National Dex True boss girl Pon (Swords dance Ogerpon Wellspring) [QC 2/2][0/1] GP

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[SET]
Swords Dance (Ogerpon-Wellspring) @ Wellspring Mask
Ability: Water Absorb
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Swords Dance
- Ivy Cudgel
- Power Whip / Horn Leech
- Superpower / Play Rough

[SET COMMENTS]

Ogerpon-W is a very threatening wallbreaker that gets many opportunities to set up with Swords Dance, as it can threaten key defensive pieces like Landorus-T, Great Tusk, and Heatran with its STAB moves. Power Whip is the preferred option, as it OHKOes Great Tusk and Alomomola, but Horn Leech can keep Ogerpon-W healthy. Superpower hits potential switch-ins such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon. Play Rough can allow Ogerpon-W to target foes such as Dragonite, Raging Bolt, and Dragapult, which would otherwise switch in comfortably.

Ogerpon-W tends to fit on many different playstyles from hyper offense to balance, as it is a potent wallbreaker capable of threatening defensive teams. Its Water immunity is also appreciated against rain teams. Pokemon like Great Tusk and Landorus-T value Ogerpon-W’s ability to break through bulky Water-types such as Alomomola, Slowbro, and Dondozo. In return, these two provide Stealth Rock support as well as an Electric immunity that can stop revenge killing attempts from Tapu Koko and Raging Bolt. In addition, both teammates can provide entry hazard removal, which Ogerpon-W appreciates, as it is vulnerable to chip damage. Ogerpon-W struggles with threats like Dragapult, Mega Latios, and Mega Latias, so Pursuit trappers like Kingambit and Mega Tyranitar are welcomed. Ogerpon-W does not like taking many hits, so it appreciates U-turn from teammates such as Landorus-T and Dragapult to enter the field safely against Pokemon that want to come in on them such as Alomomola for the former and Mega Tyranitar for the latter. Non-Superpower Ogerpon-W can struggle to dent checks such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon, so Pokemon like Zamazenta and Mega Lopunny are valued to make up for the lack of coverage. Non-Play Rough Ogerpon-W should have partners that can pressure checks like Dragonite and Raging Bolt like Great Tusk and Tapu Koko.

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[SET]
Swords Dance (Ogerpon-Wellspring) @ Wellspring Mask
Ability: Water Absorb
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Swords Dance
- Ivy Cudgel
- Power Whip / Horn Leech
- Superpower / Play Rough

[SET COMMENTS]

Ogerpon-W is one of the elite wallbreakers in the Natdex tier. sentence has no real value since it tells the reader nothing they dont already know, when writing always explain by giving reasons Ogerpon-W can immediately threaten common Pokemon such as Landorus-T, Great Tusk and Heatran with its STABs. <= this is just a statement -- why is this useful? pon is good mainly because its relatively fast while being only meaningfully walled by dragons (superpower) and defensive grasses (play rough), and this is useful because that means it does a lot of damage on every good switch it gets + is VERY threatening into slower teams. a lot more that you can expand on here Swords Dance allows Ogerpon-W to secure KOs versus Pokemon such as Ting-Lu and Landorus-T with Ivy Cudgel. SD is the main reason pon is threatening against slower teams - it can scale and therefore become an exponentially bigger problem until it either dies or wins. of course dont write this exactly but explain why SD is good in general Power Whip is used primarily as it can score a 2HKO on Pokemon such as Alomomola and Great Tusk. pwhip is for immediate power, this is good but specify Power Whip also has the chance to OHKO Offensive Great Tusk. no reason for this to be a new sentence Horn Leech is a secondary option it can give Ogerpon-W more longevity at the cost of more power. Super Power an option in the last slot to hit potential switch-ins such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon. Play Rough another option in the last slot can allow Ogerpon-W to target foes such as Dragonite, Raging Bolt, and Dragapult.

im ngl this is quite lacking in explanation - you have a lot of statements that granted, are correct, but dont justify themselves in a meaningful way and therefore would likely leave readers confused if they don't already know what you mean. whenever you write a sentence, make sure you explain - why? (reason) how? (method) and sometimes also so what? (impact) the word count is quite short but that isn't at all a problem, but you can work on explanation
as for the comments i left, i dont doubt that you already knew practically everything i said, problem is you didnt make reference to any of it. you dont have to fully explain anything that's intuitive, but everything else should be expanded on as much as possible in your own words. please don't copy what i wrote as comment but you get the idea :D

