LC Krabby

[churine]

[OVERVIEW]
Krabby seems appealing due to its high Attack stat, usable Speed, and good ability in Sheer Force, allowing it to be a strong cleaner. However, it faces stiff competition from other physical Water-types in the tier such as Corphish and Totodile, as they have better movepools including ways to boost both Speed and Attack in Dragon Dance and a priority option in Aqua Jet, both of which Krabby lacks. These Pokemon also have better bulk, giving them an easier time setting up than Krabby,whose poor Special Defense grants it limited setup opportunities, making it opt for a Choice Scarf revenge killer set.

[SET]
name: Choice Scarf
move 1: Liquidation
move 2: Superpower
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Body Slam
item: Choice Scarf
ability: Sheer Force
nature: Adamant
evs: 36 HP / 236 Atk / 36 Def / 196 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Krabby can use a Choice Scarf with the best of its movepool to try to function as a revenge killer and cleaner. It has trouble fighting against particular Grass- and Water-types, as they resist its strongest move in Liquidationand can deal with Krabby pretty easily. Krabby also only reaches 21 Speed even with a Choice Scarf, making it fall flat in the face of faster Choice Scarf users, thus finding itself outclassed by those same Choice Scarf users. Physical Water-types like Corphish and even Totodile also exist, with both performing as a better cleaner with Dragon Dance or as a better wallbreaker with Swords Dance + Aqua Jet than Krabby.

 

[Nineage]

You should absolutely mention the advantages it has over Corphish - namely, substantially higher Attack and Speed. Mention that its awful special bulk makes it hard to use these advantages properly, and that its Speed is still not high enough to really help it. Right now you are talking more about Corp/Toto than Corphish.
For both Totodile and Corphish, you need to elaborate more on specifically how Dragon Dance makes them outclass Krabby (overcome mediocre Speed and boost attack to threatening levels), and why Krabby underperforms because it doesn't have DD. Maybe specifically contrast this with an Agility Krabby set in the overview.
Elaborate just a bit more on why lack of priority makes it a poor choice as well.

I agree that Scarf is the best set, but I'd run 36 HP / 236 Atk / 36 Def / 196 Spe as the EVs. Its special bulk is irredeemably bad anyway, and this physical bulk is marginally beneficial.
I don't think I'd necessarily mention Mienfoo or Doduo specifically here. Just explain that 21 speed isn't enough to rk a lot of Pokemon, you can't KO basically anything that resists water, and because of that you are outclassed by the majority of scarfers, some of which hit harder/as hard.
Keep the line about Corp/Toto here though.

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[jake]

not gp but the overview is kinda tough to digest, so i want to talk about it. i can see you're incorporating nine's qc but it needs a bit of fixing so someone new to the game can understand what you mean

[OVERVIEW]
Krabby seems appealing due to its high Attack stat, usable Speed, and good ability in Sheer Force, allowing it to be a strong cleaner and wallbreaker.

fine. it's not the best wallbreaker but it's serviceable so you can leave that

However its poor special bulk, and necessity to hold a Choice Scarf or find a turn of setup with Agility to patch its middling Speed stat make it hard to use its Attack stat effectively.

dropping this right after mentioning that its speed stat is okay seems contradictory, and talking about its poor special bulk / needing a scarf / needing setup makes this sentence too bloated. what i would do is draw the comparisons to totodile and corp first, before talking about krabby's bad stats -- this lets the readers understand that we're looking at the krab in comparison to other physically focused water-types, not just arbitrarily saying that its sdef is bad.

This causes it to face stiff competition with other Water-types like Corphish and Totodile, as they both have better bulk and tools in their movepool such as Aqua Jet and Dragon Dance, which let them overcome their Speed problem, with Dragon Dance also boosting their Attack, to make their offensive presence .

you're packing too much in this sentence, too. it's also unfinished. it's okay to break your comparisons into a couple of different sentences: for example, you can mention that their speed control options are more useful overall than krabby's, then talk about bulk in a different sentence. but talk about corp and toto before you talk about krab's stats in comparison to theirs.

[SET]
name: Choice Scarf
move 1: Liquidation
move 2: Superpower
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Body Slam
item: Choice Scarf
ability: Sheer Force
nature: Adamant
evs: 36 HP / 236 Atk / 36 Def / 196 Spe

i'm fine with scarf over boosting sets

[SET COMMENTS]
Krabby can use a Choice Scarf with the best of its movepool to try function as a revenge killer and cleaner. However, 21 Speed isn't plausible to revenge kill some Pokemon, as it can't KO many Pokemon that resist Water, and faster Choice Scarf users in the tier exist that it can't outspeed to revenge kill, and so it finds itself outclassed by those faster Choice Scarf users. Physical Water-types like Corphish and even Totodile also exist with the ability to set up Dragon Dance to perform as a cleaner better than Krabby.

this is a little awkwardly worded too but i think it's def easier to read than the overview. when talking about corp and toto, you can also mention that they have the option to run swords dance sets with aqua jet too, which krabby cannot do.

qc 2/2

 

[P Squared]

GP 1/1
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[OVERVIEW]
Krabby seems appealing due to its high Attack stat, usable Speed, and good ability in Sheer Force, allowing it to be a strong cleaner. However, it faces stiff competition with from other physical Water-types in the tier such as Corphish and Totodile, as they have a better movepools including ways to boost both Speed and Attack in Dragon Dance, (remove comma) and a priority option in Aqua Jet, both of which Krabby lacks. These Pokemon also have better bulk, giving them an easier time to setting up than Krabby, who's whose poor Special Defense grants it limited setup opportunities, making it opt for as a Choice Scarf revenge killer set.

[SET]
name: Choice Scarf
move 1: Liquidation
move 2: Superpower
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Body Slam
item: Choice Scarf
ability: Sheer Force
nature: Adamant
evs: 36 HP / 236 Atk / 36 Def / 196 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Krabby can use a Choice Scarf with the best of its movepool to try to function as a revenge killer and cleaner. It has trouble fighting against particular Grass- and Water-types, as they resist its strongest move in Liquidation, (remove comma) and can deal with Krabby pretty easily. Krabby also only reaches 21 Speed after even with a Choice Scarf, making it fall flat in the face of faster Choice Scarf users, thus finding itself outclassed by those same Choice Scarf users. Physical Water-types like Corphish and even Totodile also exist, with both performing as a better cleaner with Dragon Dance or as a better wallbreaker with Swords Dance + Aqua Jet than Krabby.

 

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