Anxiety and Doubt, an OU Warstory

This is my first warstory. I've been looking for a good match to write one up on for a few days now, and while this one may not be the best match with amazing predictions and surprise Pokemon on both sides it was very intense to play in. Reaver12 is my screen name on Smogon and my opponent was totzish, a player I've never met before who graciously agreed to let me use the battle and his name in this warstory. So lets get to it, please enjoy yourself and give constructive criticism, as I plan to write more of these in the future. If you find the battle less-than-special... well it should still be enjoyable to read.

Reaver12's team!
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Reaver12 sent out Freak (lvl 100 Gliscor)
totzish sent out Fuck you (lvl 100 Azelf).

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Totzish starts off with the most used lead in standard play, which means I've had plenty of experience facing it. I figure he will either set up SR, use Taunt to stop me from using SR, or switch to avoid the U-turn. Doesn't matter to me, U-turn it is.

Totzish switched Mencey (lvl 100 Salamence)
Mencey's Intimidate cut Freak's attack!
Freak used U-turn.
Mencey lost 7% of it's health.
Reaver12 switched in Shelly (lvl 100 Starmie)

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Well that worked out perfectly for me. Azelf managed to get out unscathed, but I'm not that worried about it. It's fast, but it can be managed later on. For now I'm going to try and get an Ice Beam on Mence and take out this scary beast right now. Doubtful he'll stay in, but might as well give it a shot.

Totzish switched in Fuck you (lvl 100 Azelf)
Shelly used Ice Beam
Fuck you lost 47% of its health.

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A bit unexpected to tell the truth, Azelf is way too frail to be switching into anything. Not sure what his plan is, but I'm fairly certain he won't try to Explode. Well I've got a 50/50 shot of never finding out, who will win the speed tie?

Shelly used Hydro Pump.
Fuck you lost 53% of its health.
totzish Fuck you fainted.

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Might have been a big risk to take, but it paid off. Azelf is down having done absolutely no damage to my team, not even managing to get Stealth Rocks up. Can't have asked for a better way to start this match.

totzish switched in Hyper (lvl 100 Flygon)

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Another surprise move from totzish. He knows I have Ice Beam, so now I'm pretty sure he has a Choice Scarf otherwise he would have kept Flygon far away from Starmie. If he is scarfed I know that Starmie will survive whatever Flygon throws at it and OHKO with Ice Beam, and if totzish is bluffing the scarf and Flygon is banded he gets OHKO'd anyway.

Hyper used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Shelly lost 57% of its health.
totzish switching in Kamina (lvl 100 Machamp)
Kamina lost 27% of its health.
Kamina's leftovers restored its health a little!
Kamina restored 6% of its health.

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Ok, that hurt. Flygon is proved to be the less threatening scarfer and Machamp comes out.I really hate Machamp. Pretty much every set he has is difficult for my team to take down. Starmie is sitting at pretty low health, meaning he won't be able to switch into any kind of attack the rest of this match. I have Raikou to deal with that Mence with HP Ice later on, and Starmie won't be any help against Flygon anyway. I decide to let Starmie go down fighting right here and now and fire off a Hydro Pump, hoping it hits and giving me a little justification for losing Starmie.

Shelly used Hydro Pump
Kamina lost 51% of its health.
Kamina used Substitute.
Kamina lost 25% of its health.
Kamina's leftovers restored its health a little.
Kamina restored 6% of its health.

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Hey, that worked out much better than I'd planned. Not only did Hydro Pump hit, but Machamp lost 25% more health setting up a sub I'll easily break next turn. Same concept as last turn really, do as much damage to Machamp with Starmie and keep him from giving me issues all match long.

Shelly used Ice Beam
The substitute took damage for Kamina!
Kamina's substitue faded!
Kamina used Payback
Shelly lost 43% of its health
Reaver12s Shelly fainted.
Kamina's leftovers restored its health a little!
Kamina restored 6% of its health.

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Fare thee well Starmie, you did plenty to be proud of. Stopped Azelf in its tracks, crippled Machamp, and let me know what Flygon set I'm dealing with. Machamp's too low on health to do any damage to my team, and I don't want to reveal any Pokemon I don't have to. I'll send in Gliscor to finish him off.

