Quality Control Defensive Cloyster [QC: 0/2]

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[SET]
name: Defensive Cloyster
Cloyster @ Rocky Helmet / Heavy-Duty Boots
Ability: Overcoat
EVs: 248 HP / 252 Def / 8 SpD
Bold Nature
- Rapid Spin
- Spikes
- Surf
- Teleport / Hidden Power Fire

[SET COMMENTS]
Due to its typing, Cloyster has found itself as an important defensive piece on Ice. Its high defense stat allows it to tank hits from Steel-type pokemon that are often threatening to Ice such as Scizor and Excadrill. Rapid Spin allows it remove hazards such as Stealth Rocks, which is vital to remove on Ice due to ice's weakness to Stealth Rocks. Even though it forces Cloyster's ability to Overcoat, Teleport allows Cloyster to keep momentum when it comes onto the field. Teleport allows Cloyster to pivot into its teammates who can provide more offensive ability. Hidden Power Fire helps to threaten the pokemon that Cloyster is often swapping into on Ice, such as the aforementioned Scizor, and helps lower their HP to a point where Cloyster's teammates can deal with them easier. Surf allows Cloyster to do consistent damage, while being able to run Teleport. Rocky Helmet allows Cloyster to punish physical moves that Cloyster often swaps into and U-Turn. Heavy-Duty Boots allows Cloyster to come in more often in order to remove hazards and reduce the amount of damage that it is taking over time due to hazards. Overcoat also helps to reduce the damage that Cloyster is taking overtime by negating Sandstorm damage and increases its defensive ability because it allows it to swap into powder moves such as Spore or Stun Spore that can hinder its teammates.

Defensive Cloyster works best on offensive teams that can take advantage of the Spikes that Cloyster can set. Darmanitan-Galar is a very good teammate for Cloyster, being able to threaten Pokémon with Icicle Crash and being able to force Pokémon out, forcing them to take spikes damage while still hitting something for a lot of chip. Ninetales-Alola is another useful teammate and Ice staple, it helps Cloyster with Aurora Veil. With Aurora Veil, Cloyster is able to tank special attacks better and set spikes easier against Pokémon that can often deny spikes from Cloyster.

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[SET]
Cloyster @ Rocky Helmet / Heavy-Duty Boots
Name: Defensive Utility (Ice) Defensive Cloyster
Ability: Overcoat
EVs: 248 HP / 252 Def / 8 SpD
Bold Nature
- Rapid Spin
- Spikes
- Surf
- Teleport / Hidden Power Fire

[SET COMMENTS]
Due to its typing, Cloyster has found itself as an important defensive piece on Ice. Its high defense stat allows it to tank hits from Steel-type pokemon that are often threatening to Ice such as Scizor and Excadrill.(This can be combine into one sentence, just talk about its part water typing, ability to check drill + nice utility]. Rapid Spin allows it remove entry hazards such as Stealth Rocks, which is vital to remove on Ice teams due to ice's weakness to Stealth Rocks. Comments: Add a Spikes sentence; talk about how it provide chip damage against threats to cloyster like x y and z Even though it forces Cloyster's ability to Overcoat, Teleport allows Cloyster to keep momentum when it comes onto the field. Teleport allows Cloyster to pivot into its teammates who can provide more offensive ability. Hidden Power Fire helps to threaten the pokemon that Cloyster is often swapping into on Ice, such as the aforementioned Scizor, and helps lower their HP to a point where Cloyster's teammates can deal with them easier. (Move this after the Surf sentence so it flows with the order of the moves on the set also Overcoat is not a bad ability, its actually nice for defensive cloyster as we dont ever wanting this to be spored or even sandstorm chip yanno? I would remove that part and reword the teleport sentence. Talk about how it pivots out of bad mu [give examples of threats] while also bringing in offensive teammates [provide one] to deal with said check. For Hp Fire all its hitting / dealing with is scizor imo so you can just say: Whereas Hidden Power Fire can be used over Teleport to effectively deal with Scizor.) Surf allows Cloyster to do consistent damage, while being able to run Teleport.(Fluff) Rocky Helmet allows Cloyster to punish physical moves that Cloyster often swaps into and U-Turn. (just provide mons that we are punishing) Heavy-Duty Boots allows Cloyster to come in more often in order to remove hazards and reduce the amount of damage that it is taking over time due to hazards. Overcoat also helps to reduce the damage that Cloyster is taking overtime by negating Sandstorm damage and increases its defensive ability because it allows it to swap into powder moves such as Spore or Stun Spore that can hinder its teammates.

Defensive Cloyster works best on offensive teams that can take advantage of the Spikes that Cloyster can set. Darmanitan-Galar is a very good teammate for Cloyster, being able to threaten Pokémon with Icicle Crash and being able to force Pokémon out, forcing them to take spikes damage while still hitting something for a lot of chip. Ninetales-Alola is another useful teammate and Ice staple, it helps Cloyster with Aurora Veil. With Aurora Veil, Cloyster is able to tank special attacks better and set spikes easier against Pokémon that can often deny spikes from Cloyster.
Notes: NDM analyses are only 1 big paragraph so we need to merge the second paragraph after you talked about Cloyster set. Then you talk about teammates. Teammates should include / need to write about: Alolan Ninetales, Galarian Darmanatan, Kyurem, Piloswine, and sweeper options like Weavile / Cetitan / alolan sandslash
- Regional formes names start off with the region. So like Galarian Slowking not Slowking-Galar
- K.I.S.S.=KEEP IT SHORT AND SIMPLE :)
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