Ogerpon-W tends to fit on many different playstyles from Hyper Offense to Balance. why? Pokemon like Great Tusk and Landorus-T appreciate Ogerpon-W’s ability to break through bulky Water types such as Alomomola, Slowbro, and Dondozo. In return, these two provide Stealth Rock to help Ogerpon-W have an easier time versus checks such as Raging Bolt especially when lacking Play Rough. In addition to this, both provide hazard removal which Ogerpon-W is vulnerable to hazards. Ogerpon-W struggles with faster threats such as Dragapult so it appreciates the presence of Pursuit trappers like Kingambit and Mega Tyranitar. maybe a mention of pivoting teammates here

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ping me after implement
 
[SET]
Swords Dance (Ogerpon-Wellspring) @ Wellspring Mask
Ability: Water Absorb
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Swords Dance
- Ivy Cudgel
- Power Whip / Horn Leech
- Superpower / Play Rough

[SET COMMENTS]

Ogerpon-W is a terrifying breaker that can immediately threaten common Pokemon such as Landorus-T, Great Tusk, and Heatran with its STAB combination, as these Pokemon can be key defensive pieces to many bulky offense teams. <= can be more concise but this is the stuff we want. maybe can word it as "... immediately threaten key defensive pieces such as ..." Its STAB combination and good coverage options make it hard to respond to defensively, which gives slower teams a hard time as Pokemon like Ting-Lu, Dondozo, and Alomomola are also threatened by Ogerpon-W threatened => free SD, elaborate a bittt more there . It also has a respectable speed tier outpacing offensive Pokemon like Urshifu-R, Garchomp, and Kartana. Swords Dance allows Ogerpon-W to secure KOs versus Pokemon such as Ting-Lu and Landorus-T with Ivy Cudgel. Power Whip is primarily used to provide immediate power but can also score a 2HKO on Pokemon such as Alomomola and Great Tusk. Horn Leech is a secondary option. <= merge these => It can give Ogerpon-W more longevity at the cost of more power. Super Power is an option in the last slot to hit potential switch-ins such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon as they resist both its STAB options. Play Rough, another option in the last slot can allow Ogerpon-W to target foes such as Dragonite, Raging Bolt, and Dragapult, which would otherwise switch in comfortably.

Ogerpon-W tends to fit on many different playstyles from Hyper Offense to Balance, as it provides a water immunity which helps vs rain, a Good speed tier, and a great move pool that threatens much of the Natdex metagame. Pokemon like Great Tusk and Landorus-T appreciate Ogerpon-W’s ability to break through bulky water types such as Alomomola, Slowbro, and Dondozo. In return, these two provide Stealth Rock to help Ogerpon-W have an easier time versus checks such as Raging Bolt, especially when lacking Play Rough. In addition, both provide hazard removal, which Ogerpon-W is vulnerable to GP thing but it sounds like pon is vulnerable to your teammates hazard removal. Ogerpon-W struggles with faster threats like Dragapult, so it appreciates the presence of Pursuit trappers like Kingambit and Mega Tyranitar <= this sentence is weird, you say faster threats in general and then suggest a fix for only pult - maybe rework this to be suit trap pult and other speed control. Ogerpon-W does not like taking many hits so it appreciates U-turn from teammates such as Landorus-T and Dragapult to enter the field safely against Pokemon that want to come in on them such as Alomomola for the former and Mega Tyranitar for the latter.

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1/2 after implement, much improvement love to see it
 
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[SET]
Swords Dance (Ogerpon-Wellspring) @ Wellspring Mask
Ability: Water Absorb
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Swords Dance
- Ivy Cudgel
- Power Whip / Horn Leech
- Superpower / Play Rough

[SET COMMENTS]

Ogerpon-W is a terrifying breaker that can immediately threaten key defensive pieces like Landorus-T, Great Tusk, and Heatran with its STAB combination. Its STAB combination and good coverage options make it hard to respond to defensively, which gives slower teams a hard time as Pokemon like Ting-Lu, Dondozo, and Alomomola are also threatened by Ogerpon-W as it can use these Pokemon t as bait to Swords Dance. This first section feels a bit awkward to read, I think just saying “Ogerpon-W is a very threatening wallbreaker that gets many opportunities to set up Swords Dance on x, y, z that are weak to its STAB combination.” would get the point across better It also has a respectable speed tier outpacing offensive Pokemon like Urshifu-R, Garchomp, and Kartana. Swords Dance allows Ogerpon-W to secure KOs versus Pokemon such as Ting-Lu and Landorus-T with Ivy Cudgel. Either remove this or give actual mons that are threatened by SD, Lando and Ting are already not keen to eat Waterpon’s moves Power Whip is primarily used to provide immediate power but can also score a 2HKO on Pokemon such as Alomomola and Great Tusk. Horn Leech is a secondary option It can give Ogerpon-W more longevity at the cost of more power. Super Power is an option in the last slot to hit potential switch-ins such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon as they resist both its STAB options. Play Rough, another option in the last slot can allow Ogerpon-W to target foes such as Dragonite, Raging Bolt, and Dragapult, which would otherwise switch in comfortably.

