(Archive) Small Objective Changes Thread

On Ponyta's analysis (http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/ponyta), I think I found a typo.
Double-Edge is an alternative over Return to hit Pokemon who resist Fire-type attacks harder, however, the recoil damage given from it makes it an unattractive choice since Life Orb, Stealth Rock, and recoil damage from both Double-Edge and Flare Blitz will wear down Ponyta quickly.
shouldn't the first comma (before "however") be a semi-colon?
 
On Ponyta's analysis (http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/ponyta), I think I found a typo.
Double-Edge is an alternative over Return to hit Pokemon who resist Fire-type attacks harder, however, the recoil damage given from it makes it an unattractive choice since Life Orb, Stealth Rock, and recoil damage from both Double-Edge and Flare Blitz will wear down Ponyta quickly.
shouldn't the first comma (before "however") be a semi-colon?
Thanks, fixed!
 

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The nature IS specified, it's the ability that isn't. If you read the additional comments you'll see:

"With Arcanine's two excellent abilities, it can make a very effective switch-in to various threats. Flash Fire is recommended because not only does it allow Arcanine to destroy Weezing, Spiritomb, and most Fire-type Pokemon, but it also gives Arcanine extra firepower for Flare Blitz. Intimidate is still useful, however, since it allows Arcanine to switch in more reliably against Pokemon such as Leafeon."
 
Against slower leads, set up a layers Toxic Spikes until Beedrill gets knocked down to low HP, and then depending on the situation, either set up another layer and get KOed, or Endeavor to bring the opposing Pokemon down to 1 HP.
I changed it to:

Against slower leads, it can set up Toxic Spikes until Beedrill gets knocked down to low HP, and then depending on the situation, either set up another layer and get KOed, or Endeavor to bring the opposing Pokemon down to 1 HP.
In short, fixed.
 

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http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/beedrill

Against slower leads, it can set up Toxic Spikes until Beedrill gets knocked down to low HP, and then depending on the situation, either set up another layer and get KOed, or Endeavor to bring the opposing Pokemon down to 1 HP.
lol, S_A =P
Isn't it a bit odd to refer to it as "it" and then refer to it as Beedrill in the same sentence xD I would actually rather it be changed to:

Against slower leads, set up a layers Toxic Spikes until Beedrill gets knocked down to low HP, and then depending on the situation, either set up another layer and get KOed, or Endeavor to bring the opposing Pokemon down to 1 HP.
 
But that's exactly what it was before, which is grammatically incorrect. It can be changed to either what I originally suggested, or perhaps:

Against slower leads, Beedrill can set up Toxic Spikes until it gets knocked down to low HP, and then depending on the situation, either set up another layer and get KOed, or Endeavor to bring the opposing Pokemon down to 1 HP.
 

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changed that Beedrill thing to this:

Against slower leads, Beedrill can set up Toxic Spikes until it gets knocked down to low HP, and then depending on the situation, either set up another layer and get KOed, or Endeavor to bring the opposing Pokemon down to 1 HP.
Shinyazelf we appreciate your help but you might wanna double check your stuff there :P
 
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/donphan
UU overview. IIRC, 2 subjects joined by "and" make a plural verb.. missing commas?
actually, the subject is "the common presence" which is singular

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/donphan
OU overview. There's a missing comma between stats and which, i think.. The overview also kind of just stops, but that's a bit subjective..
i'll let the author do what he wants, but i did fix the bad phrase

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/donphan
OU Choice band set refers to "the set above", which R_D says to not do.. high powered is also supposed to have a hyphen
i don't know anything about the rules for the set above, but i fixed the other one

thank you for your suggestions!
 
I have noticed a typo in the Crobat analysis. I found this in the optional changes.

"Crobat has a wide variety of EV spreads it can run, due to the different roles it can fulfill. You can reduce the Speed number to 144 EVs, as this puts Crobat at 356 Speed, just enough to outpace +1 Speed Tyranitar."

Those speed EV's put Crobat at 365 speed, not 356. If you only had 356 Spe, you wouldn't outrun base 115s nor Scarftar.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/crobat
 
I have noticed a typo in the Crobat analysis. I found this in the optional changes.

"Crobat has a wide variety of EV spreads it can run, due to the different roles it can fulfill. You can reduce the Speed number to 144 EVs, as this puts Crobat at 356 Speed, just enough to outpace +1 Speed Tyranitar."

Those speed EV's put Crobat at 365 speed, not 356. If you only had 356 Spe, you wouldn't outrun base 115s nor Scarftar.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/crobat
gotcha, good one
 

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http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/trapinch

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0 Speed EVs and a Brave nature give Trapinch a grand total of 22 Speed, making him one of the slowest Pokemon in the (only Munchlax is slower).
The error is pretty obvious, the sentence is incomplete. I'm going to guess it was supposed to be:
0 Speed EVs and a Brave nature give Trapinch a grand total of 22 Speed, making him one of the slowest Pokemon in the tier (only Munchlax is slower).
 

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