Serperior - Contrary Sweeper QC - 0/2

[Zecronium14]

Contrary Sweeper (Serperior) @ Leftovers
Ability: Contrary
Tera Type: Ground / Fire / Rock
EVs: 4 Def / 252 SpA / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Leaf Storm
- Tera Blast
- Glare
- Substitute / Dragon Pulse


Serperior's good Speed tier and access to Contrary makes it a good late-game cleaner that can overwhelm teams. Terastalizing and using Tera Blast can turn the tables on opposing Pokemon that take little damage from Leaf Storm, such as Volcarona and Heatran. Glare allows Serperior to maintain Speed control and weaken opposing foes to either set up on its own using Leaf Storm, or allow a teammate to set up instead. Glare is also unique in the fact that it can paralyze even Ground types. Substitute is another viable alternative which can be used to force threats such as Dragapult, Darkrai and Iron Valiant to accept paralysis if they want to break Serperior's Substitute, in addition to the benefit of scouting out the opponents moves as well as allowing Serperior to set up safely . Dragon Pulse is a solid coverage option that hits much of the tier for at least neutral damage, and gives Serperior a super-effective option against prevalent Dragon types such as Dragapult and Dragonite. Max Speed is used to outrun a plethora of OU threats and 252 EVs in Special Attack lets Serperior hit as hard as possible. Leftovers gives Serperior extra longevity, and allows it to create more substitutes over the course of a game. Tera Fire Tera Blast can be used to check common OU Pokemon such as Meowscarada, Rillaboom, Weavile, Skarmory and Corviknight, and Tera Rock can be used to check Volcarona and Weavile. Tera Ground Tera Blast allows Serperior to hit the likes of non Air Balloon Gholdengo, Heatran and Raging Bolt for super-effective damage.

Serperior fits best on offensive teams who require some form of Speed control, as well as a versatile cleaner that has sweeping potential. Serperior greatly benefits from offensive hazard setters such as Glimmora and Samurott-H on its side. This allows it to OHKO the likes of Raging Bolt after stealth rock using Tera Ground Tera Blast at +2. Deoxys-S is a good teammate as it can be an extremely fast dual screens setter in addition to its ability to set up hazards, enabling Serperior to set up with ease. Ribombee is also a good teammate as it can set up Sticky Web, enabling Serperior to outspeed all but Heavy-Duty Boots Pokemon and opposing Serperior. Raging Bolt is another good teammate, who overcomes Serperior's weakness in terms of immediate offensive pressure, and appreciates Serperior's ability to pivot in and force out Ground-types. Corviknight also has good synergy with Serperior, as it can check Weavile as well as safely pivot Serperior in with U-turn. Wallbreakers who benefit from speed control such as Raging Bolt, Gouging Fire, and Kyurem appreciate Serperior's ability to paralyze faster threats such as Dragapult, Darkrai, Zamazenta, and Choice Scarf Enamorus. The combination of Kyurem, Serperior and Slowking-G is an excellent core. Slowking-G’s Chilly Reception can be extremely useful against sun, and the rare rain teams, on top of the snow making Kyurem much harder to take out thanks to the Defense boost. Chilly Reception can also be used to get Kyurem and Serperior in safely, and both of them can force out the Ground types that threaten Slowking-G. Furthermore, Serperior’s capability to pivot in and force out physically defensive walls such as Great Tusk, Gliscor, Alomomola, and Dondozo, is quite valued, creating an opportunity for physical wallbreakers like Roaring Moon, Dragonite and Gouging Fire to set up and then potentially sweep. Serperior struggles against Roaring Moon, who can either use it as setup fodder, or just take it out, so a pokemon like Landorus-T is quite a good teammate, as it can switch in, lower Roaring Moon’s Attack with Intimidate, and can U-Turn to pivot. Landorus-T can also set up Stealth Rock. Serperior becomes toast when faced with Kyurem's good coverage and immense power, even more so against Choice Specs Kyurem. Air Balloon Gholdengo can check Choice Specs variants of Kyurem, while also helping to preserve the hazards that Serperior works well with thanks to its ability. Additionally, Iron Valiant is an option that can revenge kill Kyurem, and is a powerful offensive threat in its own right. Weavile is another potent threat to Serperior due to STAB Triple Axel which can OHKO Serperior, even potentially through Substitute, making Kingambit a great teammate choice for Serperior. Kingambit can also take care of many problems for Serperior such as Ninetales-A, and its powerful Sucker Punch can revenge kill a variety of threats. Kingambit is also extremely potent against Galarian Slowking, who is a huge check to Serperior, as it completely walls Serperior barring Tera ground Tera Blast. Corviknight and Skarmory are more checks to non Tera fire Serperior, so teammates like Volcarona are good choices.

