Copyediting Hearthflame Ogerponpon [GP 0/1]

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[SET]
Cudgel Bonk (Ogerpon-Hearthflame) @ Hearthflame Mask
Jolly Nature
Tera Type: Fire
Ability: Mold Breaker
EVs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe
- Ivy Cudgel
- Wood Hammer / Horn Leech
- Follow Me / Focus Energy
- Spiky Shield

[SET COMMENTS]
- Ogerpon-H uses Wood Hammer to deal huge damage, allowing it to OHKO Diancie and both Ursaluna formes. Horn Leech can be used instead to increase its longevity at the cost of dealing a lot less damage.
- Ogerpon-H provides redirection, allowing its allies to set up or position safely. Ogerpon-H is particularly good at redirecting Spore from Amoonguss due to its immunity.
- Focus Energy can be run over Follow Me to increase Ogerpon-H's offensive prowess. This allows Ivy Cudgel to always be a critical hit, letting Ogerpon-H ignore Attack drops from Incineroar's Intimidate and damage reduction from Alolan Ninetales's Aurora Veil.
- When Ogerpon-H Terastallizes, Embody Aspect enables it to easily threaten Kyurem in snow through Aurora Veil with Ivy Cudgel, and it loses its weakness to Sludge Bomb from Landorus and Bleakwind Storm from Tornadus. Ogerpon-H is capable of OHKOing Landorus and 2HKOing Iron Hands and Cresselia with Ivy Cudgel thanks to Terastallization.
- Ogerpon-H is primarily used as an offensive threat, capable of OHKOing prominent offensive and support Pokemon, such as Gholdengo, Rillaboom, Amoonguss, and Sinistcha.
- Ogerpon-H synergizes well with Chien-Pao, since it can easily threaten Landorus and Tornadus, which Ogerpon-H is offensively threatened by due to their strong STAB move. Ogerpon-H threatens Steel-types Chien-Pao struggles against such as Gholdengo and Kingambit.
- Ground-types such as Landorus and Ursaluna-B greatly appreciate Ogerpon-H's ability to threaten Rillaboom, which threatens both with its potent Wood Hammer and Grassy Glide. Meanwhile, (AC) both can easily dispatch Raging Bolt, (AC) which Ogerpon-H struggles against.
- Dragon-type partners, (AC) such as Raging Bolt and Regidrago, (AC) appreciate Ogerpon-H KOing threats like Chien-Pao and Alolan Ninetales as well as common redirectors like Amoonguss and Sinistcha. Ogerpon-H's redirection utility additionally allows Raging Bolt to easily set up with Calm Mind. In return, Raging Bolt can easily dispatch Ogerpon-W, opposing Raging Bolt, and Roaring Moon, which threaten Ogerpon-H and are tricky for it to defeat. Meanwhile, Regidrago's Dragon Energy can remove Dragon-types that Ogerpon-H struggles to damage.
- Ogerpon-H supports Steel-types like Gholdengo and Kingambit exceptionally well. Ogerpon-H threatens opposing Steel-types its teammates struggle to damage as well as Ground-types that threaten them like the Ursaluna formes. In return, Gholdengo provides a strong special offensive presence to complement Ogerpon-H's physical offense, and Kingambit dissuades Intimidate cycling from Incineroar thanks to Defiant.
- Ogerpon-H works very well on a core of Gholdengo, Tornadus,and Regidrago, taking advantage of their offensive coverage and Tailwind support as well as providing its own offensive coverage as well as redirection.

