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Eine Gestalt lag auf dem Boden
so bösartig, dab die Blumen um sie herum
verwelkten
eine dunkle Seele lag auf dem Boden
so kalt, dab alles Wasser sich in Eis verwabdelte
Ein Schatten fiel über den Wald
als des Gestalts Seele dahinwelkte
denn des gestalts Seele war ein Schatten
ein Schatten der Kräfte des Bösen.
Ok kid, i have tried. You obviously do not know german or old high german or gothic languages. Otherwise you would have cringed by now. Here is what is wrong:
Eine gestalt lag auf dem boden so bösartig: lag auf dem boden is a finished phrase, you are literally saying "xxx lay on the ground eviley" - Edge counter +1
So kalt, dab [...]
Literally everything is irrelevant here. "dab" does not exist. I literally checked a mediveal german archive and a gothic one. That word is not german
In case dab means daß - even that is wrong, dass and daß have a significant phonoligocal difference and are not the same word. Daß is considered a mistake for several years in german now
Lmao, as much as i like Dunkelheit and some other tunes that guy made, everything he does screams "edgy and hackish", i just can't help, varg a talentless hack live with it.