 

[autumn]

hey Zecronium14, before I check this, please take a look at the OU Analysis Format thread and make sure your analysis matches the structure listed there. The first sentence should talk about Serperior’s general role in OU, then explain the moves (in set order), then other set details etc to prevent the analysis jumping around between different ideas and being harder to follow.

It should also be two paragraphs, not one, with teammates being in that separate second paragraph.

Please also use the on-site Serperior set for this - we’re not looking into adding Scarf at this time. Marnie edited this into your reservation so make sure your set matches.

we'll just be working with the onsite serperior set ( https://www.smogon.com/dex/sv/pokemon/serperior/ou/ ) for now

If you have any questions, feel free to ask. Setsu sent you an invite to the OU Discord, which is the easiest way to find C&C mods and QC members online to help out, and we can also listen to your suggestions there.

 

[Zecronium14]

hey Zecronium14, before I check this, please take a look at the OU Analysis Format thread and make sure your analysis matches the structure listed there. The first sentence should talk about Serperior’s general role in OU, then explain the moves (in set order), then other set details etc to prevent the analysis jumping around between different ideas and being harder to follow.

It should also be two paragraphs, not one, with teammates being in that separate second paragraph.

Please also use the on-site Serperior set for this - we’re not looking into adding Scarf at this time. Marnie edited this into your reservation so make sure your set matches.


If you have any questions, feel free to ask. Setsu sent you an invite to the OU Discord, which is the easiest way to find C&C mods and QC members online to help out, and we can also listen to your suggestions there.

Thanks, will do

 

[Zecronium14]

hey Zecronium14, before I check this, please take a look at the OU Analysis Format thread and make sure your analysis matches the structure listed there. The first sentence should talk about Serperior’s general role in OU, then explain the moves (in set order), then other set details etc to prevent the analysis jumping around between different ideas and being harder to follow.

It should also be two paragraphs, not one, with teammates being in that separate second paragraph.

Please also use the on-site Serperior set for this - we’re not looking into adding Scarf at this time. Marnie edited this into your reservation so make sure your set matches.


If you have any questions, feel free to ask. Setsu sent you an invite to the OU Discord, which is the easiest way to find C&C mods and QC members online to help out, and we can also listen to your suggestions there.

autumn I made the changes, I'm not sure if there is more to do, or its ready for qc now?

 

[autumn]

autumn I made the changes, I'm not sure if there is more to do, or its ready for qc now?

The set isn’t fully fixed - you’ve added a new EV spread and the and slashing differs slightly. With the set fixed and the paragraph updated to match the new set, it should be QC ready.

If you want to suggest a change, it would be good to explain why something should be considered instead of just changing it. I don’t think over complicating Serp’s EV spread like that provides more benefits than just investing offensively though

 

[Zecronium14]

The set isn’t fully fixed - you’ve added a new EV spread and the and slashing differs slightly. With the set fixed and the paragraph updated to match the new set, it should be QC ready.

If you want to suggest a change, it would be good to explain why something should be considered instead of just changing it. I don’t think over complicating Serp’s EV spread like that provides more benefits than just investing offensively though

Sorry, but im a bit confused. I adjusted the slashing, but is your suggestion just me sticking to 252 4 252?

 

[autumn]

Sorry, but im a bit confused. I adjusted the slashing, but is your suggestion just me sticking to 252 4 252?

The suggestion is to stick entirely to the on-site set with EVs and move slashing, which is here https://www.smogon.com/dex/sv/pokemon/serperior/ou/

 

[Zecronium14]

The suggestion is to stick entirely to the on-site set with EVs and move slashing, which is here https://www.smogon.com/dex/sv/pokemon/serperior/ou/

done

 

[autumn]

This analysis in its current state needs a lot of work and is rejected in its current form. Thse analysis contains a lot of irrelevant information and fluff, and the metagame examples you do use show a lack of understanding of the tier. I'm putting this back into WIP for you to address the comments below and work to improve this. If there isn't significant improvement after this update, this will be reassigned. Feel free to ask us any questions in the OU discord.

