Copyediting Venusaur (Grass) [QC: 2/2]

Yami

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:venusaur: :ss/Venusaur: :venusaur:
[SET]
name: Sun Sweeper (Grass)
move 1: Weather Ball
move 2: Giga Drain
move 3: Sludge Bomb
move 4: Growth
item: Life Orb
ability: Chlorophyll
nature: Modest
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Venusaur is a great sun sweeper because of its ability Chlorophyll, its good Special attack and good movepool consisting of moves like Growth and Weather Ball. Weather Ball turns into a Fire-type move in the Sun, which can take care of Corviknight and Aegislash. Giga Drain is used to make Venusaur able to take care of Water- and Ground-types such as Keldeo,Toxapex and Gastrodon while giving Venusaur a way to get some health back from Life Orb recoil. Sludge Bomb is used to OHKO Fairy-types such as Togekiss and can take care of Hydreigon and Kyurem-B after using Growth once. Growth should be used under Sun to double Venusaur’s Special Attack to become a dangerous sweeper. Earth Power is a niche option that can be used to hit Poison-type Pokemon such as Salazzle and Drapion. Venusaur should try to set up Growth on a predicted switch or on a passive Pokemon like Ferrothorn and Toxapex. Venusaur should come in on U-turn or Memento from Whimsicott or on passive Pokemon such as Toxapex. A modest nature allows it to net an OHKO on Aegislash and Corviknight.

Whimsiscott is a mandatory teammate because of its access to Prankster Sunny Day. Venusaur also loves Whimsicott for being able to get it in safely with U-turn or Memento. Shiftry is a great partner to pair with Venusaur because of its Dark-tying and Chorophyll allowing it to take care of Psychic-types that Venusaur can struggle with such as Jirachi and Indeedee. Shiftry can also take care of Dragapult with Sucker Punch. Celebi also goes great with Venusuar because it can help pressure Fighting-types such as Bulletproof Kommo-o. and can use Weather Ball to help Venusaur sweep in the Steel-type matchup. Celebi can also greatly help in the Poison-type matchup with Earth Power and Psychic. Ferrothorn is great to pair with Venusaur due to its access to hazards like Stealth Rock and Spikes and being able to come in on Ice-type attacks from Cloyster and Alolan Ninetales and physical attacks such as Dracovish's Psychic Fang. Virizion is a great for Speed control while also dealing with threats like Snorlax, Hydreigon, Kyurem-B and Centiskorch against Normal-, Dark-, Ice-, and Bug-type matchups respectively. It also can take care of Alolan Ninetales with Smart Strike and can also act as an emergency Sunny Day settler if Whimsicott gets KOed.


[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Yami, 393488]]
- Grass analysis by: [[Yami, 393488]]
- Quality checked by: [[Harpp, 320110], [maroon, 305839]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]
 
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:venusaur: :ss/Venusaur: :venusaur:
[SET]
name: Sun Sweeper (Grass)
move 1: Weather Ball
move 2: Giga Drain / Earth Power
move 3: Sludge Bomb
move 4: Growth
item: Life Orb
ability: Chlorophyll
nature: Modest
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Venusaur is a great sun sweeper because of its ability Chlorophyll, movepool and it good Special Attack and Speed [In the first sentence you mention chlorophyll so no need of mentioning speed as it is implied that it is a sun sweeper, also talk about what kind of movepool it has and what it consists of. You can reword the first sentence to 'Venusaur is a great sun sweeper because of its ability Chlorophyll, its good Special attack and decent movepool consisting of moves like Growth and Weather Ball]. Weather Ball turns into a Fire-type move in the Sun, which can take care of Corviknight and Aegislash. Giga Drain is used to make Venusaur able to take care of Water- and Ground-types such as Crawdaunt and Gastrodon while giving Venusaur a way to get some HP health back from Life Orb recoil. Earth Power can be used over Giga Drain to hit Poison-type Pokemon such as Toxapex and Salazzle. Sludge Bomb is used to OHKO Fairy-types such as Togekiss [Mention how Sludge bomb can take out threats like Hydreigon and Kyurem-B after a Growth boost]. Growth is used to boost Venusaur’s Special Attack to become a dangerous sweeper. Venusaur should come in on U-turn or Memento from Whimsicott or on passive Pokemon such as Toxapex. A modest nature allows it to net an OHKO on Aegislash and Corviknight.

