LC Vanillite

[Sultan]

[OVERVIEW]
Vanillite has a decent Special Attack stat and ways of boosting its Speed, but its bad defensive typing, shallow movepool, and poor bulk make it very underwhelming. Vullaby, Clamperl, and Shellder are better Speed-boosting sweepers than Vanillite, while Amaura, Alolan Vulpix, and Alolan Sandshrew are better Ice-types. Because a variety of more viable Pokemon directly outclass Vanillite, it should not be considered for serious teams.

[SET]
name: Weak Armor Sweeper
move 1: Ice Beam
move 2: Hidden Power Fighting
move 3: Explosion
move 4: Substitute
item: Icium Z / Life Orb
ability: Weak Armor
nature: Modest
evs: 240 SpA / 244 Spe
ivs: 19 HP / 1 Atk / 30 Def / 30 SpA / 30 SpD / 30 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
This set attempts to pose a threat against offensive teams by boosting its Speed with Weak Armor and hitting decently hard with a Subzero Slammer or Life Orb-boosted Ice Beam. However, as Vanillite is rather frail and vulnerable to common priority moves, this is hard to accomplish compared to sweeping with Vullaby or Shellder. Similarly, Alolan Vulpix's Aurora Veil support is useful to more teams, while Amaura and Alolan Sandshrew have better power and coverage that make them much better offensively than Vanillite.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Sultan of Skook, 404053]]
- Quality checked by: [[Merritt, 213064], [Fiend, 208173]]
- Grammar checked by: [[frustration, 447027]]

 

[Nineage]

Though this was posted without permission, the work is good so I'll let this go to QC. Please don't post before getting a reservation approved or the analysis will be re-assigned and you will be infracted regardless of the quality of the content.

 

[Merritt]

[OVERVIEW]
This is too long for Vanillite. Keep it short and simple - points you want to hit in one sentence or so is that Vanillite has a mediocre Special Attack stat and a way to boost its speed, but has a terrible typing and movepool alongside poor speed and rather low bulk. Then say that there are significantly better options for offensive Pokemon in general and that Vanillite should not be considered for any serious team.

[SET]
Use this set instead.

name: Weak Armor Sweeper
move 1: Ice Beam
move 2: Hidden Power Fighting
move 3: Explosion
move 4: Substitute
item: Icium Z / Life Orb
ability: Weak Armor
nature: Modest
evs: 240 SpA / 244 Spe
ivs: 19 HP / 1 Atk / 30 Def / 30 SpA / 30 SpD / 30 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Adjust for the new set. You're going into too much detail and commentary as it is now - avoid using phrases like "This doesn't even seem that bad on paper". Restate here that there are many better options for offensive Pokemon in LC then a specific mention of Amaura or Vulpix-A being much better offensive Ice-types specifically.

[CREDITS]
You should only have two spaces for QC here and one space for GP since this is a pseudo analysis.

Implement and give yourself 1/2

 

[Nineage]

Sultan of Skook please implement this or it will be re-assigned.

 

[Sultan]

Implemented, sorry for taking so long

 

[Fiend]

I'm realizing these look more and more like GP edits...
Relevant bit.
Add.
[Comment.]

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[OVERVIEW]
Vanillite has an alright Special Attack stat and ways of boosting its speed, but its bad defensive typing, shallow movepool, and poor bulk make it very underwhelming. There are many much better options for offensive Pokemon - [Remove.]Vullaby, Clamperl, and Shellder are better speed [Remove.] Speed boosting sweepers than Vanillite, while Amaura, Vulpix-Alola, and Sandshrew-Alola are better Ice-types. Since it is not very effective and outclassed by many things, one should not use Vanillite on a serious team. [Remove.] Since a variety of more viable Pokemon directly outclass Vanillite, it should not be considered for serious teams. [Makes your point a bit better.]


[SET]
[Good.]

[SET COMMENTS]
This set attempts to pose a threat against offensive teams by boosting its Speed with Weak Armor and hitting decently hard with a Subzero Slammer or Life Orb-boosted Ice Beam. [Your next two sentences don't fully accomplish what a pseudo should, but if you change this middle one it would.] However, due to its vulnerability to chip damage (especially if it runs Life Orb), Vanillite will typically only get one kill per game at most, and that's if you're lucky. [Remove.] However, as Vanillite is rather frail and vulnerable to common priority moves, this is hard to accomplish compared to sweeping with Vullaby or Shellder. [I know I wrote this fix for you, but I thought this example was easy to learn from: compare it again, reiterate all its downsides quickly, and make sure the reader knows the Pokemon is bad. Full stop.] Similarly, Vulpix-Alola's Aurora Veil support is useful to more teams, while Amaura and Sandslash-Alola have better power and coverage that make them much better offensively than Vanillite.

QC: 2/2

 

[Sultan]

Implemented, ready for GP

 

[frostration]

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[OVERVIEW]
Vanillite has an alright [not that necessary but i would change this to "a decent"] Special Attack stat and ways of boosting its speed Speed, but its bad defensive typing, shallow movepool, and poor bulk make it very underwhelming. Vullaby, Clamperl, and Shellder are better Speed-boosting [add hyphen] sweepers than Vanillite, [AC] while Amaura, Vulpix-Alola Alolan Vulpix, and Sandshrew-Alola Alolan Sandshrew are better Ice-types. Since Because a variety of more viable Pokemon directly outclass Vanillite, it should not be considered for serious teams.

[SET]
name: Weak Armor Sweeper
move 1: Ice Beam
move 2: Hidden Power Fighting
move 3: Explosion
move 4: Substitute
item: Icium Z / Life Orb
ability: Weak Armor
nature: Modest
evs: 240 SpA / 244 Spe
ivs: 19 HP / 1 Atk / 30 Def / 30 SpA / 30 SpD / 30 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
This set attempts to pose a threat against offensive teams by boosting its Speed with Weak Armor and hitting decently hard with a Subzero Slammer or Life Orb-boosted Ice Beam. However, as Vanillite is rather frail and vulnerable to common priority moves, this is hard to accomplish compared to sweeping with Vullaby or Shellder. Similarly, Vulpix-Alola's Alolan Vulpix's Aurora Veil support is useful to more teams, while Amaura and Sandshrew-Alola Alolan Sandshrew have better power and coverage that make them much better offensively than Vanillite.

GP 1/1, make sure you switch the tag from QC to copyediting next time!!:)

 

[Sultan]

Aaaaaand done!

 

[Corporal Levi]

uploaded!