Serperior has been a staple in OU ever since Contrary - its hidden ability - was introduced. If a Pokemon with Contrary has a stat raised, it is lowered instead. This, paired with Serperiors excellent base 113 Speed, allows it to be a fearsome sweeper under the right conditions. Leftovers is most commonly used on Serperior for passive healing, which when paired with its decent bulk, good defensive typing, and move choices such as Leech Seed and Substitute, can make it surprisingly difficult to remove from the field. Before Contrary, Serperior had been held back by its measly offenses, but with it, Serperior can easily overcome this by using Leaf Storm, which now instead of lowering its Special Attack by two stages, increases it instead. Paired with decent coverage options in Dragon Pulse, and Tera Blast after terastalizing, Serperior has the potential to absolutely sweep unprepared teams.

None of this is necessary to have - you are writing an analysis on Serperior in the current SV OU metagame only. There is no reason to refer to previous metagames or generations to do this - the fact that it got Contrary in gen 5 and became viable doesn't relate to its role in current SV OU at all. You also focus too much on dex info - this is information about the game that you can find by searching on the dex or on Google for basic info, such as what a move/ability does and what the type chart is. The goal of our analyses is to go above and beyond dex info; we write analyses of a Pokemon's role in our specific metagame, which can't be found elsewhere. There's no reason to explain what Contrary does as a result. The remaining information should be condensed into one or two sentences about the role Serperior plays in OU.

I also directed you to the OU analysis format thread in a previous post - you're still not following it. The format says you need a sentence on the role the Pokemon plays (in current meta, not what it used to do), then you need to talk about coverage moves (no need to explain simple STAB moves like Leaf Storm). Items should not be explained before the moves are, but Leftovers is mentioned as the second sentence overall. This structurally also jumps around a lot - you talk about something, introduce a new idea, then come back to the first thing without it logically following prose-wise. Following the structure below will greatly improve the readability of this analysis.

Paragraph 1
- the role that the Pokemon plays;
- coverage moves that affect its role, there's no need to explain simple STAB moves unless they're slashed;
- a description of the EV spread in one sentence or less; don't focus on "default" things like maximum Attack investment, do give reasoning behind the benchmarks chosen; )items can go here too)
- an explanation of Tera types used and why they're beneficial.

Paragraph 2
- a brief example of teammates that benefit from the analysed Pokemon's presence;
- a brief example of foes that the analysed Pokemon is vulnerable to + teammates to help cover them.

Max Speed is used to outrun other OU threats such as Ogerpon-W, Walking Wake, Iron Treads, Volcarona, and Kyurem. 252 EVs in Special Attack is used to let Serperior hit as hard as possible allowing It to easily OHKO Samurott-H and Ash-Greninja with Leaf Storm even without a boost. With this investment, Tera Ground Tera Blast can OHKO a Heatran after a Leaf Storm boost, and the same boost also lets Serperior get a OHKO on Gholdengo using Tera Fire Tera Blast. Leaf Storm is a 130 BP move that hits extremely hard when used in succession by doubling Serperior's Special Attack each time it is used. Dragon Pulse is a solid coverage option, which hits much of the tier for neutral damage, but Substitute is also a viable alternative. Substitute makes Serperior even more dangerous, allowing it to avoid status and take extra hits, all while setting up by using Leaf Storm. Terastalizing and using Tera Blast can be used to turn the tables on opposing Pokemon looking to take out Serperior, such as Volcarona and Heatran. Glare is used for speed control, and when paired with Serperior's good Speed, allows it to comfortably spread paralysis with 100% accuracy. A Tera Type of Fire can be used to check other common OU Pokemon such as Meowscarada, Rillaboom, Skarmory and Weavile, and Tera Rock can be used to check Volcarona, and other Flying types. Tera Ground can also be used to check Heatran, Iron Hands, and Raging Bolt.

