Copyediting Boots Attacker Lokix (QC 2/2) (GP 0/1)

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[SET]
name: Boots Attacker
move 1: First Impression
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: U-turn
move 4: Sucker Punch
item: Heavy-Duty Boots
tera type: Bug
ability: Tinted Lens
nature: Adamant / Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Paragraph 1
Lokix acts as an incredible revenge killer in the tier, able to utilise its ability in Tinted Lens and having access to a strong priority move in First Impression. First Impression can get around Lokix's modest base speed and revenge kill Pokemon such as Darkrai and Dragapult by hitting them for considerable damage. U-turn allows Lokix to pivot out of common switch ins such as Corviknight, Gliscor, and Alomomola, while gaining momentum for the rest of its team. Knock Off allows Lokix to remove key items like Rocky Helmet and Heavy-Duty Boots from potential switchins such as Landorus-T and Moltres, while hitting Pecharunt and Gholdengo for super effective damage. Sucker Punch can act as a secondary priority move for Lokix, and the combination of Bug- and Dark-type priority moves coupled with its ability makes it doubly effective. Adamant allows Lokix to get the maximum amount of damage from First Impression and Sucker Punch, for example allowing Lokix to OHKO Cinderace from full with First Impression into Sucker Punch and giving Sucker Punch good odds to 2HKO Enamorus, while Jolly allows Lokix to outspeed Pecharunt, Hisuian Samurott and Gholdengo. Tera Bug allows Lokix to further increase the damage output of both First Impression and U-turn, allowing First Impression to 2HKO Kyurem and Zamazenta that has expended its Dauntless Shield.

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Boots attacker Lokix fits best on bulky offense and balance, as they heavily appreciate its revenge killing abilities and access to key moves like U-turn and Knock Off. Hazard stacking teams love Lokix, as it can peform multiple roles such as being a strong Knock Off user, momentum gainer and revenge killer. Therefore, Entry hazard support from Pokemon such as Ting-Lu, Landorus-T, and Gliscor are heavily appreciated, as they can help Lokix against bulkier squads it might otherwise struggle against as Lokix can utilise Knock Off to remove Heavy-Duty Boots and eventually wear down its checks such as Moltres and Heatran through hazards. Spinblockers such as Air Balloon Gholdengo and Pecharunt also pair well with Lokix, as they can prevent Rapid Spin from Great Tusk and Iron Treads from removing entry hazards. Pivoting Pokemon such as Landorus-T, Pecharunt, Galarian Slowking and Iron Crown pair well with Lokix, as they can get it in safely, and in return Lokix can revenge kill the offensive threats that threaten these teammates such as Ogerpon-W and Darkrai. Iron Crown in particular is a very good Lokix partner, as they can form an effective pivoting core, which can heavily pressure defensive teams. Lokix particularly struggles with faster Pokemon that 4x resist Bug, such as Iron Valiant and Iron Moth. Therefore, teammates that can handle these Pokemon such as Gholdengo and Moltres for the former, and Garganacl and Galarian Slowking for the latter, are heavily appreciated. Slower wallbreakers like Primarina and Raging Bolt help Lokix against bulkier teams, and in return Lokix can help against offensive structures they may struggle with. Primarina in particular is an amazing Lokix partner, as it can help deal with Gliscor, Corviknight, and Garganacl that Lokix struggles with, while Lokix can punish Ogerpon-W and Galarian Slowking that trouble Primarina. Zamazenta pairs well with Lokix as an offensive partner, as it is able to softcheck the various physical attackers that Lokix might struggle to KO reliably, while Lokix can threaten faster Pokemon such as Deoxys-S and Dragapult that threaten Zamazenta.

