Cheese B*tches!!! (A suspect warstory)

Hello everyone. Normally im a person that kinda lurks around on these forums and doesnt post much. But recently ive been trying to get more involved in them and also in the suspect ladder. I concider myself to be an above average battler although im not widely known. Below is a battle with very few mistakes and little hax. I hope you guys enjoy it as much as i did. My opponent was egg shell and his team is at the end. Here is my team:



Rules: Ladder Match, Sleep Clause, Freeze Clause, OHKO Clause, Evasion Clause, Species Clause, Strict Damage Clause
BAN SALAMENCE sent out Heatran (lvl 100 Heatran ?).
egg shell sent out Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's Intimidate cut Heatran's attack!
familyties has entered the room.


Egg shell leads with a gyrados. Im assuming its a taunt version or a stupid twave version. My team is fairly dd gyrados weak, with flygon being the only one who can revenge it. So instead of risk it sweeping me i switch to gyrados to get an intimidate off. Hopefully ill be able to get sr up later.

BAN SALAMENCE: z0mg ur number 4 on the ladder
BAN SALAMENCE switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's Intimidate cut Gyarados's attack!
Gyarados used Waterfall.
It's not very effective...
Gyarados lost 22% of its health.
Gyarados's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gyarados restored 6% of its health.


Hmm waterfall. Hes probly trying to weaken my counter for a lategame sweep. I doubt hes gonna dd yet and im not gonna try to sweep yet so i just go for the taunt.

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egg shell: thanks that from two day work
BAN SALAMENCE: i know lol
egg shell: i don't have a socail life
egg shell switched in Cresselia (lvl 100 Cresselia ?).
Gyarados used Taunt.
Cresselia fell for the taunt!
Gyarados's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gyarados restored 6% of its health.


CRESSILA? Havent seeen one of those in years. I guess with the scizor and ttar decline more and more players are starting to use him again. Unless its running hp ground (lol) he cant touch heatran so im gonna try and get sr up now.

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BAN SALAMENCE: well maybe if u came out of ur egg shell...
BAN SALAMENCE switched in Heatran (lvl 100 Heatran ?).
Cresselia used Charge Beam.
Heatran lost 10% of its health.

Dam. This things gonna have to be weakend pretty bad before i can try to sweep with my gyra. Time to get up the lovely floating rocks.

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egg shell: lol
egg shell switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's Intimidate cut Heatran's attack!
Heatran used Stealth Rock.
Pointed stones float in the air around the foe's team!


Success! But here comes that deadly serpant again, unscratched. He hasnt set up rocks yet so im gonna abuse that by going to my own gyra.

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BAN SALAMENCE switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's Intimidate cut Gyarados's attack!
Gyarados used Waterfall.
It's not very effective...
Gyarados lost 21% of its health.
Gyarados's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gyarados restored 6% of its health.


Hes still trying to waterfall? I dont know whats going through this guys head but i dont like it. Im gonna stone edge this time in case he tries to dance.

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egg shell switched in Cresselia (lvl 100 Cresselia ?).
Pointed stones dug into Cresselia.
Cresselia lost 12% of its health.
Gyarados used Stone Edge.
Cresselia lost 15% of its health.
Gyarados's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gyarados restored 6% of its health.
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.


15% is better than nothing right? Im assuming hes gonna charge beam again so im going to my newest team member, subseed shaymin.

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BAN SALAMENCE switched in Shaymin (lvl 100 Shaymin).
Cresselia used Reflect.
A barrier was formed!
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.


So its a duel screen version. Thats every offensive teams nightmare. At least i can stall the screans out with shaymin. I dont think he can break my sub so im gonna use that in case he switches.

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egg shell switched in Shaymin (lvl 100 Shaymin).
Pointed stones dug into Shaymin.
Shaymin lost 12% of its health.
Shaymin used Substitute.
Shaymin lost 25% of its health.
Shaymin made a substitute!
Shaymin's leftovers restored its health a little!
Shaymin restored 6% of its health.
Shaymin's leftovers restored its health a little!
Shaymin restored 6% of its health.