This section also doesn't follow the structured format - you talk about EVs, then a move, then Teras, then more moves. Here are some general notes on this part:

• Ash-Greninja is not in the game.
• As the analysis format post says, we don't need to explain max/max EV spreads; there can be a line on them with useful calcs. but you don't need three sentences justifying why you run 252 Special Attack on your special attacker.
• The Leaf Storm sentence is pure dex info - it can be removed entirely because it's a self-explanatory STAB move. You could mention how it can snowball out of control with relevant OU metagame examples that it can beat with boosts so it goes above and beyond dex info if you want. If you do this, make sure it’s at the start of the analysis as Serperior’s main selling point.
• The Dragon Pulse + Substitute line doesn't actually explain what OU-relevant targets it hits (apart from just neutral damage), and it also doesn't explain what Substitute lets Serperior break through.
• Tera Blast Fire has no mention of Skarmory or Corviknight, which are the main targets for that over Ground. You talk about Tera Fire checking Skarmory but don't directly link that to Tera Blast.
• You say Tera Rock can be used for Volcarona and 'other Flying-types' without giving any examples of them.
• Iron Hands isn't really OU relevant enough to be listed as a target before metagame staples like Raging Bolt.
• There's no mention of Galarian Slowking at all here, which is arguably Serperior's biggest counter.

Serperior benefits greatly from hazard setting teammates such as Glimmora, Gliscor, and Ting Lu, who provide extra chip damage with hazards, and appreciate Serperior's resistances to Grass and Water. Roaring Moon is a great teammate for Serperior who helps in dealing with bulkier Fire and Steel types. Raging Bolt is another good teammate, who overcomes Serperiors weakness in terms of immediate offensive pressure, and appreciates Serperiors ability to take care of Ground types. Wallbreakers benefit from speed control appreciate Serperiors ability to paralyze faster threats such as Dragapult, Darkrai, Zamazenta, and Iron Boulder.

For the teammates paragraph, you should begin by talking about the types of teams Serperior fits on. This way, you can make sure the examples you list also fit on these types of teams. You give three examples of hazard setters - Glimmora fits on hyper offense, while Gliscor and Ting=Lu fit on bulkier teams; Serperior is more of an offensive Pokemon, so make sure to think about whether the examples you're giving match up.

You're also approaching this in a type charty way - you're giving examples purely because they have type advantages/disadvantages and not because of any other offensive synergy. This leans into dex info too - "Serperior resists Water so it can pair well with Glimmora" is essentially saying "Ground is weak to Water" which is dex info because we assume readers know the type chart. In reality, Glimmora is mostly a lead and won't need Serperior's Water resistance in a game because it would have fainted already. Similarly, saying Roaring Moon can break Fire- and Steel-types doesn't do much in practice when Moon is a Pokemon that can only really come in once because of Booster and is a sweeper itself. There are also no metagame examples of Fire- and Steel-types, so the point is entirely type chart with no link to SV OU. These are good partners, but the reasoning for why they work is more nuanced than types.

Instead, you want to look at teamamtes with roles that can be played; the wallbreakers point is good because it's a general role that has offensive synergy - you need to give examples of wallbreakers that pair well though.

Tera Flying Roaring Moon, Gouging Fire, Blaziken, Ceruledge and Kyurem are all threats to Serperior. Tera Flying Roaring Moon demolishes Serperior with Acrobatics, and can also set up for free before terastalizing, as Serperior has no way of dishing out good damage against it, even with Dragon Pulse. Gouging Fire can take hits from Serperior extremely well, and can set up against it. Speed Boost Blaziken is one of the tiers most dangerous Pokemon, and it can Swords Dance against Serperior and take it out subsequently. Ceruledge's healing through Bitter Blade proves problematic for Serperior, who additionally becomes toast when faced with Kyurem's excellent coverage and immense power, especially with Choice Specs, proving counters such as Iron Valiant and strong Water types like Primarina to be excellent teammates.

This part is structured weirdly - the analysis format looks for an example of a Pokemon Serperior struggles with + a teammate that can beat it for each point, not combined. Instead of listing multiple things that Serperior loses to + two semi-linked teammates right at the end, it should be "Serperior struggles with Roaring Moon because x, y, z, so a teammate like (example) can help because a, b c" for each point, with different wording of course.

Some of these threats are also not OU relevant - Speed Boost Blaziken isn't one of the tier's most dangerous Pokemon at all; it's UUBL. Creuledge is also UUBL and not relevant right now. Iron Valiant also isn't a Kyurem counter - it can switch into Draco but it dies to Ice beam, which is what it will be clicking 99% of the time. It can offensively check Kyurem and force it out because it's faster, but that's not a counter.

The teammates section also needs Galarian Slowking to be mentioned - Serperior cannot break this Pokemon without boosted Tera Ground, and it's a very common OU staple.

 

[Zecronium14]

Thank you so much for the detailed feedback! I'll work on the changes and get back to you soon!

