UU Bronzong [QC 2/2] [GP 1/1]

[Jade]

[SET]
name: Specially Defensive
move 1: Stealth Rock
move 2: Toxic
move 3: Psychic / Gyro Ball
move 4: Protect / Gyro Ball
item: Leftovers
ability: Levitate
nature: Calm
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
An excellent defensive typing and great defensive stats make Bronzong an amazing Stealth Rock setter for many teams that is able to check threats such as Celebi and Noivern. A good ability in Levitate allows Bronzong to check Pokemon such as Rhyperior and Flygon. Toxic prevents Bronzong from being completely passive against Pokemon that would otherwise wall it such as Milotic and Mantine. Psychic hits Poison-types such as Toxtricity and Galarian Weezing while providing chip damage against Cobalion and Rotom-C and preventing Fighting-types such as Sirfetch'd from switching in freely. Gyro Ball hits faster Pokemon such as Flygon and Noivern harder than Psychic while also hitting Gardevoir without having to use Toxic. Heavy Slam is an alternate option to hit Pokemon that aren't hit hard by Gyro Ball such as Reuniclus and Galarian Weezing, and has more PP than Gyro Ball, but does less against Mamoswine. Protect allows Bronzong to scout for moves from Choice-locked Pokemon such as Haxorus and Chandelure while getting additional Leftovers recovery and pairing well with Toxic. Earthquake hits Heliolisk and Lucario harder than Psychic but has less utility than Protect due to not being able to scout Choice-locked Pokemon such as Gardevoir and Darmanitan. A Sassy nature is preferred if using Gyro Ball.

Due to how passive Bronzong is, breakers such as Haxorus and Inteleon pair well with it. Both also appreciate the Stealth Rock support that Bronzong provides while checking their revenge killers such as Noivern and Choice Scarf Flygon. Incineroar can take advantage of Bronzong for free turns and isn't bothered by any of its moves bar Toxic. Water-types such as Milotic and Vaporeon can check Incineroar and Darmanitan and have great type synergy with Bronzong. Due to Bronzong's vulnerability to Steel-types, checks to them such as Incineroar and Chandelure are vital. Incineroar is also a great partner for its ability to check Chandelure and Doublade, and Bronzong can check Ground- and Rock-type Pokemon that give Incineroar trouble. Incineroar can also help Bronzong check Gardevoir by forcing it to predict more heavily while also being able to wear down checks through hazards, status, and Knock Off. Physical wallbreakers such as Mamoswine and Haxorus can break through Bronzong and force it out with Knock Off and Earthquake, respectively. Checks to these Pokemon, such as Golisopod and Noivern, are important. Clerics such as Umbreon, Vaporeon, and Sylveon can heal Bronzong with Wish, as it otherwise lacks recovery. The former two can also check Chandelure, while Sylveon can check Haxorus.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Juuno, 444224]]
- Quality checked by: [[Hilomilo, 313384], [Twilight, 344575]]
- Grammar checked by: [[Estronic, 240732]]

 

[Jade]

So sorry for the delay! Ready for QC.

 

[Hilomilo]

[SET]
name: Specially Defensive
move 1: Stealth Rock
move 2: Toxic
move 3: Psychic / Heavy Slam / Gyro Ball
move 4: Protect / Psychic / Earthquake / Gyro Ball
item: Leftovers
ability: Levitate
nature: Calm
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD
Heavy Slam is fine as a moves mention but Gyro is much better against Noivern, Mamo, and Flygon. Fourth slot was reconfigured to be a bit less confusing while removing EQ which is rather niche. Just for future reference a main slash on one slot isn't usually optimal to put as another slash elsewhere.

