Life Orb Jumbao [QC: 2/2] [GP: 1/1]

[D2TheW]

[SET]
name: Life Orb
move 1: Leaf Storm
move 2: Moonblast
move 3: Focus Blast
move 4: Shore Up
item: Life Orb
ability: Trace
nature: Modest / Timid
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Details
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Life Orb Jumbao is one of the strongest special attackers in cap, using metagame staples like Slowking and Zeraora as entry points to fire off it’s strong stab attacks and coverage. Trace allows Jumbao to copy Slowking’s Regenerator so it can stay healthy and constantly threaten Slowking throughout a game. Trace also allows Jumbao to absorb Zeraora's Volt Switch and switch into most Heatran sets, both of which are useful to balance teams. Leaf Storm and Moonblast pair excellently, as the sheer power of Leaf Storm dissuades Moonblast switch-ins like Toxapex and Equilibra from coming in. Focus Blast is important coverage for Steel-types such as Heatran, Ferrothorn, and Melmetal. Shore Up helps Jumbao stay healthy, as it is otherwise prone to entry hazard and life orb chip damage. A Modest nature allows Leaf Storm to guarantee an OHKO versus Slowking and a 2HKO on Toxapex as it switches in, while letting Focus Blast 2HKO Corviknight after Stealth Rock and Scizor after a small amount of chip damage. Timid may occasionally be preferred to outspeed the likes of Kyurem, Tapu Lele and Nidoking.

Jumbao pairs well with Steel and Water-types, which cover its weaknesses to the likes of Melmetal, Scizor, and Volcarona. It pairs incredibly well with Heatran, each resisting every type the other is weak to. Additionally, Heatran can pressure Jumbao's Steel-type checks like Corviknight and Scizor and use Taunt to help weaken Blissey and prevent Slowking from instantly pivoting out with teleport as Jumbao switches in. Heatran can also use Magma Storm to trap and remove some of Jumbao's checks such as Toxapex and Galarian-Slowking. Jumbao also pairs well with Slowking, which has similar type synergy and can pivot Jumbao in safely with Teleport while additionally setting Future Sight, which makes Pokemon like Toxapex and Tornadus-T unable to switch into Jumbao’s attacks. Toxapex covers Jumbao’s weaknesses to Scizor, Astrolotl, and Weavile and benefits from Jumbao taking advantage of Slowking and Zeraora. Tornadus-T greatly appreciates Jumbao's ability to stave off Zeraora, and in return Tornadus-T can often weaken Jumbao's answers like Blissey and Galarian-Slowking with Knock Off.

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- Written by: [[D2TheW, 482912]
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[dex]

I realize I'm doing a lot of this without being a member of the QC team, but even on LO, Healing Wish is quite good. It's just useful as a strong "Ace in the hole" type move. I think it's worth a slash.

 

[snake]

Life Orb Jumbao acts as a special attacker on balance teams, using it’s solid bulk, good resistances and access to reliable recovery to consistently switch in and fire off it’s strong stab moves and coverage.

Trace allows Jumbao to consistently switch into Slowking, copying regenerator so that it isn’t forced to constantly heal. This ability to consistently switch into one of the best pokemon in the tier and threaten it with an ohko is one of the most important aspects of Jumbao’s niche on balance. Trace also provides additional utility such as volt blocking Zeraora, the ability to switch into most Heatran sets and copying Clefable’s magic guard to become immune to life orb chip.

Most of what you say at the end of the paragraph should honestly be at the beginning of the paragraph. As it is now, your first sentence doesn't really convey information contextual to the metagame. Instead, frame Life Orb Jumbao as a special attacker that's exceedingly hard to switch into aside from a small, specific pool of counters like Galarian Slowking, a special attacker that minimizes Slowking's impact on a game because of Trace, a mon that solidly checks Heatran and Zera, etc.

The information is all there, but the way you present it in an analysis is important because we want it to be as compact as possible. Thus, I'd recommend restructuring your sentences (rather than just moving them) with the information you already have here.

Leaf Storm is it’s strongest stab move, capable of OHKOing neutral targets such as Zeraora and Landorus T, and is also able to 2HKO bulkier neutral targets on the switch, such as Clefable and physdef Toxapex. Moonblast is a consistent stab move, threatening the likes of Tomohawk, Dragapult and Mandibuzz while maintaining solid neutral damage against Leaf Storm switch ins such as Zapdos and Tornadus Therian.

I'd rather see something like "Leaf Storm complements Moonblast well, as it's able to blow away Slowking, Toxapex, etc." Unless Moonblast does anything exceptionally cool, just explain what Leaf Storm does to make Moonblast such a spammable STAB move otherwise.

Focus Blast is important coverage to threaten steel types like Heatran, Ferrothorn and Melmetal that wall Jumbao’s stab moves.

we know they resist grass and fairy

Modest nature is preferred to guarantee an ohko OHKO vs full health Slowking with leaf storm Leaf Storm and to improve Jumbao’s damage output vs other bulky metagame threats like Equilibra and Zapdos.

only include benchmarks for guaranteed OHKOs, 2HKOs, or relevant 3HKOs. If there's any speed benchmark at all for Timid, it might be worth at least mentioning, even if it's not slashworthy.

