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National Dex Monotype Defensive Cloyster [QC: 2/2] [GP: 1/1]

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[SET]
Cloyster @ Rocky Helmet / Heavy-Duty Boots
Name: Defensive Utility (Ice)
Ability: Overcoat
EVs: 248 HP / 252 Def / 8 SpD
Bold Nature
- Rapid Spin
- Spikes
- Surf
- Teleport / Hidden Power Fire

[SET COMMENTS]
Due to Cloyster's Water typing, high Defense stat, and utility, it is able to tank hits from Steel-type Pokemon that are often threatening to Ice-types, such as Excadrill. Rapid Spin is an asset for defensive utility sets, allowing Cloyster to remove entry hazards such as Stealth Rock. Spikes can help provide chip damage to threats such as Iron Valiant and Heatran. Teleport allows Cloyster to keep momentum when it comes onto the field and pivot out of Pokemon that threaten it into teammates such as Weavile and Galarian Darmanitan. Hidden Power Fire can be used over Teleport to effectively deal with Scizor. Rocky Helmet allows Cloyster to punish physical moves it often switches into, such as U-turn from Corviknight and Crobat. Overcoat also helps reduce the damage Cloyster takes over time by negating sand damage. Defensive Cloyster works best on offensive teams that can take advantage of the Spikes it sets. Wallbreakers such as Galarian Darmanitan and Kyurem are very good teammates, as they can remove threats like Gholdengo, Archaludon, and Choice Band Hisuian Arcanine. Revenge killers such as Weavile, Cetitan, and Alolan Sandslash can check Pokemon such as Hisuian Goodra and Mega Gallade after Spikes damage, allowing sweepers to snowball more easily. Alolan Ninetales is another useful teammate, as it helps Cloyster with Aurora Veil, allowing it to tank special attacks better and set Spikes more easily against Pokemon that can often deny them, such as Keldeo.


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[SET]
Cloyster @ Rocky Helmet / Heavy-Duty Boots
Name: Defensive Utility (Ice) Defensive Cloyster
Ability: Overcoat
EVs: 248 HP / 252 Def / 8 SpD
Bold Nature
- Rapid Spin
- Spikes
- Surf
- Teleport / Hidden Power Fire

[SET COMMENTS]
Due to its typing, Cloyster has found itself as an important defensive piece on Ice. Its high defense stat allows it to tank hits from Steel-type pokemon that are often threatening to Ice such as Scizor and Excadrill.(This can be combine into one sentence, just talk about its part water typing, ability to check drill + nice utility]. Rapid Spin allows it remove entry hazards such as Stealth Rocks, which is vital to remove on Ice teams due to ice's weakness to Stealth Rocks. Comments: Add a Spikes sentence; talk about how it provide chip damage against threats to cloyster like x y and z Even though it forces Cloyster's ability to Overcoat, Teleport allows Cloyster to keep momentum when it comes onto the field. Teleport allows Cloyster to pivot into its teammates who can provide more offensive ability. Hidden Power Fire helps to threaten the pokemon that Cloyster is often swapping into on Ice, such as the aforementioned Scizor, and helps lower their HP to a point where Cloyster's teammates can deal with them easier. (Move this after the Surf sentence so it flows with the order of the moves on the set also Overcoat is not a bad ability, its actually nice for defensive cloyster as we dont ever wanting this to be spored or even sandstorm chip yanno? I would remove that part and reword the teleport sentence. Talk about how it pivots out of bad mu [give examples of threats] while also bringing in offensive teammates [provide one] to deal with said check. For Hp Fire all its hitting / dealing with is scizor imo so you can just say: Whereas Hidden Power Fire can be used over Teleport to effectively deal with Scizor.) Surf allows Cloyster to do consistent damage, while being able to run Teleport.(Fluff) Rocky Helmet allows Cloyster to punish physical moves that Cloyster often swaps into and U-Turn. (just provide mons that we are punishing) Heavy-Duty Boots allows Cloyster to come in more often in order to remove hazards and reduce the amount of damage that it is taking over time due to hazards. Overcoat also helps to reduce the damage that Cloyster is taking overtime by negating Sandstorm damage and increases its defensive ability because it allows it to swap into powder moves such as Spore or Stun Spore that can hinder its teammates.

