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:xy/Slurpuff:
[SET]
name: Belly Drum
move 1: Belly Drum
move 2: Play Rough
move 3: Drain Punch
move 4: Facade
item: Sitrus Berry
ability: Unburden
nature: Jolly
evs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Slurpuff's niche is as a sweeper who can use the combination of Unburden + Belly Drum to break through teams late-game. In addition, its Fairy-typing allows it to set up on common Pokemon such as Noivern, Umbreon, and Choice Scarf Heracross. Unfortunately, Slurpuff faces competition with other setup sweepers such as Mimikyu, Cloyster, and Necrozma, as they have an easier time setting up because of their bulk or speed which allows them to break through teams more easily. Slurpuff also faces stiff competition as a Belly Drum sweeper with Linoone, who has an amazing movepool that is resisted by very few Pokemon. Drain Punch is used to hit Steel-types such as Cobalion, Stakataka, and Steelix, and Facade is used to hit Poison-types such as Crobat, Vileplume, and Galarian Weezing.

Because Slurpuff is a late game-sweeper, it belongs on hyper offensive teams. Due to Slurpuff's frailty, screens support from Klefki and Froslass is appreciated. Galarian Weezing can support Slurpuff with Misty Terrain, preventing it from being crippled with status. In addition, Galarian Weezing can also provide Memento support, allowing Slurpuff to set up on a weakened foe. Entry hazard support from Roserade, Golisopod, and Cobalion can ease Slurpuff's ability to sweep through teams. Other setup sweepers, such as Necrozma and Cloyster, are good teammates, as they can set up on Pokemon such as Steelix, Vileplume, and Crobat. Slurpuff fails to break past Steel-types such as Metagross and Doublade, so checks to these Pokemon such as Zarude, Chandelure, and Darmanitan are important. Haze users such as Milotic prevent Slurpuff from setting up, so checks such as Zarude and Toxtricity are appreciated. Entry hazards can decrease Slurpuff's ability to sweep, so spinners such as Dhelmise and Starmie make good partners.

:xy/Slurpuff:
[SET]
name: Sash Lead
move 1: Sticky Web
move 2: Yawn
move 3: Endeavor / Magic Coat
move 4: Misty Explosion
item: Focus Sash
ability: Unburden
nature: Hasty
ivs: 0 HP / 0 Atk / 0 Def / 0 SpD
evs: 4 HP / 252 SpA / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Slurpuff can act as a suicide lead on hyper offensive teams using Sticky Web and its myriad of crippling moves to support its teammates. With a Focus Sash, Slurpuff can survive a hit to set up Sticky Web, and it will often move first next turn due to Unburden. Yawn is used to force switches and prevent opposing Pokemon from using Slurpuff as setup fodder. Endeavor is used to bring down an opponent's HP if they damage it. Alternatively, Magic Coat can be used to bounce back entry hazards from pokemon such as Seismitoad, Golisopod, and Klefki. Finally, Misty Explosion is used to damage an opposing Pokemon while maintaining momentum. 0 IVs in HP, Defense, and Special Defense allow Slurpuff to activate its Focus Sash more consistently.

Because Slurpuff's role is to set up Sticky Web, Pokemon that can take advantage of Sticky Web to sweep, such as Mimikyu, Zarude and Cobalion, make good teammates. Mimikyu, in particular, can also block Rapid Spin attempts from the opponent. Common Defog users such as Togekiss and Crobat may try to remove Sticky Web, so teammates that can pressure them such as Xurkitree, Raikou, and Toxtricity can help. Furthermore, Toxtricity and Raikou can break through teams much more easily with Sticky Web support. Sticky Web can also help slower wallbreakers such as Pangoro, Regidrago, and Bewear break through teams. Finally, Knock Off support from Pokemon such as Obstagoon, Golisopod and Heracross is helpful, as it can remove Heavy-Duty Boots from opposing Pokemon.



