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[OVERVIEW]

Thanks to Duraludon's good Speed and Draco Meteor + Eject Pack combo, it's able to act as a decent one-time pivot and wallbreaker. Even in unfavorable matchups against bulkier walls, Duraludon is still able to safely make progress against Copperajah, Vaporeon, and Escavalier. Its serviceable physical bulk and Steel-typing allow it to switch into the likes of Talonflame, Ninjask, and bulky Poison-types, with the consumption of Eject Pack allowing it to better handle Poltergeist and Knock-Off users. However, Duraludon has very poor Special Defense, making it very vulnerable to faster special attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi, and Volt Switch users. Duraludon also faces large competition with other Dragon- and Steel-type wallbreakers like Goodra and Copperajah. Additionally, Duraludon is unable to properly check the things a traditional Dragon- or Steel-type would check, such as Rotom-C, Exploud, Sylveon, and more, leading to type stacking and or more compensation needed in the builder.

[SET]
name: Eject Pack
move 1: Draco Meteor
move 2: Flash Cannon
move 3: Dark Pulse / Body Press
move 4: Stealth Rock / Thunderbolt
item: Eject Pack
ability: Light Metal
nature: Timid
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Details
====

Eject Pack allows Duraludon to gain momentum for its teammates, oftentimes after claiming a kill or after bailing on one of its checks. Duraludon's good matchup against common hazard removal options like Talonflame and Xatu allows it to serve as a decent Stealth Rock setter. Alternatively, Thunderbolt can be used to better pressure bulky Water-types such as Vaporeon and Mantine. Dark Pulse allows you to hit Pokemon such as Bronzong and Starmie for good damage, meaning the use of Draco Meteor is not needed to make progress in these matchups. While Body Press allows you to hit Copperajah, allowing other teammates such as Blastoise to better sweep later on. Timid is preferred to outspeed base 80's such as Braviary, also giving you more insurance in the Toxicroak matchup.

Fighting-types such as Toxicroak and Sirfetch'd are able to take advantage of Duraludon's checks such as Copperajah, Vaporeon, and Escavalier. They are also able to weaken and pressure shared checks in Mudsdale and Bronzong. In return, Duraludon is able to threaten the bulky Poison-types such as Garbodor, Vileplume, and Dragalge that might otherwise be problematic for the Fighting-types. Duraludon is easily revenge killed and chunked by faster special attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi, and Electric-types. Duraludon is also unable to properly take advantage of its Dragon / Steel typing to check Fire- and Fairy-types. Pokemon such as Diancie and Heatproof Bronzong are able to pair nicely with Duraludon as a result. Diancie appreciates the extra protection against Pokemon like Decidueye, Heavy Slam Guzzlord, and bulky Poison-types, and can help Duraludon in the Fire- and Dragon-type matchups it's vulnerable against. Bronzong similarly can also act as a good pairing with Duraludon, able to utilize other sets without Stealth Rocks taking up a moveslot, with the same applying to Diancie.


[STRATEGY COMMENTS]
Other Options
====

Choice Specs can be used to increase Duraludon's already decent wallbreaking powers, scoring more OHKOes and landing the 2HKO on Pokemon such as Vaporeon and Bronzong. Choice Specs Duraludon is more prediction reliant, however, and lacks the utility of Eject Pack.

While more matchup fishy, Iron Defense + Body Press Duraludon can still serve as a usable wincon. It's able to use its decent bulk and Steel-typing to setup on non-Body Press Bronzong, Copperajah, and other passive Pokemon. It has more longevity utilizing Leftovers, allowing it to better answer things like Ninjask long-term.

Checks and Counters
====

**Bulky Steel-types**: Bulky Steel-types such as Copperajah and Escavalier can tank multiple hits and threaten with heavy damage back, while Pokemon such as Bronzong can avoid the 2HKO and threaten back with a devastating Body Press.