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[SET]
name: Boots Attacker
move 1: First Impression
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: U-turn
move 4: Sucker Punch
item: Heavy-Duty Boots
tera type: Bug
ability: Tinted Lens
nature: Adamant / Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Paragraph 1
Lokix acts as an incredible revenge killer in the tier, able to utilise its ability in Tinted Lens to revenge kill any weakened offensive threat. First Impression allows Lokix to outspeed everything in the tier, including Pokemon such as Zamazenta and Dragapult (define sizeable, lokix first impression only does a quarter to boots attacker zama and even less to iron press), and hit them for sizeable damage. U-turn allows Lokix to pivot out of bad matchups such as Corviknight and Alomomola Gliscor can be mentioned here, while regaining momentum for the rest of its team. Knock Off allows Lokix to remove items from potential switchins such as Landorus-T and Moltres, while hitting Pokemon such as Pecharunt and Gholdengo for super effective damage. Sucker Punch can act as a secondary priority move for Lokix, allowing it to revenge kill targets such as Iron Moth and Enamorus from much higher health ranges, while also able to be used multiple times in a row. Adamant allows Lokix to get the maximum amount of damage from First Impression and Sucker Punch (any rolls in particular adamant meets? One I found rn is ada sucker punch is 98% likely to 2hko enamorus meanwhile jolly is only 25%, but an example of what specific benefits adamant would be nice), while Jolly allows Lokix to outspeed Great Tusk, Pecharunt and Landorus-T. Tera Bug allows Lokix to further increase the damage output of both First Impression and U-turn, allowing First Impression to 2HKO Kingambit and Zamazenta that has expended its Dauntless Shield.

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Boots attacker Lokix fits best on bulky offense and balance, as they heavily appreciate its revenge killing abilities. Volt Switch users such as Raging Bolt (Lokix and raging bolt are actually rarely seen together, I would cut the mention of bolt and mention Iron crown with the other pivot mons below then elaborate further on how they compliment one another) and Iron Crown pair well with Lokix, as they can form an effective pivoting core that can heavily pressure defensive teams. Other pivot Pokemon such as Landorus-T and Galarian Slowking I would mention pecharunt as well, as bulky offence teams with lokix would rather it over galarian slowking) also pair well with Lokix, as they can get it in safely, and in return Lokix can revenge kill the offensive threats that commonly switch into these Pokemon such as Ogerpon-W and Darkrai. Lokix particularly struggles with faster Pokemon that 4x resist Bug, such as Iron Valiant and Iron Moth. Therefore, teammates that can handle these Pokemon such as Gholdengo and Moltres for the former, and Garganacl and Galarian Slowking for the latter, are heavily appreciated. Entry hazard support from Pokemon such as Tinkaton (Ting lu is probably a better example as a more consistent setter, so I think it should be mentioned) and Gliscor are heavily appreciated (I want to elaborate on this, entry hazards help out significantly in dealing with lokix's defensive answers such as moltres and heatran the former of which lokix can knock off its boots, the point itself is fine but I wanted to add this since lokix doesn't pressure moltres much with knock if strong hazard setters aren't on the users side and heatran forces lokix out and it gets worn down by hazards as well. you could also mention Lando T here again since it was mentioned above), as they can help Lokix against bulkier squads it might otherwise struggle against as it can Knock Off their Heavy Duty Boots (The wording here is a bit confusing, are you saying lokix helps tinkaton and gliscor with knock or vice versa? Either way they're all good knock off users in their own right, and not sure this point is super relevant, do they do anything in particular aside from forming a knock off spam core? Since lokix is fine at removing boots from walls itself perhaps you could mention the utility tools that gliscor and tink offer which lokix lacks? like toxic and encore for said bulkier teams otherwise I think this should be removed) . Slower wallbreakers such as Primarina and Hydrapple (bit of a weird example, hydrapple is pretty niche and doesn't appear all that often as a wallbreaker alongside lokix) are great partners to Lokix, as Lokix can not only get them in easily to start wallbreaking and help deal with the faster playstyles that they usually struggle with, but said wallbreakers can help against the bulkier teams that Lokix can sometimes struggle with. (Maybe we could add to this? primarina helps deal with gliscor, corviknight garganacl and other stopgaps against lokix meanwhile lokix deals with ogerpon and galarian slowking for prim,

One thing that could be worth mentioning is zamazenta as an offensive partner for lokix, not necessarily a wallbreaker but the two do appear together often.

