Another CB Scizor :)

[josh14128]

Well hello there people this is my first time posting my team on smogon and i am just looking for some improvements there will probably be alot of spelling mistakes but oh well and thank you so lets start here is my team at points view.

http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/swampert.png
http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/rotomheat.png
http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/scizor.png
http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/zapdos.png
http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/infernape.png
http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/vaporeon.png

Well thats my team now lets get on to the movesets ok heres swampert
http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/swampert.png
this thing is just a beast not being 3 hit koed by t-tar or nothing but i do lose to roserade like always but yh oh well i liek mudkipz :)
Nature: Relaxed Evs: 252 hp 252def 4atk
Moves: Earthquake Ice Beam Stealth Rock and Yawn
Item: Leftovers
well as i said before i lose to roserade no matter what the situation but other than that it is a great lead is bulky enough to set up rocks and yawn stuff to get more rock damage on stuff which is pretty cool and if still alive at rather nice hp it can come as either death fodder or just to wall stuff which is pretty cool

ok here is my revenge killer to bring the mighy fine beast known as Gyarados to its doom yh this is my choice Scarf rotom which half the time on shoddy is pursuit bait for t-tar or scizor which is kinda annoying but it normally does its job it takes out annoying gengars which will then later allow infernape to have an easier time.
Nature: Timid Evs: 4hp 252spec atk 252 speed
Item:Choice Scarf
Moves: Thunderbolt Shadow Ball Overheat Trick
special walls like blissey love coming on this thing and can get rid of the occasional scarf magnezone and if there is a lead metagross i like bluffing them with swampert moreless provoking them to go Boom and then i go into this guy to take :p

This Guy makes another Team again OMG its a CB scizor
http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/scizor.png
well this guy can come in and Trap annoying scarf latias and such and take out t-tar with Bullet Punch but most the time i just U-turn when i no something is coming out it works really well with scarf rotom cause my opponent loves bringing gyra on my u-turn and after rocks brings them down to around 50% which i then can scare away with rotom Scizor can also take out salamence who come in and try to destroy my team at some point so yh scizor is a great priority abuser and come in and revenge kill a lot of threats

Item: choice Band Evs:248hp 252atk 8speed
Moves: bullet punch U-turn Pursuit Superpower
Nature:Adamant
OK this next guy is just BEAST and my favourite pokemon its a zapdos
http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/zapdos.png
this thing can really help me out espically against skarm when rotom is down its my reliable scizor counter and breloom counter which is amazing and it is able to roost of any damage and thats what zapdos is here for but im wondering if i should make him specially bulky or not.
Item:Leftovers Evs: 248 hp 228def 32 speed
Nature: Bold
Moves: thunderbolt hidden power ice heat wave roost
the evs are so that zapdos can switch into stealth rock 5 times and the speed evs are enough to outspeed jolly t-tar but this thing is to check major OU threats which is good For me :)

Now we have the late game clean up which owns most annoying stall teams its an infernape
http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/infernape.png
this thing is such a great clean up i cant remember how many times its helped with late game clean up its a really good pokemon and can sweep unprepared teams.
item: life orb Nature:Naive EVs: 64 atk 252spec atk 192 speed
personally i think specially based mix ape is the better one i think it has better covereage in my opinion and is a great late gamer.
Moves: fire blast close combat hidden power ice grass knot
this set hits ever pokemon at least neutral in the game which is good and is a great clean up but can get owned in about three turns in stall teams.

and now for the last poke this thing is here to pass wishes and do a bit of stalling its a vapereon
http://www.arkeis.com/images/pokemonfactory/vaporeon.png
this thing comes in so handy its a great infernape counter which stops it running round my team if rotom is dead and can counter gyra to a certain extent
Item: Leftovers Evs: 188 252def 68 speed
Nature: Bold
The EVs are simple enough speed to outspeed most scizor and to scout out what there gonna do with protect whilst also getting more leftys recovery
i do lose to mence in a way if i am taunted though but the mence will have to lock itself into outrage and vapereon of course if its DD with life orb but thats it for my team
I would really enjoy the rating i would like to no what i can fix and thank you Peace.

 

[Bloo]

Ok, your thread is exceedingly difficult to read, as it's quite messy in its current state. Take a look at the RMT rules, rule #6, which is entitled 'formatting' I highly recommend fixing up this thread to make it more attractive, and you can start by using the proper format, which is this:

Pokemon @ Item
Ability:
EVs:
Nature:
- move
- move
- move
- move

Also, in order to make your pictures appear, don't just copy and paste the link from the website you obatined it from. When you click 'post thread' look for a yellow button that has a picture of a little mountain (it's next to the 'insert email link' icon) Then enter the link of the picture into the box that shows up, press OK, and your image will show.

Take a look at rule #3 as well.

3. Have some actual words in your post beyond your six Pokemon and their moves. Not following this makes your post quite boring to read and rate. All Pokemon should have a good reason for being in your team anyway, so why not post that reason? If you are having trouble with this one, start by giving an explanation for each team member. Why are they there? What role do they serve? How do you get them in? Then, give an explanation of how you would open with the team and how you would go about using it. All of these things help people rate your team and allow us to offer more helpful advice.

Some of your descriptions are lacking in substance; Have a look at some of the teams in the RMT archive to see what is expected. Try and stay away from 1-2 line descriptions. Explain why you chose a Pokemon, what it does, how does it contribute to the success of the team, etc. If you fix the descriptions ans this entire thread basically, PM me the changes and I'll unlock your thread.