Monotype Dragonite (Flying) QC:2/2 GP:0/1

[Mada]

[SET]
name: Choice Band (Flying)
move 1: Extreme Speed
move 2: Outrage
move 3: Fire Punch
move 4: Earthquake
item: Choice Band
ability: Multiscale
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

Dragonite's high base Attack combined with Choice Band allows it to clean up many offensive teams with Extreme Speed, while Outrage can break through bulky teams such as Poison and Water. Multiscale can be very helpful to survive a supereffective attack from foes such as Hydreigon. Outrage is a powerful STAB that breaks defensive cores on types such as Water and Poison, 2HKOing physical walls such as Toxapex, Quagsire, and Amoonguss. Fire Punch and Earthquake punishes Steel-types such as Corviknight, Iron Treads, and the aforementioned Poison-types. Brick Break can be helpful to target Dark-types such as Kingambit, and it removes screens against Dark and Fairy teams to help its teammates break. Iron Head can be used to deal with Fairy-types such as Hatterene, while Waterfall can be used in rain-archetypes to deal with types such as Ground.

Corviknight can deal with Ice-type Pokemon like Chien-Pao with Iron Head and can pivot with U-turn. Kilowattrel can also pivot Dragonite in with Volt Switch and can help it deal with physical walls like Dondozo and Iron Defense Corviknight. Choice Specs Iron Jugulis is also a great partner that appreciates Dragonite dealing with special walls such as Clodsire, Slowking, and Dragalge, while Iron Jugulis deals with Phyisical walls such as Toxapex and Amoonguss. Bombirdier can provide entry hazard support with Stealth Rock and avoid them being placed by foes such as Ting-Lu with Taunt, while also offering extra-pivoting with Parting Shot to help Dragonite find more occasions to wallbreak. Gyarados is another teammate that can deal with some Ice-types such as Chien-Pao, but the lack of recovery can wear it down very quickly. In exchange, Dragonite can weaken down foes such as Toxapex and Amoonguss to potentially allow Gyarados to clean up teams with Dragon Dance.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[AtraX Madara, 513753]]
- type analysis by: [[AtraX Madara, 513753]]
- Quality checked by: [[Neko, 542526], [sasha, 510532]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

 

[Neko]

Dnite

[SET]
name: Choice Band (Flying)
move 1: Extreme Speed
move 2: Outrage
move 3: Fire Punch
move 4: Brick Break / Earthquake (but keep it in the comments)
item: Choice Band
ability: Multiscale
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

The high base Attack combined with Choice Band allows Dragonite to clean up many offensive teams with Extreme Speed and to break fat bulky teams with Outrage (can you mention which types in particular?). Multiscale can be very helpful to survive a supereffective attack from foes such as Hydreigon. Outrage is a powerful STAB that can breaks defensive cores on types such as Water and Poison, 2HKOing physical walls such as Toxapex, Quagsire, and Amoonguss, and Slowbro. Fire Punch and Earthquake can punishes Steel-types such as Corviknight and Iron Treads, and is but I can also be helpful against the aforementioned Poison-types to avoid getting Outrage's confusion (tiny nitpick, Amoon is never 2HKO'ed by Eq and Eq never OHKOes Toxapex anyway, so is there an advantage in using Outrage over Eq? [prevents you from being locked to be revenge killed by Iron Moth, perhaps?]). Brick Break can be helpful to target Dark-types such as Kingambit, and it cleans screens against Dark and Fairy teams to help its his teammate break. (Kinda a little vague, add mention of Thunder Punch / Iron Head / Waterfall too imo, deals with Azu / Hatt while Waterfall synergizes well in rain archetypes flying teams do, sometimes)

All Flying Pokemon appreciate Dragonite's ability to clean up teams. Corviknight can deal with Ice-type Pokemons like Chien-Pao and can pivot it safely on the field with U-turn. Kilowattrel can also pivot Dragonite in with Volt Switch and can help it deal with annoying physical walls like Dondozo and Iron Defense Corviknight. Choice Specs Iron Jugulis is also a great partner that appreciates Dragonite dealing with special walls (like?), while Iron Jugulis deals with Ghost-Types as they are immune to Extreme Speed. Bombirdier can sets up Stealth Rock and avoid them being placed by foes such as Ting-Lu with Taunt, while also offering extra-pivoting with Parting Shot to help Dragonite find more occasions to wallbreak. Gyarados is another teammate that can deal with some Ice-types such as Chien-Pao, but the lack of recovery can wear it down very quickly. In exchange, Dragonite can weaken down foes such as Toxapex and Amoonguss to potentially allow Gyarados to clean up teams with Dragon Dance.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[AtraX Madara, 513753]]
- type analysis by: [[AtraX Madara, 513753]]
- Quality checked by: [[Neko, 542526username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

The analysis has a few problems in terms of clarity, but I'm not proficient enough to straighten it for you. Content-wise, its oki, Thankie Madara

1/2

 

[Mada]

Implemented, thanks

 

[sasha]

dnite

[SET COMMENTS]