Reaver12 switched in Freak (lvl 100 Gliscor)

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I could do several differnt things right now. I could fire off a quick Earthquake and finish Machamp off, I could use Stealth Rock to help wear down his Salamence, or I could use U-turn as a switch wouldn't be that out of the ordinary. I decide to just end Machamp right now without risking getting hit with a Dynamic Punch and getting confuse haxed to death.

Freak used Earthquake.
Kamina lost 15% of its health.
totzish's Kamina fainted.

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Alright, Machamp is down and my team is in perfect health. I'm feeling really good about the match so far, but I have a nagging feeling that I'm forgetting something important...

totzish switched in Mencey (lvl 100 Salamence)
Menceys intimidate cut Freak's attack!

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...Fuck. This is a horrible situation to be in. Gliscor can't threaten Mence with any of its attacks, and because I have no idea what set it is running I can't even switch a Pokemon in without risking a KO. I hate Mence even more than Machamp. I'm really stuck on what to do here. If he's a DD Mence then he is going to get a Dragon Dance for free, and threaten to end this match right now. If he's mixed or Special and I switch in Scizor I risk totzish predicting it (he is the most used Pokemon in the game afterall) and KOing it with Fire Blast. Well, Gliscor is probably the most despensable Pokemon on my team so I am going to try and U-turn. If he attacks I might get KO'd, allowing me to revenge kill Mence. If he sets up.... well if he's DD then I'm screwed either way really. Might as well try to get another 7% damage on him.

Mencey used Draco Meteor
Freak lost 100% of its health.
Reaver12's Freak fainted.
Mencey's Special Attack was harshly lowered
Mencey lost 10% of its health

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Ok, Life Orb tells me that Mence is mixed. A threatening moveset to be sure, but much more easily handled by my team than Dragon Dance. I'll switch in Raikou to scare him off, or even better take him out of the picture.

Reaver12 switched in Raikou (lvl 100 Raikou)
Raikou is exerting its pressure!

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I run a Sub CM Raikou, which in my opinon is one of the most threatening and underrated sweepers out there. I expect a switch, because no one wants to risk losing a Salamence when only half of the opponents team has been shown. I go for the safe route and use Substitute, which in the worst case scenario will just get broken by Mence. No biggy here.

totzish switched in Hyper (lvl 100 Flygon)
Raikou used Substitute
Raikou lost 25% of its health
Raikou made a Substitute
Raikou's leftovers restored its health a little!
Raikou restored 6% of its health.

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Ok, great prediction on totzish's part. Extremely risky, because though Sub CM Raikou is the most popular set he risked me going for the quick KO and losing Flygon. Speaking of the quick KO, I opt to go ahead and try to use HP Ice hoping that totzish tries to Earthquake or Ourtrage. I could use Calm Mind, but not knowing what other pokes he has it would likely get wasted anyway.

Hyper used U-turn
The substitute took damage for Raikou!
Raikou's substitute faded!
totzish switched in Lagann (lvl 100 Metagross)
Raikou used Hidden Power.
It's not very effective...
Lagann lost 8% of its health
Raikou's leftovers resored its health a little!
Raikou restored 6% of its health.

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Hmm. Well at least I got some damage on Metagross. Here is another Poke that scares the hell out of me. LeadGross is easy to predict and can be handled, but in the late game I have to worry it's AgilGross. Now I'm in the same boat I was in before with the Salamence. I have no idea what set he's running and I can't risk losing Raikou, my only answer to Salamence left on the team. Luckily I have Bulky Gyara to dodge the likely Earthquake, or try and deal with Metagross after it's Agility.

Reaver12 switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados)
Lagann used Bullet Punch
It's not very effective...
Gyarados lost 11% of its health.
Gyarados's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gyarados restored 6% of it's health

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Man, totzish just refuses to do what I expect him to. Well, lack of leftovers makes me believe that this Metagross is holding Expert Belt. Unfortunatley this knowledge doesn't help me much. He could still be AgilGross, or even be a variation on the standard lead adapted to mid game play. I have no idea what to expect, though I have an idea that one of two things is about to happen. Either we all go Boom together when Gross explodes, or we both try to stat up at the same time...

Gyarados used Dragon Dance
Gyarados's attack was raised
gyarados's speed was raised
Lagann used Explosion
Gyarados lost 95% of its health
Reaver12's Gyarados fainted.
totzish's Lagann fainted.
totzish's Lagann fainted.