[SET COMMENTS]
An excellent defensive typing Give some examples of Pokemon it can check with its typingand great defensive stats make Bronzong an amazing Stealth Rock setter for many teams. A good ability in Levitate allows Bronzong to check things such as Rhyperior and Earth Power CelebiUse Flygon instead of Celebi here, but consider mentioning Celebi in your earlier sentence. Heatproof is an alternate option to better answer Gardevoir, but loses out on the crucial Ground-type immunity. Levitate is too important. Toxic prevents Bronzong from being completely passive against Pokemon that would otherwise wall it you need to give some examples here. Psychic hits Poison-types such as Toxtricity and Galarian Weezing I'd also mention it provides neutral chip damage against Pokemon like Cobalion and Rotom-C, while Heavy Slam hits Celebi and Gardevoir. Make all three of Psychic/Gyro Ball/Slam separate sentences and rephrase Heavy Slam to sound less optimal than Gyro Ball. Gyro Ball is an alternative option to hit faster Pokemon such as Mamoswine harder, but is easy to PP stall and is less consistent overrall compared to Heavy Slam. Protect allows Bronzong to scout for moves from Choice-locked Pokemon such as Haxorus and Chandelure also add that it allows it to further restore health with Leftovers and Toxic stall foes, while Earthquake hits Toxtricity and Lucario harder than Psychic. Separate these into two sentences since Protect is significantly less niche. Specify Earthquake's drawbacks more, like how situational it is and its worse coverage. A Sassy nature is preferred if using Gyro Ball or Heavy Slam.

Due to how passive Bronzong is, breakers such as Haxorus and Inteleon pair well with it. Both also appreciate the Stealth Rock support that Bronzong provides, while checking their revenge killers such as Noivern and Choice Scarf Flygon. Incineroar can exploit Bronzong for free turns and isn't bothered by any of its moves bar Toxic. Water-types such as Milotic and Mantine can check Incineroar and have great type synergy with Bronzong. Add some examples of Steel-type checks due to Bronzong's general vulnerability to them. Physical wallbreakers such as Mamoswine and Haxorus can break through Bronzong and force it out with Knock Off and Earthquake respectively. Checks to these Pokemon, such as Golisopod and Noivern, are important. Clerics such as Umbreon and Vaporeon can heal Bronzong with Wish, as it otherwise lacks recovery. The latter can also check Incineroar and Chandelure. Incineroar itself is a good partner so I'd mention it. Great type synergy (mention what they can check for each other), forces Gardevoir to predict more, and they can stack chip damage with rocks + toxic + knock off.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Juuno, 444224]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, usernameid1], [username2, usernameid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, usernameid1]]

Tag me here when you've got this implemented for one last look before a stamp.

 

[Jade]

Ready for another look Hilomilo

 

[Hilomilo]

• Remove Heatproof. I already asked you to do this in the first check. Please implement everything qc asks of you.
• Don't say 'things' when referring to what Bronzong checks - use the word 'Pokemon.'
• "while providing chip damage against Bronzong and Rotom-C." - change your Bronzong example to something like Cobalion.
• Why does Earthquake have less utility than Protect? Elaborate more.
• Rephrase your sentence Incineroar to say that with Bronzong it forces Gardevoir to predict more heavily and specifically bring up Knock Off and Toxic when talking about stacking chip damage. Also add what Bronzong can check for Incineroar.

1/2 when you do this

 

[Jade]

ok

Ready for QC #2

 

[Twilight]

[SET]
name: Specially Defensive
move 1: Stealth Rock
move 2: Toxic
move 3: Psychic / Gyro Ball
move 4: Protect / Gyro Ball
item: Leftovers
ability: Levitate
nature: Calm
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
An excellent defensive typing and great defensive stats make Bronzong an amazing Stealth Rock setter for many teams that is able to check threats such as Celebi and Noivern. A good ability in Levitate allows Bronzong to check Pokemon such as Rhyperior and Flygon. Toxic prevents Bronzong from being completely passive against Pokemon that would otherwise wall it such as Milotic and Mantine. Psychic hits Poison-types such as Toxtricity and Galarian Weezing, while providing chip damage against Cobalion and Rotom-C. I would at least mention it helps deter Fighting-types like Sirfetch'd trying to pivot into it because it's able to risk taking a Gyro at least twice. Gyro Ball hits faster Pokemon such as Flygon and Noivern harder, however it's easier to PP stall. Definitely mention how it gives it an immediate way to remove Gardevoir than being forced to Toxic stall it. This ending about it being easier to PP stall also seems really abrupt and unnecessary so just remove it. Heavy Slam is an alternate option to hit Pokemon that aren't hit hard by Gyro Ball, but does less against Mamoswine. Give examples of Mons not hit as hard by Gyro that are important. Frankly, I would say the main benefit of using Heavy Slam is for the extra PP so include that here too, this fits much better than the Gyro PP stall comment. Protect allows Bronzong to scout for moves from Choice-locked Pokemon such as Haxorus and Chandelure, while getting additional Leftovers recovery and pairing well with Toxic. Earthquake hits Heliolisk and Lucario harder than Psychic, but has less utility than Protect due to not being able to scout Choice-locked Pokemon such as Gardeovir and Toxtricity. A Sassy nature is preferred if using Gyro Ball.