The Dragonite's high base Attack combined with Choice Band allows Dragonite it to clean up many offensive teams with Extreme Speed, while Outrage can break through bulky teams such as Poison and Water. Multiscale can be very helpful to survive a supereffective attack from foes such as Hydreigon. Outrage is a powerful STAB that breaks defensive cores on types such as Water and Poison, 2HKOing physical walls such as Toxapex, Quagsire, and Amoonguss. Fire Punch and Earthquake punishes Steel-types and Poison-types such as Corviknight, Iron Treads, and the aforementioned Poison-types. Brick Break can be helpful to target Dark-types such as Kingambit, and it cleans removes screens against Dark and Fairy teams to help its teammate (Add which teammate benefits from this) break. Iron Head can be used to deal with Fairy-types such as Hatterene, while Waterfall can be used in rain-archetypes with Pelipper and Kilowattrel. (id just mention what waterfall in rain helps with such as ground, cuz pelipper and kilo aren't exclusive to rain teams, theyre both good in their own regard so this just reads weird)

All Flying Pokemon appreciate Dragonite's ability to clean up teams. Corviknight can deal with Ice-type Pokemons like Chien-Pao (with what) and can pivot it safely on the field with U-turn. Kilowattrel can also pivot Dragonite in with Volt Switch and can help it deal with physical walls like Dondozo and Iron Defense Corviknight. Choice Specs Iron Jugulis is also a great partner that appreciates Dragonite dealing with special walls such as Clodsire, Slowking, and Dragalge, while Iron Jugulis deals with Ghost-Types as they are immune to Extreme Speed (i would reword this to like physical walls maybe instead of ghost types since ghost has things like pult and flutter mane to easily deal with specs jugulis). Bombirdier can provide entry hazard support sets up with Stealth Rock and avoid them being placed by foes such as Ting-Lu with Taunt, while also offering extra-pivoting with Parting Shot to help Dragonite find more occasions to wallbreak. Gyarados is another teammate that can deal with some Ice-types such as Chien-Pao, but the lack of recovery can wear it down very quickly. In exchange, Dragonite can weaken down foes such as Toxapex and Amoonguss to potentially allow Gyarados to clean up teams with Dragon Dance.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[AtraX Madara, 513753]]
- type analysis by: [[AtraX Madara, 513753]]
- Quality checked by: [[Neko, 542526], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

add remove comment
ill recheck after this is implemented

 

[Mada]

sasha done

 

[sasha]

Looks good, 2/2!
[sasha, 510532]

 

[Mada]

GP Team

 

[Dead by Daylight]

AMGP check, take what you'd like | add remove comment

AMGP Check

[SET]
name: Choice Band (Flying)
move 1: Extreme Speed
move 2: Outrage
move 3: Fire Punch
move 4: Earthquake
item: Choice Band
ability: Multiscale
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

Dragonite's high base Attack combined with Choice Band allows it to clean up many offensive teams with Extreme Speed, while Outrage can break through bulky teams such as Poison and Water. Multiscale can be very helpful to survive a super-effective attack from foes such as Hydreigon. Outrage is a powerful STAB that breaks bulkier defensive cores on types such as Water and Poison (you said this 2 lines ago), 2HKOing physical walls such as Toxapex, Quagsire, and Amoonguss. Fire Punch and Earthquake punishes Steel-types such as Corviknight, Iron Treads, and the aforementioned Poison-types trying to switch in on its moves. Brick Break can be helpful to target Dark-types such as Kingambit, and it removes screens against Dark and Fairy teams to help its teammates break. Iron Head can be used to deal with Fairy-types such as Hatterene, while Waterfall can be used in Rain-archetypes to deal with types such as Ground.

Corviknight can deal with Ice-type Pokemon like Chien-Pao with Iron Head and can pivot with U-turn. Kilowattrel can also pivot Dragonite in with Volt Switch and can help it deal with physical walls like Dondozo and Iron Defense Corviknight. Choice Specs Iron Jugulis is also a great partner that appreciates Dragonite dealing with special walls such as Clodsire, Slowking, and Dragalge, while Iron Jugulis deals with phyisical walls such as Toxapex and Amoonguss. Bombirdier can provide entry hazard support with Stealth Rock while keeping them off Dragonite's side of the field and avoid them being placed by foes such as Ting-Lu (this seemed a bit clunky) with Taunt, while also offering extra-pivoting with Parting Shot to help Dragonite find more occasions to wallbreak. Gyarados is another teammate that can deal with some Ice-types such as Chien-Pao, but the lack of recovery can wear it down very quickly. In exchange, Dragonite can weaken down foes such as Toxapex and Amoonguss to potentially allow Gyarados to clean up teams with Dragon Dance.
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[autumn]

1/1 GP Team done

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[SET]
name: Choice Band (Flying)
move 1: Extreme Speed
move 2: Outrage
move 3: Fire Punch
move 4: Earthquake
item: Choice Band
ability: Multiscale
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

Dragonite's high base Attack combined with Choice Band allows it to clean up many offensive teams with Extreme Speed, while Outrage can break through bulky teams such as Poison and Water. Multiscale can be very helpful to survive a super effective attack from foes such as Hydreigon. Outrage is a powerful STAB move that breaks defensive cores on types such as Water and Poison (you said this 2 lines ago), 2HKOing physical walls such as Toxapex, Quagsire, and Amoonguss. Fire Punch and Earthquake punishes Steel-types such as Corviknight (RC) and Iron Treads, and as well as the aforementioned Poison-types. Brick Break can be helpful to target Dark-types such as Kingambit, and it removes dual screens against Dark and Fairy teams to help its teammates break. Iron Head can be used to deal with Fairy-types such as Hatterene, while Waterfall can be used in rain- (remove hyphen)archetypes to deal with types such as Ground.

