    Screen: gg
    Screen has left the room.
    This log was formatted using Warmachine Version 1.0


    GG Screen! :D
  2. BlakBlastoise

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    You need better comments. Have you not read any of the recent war stories? most of them had the same problem this one does.
  3. Playamania

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    As Blak stated, the recent warstories, including this one, have looked more like formatted logs than warstories.

    When making a warstory, try to analyse each turn in more depth, showing your thought process with each move, etc etc.
  4. Fiskebollen

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    Very meh battle made worse by terrible commenting (really... "hooray"?)
  5. TerrickTerran

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    Tiny type, virtually no comments, and we already knew how it was going to end before it even started.
  6. Black Buddha

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    this is like:
    A vs B
    A used X move. B fainted
    C used y move. A fainted
    hooray :D
  7. Matthew

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    My eyes!

    They BLEED
  8. Nachos

    Nachos ∇Good player alert!∇
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    Nothing really sets this warstory apart from others for me. It didn't have that wow factor that other good warstories have, neither did it have something where you thought 'nice prediction' etc.
  9. Imran

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    To be honest man, none of your warstories have been any better :/ but yeah you seem to get the general concensus that this was not really an interesting battle, nor were the comments very tactically illuminating, in fact anyone could have read the log and though exactly the same thing
  10. Olie

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    I strongly disagree. Gen Empoleon's warstories (particularly this one) were very well written.
    http://www.smogon.com/forums/showthread.php?t=46984

    But yeah for next time:
    -Bigger Type (Use the standard for all posts (size 2)
    -Less Goddamn Colour (pick 2, that's plenty)
    - Much more Commentary (2-3 sentances should be your minimum for each round)
    - Have more skilled players that you play against (honestly, these battles are much more exciting)
    -Don't give away your ending in your title (this is self explanatory.)
  11. Towlie

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    Pretty much sums this warstory up.
  12. Matthew

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    Excuse me? At least I try to put a lot of effort into them. My comments may be lacking sometimes but I improve each time. >_> I also try to avoid using a bunch of colours in my posts now as well. Along with removing log to get rid of a bunch of useless stuff. (Sandstorm, SR, Hail, blah blah blah) TC you could do the same.

    This is by far the nicest thing anyone has ever said to me on this fourm
  13. cim

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    Every single comment is "wow, exactly what happened! I think I'll do whatever im doing next now". It's barely even commentary on what we can all see going on. It has no entertainment value, informative value, or value in general. Sorry.

    Remember, it's a warstory! Express yourself a little.
  14. I am Gengar

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    Text is way too small. It was hard to read even after zooming in...
  15. PazzaK

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    Yeah it sucked. Sorry dude, maybe wait for a more interesting story before posting.
  16. Fishin

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    Yeah, no offense, but this was more of a "Pokemon beats Pokemon with move" than a close, interesting battle, which is what we want to see for a warstory, and the comments weren't very interesting either. Check out some of the threads in the Warstory Archive for an idea of how to write one.
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