**Specially Defensive Pokemon**: Specially Defensive variants of Vaporeon and Sylveon are able to stomach Duraludon's attacks from full, and can beat Duraludon with the combination of Wish and their STAB attacks.

**Special Attackers**: Special Attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi, Heliolisk, Rotom-C, and Starmie are all able to either OHKO Duraludon or are able to heavily chunk it with their resisted attacks.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[turtledoggo1, 503907]]
- Quality checked by: [[Rabia, 336073, [S1nn0hC0nfirm3d, 231074]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
 
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[OVERVIEW]

Thanks to Duraludon's Steel-typing, high Special Attack and good Speed, it's able to act as a decent one-time pivot and wallbreaker. Its serviceable physical bulk and Steel-typing allow it to switch into the likes of Talonflame, Ninjask, and bulky Poison types, with the consumption of Eject Pack allowing it to better handle Poltergeist and Knock-Off users. Even in unfavorable matchups against bulkier walls, Duraludon is still able to make progress thanks to the combination of Eject Pack and Draco Meteor.(I think it'd be good to note here or somewhere else in the Overview how Eject Pack Duraludon prevents momentum loss against its hardest checks/counters and is good at supporting the wallbreakers that take advantage of its switch-ins.) However, Duraludon has very poor Special Defence, making it very vulnerable to faster Special Attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi and Volt Switch users. Duraludon also faces slight (Definitely more than just "slight" competition.) competition as a Dragon and Steel type wallbreaker with Goodra and Copperajah respectively. (It's worth noting that Duraludon is unable to make use of the typical resistances you'd gain from having a Steel- or Dragon-type on your team. It can't reliably check Fairy- or Fire-types, which leads to some heavy compensation being needed in the builder.)

[SET]
name: Eject Pack
move 1: Draco Meteor
move 2: Flash Cannon
move 3: Dark Pulse
move 4: Stealth Rock/Thunderbolt
item: Eject Pack
ability: Light Metal
nature: Timid
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Details
====

Eject Pack allows Duraludon to gain momentum for its teammates, oftentimes after claiming a kill or after bailing on a bulky Steel or Water-type. Stealth Rocks allow Duraladon to chip and ware down the opposing team. Threatening common hazard removal and deterrents such as Xatu, Dhelmise and Talonflame. Alternitevely, thunderbolt can be used to better pressure bulky Water-types such as Vaporeon and Mantine. (I think you need to check here for typos. You can cut that first Stealth Rock sentence out as is anyway and just note that Duraludon's good matchup against common removal options makes it a fine option to set the hazard.) Timid is preferred to outspeed potentially problematic Pokemon such as Toxicroak (You still risk a Speed tie with Toxicroak, so reword to reflect that.) and base 80's such as Braviary.

Fighting-types such as Toxicroak and Sirfetch'd are able to take advantage of Duraludon's checks such as Copperajah, Vaporeon and Escavalier. They are also able to weaken and pressure shared checks in Mudsdale and Bronzong. In return, Duraludon is able to threaten the bulky Poison-types such as Garbodor, Vileplume and Weezing that might otherwise be problematic for the Fighting-types. Duraludon is easily revenge killed by faster Special Attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi, with Electric-types such as Rotom-C and Heliolisk able to chunk away at its health. As a result, Pokemon such as Guzzlord, Bronzong and Mudsdale make for a good pairing, appreciating Duraludon's offensive pressure and defensive utility with regards to Mudsdale. (To go back to my last Overview comment, maybe make note down here of Duraludon's defensive shortcomings typing-wise and what some options are to pair with it as a result. Diancie and Sylveon come to mind.)