Due to how passive Bronzong is, breakers such as Haxorus and Inteleon pair well with it. Both also appreciate the Stealth Rock support that Bronzong provides, while checking their revenge killers such as Noivern and Choice Scarf Flygon. Incineroar can exploit Bronzong for free turns and isn't bothered by any of its moves bar Toxic. Water-types such as Milotic and Mantine I would use Vaporeon or Gastrodon instead, Mantine being forced to take a Knock and lose boots is far more detrimental than others losing Lefties can check Incineroar and have great type synergy with Bronzong. I would expand a little on this type synergy bit, something as little as they appreciate it checking Celebi and Roserade for them for example. Due to Bronzong's vulnerability to Steel-types, checks to them such as Incineroar and Chandelure are vital. Incineroar is also a great partner for its ability to check Chandelure and Doublade, while Bronzong can check Ground- and Rock-type Pokemon that give Incineroar trouble. Incineroar can also help Bronzong check Gardevoir by forcing it to predict more heavily, while stacking chip with Knock Off and Toxic. I feel like this can be worded better as hazards + toxic/wisp is what is wearing them down. If you mention Knock then I would specify removing Leftovers + these factors are what helps them achieve this. Physical wallbreakers such as Mamoswine and Haxorus can break through Bronzong and force it out with Knock Off and Earthquake respectively. Checks to these Pokemon, such as Golisopod and Noivern, are important. Clerics such as Umbreon and Vaporeon I'd mention Aroma here given it can check Haxorus for Bronzong, maybe try to tie it into your earlier point can heal Bronzong with Wish, as it otherwise lacks recovery. The latter can also check Incineroar and Chandelure.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Juuno, 444224]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, usernameid1], [username2, usernameid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, usernameid1]]

2/2 when done

 

[Jade]

ok

Ready for GP.

 

[Milak]

Amcheck
Add (AC=Add comma; ASC=Add semicolon)
Remove (RC=Remove comma; RFS=Remove full stop)
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[SET]
name: Specially Defensive
move 1: Stealth Rock
move 2: Toxic
move 3: Psychic / Gyro Ball
move 4: Protect / Gyro Ball
item: Leftovers
ability: Levitate
nature: Calm
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
An excellent defensive typing and great defensive stats make Bronzong an amazing Stealth Rock setter for many teams that where it is able to check threats such as Celebi and Noivern. A good ability in Levitate allows Bronzong to check Pokemon such as Rhyperior and Flygon. Toxic prevents Bronzong from being completely passive against Pokemon that would otherwise wall it such as Milotic and Mantine. Psychic hits Poison-types such as Toxtricity and Galarian Weezing,(RC) while providing chip damage against Cobalion and Rotom-C, while as well as preventing Fighting-types such as Sirfetch'd from switching in freely. Gyro Ball hits faster Pokemon such as Flygon,(RC) and Noivern harder than Psychic,(RC) while also hitting Gardevoir without having to use Toxic. Heavy Slam is an alternate alternative option to hit Pokemon that aren't hit hard by able to tank (changed this to avoid repetition of the verb "hit") Gyro Ball such as Reuniclus and Galarian Weezing, as well as having more PP than Gyro Ball, but does less against Mamoswine. Protect allows Bronzong to scout for moves from Choice-locked Pokemon such as Haxorus and Chandelure, while getting additional Leftovers recovery and pairing well with Toxic. Earthquake hits Heliolisk and Lucario harder than Psychic, but has less utility than Protect due to not being able to scout Choice-locked Pokemon such as Gardeovir and Toxtricity. A Sassy nature is preferred if using Gyro Ball.