He has a shaymin too. Grass types became so much more viable with the banning of salamence, so im not surprised. Im gonna burn his ass with hp fire.

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Shaymin used Hidden Power.
It's super effective!
The substitute took damage for Shaymin!
Shaymin's substitute faded!
Shaymin used Hidden Power.
It's super effective!
Shaymin lost 38% of its health.
Shaymin's leftovers restored its health a little!
Shaymin restored 6% of its health.
Shaymin's leftovers restored its health a little!
Shaymin restored 6% of its health.

Dam hes faster. I run a modest shaymin with 252hp eves, alot of special attack, and some speed. So i hp fire again to wear it down.

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Shaymin used Hidden Power.
It's super effective!
Shaymin lost 38% of its health.
Shaymin used Hidden Power.
It's super effective!
Shaymin lost 43% of its health.
Shaymin's leftovers restored its health a little!
Shaymin restored 6% of its health.
Shaymin's leftovers restored its health a little!
Shaymin restored 6% of its health.


Hes pretty low on health now so here i try to bring in flygon to force it to die or give me the advantageus switch. I pray hes not running hp ice (why would he with mence gone) and bring in the flying ground type.

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BAN SALAMENCE switched in Flygon (lvl 100 Flygon ?).
Shaymin used Hidden Power.
It's not very effective...
Flygon lost 15% of its health.
Shaymin's reflect wore off!
Shaymin's leftovers restored its health a little!
Shaymin restored 6% of its health.


Perfect timeing his reflect wore off.

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egg shell switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's Intimidate cut Flygon's attack!
Pointed stones dug into Gyarados.
Gyarados lost 25% of its health.
Flygon used U-turn.
It's not very effective...
Gyarados lost 8% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE switched in Jirachi (lvl 100 Jirachi).


Ugh he didnt let it die. But he did bring in gyra and he took 32% this turn. Sucussful turn in my eyes. I bring in rachi to hopefully scare it out.

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egg shell switched in Swampert (lvl 100 Swampert ?).
Pointed stones dug into Swampert.
Swampert lost 6% of its health.
Jirachi used Thunderbolt.
It doesn't affect Swampert...
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.


Swampert absorbes the thunderbolt. Im running a bulky cm wish rachi with psychic so i cant really hurt him now. Id bet my house that hes gonna sr so i bring in shaymin on the free switch.

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BAN SALAMENCE switched in Shaymin (lvl 100 Shaymin).
Swampert used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!
Shaymin lost 30% of its health.
Shaymin's leftovers restored its health a little!
Shaymin restored 6% of its health.


He didnt sr? I guess im homeless now :(. Ice beam still only does 30% so its all good. Havent seen a grass resist yet besides shaymin so im gonna seed flare.

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egg shell switched in Scizor (lvl 100 Scizor ?).
Pointed stones dug into Scizor.
Scizor lost 12% of its health.
Shaymin used Seed Flare.
It's not very effective...
Scizor lost 18% of its health.
Shaymin's leftovers restored its health a little!
Shaymin restored 6% of its health.


The ugly metal bug. Hes a rare sight nowadays. I think shaymin can survive a bullet punch so i decide to go for the kill.

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Scizor used Bullet Punch.
Shaymin lost 38% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE's Shaymin fainted.


FML. Turns out bullet punch had a 100% chance of koing, so no hax there. At this point the futures looking grim for me.

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BAN SALAMENCE switched in Jirachi (lvl 100 Jirachi).
egg shell switched in Swampert (lvl 100 Swampert ?).
Pointed stones dug into Swampert.
Swampert lost 6% of its health.
Jirachi used Wish.
Jirachi made a wish!
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.


I know hes gonna go to swampert so i wish to try to heal someone.

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Jirachi used Psychic.
Swampert lost 28% of its health.
Swampert used Stealth Rock.
Pointed stones float in the air around the foe's team!
The wish came true!
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.


Finally he sets up sr. I guess with mence gone its not a top priority anymore. I decide to psychic to do some damage.

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Jirachi used Wish.
Jirachi made a wish!
Swampert used Earthquake.
It's super effective!
Jirachi lost 49% of its health.
Jirachi's leftovers restored its health a little!
Jirachi restored 6% of its health.
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.