Corviknight can deal with Ice-type Pokemon like Chien-Pao with Iron Head and can pivot with U-turn. Kilowattrel can also pivot Dragonite in with Volt Switch and can help it deal with physical walls like Dondozo and Iron Defense Corviknight. Choice Specs Iron Jugulis is also a great partner that appreciates Dragonite dealing with special walls such as Clodsire, Slowking, and Dragalge, while Iron Jugulis deals with phyisical walls such as Toxapex and Amoonguss. Bombirdier can provide entry hazard support with Stealth Rock and prevent foes such as Ting-Lu from setting up their own hazards and avoid them being placed by foes such as Ting-Lu (this seemed a bit clunky) with Taunt (RC) while also offering extra- (remove hyphen)pivoting with Parting Shot to help Dragonite find more occasions to wallbreak. Gyarados is another teammate that can deal with some Ice-types such as Chien-Pao, but the lack of recovery can wear it down very quickly. In exchange, Dragonite can weaken down foes such as Toxapex and Amoonguss to potentially allow Gyarados to clean up teams with Dragon Dance.

notes for amcheck

Dead by Daylight
- Super effective is never hyphenated
- STAB attack/move, not just STAB
- "Defensive cores" is perfectly fine phrasing; there's no need to add "bulkier." In fact, you're slightly changing the meaning by doing that, and as GP, you always always want to avid altering meaning and content
- You want to make sure lists are parallel and all parts of the list could follow the start of it "Steel-types such as Corviknight" "Steel-types such as Iron Treads" "Steel-types such as the aforementioned Poison-types" - the last one doesn't make sense, so you have to restructure the sentence and remove that from the list and make it a separate clause
- Adding "trying to switch in on its moves" is also adding unnecessary content - if you ever feel like something needs clarification, leave a comment instead
- Dual screens, not screens
- Weather conditions (rain, sun, snow, sand) are not capitalised
- When adding/removing hyphens, make sure to mark the change because it can be hard to see and easily missed
- Your reword in the second paragraph is fine, but you removed content (the Ting-Lu example) while doing this. If you're rewording content, you need to make sure all the original content and meaning is intact
- Commas before "while" should only be used when it means "whereas"

 

[Neko]

[SET]
name: Choice Band (Flying)
move 1: Extreme Speed
move 2: Outrage
move 3: Fire Punch
move 4: Earthquake
item: Choice Band
ability: Multiscale
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

Dragonite's high base Attack combined with Choice Band allows it to clean up many offensive teams with Extreme Speed, while Outrage can break through bulky teams such as Poison and Water. Multiscale can be very helpful to survive a super effective attack from foes such as Hydreigon. Outrage is a powerful STAB move that breaks defensive cores, 2HKOing physical walls such as Toxapex, Quagsire, and Amoonguss. Fire Punch and Earthquake punish Steel-types such as Corviknight and Iron Treads, as well as the aforementioned Poison-types. Brick Break can be helpful to target Dark-types such as Kingambit, and it removes dual screens against Dark and Fairy teams to help its teammates break. Iron Head can be used to deal with Fairy-types such as Hatterene, while Waterfall can be used in rain archetypes to deal with types such as Ground.

Corviknight can deal with Ice-type Pokemon like Chien-Pao with Iron Head and can pivot with U-turn. Kilowattrel can also pivot Dragonite in with Volt Switch and can help it deal with physical walls like Dondozo and Iron Defense Corviknight. Choice Specs Iron Jugulis is also a great partner that appreciates Dragonite dealing with special walls such as Clodsire, Slowking, and Dragalge, while Iron Jugulis deals with phyisical walls such as Toxapex and Amoonguss. Bombirdier can provide entry hazard support with Stealth Rock and prevent foes such as Ting-Lu from setting up their own hazards with Taunt while also offering extra pivoting with Parting Shot to help Dragonite find more occasions to wallbreak. Gyarados is another teammate that can deal with some Ice-types such as Chien-Pao, but the lack of recovery can wear it down very quickly. In exchange, Dragonite can weaken down foes such as Toxapex and Amoonguss to potentially allow Gyarados to clean up teams with Dragon Dance.

[CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/atrax-madara.513753/
Flying analysis by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/atrax-madara.513753/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/neko.542526/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/sasha.510532/
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/autumn.384270/