Bulky Set-up Sweeper Bronzong [QC 0/2] [GP 0/1]

[Miyoko]

[SET]
name: Bulky set-up sweeper
move 1: Iron Defense
move 2: Calm Mind/ Rest
move 3: Body Press
move 4: Stored Power / Psychic Noise
item: Leftovers
ability: Levitate
nature: Calm
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD
tera type: Water

[SET COMMENTS]

Bronzong is one of the best set-up Pokemon in the current metagame. With its access to Iron Defense, Bronzong can easily maximize its Defense stat and become a physical wall against Pokemon such as Pawmot, Scrafty, and Staraptor. Iron Defense also boosts the power of Body Press which can do immense damage to most Pokemon of the metagame such as Coalossal, Wo-Chien, Zoroark, Ambipom, Sandslash-Alola, Scrafty, and Skuntank. Rest keeps Bronzong healthy so that it can take more physical hits while allowing it to heal its Status Conditions, especially Burn. Calm Mind over Rest can be used for set-up sweeping as it raises Bronzong's Special Attack and Special Defense while allowing it to take more Special hits and strengthen its Stored Power. Psychic Noise allows Bronzong to stop its opposing Pokemon from healing while doing some damage to it. Stored Power, boosted by Iron Defense and Calm Mind, is useful to sweep through many teams. Both Psychic Noise and Stored Power also helps to hit Poison-types such as Salazzle and Toxtricity. Stored Power should almost always be used alongside Calm Mind to minimize Bronzong’s passivity. Non-Calm Mind Bronzong must run Rest and Psychic Noise. Levitate makes Bronzong immune to Ground-type moves, removing its Ground weakness against certain Pokemon such as Mudsdale, Gligar, Gastrodon, and Golurk. Max HP, Max Special Defense, Calm nature, and passive recovery from Leftovers makes it even more bulkier and cover Special attacks, in case Bronzong doesn't run Calm Mind. Tera Water is a good defensive Tera type, covering its Fire-type weakness while helping it to live Specs Hydro Pump from Inteleon.

Bronzong works pretty decently in both offensive and defensive teams. However, Set up sweeper Bronzong works best in offensive teams. With the support of certain strong special attackers such as Florges, and other physical offensive Pokemon such as Scyther, Zoroark, Flamigo, and Tauros-Paldea-Water. Tauros-Paldea-Water and Choice Specs Inteleon pairs well with Bronzong as it hits Fire-types with super effective damage. They also benefit from it as it resists Grass-type attacks. Defensive Pokemon such as Altaria and Gastrodon can also be paired with Bronzong to cover it's Ground and Fire weakness. Florges can be a useful partner to hit Dark-type Pokemon as well as become a Specially Defensive wall. Bronzong's Steel typing allows it to cover Florges' Steel and Poison weakness, thus benefiting it. Bellibolt can be a good partner as it benefits from Bronzong's ability and covers Ground-type weakness. Since Bronzong is a set-up sweeper, it can pair well with hazard-setting Pokemon such as Smeargle, Golurk, and Gastrodon. Other Offensive partners that fit well with Bronzong in Hyper Offense teams can be Arcanine, Grimmsnarl, Skuntank, Kilowattrel, Decidueye, Slowbro-Galar, Delphox, and Meloetta. It also fits well with defensive partners such as Altaria, Mudsdale, Glilgar, Wo-Chien, Naclstack, Goodra, and Houndstone.

[SET CREDITS]
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Quality checked by:
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[Miyoko]

ready for qc

 

[Bella]

[SET]
name: Bulky set-up sweeper Setup Sweeper (simplified name)
move 1: Iron Defense
move 2: Calm Mind / (add a space here) Rest
move 3: Body Press
move 4: Stored Power / Psychic Noise
item: Leftovers
ability: Levitate
nature: Calm
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD
tera type: Water

[SET COMMENTS]

Bronzong is one of the best set-up Pokemon in the current metagame. (not really) With its access to Iron Defense, Bronzong can easily maximize its Defense stat and become a physical wall against Pokemon such as Pawmot, Scrafty, and Staraptor. (Can you combine these into one sentence? can say along the lines of "Thanks to great boosting moves in Iron Defense and Calm Mind and useful options like Body Press and Stored Power, Brozong is a niche, but potentially threatening setup sweeper" or something like that. Feels like your overselling Setup zong atm. I would also mention how great of an ability Levitate is, lets you use Grounds as bait such as gligar.) Iron Defense also boosts the power of Body Press which can do immense damage to most Pokemon of the metagame such as Coalossal, Wo-Chien, Zoroark, Ambipom, Sandslash-Alola, Scrafty, and Skuntank. (So you really dont need to mention all of these examples. Please just rewrite this a bit to say that Body Press is boosted by Iron Defense and can hit Pokemon like x and y.) Rest keeps Bronzong healthy so that it can take more physical hits while allowing it to heal its Status Conditions, especially Burn. (This should be mentioned after CM.) Calm Mind over Rest can be is used for set-up sweeping as it raises Bronzong's Special Attack and Special Defense while allowing it to take more Special hits and strengthen its Stored Power. (Mention rest here as an alternative) Psychic Noise allows Bronzong to stop its opposing Pokemon from healing while doing some damage to it. (Ok two things: 1) This should be after the stored power mention and 2) Please mention examples like Gastro and Belly here cause atm this is super vague) Stored Power, boosted by Iron Defense and Calm Mind, is useful to sweep through many teams. (Once again, vagueness is a major issue here. You need to mention why its such a good boosting move and how it allows it to muscle through even the bulkiest of threats like Palo, Alt, and Houndstone that Psynoise cant do.) Both Psychic Noise and Stored Power also helps to hit Poison-types such as Salazzle and Toxtricity. Stored Power should almost always be used alongside Calm Mind to minimize Bronzong’s passivity. Non-Calm Mind Bronzong must run Rest and Psychic Noise. (This is obvious with your last sentence.) Levitate makes Bronzong immune to Ground-type moves, removing its Ground weakness against certain Pokemon such as Mudsdale, Gligar, Gastrodon, and Golurk. Max HP, Max Special Defense, Calm nature, and passive recovery from Leftovers makes it even more bulkier and cover Special attacks, in case Bronzong doesn't run Calm Mind. (All of these are relatively obvious + Lev should be mentioned in the opener anyways.) Tera Water is a good defensive Tera type, covering its Fire-type weakness (which helps against..?) while helping it to live Specs Hydro Pump from Inteleon. (You need to mention how it removes your toxic immune, which is super big especially on non rest sets cause it means the most common toxic mon (belIy) just cripples you.)

