VGC 21 Mamoswine

[Bananers]

[SET]
name: Offensive
move 1: High Horsepower
move 2: Icicle Crash
move 3: Ice Shard
move 4: Protect
item: Life Orb / Focus Sash
ability: Oblivious
nature: Jolly
evs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

* Mamoswine is one of the most threatening Pokemon in the metagame. Between its sky-high Attack stat, great offensive typing, and immunity to Intimidate because of Oblivious, it can blow massive holes in opposing teams.

* High Horsepower is the chosen Ground-type STAB move and is used over Earthquake as it doesn't hit Mamoswine's teammates. It hits Fire-types such as Incineroar and Entei, as well as Steel-types such as Heatran and Metagross, which would otherwise resist its Ice-type attacks. High Horsepower also turns into Max Quake if you choose to Dynamax Mamoswine, providing useful Special Defense buffs.

* Icicle Crash is chosen over Icicle Spear because of its consistency. It hit a variety of Pokemon for super effective damage, such as Zapdos, Landorus-T, and Dragapult.

* Ice Shard is very useful to pick off fast Focus Sash users such as Whimsicott and Regieleki.

* Mamoswine can run Life Orb to boost its already massive Attack, but it can also run Focus Sash to survive a hit against Pokemon such as Rillaboom and Venusaur.

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- Written by: [[Bananers7, 527416]]
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[zee]

yoyoyo

nevermeltice has 2% usage, let's cut that

cut out the red text and then reword/grammar stuff:

* Mamoswine has is one of the most threatening Pokemon in the metagame. Between its sky-high attack stat, its great offensive typing, and being immune to Intimidate because of Oblivious, it can blow massive holes in opposing teams.

mention Max Quake and why you wouldn't use earthquake, those are not entirely obvious

just mention icicle crash hits dragapult / zapdos / landorus-t, mention flinches because flinches are always dope

name something it would appreciate surviving with its focus sash, then go into life orb. personally would prefer having life orb mentioned first (in the set too)


just a comment: I think you're being a bit too filler-y. " Icicle Crash is a powerful Ice-type STAB move for Mamoswine." doesn't really tell me anything, it's mostly empty characters

QC 1/1

 

[Plague von Karma]

Amchecking this since I went through the others anyway. This is unofficial, so you don't have to implement this unless a GPer says so.
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As a general rule, remember that when going over moves, their effects can be seen when mousing over them on the Strategy Dex. This is what GP means by "dex info" and often results in a lot of content being removed. If you're going to mention their effects, you have to apply - contextualize - them into general gameplay. For example, Tailwind isn't just good because of doubling Speed, it's great because of how a team can make use of that doubled Speed; it increases their options.

this mon is so cool tbh

[SET]
name: Offensive
move 1: High Horsepower
move 2: Icicle Crash
move 3: Ice Shard
move 4: Protect
item: Life Orb / Focus Sash
ability: Oblivious
nature: Jolly
evs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

* Mamoswine is one of the most threatening Pokemon in the Series 9 metagame. (From what I've seen the metagame is normally referred to at least once these scenarios) Between its sky-high Attack stat, its great offensive typing, and being immune to Intimidate because of Oblivious, it Mamoswine can blow massive holes in opposing teams.

* High Horsepower is the chosen Ground-type STAB move on Mamoswine; (ASC) it is used over Earthquake as it doesn't hit Mamoswine's (AA) teammates. It High Horsepower (clarity, since eq isn't on the set and is discouraged prior) is useful for allowing Mamoswine to hit Fire-types such as Incineroar and Entei, as well as Steel-types such as Heatran and Metagross, which would otherwise resist its Mamoswine's Ice-type attacks. High Horsepower also turns into Max Quake when if you decide to Dynamax Mamoswine decides to Dynamax, (You choose when to Dynamax, not Mamoswine) providing useful Special Defense buffs.

* Icicle Crash is chosen over other Ice-type moves on Mamoswine such as Icicle Spear because of its consistency. It allows Mamoswine to hit a variety of Pokemon for super effective damage, such as Zapdos, Landorus-T, and Dragapult. (chuck in a few XHKOs here; from what I can tell Lando-T and pult just get OHKOed and zap is 2HKO'd?) It is also worth noting that Icicle Crash has a 30% flinch chance, which can completely change the tide of a game if it activates. (This is just dex info, they can see this by mousing over the move on the strategy dex itself. How does the flinch change the tide of the game if it happens?)

* Ice Shard is very useful to for picking off fast Focus Sash users such as Whimsicott and Regieleki. (You sure this can't be expanded on? Maybe talk about stuff like not being completely screwed over by Trick Room, etc. Obviously not QC, just a thought since this seems a bit bare for such a strong priority move.)

* Mamoswine can run Life Orb for a boost to its already massive Attack, but it can also run Focus Sash for longevity against Pokemon such as Rillaboom or Venusaur.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Bananers7, 527416]]
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[Band]

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GP 1/1

[SET]
name: Offensive
move 1: High Horsepower
move 2: Icicle Crash
move 3: Ice Shard
move 4: Protect
item: Life Orb / Focus Sash
ability: Oblivious
nature: Jolly
evs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

* Mamoswine is one of the most threatening Pokemon in the metagame. Between its sky-high attack Attack stat, its great offensive typing, and being immune immunity to Intimidate because of Oblivious, it can blow massive holes in opposing teams.

* High Horsepower is the chosen Ground-type STAB move on Mamoswine, it and is used over Earthquake as it doesn't hit Mamoswines Mamoswine's teammates. It is useful for allowing Mamoswine to hits Fire-types such as Incineroar and Entei, as well as Steel-types such as Heatran and Metagross, which would otherwise resist its Ice-type attacks. High Horsepower also turns into Max Quake when Mamoswine decides if you choose you choose to dynamax mamo, not itself to Dynamax Mamoswine, providing useful Special Defense buffs.

* Icicle Crash is chosen over other Ice-type moves on Mamoswine such as Icicle Spear because of its consistency. It allows Mamoswine to hits a variety of Pokemon for Super Effective super effective damage, such as Zapdos, Landorus-T, and Dragapult. It is also worth noting that Icicle Crash has a 20% flinch chance, which can completely change the tide of a game if it activates. dex info, either go into more detail on how that helps mamo's team or remove this

* Ice Shard is very useful to pick off fast Focus Sash users such as Whimsicott and Regieleki.

* Mamoswine can run Life Orb for a boost to its already massive attack to boost its already massive Attack, but it can also run Focus Sash for longevity to survive a hit longevity would be use when referring to recovery options like Leftovers and Recover against Pokemon such as Rillaboom or and Venusaur.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Bananers7, 527416]]
- Quality checked by: [[zeefable, 901951]]
- Grammar checked by: [[Bandkrook, 301217]]