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[SET]
name: Boots Attacker
move 1: First Impression
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: U-turn
move 4: Sucker Punch
item: Heavy-Duty Boots
tera type: Bug
ability: Tinted Lens
nature: Adamant / Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Paragraph 1
Lokix acts as an incredible revenge killer in the tier, able to utilise its ability in Tinted Lens and having access to a strong priority move in First Impression and to revenge kill any weakened offensive threat. First Impression allows Lokix to outspeed everything in the tier, including Pokemon such as Darkrai and Dragapult, and hit them for considerable damage (Outspeed is probably inaccurate since Lokix itself doesn't have a great speed tier, perhaps this could be reworded to "Use its dual priority moves in First Impression and Sucker Punch to great effect" or something similar). U-turn allows Lokix to pivot out of bad matchups common switch ins such as Corviknight, Gliscor, and Alomomola, while regaining momentum for the rest of its team. Knock Off allows Lokix to remove key items like Rocky Helmet and Heavy Duty Boots from potential switchins such as Landorus-T and Moltres, while hitting Pokemon such as Pecharunt and Gholdengo for super effective damage. Sucker Punch can act as a secondary priority move for Lokix, allowing it to revenge kill targets such as Iron Moth and Enamorus from much higher health ranges (can this be reworded to something less arbitrary?), while also able to be used multiple times in a row (this information is a bit redundant imo but if you want to highlight it, could you specify the drawbacks of First Impression and then contrast it to sucker punch? . Adamant allows Lokix to get the maximum amount of damage from First Impression and Sucker Punch, for example giving Sucker Punch good odds to 2HKO Enamorus (could you provide some specific calcs that adamant provides over jolly? One that I found which could be relevant is the combination of First Impression and Sucker Punch is guaranteed to kill offensive Cinderace from 100 only if its Adamant, not Jolly), while Jolly allows Lokix to outspeed Great Tusk, Pecharunt and Landorus-T (some examples which could be more relevant here are pokemon that lie in the speed tier of 283 to 300, rather than ones above 300 - for example, samurott-hisui and gholdengo). Tera Bug allows Lokix to further increase the damage output of both First Impression and U-turn, allowing First Impression to 2HKO Kingambit and Zamazenta that has expended its Dauntless Shield (252+ Atk Tera Bug Lokix First Impression vs. 0 HP / 4 Def Kingambit: 156-184 (45.7 - 53.9%) -- 3.9% chance to 2HKO after Leftovers recovery - even without lefties, it isn't a guaranteed 2HKO even on a 0 bulk gambit - could please recheck these calcs).

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Boots attacker Lokix fits best on bulky offense and balance, as they heavily appreciate its revenge killing abilities and access to key moves like U-Turn and Knock-Off. (Here, could you please expand upon hazard stacking teams and how Lokix fits so well on such teams? You can mention it performs multiple roles like being a strong knocker, momentum gainer and a priority user all in a same slot, ie its role compression, then you could go on to mention hazard stacking teammates that are pair well with lokix - like ting lu, gliscor and spinblockers like Gholdengo and Pecharunt all of which you have already covered below. If you do decide to mention the hazard stacking teammates in this section itself, make sure to remove them from the analysis below). Pivoting Pokemon such as Landorus-T, Pecharunt, Galarian Slowking and Iron Crown pair well with Lokix, as they can get it in safely, and in return Lokix can revenge kill the offensive threats that commonly switch into these Pokemon such as Ogerpon-W and Darkrai (neither wogre nor darkrai actually like switching into any of these pokemon, could this be reworded to something like "offensive pokemon that threaten these teammates"?). Iron Crown in particular is a very good Lokix partner, as they can form an effective VoltTurn pivoting core, which can heavily pressure defensive teams. Lokix particularly struggles with faster Pokemon that 4x resist Bug, such as Iron Valiant and Iron Moth. Therefore, teammates that can handle these Pokemon such as Gholdengo and Moltres for the former, and Garganacl and Galarian Slowking for the latter, are heavily appreciated. Entry hazard support from Pokemon such as Ting-Lu, Landorus-T, and Gliscor are heavily appreciated, as they can help Lokix against bulkier squads it might otherwise struggle against as Lokix can utilise Knock Off to remove Heavy-Duty Boots and eventually wear down its checks such as Moltres and Heatran through hazards. Slower wallbreakers such as Primarina and Choice Specs Iron Crown are great partners to Lokix, as Lokix can not only get them in easily to start wallbreaking and help deal with the faster playstyles that they usually struggle with, but said wallbreakers can help against the bulkier teams that Lokix can sometimes struggle with (Firstly, Iron crown was already mentioned earlier so you could include a different example here like Gholdengo or Raging Bolt. Also, this might be a GP check but this sentence is quite long and perhaps also constructed incorrectly - could you please rewrite this? Something along the lines of "Slower wallbreakers like .... help lokix against bulkier teams, and in return lokix covers their weakness against offensive structures" could work). Primarina in particular is an amazing Lokix partner, as it can help deal with Gliscor, Corviknight, and Garganacl that Lokix struggles with, while Lokix can punish Ogerpon-W and Galarian Slowking that trouble Primarina. Zamazenta pairs well with Lokix as an offensive partner, as it is able to take on Pokemon such as Galarian Weezing (factually incorrect imo as GWeez is an excellent counter to Zama, you could perhaps reword this to something more generic without giving an example as zama generally acts a offensive check to a variety of mons) that Lokix might struggle with, while Lokix can threaten out the faster Pokemon such as Deoxys-S and Dragapult that outspeed Zamazenta.