Ogerpon-W tends to fit on many different playstyles from Hyper Offense to Balance, as it provides a water immunity which helps versus rain teams, a Good speed tier, and a great move pool that threatens much of the Natdex metagame. Pokemon like Great Tusk and Landorus-T appreciate Ogerpon-W’s ability to break through bulky water types such as Alomomola, Slowbro, and Dondozo. In return, these two provide Stealth Rock to help Ogerpon-W have an easier time versus checks such as Raging Bolt, especially when lacking Play Rough. In addition, both provide hazard removal, which Ogerpon-W appreciates as it is vulnerable to chip damage. Ogerpon-W struggles with threats like Dragapult, so it appreciates the presence of Pursuit trappers like Kingambit and Mega Tyranitar. Dragapult isn’t the only threat that Waterpon likes trapped, latis are worth mentioning Ogerpon-W does not like taking many hits so it appreciates U-turn from teammates such as Landorus-T and Dragapult to enter the field safely against Pokemon that want to come in on them such as Alomomola for the former and Mega Tyranitar for the latter. Would mention ways to get around set dependent checks, such as ways around Dragonite and Raging Bolt for Superpower and ways around Ferro/Arch on Play Rough sets

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I’d like to take another look at this before stamping
 
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[SET]
Swords Dance (Ogerpon-Wellspring) @ Wellspring Mask
Ability: Water Absorb
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Swords Dance
- Ivy Cudgel
- Power Whip / Horn Leech
- Superpower / Play Rough

[SET COMMENTS]

Ogerpon-W is a very threatening wallbreaker that gets many opportunities to set up Swords Fance as it can threaten key defensive pieces like Landorus-T, Great Tusk, and Heatran with its STAB combination. Its STAB combination and good coverage options make it hard to respond to defensively, which gives slower teams a hard time as Pokemon like Ting-Lu, Dondozo, and Alomomola are also threatened by Ogerpon-W as it can use these Pokemon as bait to Swords Dance. It also has a respectable speed tier outpacing offensive Pokemon like Urshifu-R, Garchomp, and Kartana. Power Whip is primarily used to provide immediate power but can also score a 2HKO on Pokemon such as Alomomola and Great Tusk. Horn Leech is a secondary option It can give Ogerpon-W more longevity at the cost of more power. Power Whip is the preferred option as it threatens to OHKO Great Tusk and Alomomola from full, but Horn Leech is an alternative that can keep Ogerpon-W healthy. Super Power is an option in the last slot to hit potential switch-ins such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon as they resist both its STAB options. Play Rough, another option in the last slot can allow Ogerpon-W to target foes such as Dragonite, Raging Bolt, and Dragapult, which would otherwise switch in comfortably.

Ogerpon-W tends to fit on many different playstyles from Hyper Offense to Balance, as it provides a water immunity which helps versus rain teams, a Good speed tier, and a great move pool that threatens much of the Natdex metagame. it is a potent wallbreaker capable of threatening defensive teams. Its Water immunity is also appreciated against rain teams. Pokemon like Great Tusk and Landorus-T appreciate Ogerpon-W’s ability to break through bulky water types such as Alomomola, Slowbro, and Dondozo. In return, these two provide Stealth Rock to help Ogerpon-W have an easier time versus checks such as Raging Bolt, especially when lacking Play Rough. as well as an Electric immunity that can stop revenge killing attempts from Tapu Koko and Rahing Bolt. In addition, both can provide hazard removal, which Ogerpon-W appreciates as it is vulnerable to chip damage. Ogerpon-W struggles with threats like Dragapult, Mega Latios, and Mega Latias so it appreciates the presence of Pursuit trappers like Kingambit and Mega Tyranitar. Ogerpon-W does not like taking many hits so it appreciates U-turn from teammates such as Landorus-T and Dragapult to enter the field safely against Pokemon that want to come in on them such as Alomomola for the former and Mega Tyranitar for the latter. Ogerpon-W that lack Super Power can struggle to dent checks such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon so Pokemon like Zamazenta and Mega Lopunny are is appreciated to make up for the lack of coverage. If lacking Play Rough it should have partners that can pressure checks like Dragonite and Raging Bolt, so partners like Great Tusk and Tapu Koko make effective partners. are ideal.