[STRATEGY COMMENTS]
Other Options
====

Choice Specs can be used to increase Duraludon's already decent wallbreaking powers, scoring more OHKOs and landing the two hit KO on Pokemon such as Vaporeon and Bronzong. Choice Specs Duraludon is more prediction reliant, however, and lacks the utility of Eject Pack. (Iron Defense is fine enough to put down here. It's worse than Bronzong and less effective than it was in its heyday, but you can still somewhat effectively fish for matchup with it, and having Leftovers recovery can be nice if you need Duraludon for something like Ninjask long-term.)

Checks and Counters
====

**Bulky Steel-types**: Bulky Steel-types such as Copperajah and Escavalier can tank multiple hits and threaten with heavy damage back. While Pokemon such as Bronzong can avoid the two hit KO and can threaten back with a devastating Body Press.

**Specially Defensive Pokemon**: Specially Defensive variants of Vaporeon and Sylveon are able to stomach Duraludon's attacks from full, and can beat Duraludon with the combination of Wish and their STABS.

**Special Attckers**: Special Attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi, Heliolisk, Rotom-C and Starmie are all able to either OHKO Duraludon or are able to heavily chunk it with their resisted attacks.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[turtledoggo1, userid1]] i dont know what my userid is
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]

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[OVERVIEW]

Thanks to Duraludon's Steel-typing, high Special Attack and good Speed and Draco Meteor + Eject Pack combo, it's able to act as a decent one-time pivot and wallbreaker (Stats really aren't mentioned in the overview besides Speed, and idk what its Steel-typing has to do with pivoting or wallbreaking. Instead, I kept the Speed mention and added the combo; you write about its typing in the next sentence so there's no need to mention it here if it leads to nothing within the point you're trying to make.) . Its serviceable physical bulk and Steel-typing allow it to switch into the likes of Talonflame, Ninjask, (comma) and bulky Poison-types (hyphen), with the consumption of Eject Pack allowing it to better handle Poltergeist and Knock-Off users. Even in unfavorable matchups against bulkier walls, Duraludon is still able to safely make progress thanks to the combination of Eject Pack and Draco Meteor. Preventing momentum loss against some of its hardest checks such as against Copperajah, Vaporeon, (comma) and Escavalier. (This point should follow the first sentence as it's still mentioning the offensive-pivoting aspect of Dura. It would also make sense as you finish the pros of Dura with its defensive typing, then bridging into the cons of its bulk) However, Duraludon has very poor Special Defense, making it very vulnerable to faster special attackers (only capitalized when directly referencing the stat, not for general special or physical attackers) such as Salazzle, Celebi, (comma) and Volt Switch users. Duraludon also faces large competition as a Dragon and Steel type wallbreaker with other Dragon- and Steel-type wallbreakers like Goodra and Copperajah respectively (I'm still a little confused about this point but if you're trying to say that Goodra + Copperajah are more viable wallbreakers with similar typings + coverage, then I'd leave it at that.). Additionally, Duraludon is unable to properly check the things a traditional Dragon or Steel-type would check, (like what? I think you're referencing mons like Rotom-C and Exploud, and I'd directly mention them. This would help imply why it has competition with Goodra and Copper) leading to type stacking and or more compensation in the builder.

[SET]
name: Eject Pack
move 1: Draco Meteor
move 2: Flash Cannon
move 3: Dark Pulse
move 4: Stealth Rock / Thunderbolt (spacing)
item: Eject Pack
ability: Light Metal
nature: Timid
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Details
====

Eject Pack allows Duraludon to gain momentum for its teammates, oftentimes after claiming a kill or after bailing on one of its checks. Duraludon's good matchup against common hazard removal options like Talonflame and Xatu allows it to serve as a decent Stealth Rock setter. Alternatively, Thunderbolt can be used to better pressure bulky Water-types such as Vaporeon and Mantine. Timid is preferred to outspeed base 80's such as Braviary, also giving you more insurance in the Toxicroak matchup. (Don't forget to mention why there's Dark Pulse. Also, personally, I prefer Body Press over Dark Pulse as coverage for Copper, so if not a slash, then at least a mention at the end here. Really it just depends if the team needs Dura to lure either Bronz or Copper with pulse or press, and I find HO's want Copper chipped for Toise more than then need Bronz to be targeted)