Bronzong works pretty decently in both offensive and defensive teams. However, Set up sweeper Bronzong works best in offensive teams. (This is not true. DEFENSIVE Bronzong fits on balance and fat. Setup fits on stuff ranging from offense to hyper offense to even some balance.) With the support of certain strong special attackers such as Florges, and other physical offensive Pokemon such as Scyther, Zoroark, Flamigo, and Tauros-Paldea-Water. Tauros-Paldea-Water and Choice Specs Inteleon pairs well with Bronzong as it hits Fire-types with super effective damage. (The mention of Florges makes no sense as all the fires win against it anyways and also there should not be a period here. Also, what fire types?) They also benefit from it as it resists Grass-type attacks. (How does this help migo, florges, scyther, zoro, or florges at all? Also, even with the waters you mention this is super vague when you dont mention how exactly Setup zong helps back for them. you could mention that bronzong helps them use their checks like non Knock pawmot / kilowatt / altaria as bait to setup.) Defensive Pokemon such as Altaria and Gastrodon can also be paired with Bronzong to cover it's Ground and Fire weakness. (Ground weakness does not matter cause of levitate and you already mention your fire weakness and how you cover it.) Florges can be a useful partner to hit Dark-type Pokemon (such as?) as well as become a Specially Defensive wall (the vast majority of Florges are secondary walls though, you cant rely it to be the spd wall on its own.). Bronzong's Steel typing allows it to cover Florges' Steel and Poison weakness, thus benefiting it. (Ok, but how does this help florges exactly? where are the examples?) Bellibolt can be a good partner as it benefits from Bronzong's ability and covers Ground-type weakness. Since Bronzong is a set-up sweeper, it can pair well with hazard-setting Pokemon such as Smeargle, Golurk, (Smeargle is exclusively a ho lead and sucks dick and golurk runs band. would rather mention Pokemon like Bombird, Muds, or Coal here instead.) and Gastrodon. Other Offensive partners that fit well with Bronzong in Hyper Offense teams can be Arcanine, Grimmsnarl, Skuntank, Kilowattrel, Decidueye, Slowbro-Galar, Delphox, and Meloetta. It also fits well with defensive partners such as Altaria, Mudsdale, Glilgar, Wo-Chien, Naclstack, Goodra, and Houndstone. (these examples has no expansion on why they are good partners. Do they help beat Bronzongs checks such as Taunt Pokemon like Skunk and Bombird or Phazing from the likes of Muds, Goodra, Hounds, etc? Do they benefit from Bronzongs ability to setup on their checks? Also, Grimm, Skunk, non CM Galarbro, and Melo arent HO Pokemon. Goodra is not a defensive threat either.)

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
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Quality checked by:

Grammar checked by:
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Hi, so i will be giving a QC Reject for this analysis and request this to be reassigned. There's alot of issues so i'm just going to highlight a few of my issues

1. There's quite a few grammatical errors. When writing, its Paldean Tauros-W, Galarian Slowbro, and Alolan Sandslash. Not Tauros-Paldea-Water, Slowbro-Galar, and Sandslash-Alola. Alot of the sentences are written to be extremely run on or have periods that should not be there. For example "With the support of certain strong special attackers such as Florges, and other physical offensive Pokemon such as Scyther, Zoroark, Flamigo, and Tauros-Paldea-Water. Tauros-Paldea-Water and Choice Specs Inteleon pairs well with Bronzong as it hits Fire-types with super effective damage."

2. Alot of obvious info is presented here. We don't need info on such a basic spread like this. We don't need to explain that non Calm Mind bronzong will not run stored power since you already write a sentence on it.

3. A bunch of issues are found in the teammates section. It reads like you are just explaining that x teammate is good for bronzong because typing. Its ok to say something like that, but the issue is you need to expand on that, and you don't do that.

I would recommend reading a bit into PU resources here and play the tier a bit more to get a better grasp on the metagame. Especially because atm this reads like someone just looked at the vr and did not actually play with the set enough to understand how to pilot it and how to write about it....

Btw, please don't let this discourage you from writing! Everyone starts somewhere and no one is perfect on the first go.

 

[asa]

Locking and moving this now, feel free to reserve something else you have experience with. Don't hesitate to contact me, UberSkitty, or someone else on the QC team if you have any questions.