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Well damn. Gyarados is down having done nothing but take an Explosion, which I guess is good since it saved my other pokes from taking it. It would have been nice to keep him around until I figured out what else totzish had but I guess it's ok. I don't know what exactly he'll send in now, so I'll send in the Poke everyone loves to hate, CB Scizor.

Reaver12 switched in Scizor (lvl 100 Scizor)
totzish switched in Hyper (lvl 100 Flygon)

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He probably expected me to keep my last two Pokemon hidden for as long as possible, and sent out Flygon to take on Raikou. However I want to test out the power of this Scizor that everyone raves about. I figure that he'll U-turn to his counter, so I'm gonna U-turn right back.

Hyper used Earthquake
Scizor lost 42% of its health
Scizor used U-turn
Hyper lost 80% of its health
Reaver12 switched in Spanky (lvl 100 Snorlax)

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Man, that right there tells me why Scizor is a staple in todays metagame. Flygon was hit harder than I thought by that U-turn, and if I could have switched Scizor back in right away I would have. However, since Snorlax is out and he runs my own custom Sub Punching set I figure I'll fire off an Ice Punch, knowing that ScarfGon doesn't have the power to take out that fat... bear? with Earthquake.

Hyper used Earthquake
Spanky lost 37% of its health
Spanky used Ice Punch
Hyper lost 20% of its health
totzish's Hyper fainted.

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Exactly as planned. Snorlax takes a chunk of damage, but not enought to cripple him and Flygon is out of the match. I know exaclty how I want to end this match now, Raikou is gonna prove that he deserves the title of OU!

totzish switched in Mencey (lvl 100 Salamence)
Mencey's intimidate cut Spanky's attack!

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Hey, this works for me. Salamence won't use Outrage because totzish knows that Raikou will gladly revenge kill it, so he has no choice but to Brick Break. Although my Snorlax has no defense EVs, the 252 HP EVs should be enough to survive a MixMence Brick Break, and the Intimidate drop won't stop me from getting a KO with a 4x effective move to Mence's ugly face.

Mencey used Brick Break
It's super effective!
Spanky lost 55% of its health
Mencey lost 10% of its health
Spanky used Ice Punch
It's super effective!
Mencey lost 73% of its health
totzish's Mencey fainted.

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Snorlax squeked by with a measly 8%! Well, he's death fodder now for totzish's last mystery Pokemon. While it looks like victory is in sight there are a couple of Pokemon that just might be able to defeat me....

totzish switched in DR Tran (lvl 100 Heatran)

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Ah hell. Doesn't matter which choice item this guys is running. Fire Blast will rip my team to shreds... Nothing I can do with Snorlax now, but I'll try and fire off a Focus Punch in hope totzish does something stupid like trying to status him or setting up a sub.

DR Tran used Fire Blast
Spanky lost 8% of its health
Reaver12's Spanky fainted
DR Tran lost 10% of its Health

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Ok, Life Orb. I don't see a way of living through this. Raikou will outspeed him, but won't be able to OHKO. And I highly doubt that Scizor has enough speed to KO with Superpower. I thought this match was mine too...

Reaver12 switched in Raikou (lvl 100 Raikou)
Raikou is exerting its pressure.
Raikou used Thunderbolt
DR Tran lost 49% of its health
DR Tran used Fire Blast
DR Tran's attack missed!
Raikou's leftover restored its health a little!
Raikou restored 6% of its health

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Wow, the hax gods smile on me and I dodge the burning cross that would have most likely spelled ruin for my Legendary Electric Lion. I wonder why Earthpower wasn't used... oh well. Either he doesn't have it or he just made a mistake, I don't personally care. I snatched victory from the Steely jaws of defeat! Raikou! THUNDERBOLT!

Raikou used Thunderbolt
DR Tran lost 41% of its health
totzish's DR Tran fainted
Reaver12 wins!
Reaver12: gg
totzish: wow gg

Props:
-Starmie for doing a great job in the early game
-Raikou, just for being you
-totzish for a great game

Slops:
-Gyarados for doing basically nothing
-Hax in the end losing totzish the match


Finally, Team totzish!
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I hope you don't take this into full offense, but I didn't feel that intensity while reading this warstory. It just sounds like a typical opponent on ladder. I was immediately turned off when he switched in Salamence instead of SR or Taunt. Also switching in Azelf to Starmie wasn't exactly smart. Then when I read the end... it killed it for me. You said it yourself, why not Earth Power? Modest LO Fire Blast only does 77.51% - 91.42% to standard Raikou(68 HP/72 Sp.Def.)
 