 

[Sp0oN1oRd]

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This is better than before but still needs a lot of changes, make sure that things we discuss in the discord make it into the changes next time.
Not stamping yet, implement these changes and tag me. I will read over it again.

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Contrary Sweeper (Serperior) @ Leftovers
Ability: Contrary
Tera Type: Ground / Fire / Rock
EVs: 4 Def / 252 SpA / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Leaf Storm
- Tera Blast
- Glare
- Substitute / Dragon Pulse (Slash order matters, follow the dex exactly.)

Serperior's good Speed tier and access to Contrary makes it a good late-game cleaner that can overwhelm unprepared teams (I don't like saying overwhelm unprepared teams. You want to build to beat good teams not flawed ones, any mon can win if the opponent doesn't have an answer.). Terastalizing and using Tera Blast can turn the tables on opposing Pokemon looking to take Serperior out that take little damage from Leaf Storm, such as Volcarona and Heatran. Glare allows Serperior to maintain Speed control and weaken opposing foes to either set up on its own using Leaf Storm, or allow a teammate to set up instead. Dragon Pulse is a solid coverage option that hits much of the tier for at least neutral damage, and gives Serperior a super-effective option against prevalent Dragon types such as Dragapult and Dragonite. Substitute is another viable alternative which can be used to force threats such as Zamazenta and Cinderace (Zamazenta doesn't like coming in vs serp in general and serp can pretty safely glare it 1v1 without needing a sub, ace can uturn on it to break the sub without risking glare so that is also a somewhat sketchy example. Also swap the order so it's in line with the dex set, list sub first then dpulse as an option in the next sentence.) to accept paralysis if they want to break Serperior's Substitute, in addition to the benefit of scouting out the opponents moves as well as allowing Serperior to set up safely . Max Speed is used to outrun a plethora of other OU threats such as Ogerpon-W, Walking Wake, Iron Treads, Volcarona, and Kyurem, and 252 EVs in Special Attack is used to let Serperior hit as hard as possible, allowing it to easily OHKO the likes Samurott-H, Alomomola and Great Tusk (EVs are just max max, that sentence can be shortened.). Leftovers is used for passive recovery and it gives Serperior extra longevity, and allows it to create more substitutes over the course of a game. Tera Fire Tera Blast can be used to check other common OU Pokemon such as Meowscarada, Rillaboom, Weavile, Skarmory and Corviknight, and Tera Rock can be used to check Volcarona and Weavile. Tera Ground makes Serperior immune to paralysis, retaining Speed Control, and can also be used to check the likes of non Air Balloon Gholdengo, Heatran and Raging Bolt. (Ground type does not equal paralysis immunity, that's half the appeal of glare serp in the first place. It's only thunder wave immunity and that really isn't common enough on serp's answers to list. I would also reword the last half, even with tera ground it can lose to those pretty easily. It doesn't OHKO them unboosted meaning it moreso removes them as a defensive answer than checks them.)