Whimsiscott is a mandatory teammate because of its access to Prankster Sunny Day and its ability Prankster to always move first. Venusaur also loves Whimsicott for being able to get it in safely with U-turn or Memento. Shiftry is a great parter to pair with Venusaur because of its Dark-tying and Chorophyll allowing it to take care of Psychic-types that Venusaur can struggle with such as Jirachi and Indeedee [Mention Shiftry beating Pokemon like Dragapult with Sucker Punch and weakening checks and counters for each other] Celebi also goes great with Venusuar because it can help pressure Fighting-types such as BulletProof Kommo-o. and can use Weather Ball to help Venusaur sweep in the Steel-type matchup [Mention Celebi breaking Poison type team too with earth power and Psychic]Ferrothron is great to pair with Venusaur due to its access to hazards like Stealth Rock and Spikes and being able to come in on Ice-type attacks from Cloyster and Ninetales Alolan Ninetales and physical attacks such as Dracovish's Psychic Fang. Virizon is great for Speed control as its Fighting-typing helps greatly in the Dark- Ice- and Bug-type matchup with Hydreigon, Centiskorch and Kyurem-B and able to outpace Choice Scarf users such as Charizard. Reword the last sentence entirely as it is hard to grasp imo, something like 'Virizion is a great for Speed control while also dealing with threats like Snorlax, Hydreigon, Kyurem-B and Centiskorch against Normal-, Dark-, Ice-, and Bug-type matchups respectively. Talk about it acting as emergency Sunny Day setter for the Choice Scarf set.


[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]
- <Type> analysis by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]
- Quality checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>], [<username2>, <userid2>]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]
Good job.
 

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Yami please implement harpp's check, he can then decide if he wants to stamp it or drop another. Same with the Salazzle analysis!
 
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Sorry for taking so long, its really hard for me to implement QC checks on phone as I dont have computer access due to my sisters using the limited wifi box and there isnt any data left for me to do these on my laptop due to the coronavirus. Anyways, this is now implemented Harpp
 

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- unslash earth power. when you talk about it in the paragraph make sure you say that its a niche option. also offensive venusaur can beat toxapex with giga drain pretty easily.
- this is nitpicky but id say its movepool is pretty good not 'decent' for what it does, has access to earth power, weather ball, and its stabs allowing it to break really anything it wants
- would for sure add melmetal as a target of weather ball
- its true that giga drain ohkos crawdaunt but so does everything else, lets perhaps go with different water-type examples such as Keldeo
- would mention that growth should be used in the sun, since the sun doubles the boosts it receives
- also give a usage tip about when it should setup nasty plot vs attack in the first paragraph.
- would mention that virizion nails alolan ninetales thanks to it commonly using smart strike, especially on sun teams.

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:venusaur: :ss/Venusaur: :venusaur:
[SET]
name: Sun Sweeper (Grass)
move 1: Weather Ball
move 2: Giga Drain
move 3: Sludge Bomb
move 4: Growth
item: Life Orb
ability: Chlorophyll
nature: Modest
evs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Venusaur is a great sun sweeper because of its ability Chlorophyll, its good Special Attack, (AC) and good movepool consisting of moves like Growth and Weather Ball. Weather Ball turns into a Fire-type move in the Sun, which in sun that can take care of Corviknight, Melmetal, and Aegislash. Giga Drain is used to make enable Venusaur able (optional) to take care of Water- and Ground-types such as Keldeo, Toxapex, (AC and fix spacing) and Gastrodon while giving Venusaur it a way to get some health back recover from Life Orb recoil (orig read awkwardly, kinda implying Life Orb recoil gives health). Sludge Bomb is used to OHKO Fairy-types such as Togekiss and can take care of Hydreigon and Kyurem-B after using Growth once. Growth should be used under sun to double Venusaur’s Special Attack to become turn Venusaur into a dangerous sweeper. Earth Power is a niche option that can be used to hit Poison-type Pokemon such as Salazzle and Drapion. Venusaur should try to set up Growth on a predicted switch or on a passive Pokemon like Ferrothorn and Toxapex. Venusaur It should also come in on via a U-turn or Memento from Whimsicott or on passive Pokemon such as Toxapex. A Modest nature allows it to net an OHKO on Aegislash and Corviknight.

Whimsiscott is a mandatory teammate because of its access to Prankster Sunny Day. Venusaur also loves Whimsicott for being able to get it and its ability to get Venusaur in safely with U-turn or Memento. Shiftry is a great partner to pair with Venusaur because of its Dark-tying Dark typing and Chlorophyll, (AC) allowing it to take care of Psychic-types that Venusaur can struggle with such as Jirachi and Indeedee. Shiftry can also take care of Dragapult with Sucker Punch. Celebi also goes greatly with Venusaur because it can help pressure Fighting-types such as Bulletproof Kommo-o. (RP) and can use Weather Ball to help Venusaur sweep in the Steel-type matchup. Celebi can also greatly help in the Poison-type matchup with Earth Power and Psychic. Ferrothorn is great to pair with Venusaur due to its access to entry hazards like Stealth Rock and Spikes and being able ability to come in on Ice-type attacks from Cloyster and Alolan Ninetales and physical attacks such as Dracovish's Psychic Fang. Virizion is a great for speed control while also dealing with threats like Snorlax, Hydreigon, Kyurem-B, (AC) and Centiskorch against Normal-, Dark-, Ice-, and Bug-type matchups, (AC) respectively. It also can can also take care of Alolan Ninetales with Smart Strike and can also act as an emergency Sunny Day settler if Whimsicott gets KOed.


[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Yami, 393488]]
- Grass analysis by: [[Yami, 393488]]
- Quality checked by: [[Harpp, 320110], [maroon, 305839]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]
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