Jumbao's plethora of weaknesses to common attacking types means it appreciates a solid backbone to support it, partnering well with steel types and bulky waters.

Rather than saying this, it's more succinct to say Jumbao pairs well with Steel-types like [x] because the Steel-types do [x], and in return Jumbao does [x].

I'd also continue listing teammates - Pokemon that are food for Zera should be listed, Pokemon that want Slowking gone, etc.

There's a lot to change here so I'm not going to give QC but DM me on discord or ping me in #analyses if you need me to clarify anything!

 

[snake]

Life Orb Jumbao is one of the strongest special attackers in the cap metagame, using metagame staples like Slowking, Heatran and Zeraora as entry points to fire off it’s strong stabs and coverage. Trace allows Jumbao to copy Slowking’s Regenerator so it can stay healthy and constantly threaten Slowking throughout a game. This ability to consistently nullify Slowking over the course of a game and use it as a platform for offense gives Jumbao huge value on balance teams. Trace also allows Jumbao to volt block absorb Zeraora's Volt Switch and switch into most Heatran sets, both of which are useful to balance teams.

I don't think it's necessary to spend two sentences on Slowking.

Shore Up helps Jumbao stay healthy as it is otherwise prone to hazards and life orb chip.

Not necessary to spell out.

Tornadus-T Therian greatly appreciates Jumbao's ability to stave off Zeraora and in return Tornadus-T can often weaken Jumbao's answers like Blissey and Slowking Galar with Knock Off.

Sorry this took awhile to get to, you have my blessing QC 1/2

 

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[SET]
name: Life Orb
move 1: Leaf Storm
move 2: Moonblast
move 3: Focus Blast
move 4: Shore Up
item: Life Orb
ability: Trace
nature: Modest/Timid
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD/ 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Details
===================
Life Orb Jumbao is one of the strongest special attackers in the cap metagame, using metagame staples like Slowking and Zeraora as entry points to fire off it’s strong stabs and coverage. Trace allows Jumbao to copy Slowking’s Regenerator so it can stay healthy and constantly threaten Slowking throughout a game. Trace also allows Jumbao to absorb Zeraora's Volt Switch and switch into most Heatran sets, both of which are useful to balance teams. Leaf Storm and Moonblast are an excellent stab pairing as the sheer power of Leaf Storm dissuades Moonblast switchins like Toxapex and Equilibra from coming in comfortably. Focus Blast is important coverage for steels such as Heatran, Ferrothorn and Melmetal. Shore Up helps Jumbao stay healthy as it is otherwise prone to hazards and life orb chip. Modest nature allows Leaf Storm Jumbao to guarantee an OHKO vs Slowking with Leaf Storm and a 2HKO on physically defensive toxapex as it switches in, while letting Focus Blast 2HKO Corviknight after Stealth Rock and Scizor after a small amount of prior chip damage. However, Timid may occasionally be preferred to while timid lets it outspeed the likes of Kyurem, Tapu Lele and Nidoking. just added corv+scizor as reasons to run modest and reworded things accordingly

Jumbao pairs well with steel types and water types which cover its weaknesses to common attacking types mention two or three pokemon here instead as examples, it's a bit vague. Jumbao pairs incredibly well with Heatran, each resisting every type the other is weak to. Additionally, Taunt Heatran can pressure Jumbao's Steel-type checks like Corviknight and Scizor, use Taunt to help to weaken blissey and prevent Slowking from instantly teleporting as Jumbao switches in, and can even remove foes such as Toxapex and Slowking-Galar from the game by trapping them expanded some beyond type synergy + taunt. Jumbao also pairs well with Slowking which has similar type synergy and can pivot Jumbao in safely with teleport, while additionally setting Future Sight to make Pokemon like Toxapex and Tornadus-T unable to switch into Jumbao’s attacks. Toxapex covers Jumbao’s weaknesses to which pokemon? and benefits from Jumbao abusing Slowking and Zeraora. Tornadus-T greatly appreciates Jumbao's ability to stave off Zeraora and in return Tornadus-T can often weaken Jumbao's answers like Blissey and Slowking Galar with Knock Off.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[D2TheW, 482912]
- Quality checked by: [[snake_rattler, 227784], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

implement and ill have another look :]

 

[spoo]

[SET]
name: Life Orb
move 1: Leaf Storm
move 2: Moonblast
move 3: Focus Blast
move 4: Shore Up
item: Life Orb
ability: Trace
nature: Modest/Timid
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD/ 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Details
===================
Life Orb Jumbao is one of the strongest special attackers in the cap metagame, using metagame staples like Slowking and Zeraora as entry points to fire off it’s strong stabs and coverage. Trace allows Jumbao to copy Slowking’s Regenerator so it can stay healthy and constantly threaten Slowking throughout a game. Trace also allows Jumbao to absorb Zeraora's Volt Switch and switch into most Heatran sets, both of which are useful to balance teams. Leaf Storm and Moonblast are an excellent stab pairing as the sheer power of Leaf Storm dissuades Moonblast switchins like Toxapex and Equilibra from coming in comfortably. Focus Blast is important coverage for steels such as Heatran, Ferrothorn and Melmetal. Shore Up helps Jumbao stay healthy as it is otherwise prone to hazards and life orb chip. Modest nature allows Leaf Storm to guarantee an OHKO vs Slowking and a 2HKO on toxapex as it switches in, while letting Focus Blast 2HKO Corviknight after Stealth Rock and Scizor after a small amount of prior chip damage. Timid may occasionally be preferred to outspeed the likes of Kyurem, Tapu Lele and Nidoking.