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[SET]
Cudgel Bonk (Ogerpon-Hearthflame) @ Hearthflame Mask
Level: 100
Jolly Nature
Tera Type: Fire
Ability: Mold Breaker
EVs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe
- Ivy Cudgel
- Wood Hammer / Horn Leech
- Follow Me / Focus Energy
- Spiky Shield

[SET COMMENTS]
- Ogerpon-H uses Wood Hammer to deal huge damage allowing it to OHKO Diancie and Ursaluna formes, meanwhile Horn Leech can be used instead to provide healing at the cost of dealing a lot less damage. Would add something about Horn Leech being used to increase longevity, rather than just healing.
- Focus Energy can be opted over Follow Me becoming a more offensive set. This allows Ivy Cudgel to always be a critical hit, letting Ogerpon-H ignore attack drops from Incineroar's Intimidate and damage reduction from Alolan Ninetales's Aurora Veil.
- When Ogerpon-H Terastallizes, it can easily threaten Kyurem in snow through Aurora Veil with Ivy Cudgel and it removes its weakness to Sludge Bomb from Landorus and Bleakwind Storm from Tornadus. Add a sentence in here about how with tera it can ohko Landorus, and 2hko Iron hands and cresselia
- Ogerpon-H is used as an offensive threat capable of OHKOing other offensive threats like Chien-Pao, Gholdengo, and Rillaboom. and Ogerpon-H threats threatens to OHKO top tier supports such as Amoonguss and Sinistcha.
- Ogerpon-H threatens to OHKO prominent offensive and support Pokemon, such as Chien-Pao, Gholdengo, Rillaboom, Amoonguss, and Sinistcha. Just reworded this to make it flow a little easier.
- Ogerpon-H is also capable of providing redirection allowing its allies to set up or position safely. Ogerpon-H is particularly good at checking redirecting Spore from Amoonguss since it can redirect Spore while not being affected by it due to type immunity.
- Ogerpon-H synergises well with Chien-Pao, since it can easily threaten Landorus and Tornadus, which Ogerpon-H has trouble removing before it is KOed by them is offensively threatened by due to their strong STABs. Ogerpon-H threatens Steel-types Chien-Pao struggles against such as Gholdengo and Kingambit.
- Raging Bolt appreciates Ogerpon-H's support since it is capable of KOing threats like Chien-Pao and Alolan Ninetales as well as nuisances common redirectors like Amoonguss and Sinistcha. Ogerpon-H's redirection additionally allows Raging Bolt to easily set up with Calm Mind. In return, Raging Bolt can easily dispatch Ogerpon-W, opposing Raging Bolts, and Roaring Moon who threaten and are tricky for Ogerpon-H to defeat.
- Add a sentence here about how it is often paired with Gholdengo, Tornadus, and Regidrago due to their STAB combos synergizing well, as this is one of the more present cores in the format.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/rausakura.589964/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/user2.102/
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Grammar checked by:
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Good ideas, just needs a few more details here and there :) ping me for a recheck when done
 