Serperior fits best on balance or (Serp is rarely on balance and the sets explored there are normally different from this one, using stuff like synth and/or knock.) offensive teams who require some form of Speed control, as well as a versatile cleaner that has decent coverage and (Serp's weakness is coverage that's why it's a tera hog, grass/dragon is walled by everything.) sweeping potential. Serperior greatly benefits from offensive hazard setters such as Glimmora and Samurott-H on its side, which allows it to OHKO the likes of Iron Boulder after a round or two of Stealth Rock chip (If you're going to list an example, be precise. If it takes 2 hazards to secure the OHKO, say that. Also don't mention multiple rounds of hazards for mons that run booster energy. They generally will only switch in once because without booster they are much weaker.). Deoxys-S is a good teammate as it can be an extremely fast dual screens setter, enabling Serperior to set up with ease. Deoxys-S can also set hazards while bypassing Hatterene’s Magic Bounce with Skill Swap, and can use its newfound ability to keep Serperior’s side of the field free from hazards. (The second magic bounce interaction is very niche and hazard lead deos is generally outclassed by the other hazard leads anyway. If you really want to mention hazards deos just say that deos can also support serp with hazards, don't focus on magic bounce.) Raging Bolt is another good teammate, who overcomes Serperior's weakness in terms of immediate offensive pressure, and appreciates its ability to take care of Ground types such as Great Tusk Serperior's ability to pivot in and force out Ground-types. Corviknight can also has have good synergy with Serperior, as it can check Weavile as well as easily switch into to Slowking-G and it can (gking gets free future sight and slow pivot vs corv, and can carry flamethrower which hurts and is also a midground to hit serp and corv. Corv also doesn't threaten gking at all.) safely pivot Serperior in with U-turn. Wallbreakers who benefit from speed control such as Dragonite, Choice Specs Walking Wake, (Dragonite is a cleaner unless it's something like choice band which is fringe, and specs wake is primary on sun teams that serp doesn't fit on.) Gouging Fire, and Kyurem appreciate Serperior's ability to paralyze faster threats such as Dragapult, Darkrai, Zamazenta, and Choice Scarf Enamorus. Walking Wake in particular also appreciates Serperior's ability to outspeed and take out Assault Vest Primarina, though Serperior cannot safely switch into Primarina’s Moonblast. Galarian Slowking can help in this regard, absorbing Primarina's attacks with ease, and using a slow Chilly Reception to allow a safe Serperior switch in. (Both because of the wake being a sun mon thing and primarina being weak to serp, these examples don't fit. Pick better gking examples, it's a good partner but not because of wake + gking vs prima.) Furthermore, Serperior’s capability to take out physically defensive walls such as Great Tusk, Gliscor, Alomomola, Dondozo and Ting Lu, is quite valued, clearing the way for physical wallbreakers like Roaring Moon, Dragonite and Gouging Fire to sweep. (Why would these pokemon ever stay in vs serp? It's not going to remove them unless you've already removed the serp answers in which case serp is in position to win by itself anyway.) Serperior struggles against Roaring Moon, who can either use it as setup fodder, or just take it out, so checks like Dragonite and Choice Scarf Meowscarada (Scarf meow is making a team with 2 fast frail hazard weak grasses. Bad teammate. Dragonite is also a somewhat shaky moon check. Change these.) are valuable allies. Adding on, Serperior becomes toast when faced with Kyurem's good coverage and immense power, especially with Choice Specs, making Blissey a potential teammate option to help take care of Kyurem, Darkrai, and, on non Tera Rock variants of Serperior, Volcarona as well (A bit of odd wording at the start, simplify that kind of thing. As we discussed a few days ago, bliss does not fit on serp teams. Don't mention it. Use the examples we talked about.). Air Balloon Gholdengo can also be a solution to check Choice Specs variants of Kyurem, while also helping to preserve the hazards that Serperior works well with. Additionally, Kingambit is a very common option who can revenge kill Kyurem (Gambit is quite shaky vs kyurem, it doesn't OHKO with sucker and takes a lot from earth power. Good partner for serp regardless, but I would use different examples.), and is a powerful offensive threat in its own right. Kingambit is also extremely potent against Galarian Slowking, who is a huge check to Serperior, as it walls Serperior completely barring Tera ground Tera Blast. resists Serperior’s moves, has a super-effective move in Sludge Wave that 2HKOs Serperior, and is also able to use Chilly Reception to safely bring in offensive threats like Kyurem (Not nessesary information). Weavile, as previously mentioned, is another potent threat to Serperior due to the combination its offensive prowess and deadly speed of STAB Triple Axel which can OHKO Serperior, even potentially through Substitute, making Rocky Helmet Skarmory a great teammate choice for Serperior (Skarmory also doesn't fit on serp teams well, it fits on bulkier styles. Different example of weavile answers). Corviknight and Skarmory are more checks to non Tera fire Serperior, so teammates like Volcarona are excellent choices.

Think more about teammates and again look at usage stats and teams. Serperior is often on webs, mention that it works well with ribombee on webs HO. Aim for more HO teammates that appreciate the para support and can set up freely vs serp checks. Don't overexplain things or add information that's really more about a different pokemon unless it's relevant specifically in an interaction with serperior.

When you take an analysis, be sure that you have a lot of experience with the pokemon and a firm understanding of its place in the meta and the teams that it fits on. I appreciate the enthusiasm and you have some good points here, but the teammates are lacking and those are very important for the purpose of the analysis, helping people to fit the pokemon on teams that can use it effectively.

 

[Zecronium14]

Thanks, will do!

 

[Zecronium14]

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This is better than before but still needs a lot of changes, make sure that things we discuss in the discord make it into the changes next time.
Not stamping yet, implement these changes and tag me. I will read over it again.