Not even a 2hko. Im still not gonna set up on swamp so i psychic for some more damage.

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Jirachi used Psychic.
Swampert lost 28% of its health.
Swampert used Earthquake.
It's super effective!
Jirachi lost 53% of its health.
The wish came true!
Jirachi restored 50% of its health.
Jirachi's leftovers restored its health a little!
Jirachi restored 6% of its health.
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.


Wish heals me as i psychic again. Nothing interesting here.

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BAN SALAMENCE switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's Intimidate cut Swampert's attack!
Pointed stones dug into Gyarados.
Gyarados lost 25% of its health.
Swampert used Earthquake.
It doesn't affect Gyarados...
Gyarados's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gyarados restored 6% of its health.
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.


Since hes spaming eq i might as well go to gyra to force the switch. Hopefully he doesnt use roar.

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egg shell switched in Cresselia (lvl 100 Cresselia ?).
Pointed stones dug into Cresselia.
Cresselia lost 12% of its health.
Gyarados used Taunt.
Cresselia fell for the taunt!
Gyarados's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gyarados restored 6% of its health.
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.


No point in dding here since his cress is still in tip top shape. So i taunt in case he roars. In comes cress.

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BAN SALAMENCE switched in Heatran (lvl 100 Heatran ?).
Pointed stones dug into Heatran.
Heatran lost 12% of its health.
Cresselia used Charge Beam.
Heatran lost 10% of its health.
Cresselia's special attack was raised.
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.


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Cresselia makes ground moves miss with Levitate!
Heatran used Earth Power.
Heatran's attack missed!
Cresselia used Charge Beam.
Heatran lost 15% of its health.
Cresselia's special attack was raised.
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.

Right now my plan is to weaken that swampert so i can sweep with rachi.
Cress still cant touch heatran so i decide to earth power to hurt swampert. I would of exploded here but i carry taunt over it to prevent sr sometimes. Helps gyra out alot.


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Heatran used Flamethrower.
Cresselia lost 31% of its health.
Cresselia used Charge Beam.
Heatran lost 20% of its health.
Cresselia's special attack was raised.
Cresselia's taunt wore off!
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.


Sigh hes not switching and that charge beam is getting pretty powerful. Hopefully i can beat it before he beats me.

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Heatran used Flamethrower.
Cresselia lost 28% of its health.
Cresselia was burned!
Cresselia used Moonlight.
Cresselia restored 50% of its health.
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.
Cresselia was hurt by its burn!
Cresselia lost 12% of its health.


Yay a burn! Now before you scream "HAX" concider that he got a spa raise 3 times in a row with charge beam. He recovers but thats ok because im not trying to sweap with gyra anymore.

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Heatran used Taunt.
Cresselia fell for the taunt!
Cresselia used Reflect.
Cresselia can't use Reflect after the taunt!
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.
Cresselia was hurt by its burn!
Cresselia lost 12% of its health.

I taunt to try to stall for burn damage, and he psudeo struggles trying to use reflect. Silly duck, screens are for noobs. (jk no offence egg)

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BAN SALAMENCE switched in Flygon (lvl 100 Flygon ?).
Pointed stones dug into Flygon.
Flygon lost 6% of its health.
Cresselia used Charge Beam.
It doesn't affect Flygon...
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.
Cresselia was hurt by its burn!
Cresselia lost 12% of its health.


In an attempt to save heatrans life i go to flygon to absorb the charge beam. I guess hes trying to keep his boosts by not switching.

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Flygon used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Cresselia lost 20% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE switched in Heatran (lvl 100 Heatran ?).
Pointed stones dug into Heatran.
Heatran lost 12% of its health.
Cresselia used Charge Beam.
Heatran lost 21% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE's Heatran fainted.
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.
Cresselia was hurt by its burn!
Cresselia lost 12% of its health.


U-turn is the obvious move since he stil cant recover.

