LC Makuhita

[Aaronboyer]

[OVERVIEW]
Makuhita differentiates itself from other Fighting-types with its unique access to Belly Drum. However, its lackluster Attack that mandates Belly Drum setup and atrocious bulk, exacerbated by the fact that Makuhita's not holding Eviolite, makes setting up inconsistent. Makuhita also faces immense competition from other Belly Drum users such as Zigzagoon and Magby, which don't necessitate Sticky Web to function, and more consistent Fighting-types such as Mienfoo and Timburr.

[SET]
name: Belly Drum
move 1: Belly Drum
move 2: Close Combat
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Bullet Punch / Heavy Slam
item: Berry Juice
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Jolly
evs: 20 HP / 196 Atk / 36 Def / 236 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Makuhita should find a setup opportunity while Sticky Web is in play, use Belly Drum, and then fire off as many +6 attacks as it can before going down. However, Makuhita has a hard to finding those setup opportunities due to its horrendous bulk, and even at +6 Attack it has difficulty OHKOing Pokemon from full health. Pokemon such as Bulk Up Timburr and Belly Drum Zigzagoon are better options for setup sweepers, as they are more threatening and require less team support.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Aaronboyer, 239454]]
- Quality checked by: [[Fiend, 208173], [Merritt, 213064]]
- Grammar checked by: [[frostration, 447027]]

 

[Fiend]

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[OVERVIEW]
Makuhita differentiates itself from other Fighting-types with its unique access to Belly Drum and Thick Fat. However, Ice-types are already checked offensively by other Fighting-types such as Mienfoo, Timburr, and Croagunk and are more consistent than Makuhita. [Thick Fat isn't worth the mention. Mention its lackluster stats for why this 'mon sucks instead.] Makuhita also faces immense competition from other Belly Drum users such as Zigzagoon, Poliwag, [Remove Poliwag. He sucks.] and Magby, which don't necessitate Sticky Web to function. In short, Makuhita has been beaten to the punch by its competition both in the roles of an offensive Fighting-type and as a Belly Drum user.

[SET COMMENTS]
Sticky Web should be set before Makuhita makes its entrance. Once in, Makuhita should attempt to use Belly Drum and then fire off as many +6 attacks as it can before going down. However, other Fighting-types such as Bulk Up Timburr and Nasty Plot Croagunk are more consistent setup users. Other Belly Drum users have additional perks that make them more appealing than Makuhita. Zigzagoon has Extreme Speed, Poliwag has Hypnosis, Magby has Mach Punch, and all three are significantly faster than Makuhita, not needing Sticky Web support to outspeed the opposition. [I'm not sure this will get through GP. Ziggy also only runs 13 speed so.] Zigzagoon has STAB Extreme Speed, while Magby has both a have high Speed stat and Mach Punch which negates the need for Stick Web support. [Think this is better.]

QC: 1/2

 

[Merritt]

[OVERVIEW]
Second sentence isn't good - it mentions an exact detail of the set in the overview which shouldn't be there and implies that Mienfoo does setup sets often when SD is rather rare. This should be just about what sells Makuhita short, namely its absolutely horrible bulk despite its high base HP, its relatively low Attack meaning that without setup it's just not threatening, and its incredibly poor Speed meaning it requires Sticky Web to function. Make the third sentence about how Zigzagoon and Magby are both significantly better Belly Drum users while Mienfoo and Timburr are better Fighting-types. Wouldn't suggest mentioning Croagunk since its niche is rather different.

[SET]
this is fine

[SET COMMENTS]
This is again kind of long. Combine the first two sentences - Makuhita should attempt to set up Belly Drum while Sticky Web is present and fire off +6 attacks or something along those lines. Mention that Makuhita struggles to set up except on fairly passive Pokemon due to its low bulk, and even after setting up struggles against healthy teams (don't specifically mention this but it doesn't OHKO Foongus). Third sentence should be about Bulk Up Timburr and Belly Drum Zigzagoon being better options for setup sweepers due to being more threatening after they set up and requiring less team support.

[CREDITS]
this is fine

This is a lot of stuff, so let me know either on discord or tag me here and I'll take another quick look before stamping.

 

[Merritt]

[OVERVIEW]
Don't compare to other Fighting-types twice in the overview, would suggest cutting the first mention and making the sentence just "However, its lackluster Attack that mandates Belly Drum setup and atrocious bulk, exacerbated by the fact Makuhita's not holding Eviolite, makes setting up inconsistent."

[SET]
good

[SET COMMENTS]
Two GPish things.

"However, Makuhita has a hard to finding those setup opportunities due to its horrendous bulk, while even at +6 Attack it has difficulty OHKOing Pokemon from full health."
This sentence isn't clear at a glance due to using "while", you want something closer to an "and" connector there.
Remove the "Additionally" at the start of the last sentence.

[CREDITS]
good

2/2

 

[frostration]

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[OVERVIEW]
Makuhita differentiates itself from other Fighting-types with its unique access to Belly Drum. However, its lackluster Attack that mandates Belly Drum setup and atrocious bulk, exacerbated by the fact that Makuhita's not holding Eviolite, makes setting up inconsistent. Makuhita also faces immense competition from other Belly Drum users such as Zigzagoon and Magby, which don't necessitate Sticky Web to function, [AC] and more consistent Fighting-types such as Mienfoo and Timburr.

[SET]
name: Belly Drum
move 1: Belly Drum
move 2: Close Combat
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Bullet Punch / Heavy Slam
item: Berry Juice
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Jolly
evs: 20 HP / 196 Atk / 36 Def / 236 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Makuhita should find a setup opportunity while Sticky Web is in play, use Belly Drum, and then fire off as many +6 attacks as it can before going down. However, Makuhita has a hard to finding those setup opportunities due to its horrendous bulk, and even at +6 Attack it has difficulty OHKOing Pokemon from full health. Pokemon such as Bulk Up Timburr and Belly Drum Zigzagoon are better options for setup sweepers, [AC] as they are more threatening and require less team support.

GP 1/1

 

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