- Ogerpon-H uses Wood Hammer to deal huge damage allowing it to OHKO Diancie and both Ursaluna formes, meanwhile Horn Leech can be used instead to increase its longevity when facing Iron Hands No need to mention Iron Hands specifically here at the cost of dealing a lot less damage.
- Focus Energy can be opted over Follow Me becoming a more offensive set. This allows Ivy Cudgel to always be a critical hit, letting Ogerpon-H ignore attack drops from Incineroar's Intimidate and damage reduction from Alolan Ninetales's Aurora Veil.
- When Ogerpon-H Terastallizes, it can easily threaten Kyurem in snow through Aurora Veil with Ivy Cudgel and it removes its weakness to Sludge Bomb from Landorus and Bleakwind Storm from Tornadus. Ogerpon-H is capable of OHKOing Landorus and 2HKOing Iron Hands and Cresselia with Ivy Cudgel thanks to Tera. Mention the Ability giving Ogerpon an additional multiplicative boost (it's essentially an extra band)
- Ogerpon-H threatens to OHKO prominent offensive and support Pokemon, such as Chien-Pao, Gholdengo, Rillaboom, Amoonguss, and Sinistcha. Chien Pao basically always runs Focus Sash -- this is a fairly big list and I'd recommend focusing on on bulky Pokemon that are difficult for other Pokemon to KO, and what makes Ogerpon-Hearthflame stand out.
- Ogerpon-H is also capable of providing redirection allowing its allies to set up or position safely. Ogerpon-H is particularly good at redirecting Spore from Amoonguss due to type immunity.
- Ogerpon-H synergises well with Chien-Pao, since it can easily threaten Landorus and Tornadus, which Ogerpon-H is offensively threatened by due to their strong STABs. Ogerpon-H threatens Steel-types Chien-Pao struggles against such as Gholdengo and Kingambit. Chien Pao usually runs a Dark move. Additionally, mention that Ogerpon wants to maximize the damage that it does with Ivy Cudgel and that Pao in conjunction with the Ogerpon allows it to get OHKOs on neutral targets (Iron Hands is likely the most notable example, but there's several other cases -- chunking stuff with Heathflame tera + Pao also provides greater freedom to spam Ivy Cudgel since it KOs stuff like Ting Lu on the switch in.)
- Raging Bolt appreciates Ogerpon-H's support since it is capable of KOing threats like Chien-Pao and Alolan Ninetales as well as common redirectors like Amoonguss and Sinistcha. Ogerpon-H's redirection additionally allows Raging Bolt to easily set up with Calm Mind. In return, Raging Bolt can easily dispatch Ogerpon-W, opposing Raging Bolts, and Roaring Moon who threaten and are tricky for Ogerpon-H to defeat.
- Ogerpon-H supports the core of Gholdengo, Tornadus, and Regidrago exceptionally well. Ogerpon-H threatens Steel-types the trio struggle to sufficiently damage like Kingambit and Ogerpon-H pressures Alolan Ninetales which easily threatens Tornadus and Regidrago. In turn, Regidrago threatens Dragon-types like Raging Bolt and Gholdengo can threaten Glimmora while Tornadus provides Tailwind support. (Teammates could be reformatted somewhat -- it might be a good idea to combine Pokemon that have similar benefits to Ogerpon-H, since they provide similar benefits to Ogerpon-H, and mention the core at the end.)

Additionally, I would reorder these to match the set order, and merge and reword some of these. Ping me when you're ready for a recheck, wanted to post this initial check beforehand.
 
- Dragon-type partners such as Raging Bolt and Regidrago appreciate Ogerpon-H KOing threats like Chien-Pao and Alolan Ninetales as well as common redirectors like Amoonguss and Sinistcha particularly for Raging Bolt. Ogerpon-H's redirection additionally allows Raging Bolt to easily set up with Calm Mind. In return, Raging Bolt can easily dispatch Ogerpon-W, opposing Raging Bolts, and Roaring Moon who threaten and are tricky for Ogerpon-H to defeat. Meanwhile, Regidrago's Dragon Energy can dispatch opposing Dragon-types that Ogerpon-H struggles to damage with Dragon Energy. (Good changes, just moving some stuff around to clear up repetition and ambiguity)
- Ogerpon-H supports Steel-types like Gholdengo and Kingambit exceptionally well. Ogerpon-H threatens opposing Steel-types they struggle to damage as well as Ground-types that threaten them like the Ursaluna formes. In return Gholdengo provide a strong special offensive presence to compliment Ogerpon'H's physical offense and Kingambit dissuades Intimidate cycling from Incineroar thanks to Defiant.
- Ogerpon-H works very well on a core of Gholdengo, Tornadus and Regidrago, taking advantage of their offensive coverage, Tailwind support, and providing its own offensive coverage as well as redirection.

I think these changes are all that's needed, just make these changes and you're good for 2/2.
 
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[SET]
Cudgel Bonk (Ogerpon-Hearthflame) @ Hearthflame Mask
Level: 100
Jolly Nature
Tera Type: Fire
Ability: Mold Breaker
EVs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe
- Ivy Cudgel
- Wood Hammer / Horn Leech
- Follow Me / Focus Energy
- Spiky Shield