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Contrary Sweeper (Serperior) @ Leftovers
Ability: Contrary
Tera Type: Ground / Fire / Rock
EVs: 4 Def / 252 SpA / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Leaf Storm
- Tera Blast
- Glare
- Substitute / Dragon Pulse (Slash order matters, follow the dex exactly.)

Serperior's good Speed tier and access to Contrary makes it a good late-game cleaner that can overwhelm unprepared teams (I don't like saying overwhelm unprepared teams. You want to build to beat good teams not flawed ones, any mon can win if the opponent doesn't have an answer.). Terastalizing and using Tera Blast can turn the tables on opposing Pokemon looking to take Serperior out that take little damage from Leaf Storm, such as Volcarona and Heatran. Glare allows Serperior to maintain Speed control and weaken opposing foes to either set up on its own using Leaf Storm, or allow a teammate to set up instead. Dragon Pulse is a solid coverage option that hits much of the tier for at least neutral damage, and gives Serperior a super-effective option against prevalent Dragon types such as Dragapult and Dragonite. Substitute is another viable alternative which can be used to force threats such as Zamazenta and Cinderace (Zamazenta doesn't like coming in vs serp in general and serp can pretty safely glare it 1v1 without needing a sub, ace can uturn on it to break the sub without risking glare so that is also a somewhat sketchy example. Also swap the order so it's in line with the dex set, list sub first then dpulse as an option in the next sentence.) to accept paralysis if they want to break Serperior's Substitute, in addition to the benefit of scouting out the opponents moves as well as allowing Serperior to set up safely . Max Speed is used to outrun a plethora of other OU threats such as Ogerpon-W, Walking Wake, Iron Treads, Volcarona, and Kyurem, and 252 EVs in Special Attack is used to let Serperior hit as hard as possible, allowing it to easily OHKO the likes Samurott-H, Alomomola and Great Tusk (EVs are just max max, that sentence can be shortened.). Leftovers is used for passive recovery and it gives Serperior extra longevity, and allows it to create more substitutes over the course of a game. Tera Fire Tera Blast can be used to check other common OU Pokemon such as Meowscarada, Rillaboom, Weavile, Skarmory and Corviknight, and Tera Rock can be used to check Volcarona and Weavile. Tera Ground makes Serperior immune to paralysis, retaining Speed Control, and can also be used to check the likes of non Air Balloon Gholdengo, Heatran and Raging Bolt. (Ground type does not equal paralysis immunity, that's half the appeal of glare serp in the first place. It's only thunder wave immunity and that really isn't common enough on serp's answers to list. I would also reword the last half, even with tera ground it can lose to those pretty easily. It doesn't OHKO them unboosted meaning it moreso removes them as a defensive answer than checks them.)

