Thank you for your kind words, everyone. I feel like a bit of an idiot for forgetting to make his gaze in the right direction, but at least it's fixed.
I thought a lot about what Rising Dusk said and finally decided that yeah, I made him a bit large. So I sized my sketch down 85% and started again, bleh. For comparison:
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I see him as around the height of Staravia or Swanna so I think that size is about appropriate.
Still not done, obviously, but it's coming along. I tried to take into account all of MrLuvdisc's comments
except the tail because I didn't really get to that yet, on account of restarting, and the feathers thing because I'm under the impression that they're ears, so I'd like him to have two. :V
Comments/critique appreciated.