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BAN SALAMENCE switched in Jirachi (lvl 100 Jirachi).
Pointed stones dug into Jirachi.
Jirachi lost 6% of its health.
Jirachi used Wish.
Jirachi made a wish!
Cresselia used Charge Beam.
Jirachi lost 18% of its health.
Cresselia's special attack was raised.
Cresselia's taunt wore off!
Jirachi's leftovers restored its health a little!
Jirachi restored 6% of its health.
Cresselia's leftovers restored its health a little!
Cresselia restored 6% of its health.
Cresselia was hurt by its burn!
Cresselia lost 12% of its health.


Since im forced to switch i decide to bring in rachi to get a wish off. Yea, that'll make u switch cress.

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egg shell switched in Swampert (lvl 100 Swampert ?).
Pointed stones dug into Swampert.
Swampert lost 6% of its health.
Jirachi used Calm Mind.
Jirachi's special attack was raised.
Jirachi's special defence was raised.
The wish came true!
Jirachi restored 50% of its health.
Jirachi's leftovers restored its health a little!
Jirachi restored 6% of its health.
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.

Wish heals rachi And i calm mind as he goes to swampert.

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Jirachi used Wish.
Jirachi made a wish!
Swampert used Earthquake.
It's super effective!
Jirachi lost 57% of its health.
Jirachi's leftovers restored its health a little!
Jirachi restored 6% of its health.
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.


Right now i realize i havent seen another gyra counter and cress is severely weakened. Nows as good a time as ever to go for a gyra sweep.
I wish again in case he roars, but since he insists on eqing i go to gyra.


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BAN SALAMENCE switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's Intimidate cut Swampert's attack!
Pointed stones dug into Gyarados.
Gyarados lost 25% of its health.
Swampert used Earthquake.
It doesn't affect Gyarados...
The wish came true!
Gyarados restored 50% of its health.
Gyarados's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gyarados restored 5% of its health.
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.


Sucuss! I really dont want him to roar so i taunt the mudfish. Paranoid much?

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egg shell switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's Intimidate cut Gyarados's attack!
Pointed stones dug into Gyarados.
Gyarados lost 25% of its health.
Gyarados used Taunt.
Gyarados fell for the taunt!


I get out predicted and he goes to gyra to get an intimide off. Coppying much? At this point im cumming myself because that cress was his only gyra counter.

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Gyarados used Stone Edge.
Gyarados's attack missed!
Gyarados used Dragon Dance.
Gyarados's attack was raised.
Gyarados's speed was raised.


Hes pretty weakend so i decide to dd up! Yeaaaaaaaaaaaa boy!

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egg shell: noooooooooooooo
Gyarados used Stone Edge.
Gyarados's attack missed!
Gyarados used Stone Edge.
It's super effective!
Gyarados lost 100% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE's Gyarados fainted.


Is it really that serious eggy? Anyway that gyra is pretty ugly so i try to get it off my screen. Instead i miss and he 1hkos me. HE 1HKOS ME. In an attemp to save my laptops life i leave the room for a few minutes. Stupid cb gyra!!!!!!!!!

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(A FEW MOMENTS LATER)
BAN SALAMENCE switched in Flygon (lvl 100 Flygon ?).
Pointed stones dug into Flygon.
Flygon lost 6% of its health.
egg shell: that would have been gg
egg shell switched in Scizor (lvl 100 Scizor ?).
Pointed stones dug into Scizor.
Scizor lost 12% of its health.
Flygon used U-turn.
It's not very effective...
Scizor lost 11% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE switched in Jirachi (lvl 100 Jirachi).
Pointed stones dug into Jirachi.
Jirachi lost 6% of its health.
Jirachi's leftovers restored its health a little!
Jirachi restored 6% of its health.


Some flygons carry tpunch (mine does) so i try to force a switch. He brings in scizor. Not good my friends. The only poke that can take a cb bullet punch is jirachi so i go to her. Looks like game over for me.

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Jirachi used Thunderbolt.
Scizor lost 25% of its health.
Scizor used Superpower.
Jirachi lost 48% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE's Jirachi fainted.
Scizor's attack was lowered.
Scizor's defence was lowered.


Thunderbolt does little damage, and he superpowers for almost twice as much.