Serperior fits best on balance or (Serp is rarely on balance and the sets explored there are normally different from this one, using stuff like synth and/or knock.) offensive teams who require some form of Speed control, as well as a versatile cleaner that has decent coverage and (Serp's weakness is coverage that's why it's a tera hog, grass/dragon is walled by everything.) sweeping potential. Serperior greatly benefits from offensive hazard setters such as Glimmora and Samurott-H on its side, which allows it to OHKO the likes of Iron Boulder after a round or two of Stealth Rock chip (If you're going to list an example, be precise. If it takes 2 hazards to secure the OHKO, say that. Also don't mention multiple rounds of hazards for mons that run booster energy. They generally will only switch in once because without booster they are much weaker.). Deoxys-S is a good teammate as it can be an extremely fast dual screens setter, enabling Serperior to set up with ease. Deoxys-S can also set hazards while bypassing Hatterene’s Magic Bounce with Skill Swap, and can use its newfound ability to keep Serperior’s side of the field free from hazards. (The second magic bounce interaction is very niche and hazard lead deos is generally outclassed by the other hazard leads anyway. If you really want to mention hazards deos just say that deos can also support serp with hazards, don't focus on magic bounce.) Raging Bolt is another good teammate, who overcomes Serperior's weakness in terms of immediate offensive pressure, and appreciates its ability to take care of Ground types such as Great Tusk Serperior's ability to pivot in and force out Ground-types. Corviknight can also has have good synergy with Serperior, as it can check Weavile as well as easily switch into to Slowking-G and it can (gking gets free future sight and slow pivot vs corv, and can carry flamethrower which hurts and is also a midground to hit serp and corv. Corv also doesn't threaten gking at all.) safely pivot Serperior in with U-turn. Wallbreakers who benefit from speed control such as Dragonite, Choice Specs Walking Wake, (Dragonite is a cleaner unless it's something like choice band which is fringe, and specs wake is primary on sun teams that serp doesn't fit on.) Gouging Fire, and Kyurem appreciate Serperior's ability to paralyze faster threats such as Dragapult, Darkrai, Zamazenta, and Choice Scarf Enamorus. Walking Wake in particular also appreciates Serperior's ability to outspeed and take out Assault Vest Primarina, though Serperior cannot safely switch into Primarina’s Moonblast. Galarian Slowking can help in this regard, absorbing Primarina's attacks with ease, and using a slow Chilly Reception to allow a safe Serperior switch in. (Both because of the wake being a sun mon thing and primarina being weak to serp, these examples don't fit. Pick better gking examples, it's a good partner but not because of wake + gking vs prima.) Furthermore, Serperior’s capability to take out physically defensive walls such as Great Tusk, Gliscor, Alomomola, Dondozo and Ting Lu, is quite valued, clearing the way for physical wallbreakers like Roaring Moon, Dragonite and Gouging Fire to sweep. (Why would these pokemon ever stay in vs serp? It's not going to remove them unless you've already removed the serp answers in which case serp is in position to win by itself anyway.) Serperior struggles against Roaring Moon, who can either use it as setup fodder, or just take it out, so checks like Dragonite and Choice Scarf Meowscarada (Scarf meow is making a team with 2 fast frail hazard weak grasses. Bad teammate. Dragonite is also a somewhat shaky moon check. Change these.) are valuable allies. Adding on, Serperior becomes toast when faced with Kyurem's good coverage and immense power, especially with Choice Specs, making Blissey a potential teammate option to help take care of Kyurem, Darkrai, and, on non Tera Rock variants of Serperior, Volcarona as well (A bit of odd wording at the start, simplify that kind of thing. As we discussed a few days ago, bliss does not fit on serp teams. Don't mention it. Use the examples we talked about.). Air Balloon Gholdengo can also be a solution to check Choice Specs variants of Kyurem, while also helping to preserve the hazards that Serperior works well with. Additionally, Kingambit is a very common option who can revenge kill Kyurem (Gambit is quite shaky vs kyurem, it doesn't OHKO with sucker and takes a lot from earth power. Good partner for serp regardless, but I would use different examples.), and is a powerful offensive threat in its own right. Kingambit is also extremely potent against Galarian Slowking, who is a huge check to Serperior, as it walls Serperior completely barring Tera ground Tera Blast. resists Serperior’s moves, has a super-effective move in Sludge Wave that 2HKOs Serperior, and is also able to use Chilly Reception to safely bring in offensive threats like Kyurem (Not nessesary information). Weavile, as previously mentioned, is another potent threat to Serperior due to the combination its offensive prowess and deadly speed of STAB Triple Axel which can OHKO Serperior, even potentially through Substitute, making Rocky Helmet Skarmory a great teammate choice for Serperior (Skarmory also doesn't fit on serp teams well, it fits on bulkier styles. Different example of weavile answers). Corviknight and Skarmory are more checks to non Tera fire Serperior, so teammates like Volcarona are excellent choices.

Think more about teammates and again look at usage stats and teams. Serperior is often on webs, mention that it works well with ribombee on webs HO. Aim for more HO teammates that appreciate the para support and can set up freely vs serp checks. Don't overexplain things or add information that's really more about a different pokemon unless it's relevant specifically in an interaction with serperior.

When you take an analysis, be sure that you have a lot of experience with the pokemon and a firm understanding of its place in the meta and the teams that it fits on. I appreciate the enthusiasm and you have some good points here, but the teammates are lacking and those are very important for the purpose of the analysis, helping people to fit the pokemon on teams that can use it effectively.

Sp0oN1oRd I think im done

 

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Hey, this analysis still has significant issues after many attempts to improve it. We really appreciate the effort, but this is not the high quality we expect for analysis on site. We are reassigning this to ensure a quality analysis. The examples chosen are not sufficient and do not show a full knowledge of the metagame. Analysis writers are expected to understand teammates and weaknesses of the pokemon in question without being given them. In this example, you did not accurately explain why pokemon like lando are good teammates. The format is also important, the analysis truly needs to focus on exactly what a pokemon does, where it should be used, and what it should be used with. If you work to understand the meta more thoroughly and improve as a writer, feel free to attempt another analysis at a later point in time.