Fighting-types such as Toxicroak and Sirfetch'd are able to take advantage of Duraludon's checks such as Copperajah, Vaporeon, (comma) and Escavalier. They are also able to weaken and pressure shared checks in Mudsdale and Bronzong. In return, Duraludon is able to threaten the bulky Poison-types such as Garbodor, Vileplume, (comma) and Weezing Dragalge (Weezing is really niche and breaking Drag is a niche pro for fetch special attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi, and Electric-types (hyphen). Duraludon is also unable to properly take advantage of its Dragon or Steel-typing Dragon / Steel (this is how dual typings are written according to GP) to check Fire or Fire- and Fairy-types. Pokemon such as Diancie and Heatproof Bronzong are able to pair nicely with Duraludon as a result. Diancie appreciates the extra protection against Grass and Water-types (What Grass and Water Pokemon did you have in mind? The problem here is that dura is checked by Vapo, dies to Blastoise and Starmie, and you mentioned how Electric-types are a big issue too so Mowtom doesn't fit. The point I'm getting at is that mentioning these typings directly could be missleading; I'd instead mention specific examples like Decidueye), and can help Duraludon in the Fire- (hyphen) and Dragon-type matchups it's vulnerable against. Bronzong similarly can also act as a good pairing with Duraludon, able to utilize other sets without Stealth Rocks taking up a moveslot.


[STRATEGY COMMENTS]
Other Options
====

Choice Specs can be used to increase Duraludon's already decent wallbreaking powers, scoring more OHKOs and landing the two hit KO on Pokemon such as Vaporeon and Bronzong. Choice Specs Duraludon is more prediction reliant, however, and lacks the utility of Eject Pack.

While more matchup fishy, Iron Defense + Body Press Duraludon can still serve as a usable wincon. It's able to use its decent bulk and Steel-typing to setup on non-Body Press Bronzong, Copperajah, (comma) and other passive Pokemon. It has more longevity utilizing Leftovers, allowing it to better answer things like Ninjask long-term.

Checks and Counters
====

**Bulky Steel-types**: Bulky Steel-types such as Copperajah and Escavalier can tank multiple hits and threaten with heavy damage back. While back, while Pokemon such as Bronzong can avoid the two hit KO 2HKO and can threaten back with a devastating Body Press.

**Specially Defensive Pokemon**: Specially Defensive variants of Vaporeon and Sylveon are able to stomach Duraludon's attacks from full, and can beat Duraludon with the combination of Wish and their STABS STAB attacks.

**Special Attckers**: Special Attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi, Heliolisk, Rotom-C, (comma) and Starmie are all able to either OHKO Duraludon or are able to heavily chunk it with their resisted attacks.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[turtledoggo1, 503907]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]

I'll give this one more look before going to GP. Of which, keep in mind some of the more basic GP conventions when it comes to comas in lists of three or more, hyphens, and typings. I tried to fix a lot here and explain why, and you can also keep this open when writing analysis if you're unsure how to type something formally.
Let me know if you have any questions and feel free to ping me whenever you finish these changes!
 
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[OVERVIEW]

Thanks to Duraludon's good Speed and Draco Meteor + Eject Pack combo, it's able to act as a decent one-time pivot and wallbreaker. Even in unfavorable matchups against bulkier walls, Duraludon is still able to safely make progress against Copperajah, Vaporeon, and Escavalier. Its serviceable physical bulk and Steel-typing allow it to switch into the likes of Talonflame, Ninjask, and bulky Poison-types, with the consumption of Eject Pack allowing it to better handle Poltergeist and Knock-Off users. However, Duraludon has very poor Special Defense, making it very vulnerable to faster special attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi, and Volt Switch users. Duraludon also faces large competition with other Dragon- and Steel-type wallbreakers like Goodra and Copperajah. Additionally, Duraludon is unable to properly check the things a traditional Dragon- (hyphen) or Steel-type would check, such as Rotom-C, Exploud, Sylveon, (comma) and more, leading to type stacking and or more compensation needed in the builder.

