Copyediting Litleo [QC: 2/2] [GP 0/1]

Yami

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Litleo looks good at first glance due to it having Flame Charge to boost its Speed and the ability Moxie to become a fearsome sweeper. However, because of its Normal-typing and poor bulk, it is easily taken care of by Timburr and Mienfoo. Litleo is outclassed by other Fire-types like Ponyta because of its better bulk, power and having a chance to burn physical Pokemon with its ability Flame Body.

[SET]
name: Moxie Sweeper
move 1: Flare Blitz
move 2: Return
move 3: Flame Charge
move 4: Wild Charge / Hidden Power Grass
item: Firium Z
ability: Moxie
nature: Jolly
evs: 20 HP / 196 Atk / 52 Def / 4 SpD / 180 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
This sets attempts to set up with Flame Charge to outpace most of the metagame and boosts its Attack from KOs thanks to Moxie. However, Litleo fails to do this because it relying on Firium Z to get the first Moxie boost as without a boost, it will fail to do major damage because of its weak Attack stat along with being vulnerable to priority due to its poor bulk and walled by Onix unless running Hidden Power Grass over Wild Charge. Litleo is outclassed by Ponyta, because of its higher attack stat, bulk, Speed and being able to heal itself with Morning Sun.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Yami, 393488]]
- Quality checked by: [[Merritt, 213064], [Fiend, 208173]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]
 
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Merritt

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[OVERVIEW]
Good

[SET]
Good, could maybe give a shot at slashing HP Grass but I haven't found a good way to do so in testing.

[SET COMMENTS]
Mention that Litleo is very weak prior to getting its first Moxie boost and so relies on Z Flare Blitz to get that first KO. Also mention that it's hopelessly walled by Onix.

[CREDITS]
Good

1/2, nice work
 

Fiend

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i was gonna suggest a lot of things but then i realized that 15 attack is still incredibly weak.

[SET COMMENTS]
you misspelled Firium Z.
mention speed as a perk of ponyta since that's very relevant.

QC 2/2
 
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[OVERVIEW]
Litleo looks good at first glance due to it having Flame Charge to boost its Speed and the ability Moxie to become a fearsome sweeper. However, because of its Normal-typing Normal typing and poor bulk, it is easily taken care of by Timburr and Mienfoo. Litleo is outclassed by other Fire-types like Ponyta because of its better bulk, power, (AC) and having a chance to burn physical Pokemon with its ability Flame Body.

[SET]
name: Moxie Sweeper
move 1: Flare Blitz
move 2: Return
move 3: Flame Charge
move 4: Wild Charge / Hidden Power Grass
item: Firium Z
ability: Moxie
nature: Jolly
evs: 20 HP / 196 Atk / 52 Def / 4 SpD / 180 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
This sets With this set, Litleo attempts to set up with Flame Charge to outpace most of the metagame and boosts its Attack from KOs thanks to Moxie. However, Litleo fails to do this because it relying relies on Firium Z to get the first Moxie boost. (AP) as Without a boost, it will fail Litleo fails to do major damage because of its weak Attack stat along with being vulnerable to priority due to its poor bulk and being walled by Onix unless running Hidden Power Grass over Wild Charge. Litleo is outclassed by Ponyta, (RC) because of its higher attack stat Attack, bulk, and Speed. (AP) and Ponyta also has the advantage of being able to heal itself with Morning Sun.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Yami, 393488]]
- Quality checked by: [[Merritt, 213064], [Fiend, 208173]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]
 
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