Not the best, but a good attempt nonetheless. Practice makes perfect...I guess. xD I hope to see more from you. They'll get better with practice, I'm sure of it! ;)
 
I hope you don't take this into full offense, but I didn't feel that intensity while reading this warstory. It just sounds like a typical opponent on ladder. I was immediately turned off when he switched in Salamence instead of SR or Taunt. Also switching in Azelf to Starmie wasn't exactly smart. Then when I read the end... it killed it for me. You said it yourself, why not Earth Power? Modest LO Fire Blast only does 77.51% - 91.42% to standard Raikou(68 HP/72 Sp.Def.)

pardon me if I'm wrong, but at base power, shouldn't fire blast do EXACTLY the same?

Fire blast - 120 * 1.5 (STAB) = 180
Earth Power - 90 * 2 (SE) = 180
 
So I guess had didn't decide the match, unless you weren't running the standard Raikou. I didn't really feel too much intensity though, and itvdidnt make for a good warstory.
 
this warstory is OK for a first attempt,the ending was the only medicore part of the story through.

the comments were decent as well

6.5/10 its quite decent for a first warstory but i hope you improve your warstorys in the future!
 
First off, Destiny you're right. The battle was pretty standard, and I believe I acknowledged this in my intro. To be perfectly honest I was tired of looking for a great match to try this out on, and this one was fun to play so I decieded to run with it.

Secondly, so Fire Blast seems to have been either just a preference choice or like I mentioned maybe that Heatran wasn't running Earth Power at all.

and Thridly, thanks firewheeler and toaster thanks for the comments. I certainly plan on writing another when I have the time (these things take a long time I've discovered).
 
His Heatran definitely had Earth Power, this is clearly the team august used in ST5. Your opponent clearly wasn't too clever at points and this is probably shown by them using someone else's team. Your comments were decent though, probably best to warstory next a battle with a better opponent, anyway its a decent first effort.
 
Cool Warstory. Your opponent seemed like he didn't know what do sometimes. Props on using Raikou, that SubCM set is amazing.
 
pardon me if I'm wrong, but at base power, shouldn't fire blast do EXACTLY the same?

Fire blast - 120 * 1.5 (STAB) = 180
Earth Power - 90 * 2 (SE) = 180

Accuracy issues.

And it wasn't a bad warstory. Good for practice. I'm looking forward to a must improved one in the future.

6/10
 
I don't like how he played with Azelf at all. My first problem was him switching, even though you could have easily layed down SR to break his Sash next time. Then he brings in Azelf rather than Machamp on an obvious Ice Beam. Had he brought Machamp, he would have Paybacked the incoming Hydro Pump and you would be down one Starmie. Instead, he risked his Azelf to SR and a Speed tie.

Later on, when you had Raikou up against Flygon, I'm somewhat confused about why you didn't use Substitute again to scout if he was going to U-Turn or Earthquake. Using HP Ice seemed like the wrong desicion since U-Turn could break your Substitute.

The miss at the end wasn't great, and I assume it was either Choice Specs Heatran or he just misplayed. Whatever the case, I wish it ended a little differently.

Now, for the actual Story part of it, I thought you did a decent job and you had everything done correctly. Hopefully you get a greater battle in the future and we will see a good battle and a good warstory. Good luck on future tries.
 
The miss at the end wasn't great, and I assume it was either Choice Specs Heatran or he just misplayed. Whatever the case, I wish it ended a little differently.

DR Tran used Fire Blast
Spanky lost 8% of its health
Reaver12's Spanky fainted
DR Tran lost 10% of its Health

Life Orb Heatran. I liked commentary, but the battle wasn't that great.
 
Thanks for the input guys, I'll probably post another the next time I get into a good Monotype tourney. Those matches are fun and often pretty surprising since the standard movesets aren't usually as useful on a team with at least 4 other pokes sharing the same typing.
 
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