Defensive Cloyster works best on offensive teams that can take advantage of the Spikes that Cloyster can set. Darmanitan-Galar is a very good teammate for Cloyster, being able to threaten Pokémon with Icicle Crash and being able to force Pokémon out, forcing them to take spikes damage while still hitting something for a lot of chip. Ninetales-Alola is another useful teammate and Ice staple, it helps Cloyster with Aurora Veil. With Aurora Veil, Cloyster is able to tank special attacks better and set spikes easier against Pokémon that can often deny spikes from Cloyster.
Notes: NDM analyses are only 1 big paragraph so we need to merge the second paragraph after you talked about Cloyster set. Then you talk about teammates. Teammates should include / need to write about: Alolan Ninetales, Galarian Darmanatan, Kyurem, Piloswine, and sweeper options like Weavile / Cetitan / alolan sandslash
- Regional formes names start off with the region. So like Galarian Slowking not Slowking-Galar
- K.I.S.S.=KEEP IT SHORT AND SIMPLE :)
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Will take a look after implements, TYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
 
[SET]
Cloyster @ Rocky Helmet / Heavy-Duty Boots
Name: Defensive Utility (Ice)
Ability: Overcoat
EVs: 248 HP / 252 Def / 8 SpD
Bold Nature
- Rapid Spin
- Spikes
- Surf
- Teleport / Hidden Power Fire

[SET COMMENTS]
Due to Cloyster's Water typing, high defense stat and utility, it is able to tank hits from Steel-type pokemon that are often threatening to Ice such as Excadrill. Rapid Spin allows it remove entry hazards such as Stealth Rocks, which is vital to remove on Ice teams due to ice's weakness to Stealth Rocks. Spikes can help provide chip damage to threats to Cloyster such as Iron Valiant and Heatran. Teleport allows Cloyster to keep momentum when it comes onto the field and swap out of Pokemon that can threaten it into its teammates such as Weavile or Galarian Darmanitan. Teleport allows Cloyster to pivot into its teammates who can provide more offensive ability; whereas, Hidden Power Fire can be used over Teleport to effectively deal with Scizor. Rocky Helmet allows Cloyster to punish physical moves that Cloyster often swaps into such as U-Turn from Corviknight or Crobat Urshifu.(Shifu just spamming CC against us most of the time anyways.) Overcoat also helps to reduce the damage that Cloyster is taking overtime by negating Sandstorm damage and increases its defensive ability because it allows Cloyster it to swap into Spore or Stun Spore that can hinder its teammates. Defensive Cloyster works best on offensive teams that can take advantage of the Spikes that Cloyster can set. Wallbreakers such as Galarian Darmanitan and Kyurem are very good teammates for Cloyster, being able to remove threats like Gholdengo, Archaludon, and Choice Band Hisuian Arcanine threaten Pokemon with a lot of damage, forcing them to take spikes damage while still hitting something for a lot of chip. Sweepers such as Weavile, Cetitan and Alolan Sandslash that are able to pick up kills after the opposing Pokemon take spike damage are also good teammates, allowing them to snowball easier.(Provide examples of mons we are revenge killing after spikes chip) Alolan Ninetales is another useful teammate, it helps Cloyster with Aurora Veil, allowing it to tank special attacks better and set spikes easier against Pokémon that can often deny spikes from Cloyster. (like?)


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QC 1/2 After implements, well done fam :Arcanine:
 
[SET]
Cloyster @ Rocky Helmet / Heavy-Duty Boots
Name: Defensive Utility (Ice)
Ability: Overcoat
EVs: 248 HP / 252 Def / 8 SpD
Bold Nature
- Rapid Spin
- Spikes
- Surf
- Teleport / Hidden Power Fire

[SET COMMENTS]
Due to Cloyster's Water typing, high defense stat(AC) and utility, it is able to can tank hits from Steel-type pokemon Pokemon that are often threatening to Ice(AC) such as Excadrill. Rapid Spin allows it to remove entry hazards such as Stealth Rocks Stealth Rock, which is vital to remove on Ice teams due to ice's weakness to Stealth Rocks. [I'd rephrase this and maybe just differentiate it from the sets its using as Shell Smash doesn't typically run Rapid Spin. But saying this out loud we still consider compressing it nonetheless considering how volatile the typing is. "Rapid Spin is an asset for defensive utility sets" or just any "generalized phrase" of terms sounds better]

Spikes can help provide chip damage to threats to Cloyster(AC) such as Iron Valiant and Heatran. Teleport allows Cloyster to keep momentum when it comes onto the field and swap out of Pokemon that can threaten it Cloyster [proper pronoun, saying it -> its felt like i needed a "breath indicator or a pause"] into its teammates(AC) such as Weavile or Galarian Darmanitan.