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Aquarius Ghost ❤

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:xy/Slurpuff:
[SET]
Name: Belly Drum
Move 1: Belly Drum
Move 2: Play Rough
Move 3: Drain Punch
Move 4: Facade
Item: Sitrus Berry
Ability: Unburden
Nature: Adamant
EVs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Slurpuff's niche is as a sweeper who can use the combination of Unburden + Belly drum to break through the team's late-game. In addition, its Fairy-typing allows it to setup on common Pokemon such as Noivern, Umbreon, and scarfed Heracross. Unfortunately, Slurpuff faces competition with other setup sweepers such as Mimkyu, Cloyster Sharpedo, and Necrozma as they have an easier time breaking through teams with their bulk and initial speed tiers. [I wouldn't say that it faces comp from sharpedo mainly because shark is a wallbreaker. Also, make it smth like this "as they have an easier time setting up because of their bulk or speed which allows them to break thru teams easily."] Slurpuff also faces stiff competition as a Belly Drum sweeper with Linoone, who is harder to revenge kill due to STAB Extreme-Speed[??? Slurpuff is also hard to revenge killer bc of unburden, mention how linoone has an amazing movepool which is resisted by very few pokemon and prior]. Belly Drum is required in order for Slurpuff to sweep. Fluff Drain Punch is used to hit Steel-types such as Cobalion, Stakataka, and Steelix. Facade is used to hit Poison-types such as Crobat, Vileplume, and Galarian Weezing.

Because Slurpuff is a late game-sweeper, it belongs on hyper offensive and balanced teams.[nope just ho] Due to Slurpuff's frailty, screens support from Klefki and Vanilluxe is appreciated. Other setup sweepers such as Necrozma and Cloyster are good teammates as they can help break through teams for it[?? If they already broke thru the team then slurpuff has nothing to do, did u mean pokemon? if so which ones?]. Entry hazard support from Roserade, Seismitoad, Golisopod, and Cobalion can ease its ability to sweep through teams. Cobalion in particular can help pressure Steel-types for it [which ones?]. Entry hazards can decrease Slurpuff's ability to sweep so spinners such as Dhelmise and Starmie make good partners. Since Slurpuff struggles against Fire-types, pokemon such as Noivern and Sharpedo can help it.[ honestly the only 1 it struggles vs is volc which can eat a +6 dpunch, and it cant set up on it, just mention volc> fire types, the other ones just die to play rough at +6]

Things to mention for teammates paragraph:
Mention things that can check both doublade and metagross since slurpuff cant do much vs them.
Mention terrain support from gweezing so status moves don't touch it
Mention things that can stop haze users such as milo, toxtricity and zarude are good ones. <this one isn't rlly necessary tho



:xy/Slurpuff:
[SET]
Name: Sash Lead
Move 1: Sticky Web
Move 2: Yawn
Move 3: Endeavor / Magic Coat
Move 4: Misty Explosion
Item: Focus Sash
Ability: Unburden
Nature: Hasty
IVs: 0 HP / 0 Atk / 0 Def / 0 SpD
EVs: 4 HP / 252 SpA / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Slurpuff can act as a suicide lead on hyper offensive teams using Sticky Web and its myriad of crippling moves to support its teammates. With a Focus sash, Slurpuff can survive a hit to setup Sticky Web and often move first next turn with Unburden. Yawn is used to force switches and prevent an opponent from using Slurpuff as setup fodder. Endeavor is used to bring down an opponent's HP if they damage it. Alternatively, Magic Coat can be used to bounce back entry hazards from pokemon such as Seismitoad, Golisopod, and Klefki. Finally, Misty Explosion is used to damage an opponent while maintaining momentum. 0 IVs in HP, Def, and SpD allow Slurpuff to activate Focus Sash more consistently.

Because Slurpuff's role is to setup Sticky web, pokemon that can take advantage of webs to sweep such as Mimikyu, Zarude and Cobalion make good teammates. Mimikyu in particular can also block Rapid Spin attempts from the opponent. Common defoggers such as Togekiss and Crobat may try to remove Sticky Web so teammates that can pressure them such as Xurkitree, Raikou, and Toxtricity can help. Furthermore, Toxtricity and Raikou can break through teams much easier with web support. Sticky webs can also help slower wall breakers such as Pangoro, Regidraco, and Bewear break through teams.



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- Written by: [[A floor Mat, 518065]]
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Honestly, I have never seen sticky web slurpuff in my life, so I cant rlly am check that bc I know nothing abt it, but I did am check the bd set.
 