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BAN SALAMENCE: k
BAN SALAMENCE: time for the comeback
BAN SALAMENCE switched in Flygon (lvl 100 Flygon ?).
Pointed stones dug into Flygon.
Flygon lost 6% of its health.
Flygon used U-turn.
It's not very effective...
Scizor lost 15% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE switched in Gengar (lvl 100 Gengar ?).
Pointed stones dug into Gengar.
Gengar lost 12% of its health.
Scizor used Superpower.
It doesn't affect Gengar...


This is the move that cost eggshell the game. Leaving scizor in when he had a clear sweep on my team. All he had to do was switch out and scizor could survive sr damage. (note-at this point he still hasnt seen gengar). I uturn and since hes locked in to superpower i go to the star of the game, GENGAR!

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Gengar used Substitute.
Gengar lost 25% of its health.
Gengar made a substitute!
Scizor used Superpower.
It doesn't affect Gengar...


I take advantage of the free sub. Still havent seen his last poke. Hopefully gengar can take it...

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Gengar used Shadow Ball.
It's not very effective...
Scizor lost 7% of its health.
egg shell's Scizor fainted.
Gengar lost 10% of its health.


Bye bye birdie #1

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egg shell switched in Cresselia (lvl 100 Cresselia ?).
Pointed stones dug into Cresselia.
Cresselia lost 12% of its health.
Gengar used Shadow Ball.
It's super effective!
Cresselia lost 23% of its health.
egg shell's Cresselia fainted.
Gengar lost 10% of its health.

Bye bye birdie #2

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egg shell switched in Swampert (lvl 100 Swampert ?).
Pointed stones dug into Swampert.
Swampert lost 6% of its health.
egg shell switched in Lucario (lvl 100 Lucario ?).
Pointed stones dug into Lucario.
Lucario lost 3% of its health.
Gengar used Shadow Ball.
It's not very effective...
Lucario lost 43% of its health.
Gengar lost 10% of its health.


In an attempt to stall for lo damage he shows his last poke. Its luke! i can win this if fb hits.


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Gengar used Focus Blast.
It's super effective!
Lucario lost 54% of its health.
egg shell's Lucario fainted.
Gengar lost 10% of its health.


It does! bye bye birdie #3
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egg shell switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Pointed stones dug into Gyarados.
Gyarados lost 25% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE: im gonna warstory this
Gengar used Shadow Ball.
Gyarados lost 18% of its health.
egg shell's Gyarados fainted.
Gengar lost 10% of its health.

Bye bye birdie #4

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egg shell: no problem
egg shell switched in Swampert (lvl 100 Swampert ?).
Pointed stones dug into Swampert.
Swampert lost 6% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE: cool
Gengar used Pain Split.
Gengar restored 47% of its health.
Swampert lost 30% of its health.
Gengar lost 10% of its health.
Swampert used Surf.
The substitute took damage for Gengar!
Gengar's substitute faded!
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.


Im pretty low on health so i pain split. He surfs (?) and breaks my sub.

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Gengar used Shadow Ball.
Swampert lost 45% of its health.
egg shell's Swampert fainted.
Gengar lost 10% of its health.

Bye bye birdie #5
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egg shell switched in Shaymin (lvl 100 Shaymin).
Pointed stones dug into Shaymin.
Shaymin lost 12% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE: gg
egg shell: great game i'll get you next time (no u wont either)
Gengar used Shadow Ball.
Shaymin lost 19% of its health.
egg shell's Shaymin fainted.
BAN SALAMENCE wins!
egg shell has left the room.
familyties has left the room.


Bye bye birdie #6. Gengar, you are amazing, and you have a right to be constantly cheesing (smileing). GG eggy


Props-
~gengar for killing all 6 of his pokemon
~focus blast for actually hitting
~gyrados for almost getting a sweep (stone edge...)
~his gyrados for 1hkoing mine with no rocks

Slops-
~scizor for not sweeping me when he could of
~luke for doing nothing (i have 3 checks ;)
~both shaymins for not doing much
~jirachi for failing to get past swampert


 
Kinda meh as a battle. Nice to see the Gengar sweep, though.