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[SET]
Swords Dance (Ogerpon-Wellspring) @ Wellspring Mask
Ability: Water Absorb
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Swords Dance
- Ivy Cudgel
- Power Whip / Horn Leech
- Superpower / Play Rough

[SET COMMENTS]

Ogerpon-W is a very threatening wallbreaker that gets many opportunities to set up Swords Fance Dance, (AC) as it can threaten key defensive pieces like Landorus-T, Great Tusk, and Heatran with its STAB move combination. Power Whip is the preferred option, (AC) as it threatens to OHKO OHKOes Great Tusk and Alomomola from full (OHKO does mean generally from full), but Horn Leech is an alternative that can keep Ogerpon-W healthy. Super Power is an option in the last slot to hit Superpower hits potential switch-ins such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon, (AC) which as they resist both of its STAB options moves. Play Rough, (RC) another option in the last slot can allow Ogerpon-W to target foes such as Dragonite, Raging Bolt, and Dragapult, which would otherwise switch in comfortably.

Ogerpon-W tends to fit on many different playstyles from hyper offense to balance, as it is a potent wallbreaker capable of threatening defensive teams. Its Ogerpon-W's Water immunity is also appreciated against rain teams. Pokemon like Great Tusk and Landorus-T appreciate value (to avoid repetition of appreciate) Ogerpon-W’s ability to break through bulky water types Water-types such as Alomomola, Slowbro, and Dondozo. In return, these two provide Stealth Rock support as well as an Electric immunity that can stop revenge killing attempts from Tapu Koko and Raging Bolt. In addition, both can provide entry hazard removal, (RC) which that Ogerpon-W appreciates, (AC) as it is vulnerable to chip damage. Ogerpon-W struggles with threats like Dragapult, Mega Latios, and Mega Latias, (AC) so it appreciates the presence of Pursuit trappers like Kingambit and Mega Tyranitar are welcomed. Ogerpon-W does not like taking many hits, (AC) so it appreciates U-turn from teammates such as Landorus-T and Dragapult to enter the field safely against Pokemon that want to come in on them such as Alomomola for the former and Mega Tyranitar for the latter. Ogerpon-W that lack Super Power Superpower can struggle to dent checks such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon, (AC) so Pokemon like Zamazenta and Mega Lopunny are appreciated valued to make up for the lack of coverage. If When lacking Play Rough, (AC) Ogerpon-W it should have partners that can pressure checks like Dragonite and Raging Bolt, so partners Pokemon like Great Tusk and Tapu Koko make are ideal.

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[SET]
Swords Dance (Ogerpon-Wellspring) @ Wellspring Mask
Ability: Water Absorb
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Swords Dance
- Ivy Cudgel
- Power Whip / Horn Leech
- Superpower / Play Rough

[SET COMMENTS]

Ogerpon-W is a very threatening wallbreaker that gets many opportunities to set up with Swords Fance Dance, (AC) as it can threaten key defensive pieces like Landorus-T, Great Tusk, and Heatran with its STAB moves combination. Power Whip is the preferred option, (AC) as it threatens to OHKO OHKOes Great Tusk and Alomomola from full (OHKO does mean generally from full), but Horn Leech is an alternative that can keep Ogerpon-W healthy. Super Power is an option in the last slot to hit Superpower hits potential switch-ins such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon as they resist both its STAB options. Play Rough, (RC) another option in the last slot can allow Ogerpon-W to target foes such as Dragonite, Raging Bolt, and Dragapult, which would otherwise switch in comfortably.

Ogerpon-W tends to fit on many different playstyles from hyper offense to balance, as it is a potent wallbreaker capable of threatening defensive teams. Its Water immunity is also appreciated against rain teams. Pokemon like Great Tusk and Landorus-T appreciate value (to avoid repetition of appreciate) Ogerpon-W’s ability to break through bulky water types Water-types such as Alomomola, Slowbro, and Dondozo. In return, these two provide Stealth Rock support as well as an Electric immunity that can stop revenge killing attempts from Tapu Koko and Raging Bolt. In addition, both teammates can provide entry hazard removal, which Ogerpon-W appreciates, (AC) as it is vulnerable to chip damage. Ogerpon-W struggles with threats like Dragapult, Mega Latios, and Mega Latias, (AC) so it appreciates the presence of Pursuit trappers like Kingambit and Mega Tyranitar are welcomed. Ogerpon-W does not like taking many hits, (AC) so it appreciates U-turn from teammates such as Landorus-T and Dragapult to enter the field safely against Pokemon that want to come in on them such as Alomomola for the former and Mega Tyranitar for the latter. Non-Superpower Ogerpon-W that lack Super Power can struggle to dent checks such as Ferrothorn and Archaludon, (AC) so Pokemon like Zamazenta and Mega Lopunny are appreciated valued to make up for the lack of coverage. If lacking Play Rough Non-Play Rough Ogerpon-W it should have partners that can pressure checks like Dragonite and Raging Bolt (RC) so partners like Great Tusk and Tapu Koko. make are ideal.

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GP Team done
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