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[SET]
Name: Belly Drum
Move 1: Belly Drum
Move 2: Play Rough
Move 3: Drain Punch
Move 4: Facade
Item: Sitrus Berry
Ability: Unburden
Nature: Adamant Jolly (you need to outspeed scarf shao/ruder)
EVs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Slurpuff's niche is as a sweeper who can use the combination of Unburden + Belly drum to break through team's late-game. In addition, its Fairy-typing allows it to setup on common Pokemon such as Noivern, Umbreon, and scarfed Heracross. Unfortunately, Slurpuff faces competition with other setup sweepers such as Mimkyu, Cloyster, and Necrozma as they have an easier time setting up because of their bulk or speed which allows them to break through teams easily. Slurpuff also faces stiff competition as a Belly Drum sweeper with Linoone, who has an amazing movepool that is resisted by very few pokemon. Drain Punch is used to hit Steel-types such as Cobalion, Stakataka, and Steelix. Facade is used to hit Poison-types such as Crobat, Vileplume, and Galarian Weezing.

Because Slurpuff is a late game-sweeper, it belongs on hyper offensive teams. Due to Slurpuff's frailty, screens support from Klefki and Froslass Vanilluxe is appreciated. Galarian Weezing can support Slurpuff with Misty terrain, preventing it from being crippled with status. Entry hazard support from Roserade, Seismitoad, (doesnt fit on HO teams that slurpuff does) Golisopod, and Cobalion can ease its ability to sweep through teams. Other setup sweepers such as Necrozma and Cloyster are good teammates as they can pressure set-up on (slurpuff only has 1 chance to set up) pokemon such as Steelix, Vileplume, and Crobat for it. Slurpuff fails to break past Steel-Types such as Metagross and Doublade so checks to these pokemon such as Zarude, Chandelure, and Darmanitan are important. Haze users such as Milotic prevent Slurpuff from setting up so checks such as Zarude and Toxtricity are appreciated. Entry hazards can decrease Slurpuff's ability to sweep so spinners such as Dhelmise and Starmie make good partners.

:xy/Slurpuff:
[SET]
Name: Sash Lead
Move 1: Sticky Web
Move 2: Yawn
Move 3: Endeavor / Magic Coat
Move 4: Misty Explosion
Item: Focus Sash
Ability: Unburden
Nature: Hasty
IVs: 0 HP / 0 Atk / 0 Def / 0 SpD
EVs: 4 HP / 252 SpA / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Slurpuff can act as a suicide lead on hyper offensive teams using Sticky Web and its myriad of crippling moves to support its teammates. With a Focus sash, Slurpuff can survive a hit to setup Sticky Web and often move first next turn with Unburden. Yawn is used to force switches and prevent an opponent from using Slurpuff as setup fodder. Endeavor is used to bring down an opponent's HP if they damage it. Alternatively, Magic Coat can be used to bounce back entry hazards from pokemon such as Seismitoad, Golisopod, and Klefki. Finally, Misty Explosion is used to damage an opponent while maintaining momentum. 0 IVs in HP, Def, and SpD allow Slurpuff to activate Focus Sash more consistently.

Because Slurpuff's role is to setup Sticky web, pokemon that can take advantage of webs to sweep such as Mimikyu, Zarude and Cobalion make good teammates. Mimikyu in particular can also block Rapid Spin attempts from the opponent. Common defoggers such as Togekiss and Crobat may try to remove Sticky Web so teammates that can pressure them such as Xurkitree, Raikou, and Toxtricity can help. Furthermore, Toxtricity and Raikou can break through teams much easier with web support. Sticky webs can also help slower wall breakers such as Pangoro, Regidraco, and Bewear break through teams. id like to see something about knock off support for hdb mons



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TailGlowVM

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[SET]
Name: Belly Drum
Move 1: Belly Drum
Move 2: Play Rough
Move 3: Drain Punch
Move 4: Facade
Item: Sitrus Berry
Ability: Unburden
Nature: Jolly
EVs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe
Everything before the colons should be in lowercase. I think you can update that.