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I'd like to just recheck this once you've implemented these changes. Thanks in advance!
 
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Made just a few minor changes, tysm! QC 2/2 once incorporated
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[SET]
name: Boots Attacker
move 1: First Impression
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: U-turn
move 4: Sucker Punch
item: Heavy-Duty Boots
tera type: Bug
ability: Tinted Lens
nature: Adamant / Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Paragraph 1
Lokix acts as an incredible revenge killer in the tier, able to utilise its ability in Tinted Lens and having access to a strong priority move in First Impression. First Impression can get around Lokix's mediocre modest base speed and revenge kill Pokemon such as Darkrai and Dragapult by hitting them for considerable damage. U-turn allows Lokix to pivot out of common switch ins such as Corviknight, Gliscor, and Alomomola, while gaining momentum for the rest of its team. Knock Off allows Lokix to remove key items like Rocky Helmet and Heavy-Duty Boots from potential switchins such as Landorus-T and Moltres, while hitting Pecharunt and Gholdengo for super effective damage. Sucker Punch can act as a secondary priority move for Lokix, allowing it to revenge kill targets that quad resist First Impression such as Iron Moth and Enamorus (The quad resists are mentioned again below, so perhaps you can make this more generic, something like "and the combination of bug and dark type priority moves coupled with its ability makes it doubly effective")
Adamant allows Lokix to get the maximum amount of damage from First Impression and Sucker Punch, for example allowing Lokix to OHKO Cinderace from full with First Impression into Sucker Punch and giving Sucker Punch good odds to 2HKO Enamorus, while Jolly allows Lokix to outspeed Pecharunt, Hisuian Samurott and Gholdengo. Tera Bug allows Lokix to further increase the damage output of both First Impression and U-turn, allowing First Impression to 2HKO Kyurem and Zamazenta that has expended its Dauntless Shield.

Paragraph 2
Boots attacker Lokix fits best on bulky offense and balance, as they heavily appreciate its revenge killing abilities and access to key moves like U-turn and Knock Off. Hazard stacking teams love Lokix, as it can role compress perform multiple roles such as being a strong Knock Off user, momentum gainer and revenge killer. Therefore, Entry hazard support from Pokemon such as Ting-Lu, Landorus-T, and Gliscor are heavily appreciated, as they can help Lokix against bulkier squads it might otherwise struggle against as Lokix can utilise Knock Off to remove Heavy-Duty Boots and eventually wear down its checks such as Moltres and Heatran through hazards. Spinblockers such as Air Balloon Gholdengo and Pecharunt also pair well with Lokix, as they can prevent Rapid Spin from Great Tusk and Iron Treads from removing entry hazards. Pivoting Pokemon such as Landorus-T, Pecharunt, Galarian Slowking and Iron Crown pair well with Lokix, as they can get it in safely, and in return Lokix can revenge kill the offensive threats that threaten these teammates such as Ogerpon-W and Darkrai. Iron Crown in particular is a very good Lokix partner, as they can form an effective pivoting core, which can heavily pressure defensive teams. Lokix particularly struggles with faster Pokemon that 4x resist Bug, such as Iron Valiant and Iron Moth. Therefore, teammates that can handle these Pokemon such as Gholdengo and Moltres for the former, and Garganacl and Galarian Slowking for the latter, are heavily appreciated. Slower wallbreakers like Primarina and Raging Bolt help Lokix against bulkier teams, and in return Lokix can help against offensive structures they may struggle with. Primarina in particular is an amazing Lokix partner, as it can help deal with Gliscor, Corviknight, and Garganacl that Lokix struggles with, while Lokix can punish Ogerpon-W and Galarian Slowking that trouble Primarina. Zamazenta pairs well with Lokix as an offensive partner, as it is able to softcheck the various physical attackers that Lokix might struggle to KO reliably, while Lokix can threaten faster Pokemon such as Deoxys-S and Dragapult that outspeed threaten Zamazenta.

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