Hidden Power Fire can be used over Teleport to effectively deal with Scizor. Rocky Helmet allows Cloyster to punish physical moves that Cloyster often swaps into(AC) such as U-Turn from Corviknight or Crobat. Overcoat also helps to reduce the damage that Cloyster is taking overtime by negating Sandstorm damage. (AP) and increasing increases its defensive ability(AC) because it allows Cloyster to swap into Spore or Stun Spore that can hinder its teammates.


Defensive Cloyster works best on offensive teams that can take advantage of the Spikes that Cloyster can set. Wallbreakers such as Galarian Darmanitan and Kyurem are very good teammates for Cloyster, being able to remove threats like Gholdengo, Archaludon, and Choice Band Hisuian Arcanine.

Sweepers Revenge killers such as Weavile, Cetitan(AC) and Alolan Sandslash that are able to pick up kills after Pokemon, such as Hisuian Goodra and Mega Gallade Buzzwole, take spike damage are also good teammates, allowing the sweepers to snowball easier. Alolan Ninetales is another useful teammate, it helps Cloyster with Aurora Veil, allowing it to tank special attacks better and set spikes easier against Pokémon that can often deny spikes from Cloyster, (AC) such as Keldeo.

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kiru said:
Sweepers Revenge killers such as Weavile, Cetitan(AC) and Alolan Sandslash that are able to pick up kills after Pokemon, such as Hisuian Goodra and Mega Gallade Buzzwole, take spike damage are also good teammates, allowing the sweepers to snowball easier. Alolan Ninetales is another useful teammate, it helps Cloyster with Aurora Veil, allowing it to tank special attacks better and set spikes easier against Pokémon that can often deny spikes from Cloyster, (AC) such as Keldeo.
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sorry, but what exactly is intended w/ the purple crossed out words? all other changes implemented
 
qtfox said:
sorry, but what exactly is intended w/ the purple crossed out words? all other changes implemented
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“checks” instead of “are able to” felt more direct ; I think buzzwole example hls to me that you knowledge the weakness in the mons as an overscope; revenge killers gives more of a grouped term sense setting up on ice is already pretty abrasive by the nature of the tier; at Least here “checks felt more better”

This can move to gp after ur done great work :3
 
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[SET]
Cloyster @ Rocky Helmet / Heavy-Duty Boots
Name: Defensive Utility (Ice)
Ability: Overcoat
EVs: 248 HP / 252 Def / 8 SpD
Bold Nature
- Rapid Spin
- Spikes
- Surf
- Teleport / Hidden Power Fire

[SET COMMENTS]
Due to Cloyster's Water typing, high Defense stat, and utility, it is able to can tank hits from Steel-type pokemon Pokemon that are often threatening to Ice Ice-types, such as Excadrill. Rapid Spin is an asset for defensive utility set sets, allowing Cloyster to remove entry hazards such as Stealth Rock. Spikes can help provide chip damage to threats to Cloyster such as Iron Valiant and Heatran. Teleport allows Cloyster to keep momentum when it comes onto the field and swap pivot out of Pokemon that can threaten Cloyster it into its teammates (RC) such as Weavile or and Galarian Darmanitan. Hidden Power Fire can be used over Teleport to effectively deal with Scizor. Rocky Helmet allows Cloyster to punish physical moves that Cloyster it often swaps switches into, such as U-turn from Corviknight or and Crobat. Overcoat also helps to reduce the damage that Cloyster is taking overtime takes over time by negating Sandstorm sand damage. Defensive Cloyster works best on offensive teams that can take advantage of the Spikes that Cloyster can set it sets. Wallbreakers such as Galarian Darmanitan and Kyurem are very good teammates for Cloyster, being able to, (AC) as they can remove threats like Gholdengo, Archaludon, and Choice Band Hisuian Arcanine. Revenge killers such as Weavile, Cetitan, and Alolan Sandslash can check Pokemon (RC) such as Hisuian Goodra and Mega Gallade (RC) take spike after Spikes damage are also good teammates, allowing the sweepers to snowball easier more easily. Alolan Ninetales is another useful teammate, as it helps Cloyster with Aurora Veil, allowing it to tank special attacks better and set Spikes easier more easily against Pokémon Pokemon that can often deny spikes from Cloyster them, such as Keldeo.


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