Jumbao pairs well with steel types and water types which cover its weaknesses to the likes of Melmetal, Scizor and Volcarona. Jumbao pairs incredibly well with Heatran, each resisting every type the other is weak to. Additionally, Heatran can pressure Jumbao's Steel-Type checks like Corviknight and Scizor and can use taunt help to weaken blissey and prevent Slowking from instantly teleporting as Jumbao switches in. Heatran can also use magma storm to trap and remove some of Jumbao's checks such as Toxapex and Slowking-Galar. Jumbao also pairs well with Slowking which has similar type synergy and can pivot Jumbao in safely with teleport, while additionally setting Future Sight to make Pokemon like Toxapex and Tornadus-T unable to switch into Jumbao’s attacks . Toxapex covers Jumbao’s weaknesses to Scizor, Astrolotl and Weavile and benefits from Jumbao abusing Slowking and Zeraora. Tornadus-T greatly appreciates Jumbao's ability to stave off Zeraora and in return Tornadus-T can often weaken Jumbao's answers like Blissey and Slowking Galar with Knock Off.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[D2TheW, 482912]
- Quality checked by: [[snake_rattler, 227784], [2spoopy4u, 251944]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

so epic 2/2

 

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[SET]
name: Life Orb
move 1: Leaf Storm
move 2: Moonblast
move 3: Focus Blast
move 4: Shore Up
item: Life Orb
ability: Trace
nature: Modest / Timid (spaced out slash)
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / (spaced out slash) 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Details
===================
Life Orb Jumbao is one of the strongest special attackers in the cap metagame, CAP, using metagame staples like Slowking and Zeraora as entry points to fire off it’s strong stabs its strong STAB attacks and coverage. Trace allows Jumbao to copy Slowking’s Regenerator so it can stay healthy and constantly threaten Slowking throughout a game. Trace also allows Jumbao to absorb Zeraora's Volt Switch and switch into most Heatran sets, both of which are useful to balance buttress teams. Leaf Storm and Moonblast are an excellent stab pairing pair excellently, as the sheer power of Leaf Storm dissuades Moonblast switch-ins (added hyphen) like Toxapex and Equilibra from coming in comfortably. Focus Blast is important coverage for steels Steel-types such as Heatran, Ferrothorn, (AC) and Melmetal. Shore Up helps Jumbao stay healthy, (AC) as it is otherwise prone to hazards and life orb chip. entry hazard and Life Orb chip damage. A Modest nature allows Leaf Storm to guarantee an OHKO versus Slowking and a 2HKO on Toxapex as it switches in, while letting Focus Blast 2HKO Corviknight after Stealth Rock and Scizor after a small amount of prior chip damage. Timid may occasionally be preferred to outspeed the likes of Kyurem, Tapu Lele, (AC) and Nidoking.

Jumbao pairs well with steel types and water types Steel- and Water-types, which cover its weaknesses to the likes of Melmetal, Scizor, (AC) and Volcarona. Jumbao It pairs incredibly well with Heatran, each resisting every type the other is weak to. Additionally, Heatran can pressure Jumbao's Steel-type checks like Corviknight and Scizor and can use Taunt help to weaken Blissey and prevent Slowking from instantly teleporting pivoting out with Teleport as Jumbao switches in. Heatran can also use Magma Storm to trap and remove some of Jumbao's checks such as Toxapex and Slowking-Galar. Galarian Slowking. Jumbao also pairs well with Slowking, (AC) which has similar type synergy and can pivot Jumbao in safely with Teleport (RC) while additionally setting Future Sight, (AC) to make which makes Pokemon like Toxapex and Tornadus-T unable to switch into Jumbao’s attacks. (removed space before period) Toxapex covers Jumbao’s weaknesses to Scizor, Astrolotl, (AC) and Weavile and benefits from Jumbao abusing taking advantage of Slowking and Zeraora. Tornadus-T greatly appreciates Jumbao's ability to stave off Zeraora, (AC) and in return Tornadus-T can often weaken Jumbao's answers like Blissey and Slowking Galar Galarian Slowking with Knock Off.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[D2TheW, 482912]
- Quality checked by: [[snake_rattler, 227784], [2spoopy4u, 251944]]
- Grammar checked by: [[Finland, 517429]]

1/1. for longer writing id probably recommend you do a once-over prior, not big deal here but the amount of simple stuff like missed capitalization and slang could hurt in checking smth longer