[SET]
name: Eject Pack
move 1: Draco Meteor
move 2: Flash Cannon
move 3: Dark Pulse / Body Press
move 4: Stealth Rock / Thunderbolt
item: Eject Pack
ability: Light Metal
nature: Timid
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Details
====

Eject Pack allows Duraludon to gain momentum for its teammates, oftentimes after claiming a kill or after bailing on one of its checks. Duraludon's good matchup against common hazard removal options like Talonflame and Xatu allows it to serve as a decent Stealth Rock setter. Alternatively, Thunderbolt can be used to better pressure bulky Water-types such as Vaporeon and Mantine. Timid is preferred to outspeed base 80's such as Braviary, also giving you more insurance in the Toxicroak matchup. Dark Pulse allows you to hit Pokemon such as Bronzong and Starmie for good damage, meaning the use of Draco Meteor is not needed to make progress in these matchups. While Body Press allows you to hit Copperajah, allowing other teammates such as Blastoise to better sweep later on. (Make sure to talk about moves first then end with the nature line_

Fighting-types such as Toxicroak and Sirfetch'd are able to take advantage of Duraludon's checks such as Copperajah, Vaporeon, and Escavalier. They are also able to weaken and pressure shared checks in Mudsdale and Bronzong. In return, Duraludon is able to threaten the bulky Poison-types such as Garbodor, Vileplume, (comma) and Dragalge that might otherwise be problematic for the Fighting-types. Duraludon is easily revenge killed and chunked by faster special attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi, and Electric-types. Duraludon is also unable to properly take advantage of its Dragon / Steel typing to check Fire- and Fairy-types. Pokemon such as Diancie and Heatproof Bronzong are able to pair nicely with Duraludon as a result. Diancie appreciates the extra protection against Pokemon like Decidueye, Heavy Slam Guzzlord, and bulky Poison-types, and can help Duraludon in the Fire- and Dragon-type matchups it's vulnerable against. Bronzong similarly can also act as a good pairing with Duraludon, able to utilize other sets without Stealth Rocks taking up a moveslot. (this last point also applies to diancie, so i would mention that both have this effect)


[STRATEGY COMMENTS]
Other Options
====

Choice Specs can be used to increase Duraludon's already decent wallbreaking powers, scoring more OHKOes and landing the two hit KO 2HKO on Pokemon such as Vaporeon and Bronzong. Choice Specs Duraludon is more prediction reliant, however, and lacks the utility of Eject Pack.

While more matchup fishy, Iron Defense + Body Press Duraludon can still serve as a usable wincon. It's able to use its decent bulk and Steel-typing to setup on non-Body Press Bronzong, Copperajah, and other passive Pokemon. It has more longevity utilizing Leftovers, allowing it to better answer things like Ninjask long-term.

Checks and Counters
====

**Bulky Steel-types**: Bulky Steel-types such as Copperajah and Escavalier can tank multiple hits and threaten with heavy damage back, while Pokemon such as Bronzong can avoid the 2HKO and threaten back with a devastating Body Press.

**Specially Defensive Pokemon**: Specially Defensive variants of Vaporeon and Sylveon are able to stomach Duraludon's attacks from full, and can beat Duraludon with the combination of Wish and their STAB attacks.

**Special Attackers**: Special Attackers such as Salazzle, Celebi, Heliolisk, Rotom-C, and Starmie are all able to either OHKO Duraludon or are able to heavily chunk it with their resisted attacks.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[turtledoggo1, 503907]]
- Quality checked by: [[Rabia, 336073, [S1nn0hC0nfirm3d, 231074]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]

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