I cringed each time his CB Gyara used that generic Waterfall instead of Stone Edge.... Also Charge Beam+Psychic Cress?

A note: You could have calc'ed to know Gyarados's item earlier, as it did not show lefties/LO and was hitting for 22% after Intimidate.
 
Decent warstory.

Charge Beam / Psychic gets decent coverage, and the STAB boost on Psychic helps.

Stone Miss is such a great move.
 
This was an ok battle, the comments and format were somewhat lacking though. some misplays though like keeping jirachi in on swampert, and heatran on cresellia. I'm also not really a fan of deus ex machina, which was clearly what happened here. 5/10
 
This was an ok battle, the comments and format were somewhat lacking though. some misplays though like keeping jirachi in on swampert, and heatran on cresellia. I'm also not really a fan of deus ex machina, which was clearly what happened here. 5/10
Keeping jirachi in on swampert wasnt a misplay. I was trying to damage it knowing it couldnt 1hko me and wish was gonna heal me next turn anyway. Then i let jirachi take damage in order to heal gyra back to full health because cress was the only counter i'd seen so far. But i admit it was a misplay on his part leaving his only gyra counter in on heatran. And on my part not running calcs for the gyra.

The battle was actually pretty good, but the comments were really lacking. Tons of grammar/spelling mistakes.
Im not a good speller and didnt proofreed. I dont think that took too much away from the warstory though.
 
nice battle. teams are a good example of whats really common on the suspect ladder at the moment. i enjoyed reading it. it would be nice if the leftovers damage was edited out, but other than that i didnt see much wrong with it. idc about grammar/spelling too much because its pretty obvious what he is trying to say. nice job.
 
One of the biggest things that bothered me is that you tell us your move AFTER you made it. Shouldn't you say why you chose your moves and then show us what happened?
 
One of the biggest things that bothered me is that you tell us your move AFTER you made it. Shouldn't you say why you chose your moves and then show us what happened?
Sorry if this is a noob question, but why does it matter?

nice battle. teams are a good example of whats really common on the suspect ladder at the moment. i enjoyed reading it. it would be nice if the leftovers damage was edited out, but other than that i didnt see much wrong with it. idc about grammar/spelling too much because its pretty obvious what he is trying to say. nice job.
Thanks and yeah i kinda posted this prematurely X(
 
I remember this team, I battled you on like my second battle on the ladder, and lost as well. I thought the comments were a bit lacking although it was a good battle. you played well.
 
egg shell: no problem
egg shell switched in Swampert (lvl 100 Swampert ?).
Pointed stones dug into Swampert.
Swampert lost 6% of its health.
BAN SALAMENCE: cool
Gengar used Pain Split.
Gengar restored 47% of its health.
Swampert lost 30% of its health.
Gengar lost 10% of its health.
Swampert used Surf.
The substitute took damage for Gengar!
Gengar's substitute faded!
Swampert's leftovers restored its health a little!
Swampert restored 6% of its health.


Im pretty low on health so i pain split. He surfs (?) and breaks my sub.
This is a prime example of the whole warstory: you left in leftover-recovery, the (irrelevant) chat and just summarized what has happened in your comments. This just doesn't do much for the reader, since I actually just read this very second what was going on.
Might wanna work on that, since I thought the battle was not all too bad.
 
This is a prime example of the whole warstory: you left in leftover-recovery, the (irrelevant) chat and just summarized what has happened in your comments. This just doesn't do much for the reader, since I actually just read this very second what was going on.
Might wanna work on that, since I thought the battle was not all too bad.
Actually i didnt just summarize the whole battle. Some parts i did simply because there wasnt much going on. The chat was minimal and leftover recovery isnt the end of the world. You people are too harsh.
 
Most of it was you just summarising your moves, though. Pretty average warstory, the battle was decent but the comments were lacking. All in all it just didn't have much polish (you left in lefties, chat was irrelevant, you forgot to add damage percentages at the end of each turn).

Also: they weren't being harsh, they were giving you constructive criticism so you can do better on your next warstory. You've gotta be able to take criticism if you're posting a warstory because people expect something truly great.
 

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