Due to how passive Bronzong is, breakers such as Haxorus and Inteleon pair well with it. Both also appreciate the Stealth Rock support that Bronzong provides, while checking and its ability to check (Not really a major change, but I felt like there was an excessive use of the structure "while...") their revenge killers such as Noivern and Choice Scarf Flygon. Incineroar can exploit Bronzong for free turns and isn't bothered by any of its moves bar Toxic; (RFS -> ASC) therefore,(AC) (I feel like this improves flow and links the two sentence related to Incineroar vs Water-types, I used to pronoun to refer to Incineror because it's farily easy to understand it's the object) Water-types such as Milotic and Vaporeon can check Incineroar it and have great type synergy with Bronzong. Due to Bronzong's vulnerability to Steel-types, checks to them such as Incineroar and Chandelure are vital. Incineroar The former is also a great partner for its ability to check Chandelure and Doublade, while Bronzong can check Ground- and Rock-type Pokemon that give Incineroar trouble. Incineroar can also help Bronzong check Gardevoir by forcing it to predict more heavily,(RC) while being able to wear down checks through hazards, status, and Knock Off. Physical wallbreakers such as Mamoswine and Haxorus can break through Bronzong and force it out with Knock Off and Earthquake respectively. Checks to these Pokemon, such as Golisopod and Noivern, are important. Clerics such as Umbreon, Vaporeon, and Aromatisse can heal Bronzong with Wish, as it otherwise lacks recovery. The former two can also check Chandelure, while Aromatisse can check Haxorus.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Juuno, 444224]]
- Quality checked by: [[Hilomilo, 313384], [Twilight, 344575]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, usernameid1]]

 

[Astra]

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[SET]
name: Specially Defensive
move 1: Stealth Rock
move 2: Toxic
move 3: Psychic / Gyro Ball
move 4: Protect / Gyro Ball
item: Leftovers
ability: Levitate
nature: Calm
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
An excellent defensive typing and great defensive stats make Bronzong an amazing Stealth Rock setter for many teams that is able to check threats such as Celebi and Noivern. A good ability in Levitate allows Bronzong to check Pokemon such as Rhyperior and Flygon. Toxic prevents Bronzong from being completely passive against Pokemon that would otherwise wall it such as Milotic and Mantine. Psychic hits Poison-types such as Toxtricity and Galarian Weezing, (RC) while providing chip damage against Cobalion and Rotom-C, while and preventing Fighting-types such as Sirfetch'd from switching in freely. Gyro Ball hits faster Pokemon such as Flygon, (RC) and Noivern harder than Psychic, (RC) while also hitting Gardevoir without having to use Toxic. Heavy Slam is an alternate option to hit Pokemon that aren't hit hard by Gyro Ball such as Reuniclus and Galarian Weezing, as well as having and has more PP than Gyro Ball, but it does less against Mamoswine. Protect allows Bronzong to scout for moves from Choice-locked Pokemon such as Haxorus and Chandelure, (RC) while getting additional Leftovers recovery and pairing well with Toxic. Earthquake hits Heliolisk and Lucario harder than Psychic, (RC) but has less utility than Protect due to not being able to scout Choice-locked Pokemon such as Gardeovir and Toxtricity. A Sassy nature is preferred if using Gyro Ball. (shouldn't you slash sassy with calm under natures, then?)

Due to how passive Bronzong is, breakers such as Haxorus and Inteleon pair well with it. Both also appreciate the Stealth Rock support that Bronzong provides, (RC) while checking their revenge killers such as Noivern and Choice Scarf Flygon. Incineroar can exploit take advantage of Bronzong for free turns and isn't bothered by any of its moves bar Toxic. Water-types such as Milotic and Vaporeon can check Incineroar and have great type synergy with Bronzong. Due to Bronzong's vulnerability to Steel-types, checks to them such as Incineroar and Chandelure are vital. Incineroar is also a great partner for its ability to check Chandelure and Doublade, while and Bronzong can check Ground- and Rock-type Pokemon that give Incineroar trouble. Incineroar can also help Bronzong check Gardevoir by forcing it to predict more heavily, (RC) while also being able to wear down checks through hazards, status, and Knock Off. Physical wallbreakers such as Mamoswine and Haxorus can break through Bronzong and force it out with Knock Off and Earthquake, (AC) respectively. Checks to these Pokemon, such as Golisopod and Noivern, are important. Clerics such as Umbreon, Vaporeon, and Aromatisse can heal Bronzong with Wish, as it otherwise lacks recovery. The former two can also check Chandelure, while Aromatisse can check Haxorus.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Juuno, 444224]]
- Quality checked by: [[Hilomilo, 313384], [Twilight, 344575]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, usernameid1]]

1/1

 

[Jade]

ok

this should be ready for upload now

 

[Hilomilo]

uploaded