[SET COMMENTS]
- Ogerpon-H uses Wood Hammer to deal huge damage, (AC) allowing it to OHKO Diancie and both Ursaluna formes. Meanwhile, meanwhile Horn Leech can be used instead to increase its longevity at the cost of dealing a lot less damage.
- Focus Energy can be opted run over Follow Me becoming a more to increase Ogerpon-H's offensive set prowess. This allows Ivy Cudgel to always be a critical hit, letting Ogerpon-H ignore Attack drops from Incineroar's Intimidate and damage reduction from Alolan Ninetales's Aurora Veil.
- When Ogerpon-H Terastallizes, Embody Aspect provides it with a multiplicative damage boost so it can easily threaten Kyurem in snow through Aurora Veil with Ivy Cudgel, (AC) and it removes its weakness to Sludge Bomb from Landorus and Bleakwind Storm from Tornadus. Ogerpon-H is capable of OHKOing Landorus and 2HKOing Iron Hands and Cresselia with Ivy Cudgel thanks to Tera Terastallization.
- Ogerpon-H threatens to OHKO prominent offensive and support Pokemon, such as Gholdengo, Rillaboom, Amoonguss, and Sinistcha.
- Ogerpon-H is also capable of providing redirection, (AC) allowing its allies to set up or position safely. Ogerpon-H is particularly good at redirecting Spore from Amoonguss due to its type immunity.
- Ogerpon-H synergises synergizes well with Chien-Pao, since it can easily threaten Landorus and Tornadus, which Ogerpon-H is offensively threatened by due to their strong STABs STAB move. Ogerpon-H threatens Steel-types Chien-Pao struggles against such as Gholdengo and Kingambit.
- Ground-types such as Landorus and Ursaluna-B greatly appreciate Ogerpon-H threatening Ogerpon-H's ability to threaten Rillaboom, which threatens who threat both with its potent Wood Hammer and Grassy Glide. Meanwhile, (AC) both can easily dispatch Raging Bolt, (AC) which Ogerpon-H struggles to threaten against.
- Dragon-type partners, (AC) such as Raging Bolt and Regidrago, (AC) appreciate Ogerpon-H KOing threats like Chien-Pao and Alolan Ninetales, (AC) as well as common redirectors like Amoonguss and Sinistcha. Ogerpon-H's redirection utility additionally allows Raging Bolt to easily set up with Calm Mind. In return, Raging Bolt can easily dispatch Ogerpon-W, opposing Raging Bolts Bolt, and Roaring Moon, which who threaten and are tricky for Ogerpon-H to defeat. Meanwhile, Regidrago's Dragon Energy can dispatch opposing Dragon-types that Ogerpon-H struggles to damage.
- Ogerpon-H supports Steel-types like Gholdengo and Kingambit exceptionally well. Ogerpon-H threatens opposing Steel-types they its teammates struggle to damage, (AC) as well as Ground-types that threaten them like the Ursaluna formes. In return Gholdengo provide provides a strong special offensive presence to compliment Ogerpon'H's Ogerpon-H's physical offense, (AC) and Kingambit dissuades Intimidate cycling from Incineroar thanks to Defiant.
- Ogerpon-H works very well on a core of Gholdengo, Tornadus and Regidrago, taking advantage of their offensive coverage, Tailwind support, and providing its own offensive coverage as well as redirection.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/rausakura.589964/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/logice.617069/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/user3.103/
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/user4.104/
 
Let me know when this is implemented, and I'll check over any added sentences. Add credit for both me and Lunaflare

The order of moves in the paragraph needs to follow the order of moves on the set so a reader can find the information they need.
[SET]
Cudgel Bonk (Ogerpon-Hearthflame) @ Hearthflame Mask
Level: 100
Jolly Nature
Tera Type: Fire
Ability: Mold Breaker
EVs: 4 HP / 252 Atk / 252 Spe
- Ivy Cudgel
- Wood Hammer / Horn Leech
- Follow Me / Focus Energy
- Spiky Shield