[SET COMMENTS]
Slurpuff's niche is as a sweeper who can use the combination of Unburden + Belly drum Drum to break through team's teams late-game. In addition, its Fairy-typing allows it to setup set up on common Pokemon such as Noivern, Umbreon, and scarfed Choice Scarf Heracross. Unfortunately, Slurpuff faces competition with other setup sweepers such as Mimkyu Mimikyu, Cloyster, and Necrozma, (AC) as they have an easier time setting up because of their bulk or speed which allows them to break through teams more easily. Slurpuff also faces stiff competition as a Belly Drum sweeper with Linoone, who has an amazing movepool that is resisted by very few pokemon Pokemon. Drain Punch is used to hit Steel-types such as Cobalion, Stakataka, and Steelix. (RP) , (AC) and Facade is used to hit Poison-types such as Crobat, Vileplume, and Galarian Weezing.

Because Slurpuff is a late game-sweeper, it belongs on hyper offensive teams. Due to Slurpuff's frailty, screens support from Klefki and Froslass is appreciated. Galarian Weezing can support Slurpuff with Misty terrain Terrain, preventing it from being crippled with status. In addition, (AC) Galarian Weezing can also provide Memento support, allowing Slurpuff to set-up set up on a weakened foe. Hazard Entry hazard support from Roserade, Golisopod, and Cobalion can ease its Slurpuff's ability to sweep through teams. Other setup sweepers, (AC) such as Necrozma and Cloyster, (AC) are good teammates, (AC) as they can set-up set up on pokemon Pokemon such as Steelix, Vileplume, and Crobat. Slurpuff fails to break past Steel-Types Steel-types such as Metagross and Doublade, (AC) so checks to these pokemon Pokemon such as Zarude, Chandelure, and Darmanitan are important. Haze users such as Milotic prevent Slurpuff from setting up, (AC) so checks such as Zarude and Toxtricity are appreciated. Entry hazards can decrease Slurpuff's ability to sweep, (AC) so spinners such as Dhelmise and Starmie make good partners.

[SET]
Name: Sash Lead
Move 1: Sticky Web
Move 2: Yawn
Move 3: Endeavor / Magic Coat
Move 4: Misty Explosion
Item: Focus Sash
Ability: Unburden
Nature: Hasty
IVs: 0 HP / 0 Atk / 0 Def / 0 SpD
EVs: 4 HP / 252 SpA / 252 Spe
Again, you need to put everything before the colons in lowercase.

[SET COMMENTS]
Slurpuff can act as a suicide lead on hyper offensive teams using Sticky Web and its myriad of crippling moves to support its teammates. With a Focus sash Sash, Slurpuff can survive a hit to setup set up Sticky Web, (AC) and it will often move first next turn with due to Unburden. Yawn is used to force switches and prevent an opponent opposing Pokemon from using Slurpuff as setup fodder. Endeavor is used to bring down an opponent's HP if they damage it. Alternatively, Magic Coat can be used to bounce back entry hazards from pokemon such as Seismitoad, Golisopod, and Klefki. Finally, Misty Explosion is used to damage an opponent opposing Pokemon while maintaining momentum. 0 IVs in HP, Def, and SpD Defense and Special Defense allow Slurpuff to activate its Focus Sash more consistently.

Because Slurpuff's role is to setup set up Sticky web Web, pokemon Pokemon that can take advantage of webs Sticky Web to sweep, (AC) such as Mimikyu, Zarude and Cobalion, (AC) make good teammates. Mimikyu, (AC) in particular, (AC) can also block Rapid Spin attempts from the opponent. Common defoggers Defog users such as Togekiss and Crobat may try to remove Sticky Web, (AC) so teammates that can pressure them such as Xurkitree, Raikou, and Toxtricity can help. Furthermore, Toxtricity and Raikou can break through teams much easier more easily with web Sticky Web support. Sticky webs Web can also help slower wall breakers wallbreakers such as Pangoro, Regidraco Regidrago, and Bewear break through teams. Finally, Knock Off support from pokemon Pokemon such as Obstagoon, Golisopod and Heracross is helpful, (AC) as it can remove Heavy-Duty Boots from an opponent opposing Pokemon.



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