[SET COMMENTS]
- Ogerpon-H uses Wood Hammer to deal huge damage, (AC) allowing it to OHKO Diancie and both Ursaluna formes. (AP) meanwhile Horn Leech can be used instead to increase its longevity at the cost of dealing a lot less damage.
- you need to add a point about wood hammer vs horn leech here - the moves are slashed so you need to explain why you'd choose one over the other
- Focus Energy can be opted run over Follow Me becoming a more to increase Ogerpon-H's offensive set prowess. This allows Ivy Cudgel to always be a critical hit, letting Ogerpon-H ignore Attack drops from Incineroar's Intimidate and damage reduction from Alolan Ninetales's Aurora Veil.
- When Ogerpon-H Terastallizes, Embody Aspect provides it with a multiplicative damage boost so it can enables it to (dex info) easily threaten Kyurem in snow through Aurora Veil with Ivy Cudgel, (AC) and it removes loses its weakness to Sludge Bomb from Landorus and Bleakwind Storm from Tornadus. Ogerpon-H is capable of OHKOing Landorus and 2HKOing Iron Hands and Cresselia with Ivy Cudgel thanks to Tera Terastallization.
- Ogerpon-H threatens to OHKO prominent offensive and support Pokemon, such as Gholdengo, Rillaboom, Amoonguss, and Sinistcha. (this point doesn't really add anything on its own. is it a summary point? if so, it makes more sense at the top/where you talk about cudgel. is it a point about tera? if so, that should be made clearer / this should be brought into that one point)
- Ogerpon-H is also capable of providing redirection, (AC) allowing its allies to set up or position safely. Ogerpon-H is particularly good at redirecting Spore from Amoonguss due to its type immunity. (this point needs to go before the focus energy one because it's slashed before that move)
- Ogerpon-H synergises synergizes well with Chien-Pao, since it can easily threaten Landorus and Tornadus, which Ogerpon-H is offensively threatened by due to their strong STABs STAB move. Ogerpon-H threatens Steel-types Chien-Pao struggles against such as Gholdengo and Kingambit.
- Ground-types such as Landorus and Ursaluna-B greatly appreciate Ogerpon-H threatening Ogerpon-H's ability to threaten Rillaboom, which threatens who threat both with its potent Wood Hammer and Grassy Glide. Meanwhile, (AC) both can easily dispatch Raging Bolt, (AC) which Ogerpon-H struggles to threaten against.
- Dragon-type partners, (AC) such as Raging Bolt and Regidrago, (AC) appreciate Ogerpon-H KOing threats like Chien-Pao and Alolan Ninetales as well as common redirectors like Amoonguss and Sinistcha. Ogerpon-H's redirection utility additionally allows Raging Bolt to easily set up with Calm Mind. In return, Raging Bolt can easily dispatch Ogerpon-W, opposing Raging Bolts Bolt, and Roaring Moon, which who threaten Ogerpon-H and are tricky for Ogerpon-H it to defeat. Meanwhile, Regidrago's Dragon Energy can dispatch opposing remove Dragon-types that Ogerpon-H struggles to damage.
- Ogerpon-H supports Steel-types like Gholdengo and Kingambit exceptionally well. Ogerpon-H threatens opposing Steel-types they its teammates struggle to damage as well as Ground-types that threaten them like the Ursaluna formes. In return, (AC) Gholdengo provide provides a strong special offensive presence to compliment complement Ogerpon'H's Ogerpon-H's physical offense, (AC) and Kingambit dissuades Intimidate cycling from Incineroar thanks to Defiant.
- Ogerpon-H works very well on a core of Gholdengo, Tornadus, (AC) and Regidrago, taking advantage of their offensive coverage (RC) and Tailwind support (RC) and as well as providing its own offensive coverage as well as redirection.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/rausakura.589964/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/logice.617069/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/user3.103/
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/user4.104/
GP Team done
 
autumn implemented! I didn't implement this part however
- you need to add a point about wood hammer vs horn leech here - the moves are slashed so you need to explain why you'd choose one over the other
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I intended for the bullet point above to be the explanation of why one would be used over the other
 
Dragon-type partners, (AC) such as Raging Bolt and Regidrago, (AC) appreciate Ogerpon-H KOing threats like Chien-Pao and Alolan Ninetales
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remove these and then this should be good
 
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