National Dex Calm mind raging bolt [GP 0/1]

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[SET]
Raging Bolt @ Dragonium Z / Leftovers / Booster Energy
Name: Calm Mind
Ability: Protosynthesis
Tera Type: Flying / Fairy
EVs: 104 HP / 76 Def / 148 SpA / 180 Spe
Modest Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Thunderclap
- Thunderbolt / Substitute / Taunt
- Calm Mind
- Draco Meteor

[SET COMMENTS]
With access to Calm Mind and a stellar base 137 Special Attack, Raging Bolt is able to act as an excellent bulky setup sweeper. Raging Bolt’s good typing allows it to break through defensive Pokemkn like Corviknight and bulky Water-types like Alomomola, Toxapex, and Rotom-W while also checking threats like Rillaboom, Ogerpon-W, and Kartana. Thunderclap offsets Raging Bolt’s subpar Speed stat, allowing it to revenge kill offensive threats such as Urshifu-R, Ogerpon-W, and Mega Lopunny as well as weakened setup sweepers like Iron Boulder, Volcarona, and Swords Dance Kartana, while Thunderbolt gives Raging Bolt a consistent damaging attack that doesn’t rely on prediction like Thunderclap and has significantly higher PP, allowing Raging Bolt to use its Electric-type moves in longer games. Substitute is an alternative to nullify passive Pokémon that can’t touch Raging Bolt such as Rotom-W, Ferrothorn, and Zapdos and give it more opportunities to set up, while Taunt can be used to deny setup from Garganacl and Mega Scizor but at the cost of a worse matchup against Galarian Slowking. Draco Meteor in tandem with Dragonium Z lets it break through Electric-immune Pokemon such as Gliscor, Clodsire, and Ting-Lu as well as other specially bulky Pokémon that can take on Raging Bolt such as Mega Tyranitar and Galarian Slowking. Alternatively, Leftovers is also an option on Substitute sets to passively heal the chip taken from Substitute and give Raging Bolt some form of recovery. Tera Flying grants Raging Bolt a Ground immunity while giving a Fighting resistance that helps against Great Tusk and Zamazenta while also avoiding any Ground-type coverage from Serperior. Tera Fairy gives this same Fighting resistance while giving Raging Bolt an immunity to Dragon-type moves from the likes of Garchomp and Gouging Fire. The EV spread allows Raging Bolt to live a Choice Scarf Landorus-T Earthquake from full HP and have a chance to OHKO Mega Tyranitar after Stealth Rock; the EVs also give a chance to OHKO Galarian Slowking with a boosted Devastating Drake as well as OHKO Iron Valiant with a boosted Thunderclap after Stealth Rock chip. Raging Bolt struggles against fast Ground- and Fairy-types like Garchomp, Choice Scarf Landorus-T, Great Tusk, Tapu Koko, Iron Valiant, and especially Tapu Lele; Tapu Lele in particular can give Raging Bolt some trouble as well, as its Psychic Surge renders Thunderclap useless. Teammates like Mega Scizor, Ferrothorn, Rillaboom, and Galarian Slowking help beat these checks. Since Raging Bolt has no reliable recovery, Alomomola is a good partner to pass huge HP wishes to it and pivot it in. Other pivots like Tornadus-T, Mega Scizor, and Landorus-T also help bring Raging Bolt in safely. Teammates like Great Tusk and Zamazenta appreciate Raging Bolt taking care of Flying-types like Tornadus-T and Zapdos as well as bulky Waters like Rotom-W and Alomomola. In return, they help check Ferrothorn and Weavile. Great Tusk is another good partner, because it helps remove entry hazards, which harm Raging Bolt greatly, particularly Spikes.

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change tini mention to kart at the start, tini is not relevant enough of a mon. change torn t mention to something that would actually be realistic, like say lop or whatever. change kommo o mention in the tera part to a more relevant mon that uses dragon moves, like idk gouging fire or something. change your mentions in the fast ground types and fairy types, specify choice scarf lando t, not "offensive", mention tusk, remove treads, and in the fairy section remove tapu bulu and change it to valiant. u can combine these 2 sections into one like "faster fairy- and ground-type pokemon such as bla bla bla" to make it more concise. mention pivots to bring it in

otherwise once implemented tag me, but looks like a good start, well done
 
i dont see what its offensive typing has to do with gking and garg so remove those
in the dragonium z section i would reword it slightly here
mention ferro in the sub section, u turn it into fodder with sub
Ineros said:
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to "lets it break through"

and switch the examples onto tougher foes mainly, stuff like lando serp and tera grass tran all die to a +1 draco already, the main targets are like mega tar, gking, gliscor, ting lu, so just mention those, no need to stuff it full of examples.
1/1 for me but omar
 
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[SET]
Raging Bolt @ Dragonium Z / Leftovers / Booster Energy booster is prob worse overall than zdrag but if the z slot is alr used is a decent option
Ability: Protosynthesis
Tera Type: Grass / Flying / Fairy grass is p much just worse flying, it doesn't truly blank the grounds since even smth like unaclod can just spam eq forever and deny lefties
EVs: 116 HP / 76 Def / 136 SpA / 180 Spe 104 HP / 76 Def / 148 SpA / 180 Spe does the same thing as listed below and gives u some extra spatk, could also be extra speed so change that iyw
Modest Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Thunderclap
- Thunderbolt / Substitute / Taunt taunt does p much the same thing as sub but lets u deny setup and if tera fly blanks standard support glisc lando and clod, only downside is a worse gking mu
- Calm Mind
- Draco Meteor


[SET COMMENTS]
With Calm Mind, Raging Bolt is a good wincon that uses its stellar 137 base Special Attack and good offensive typing to With access to Calm mind alongside a stellar base 137 Special attack, Raging Bolt is able to act as an excelent bulky setup sweeper. Raging Bolt's good typing allows it to break through defensive Pokémon like Garganacl, Galarian Slowking, Corviknight, and bulky Water types like Alomomola, Toxapex, and Rotom-W. Raging Bolt also has a good defensive typing that checks ,while also checking threats like Rillaboom, the aforementioned Ogerpon-W, and Kartana. Thunderclap offsets Raging Bolt’s subpar speed stat, allowing it to revenge kill offensive threats such as Urshifu-R, Ogerpon-W, and Mega Lopunny and other revenge kill weakened setup sweepers like Iron Boulder, Volcarona, and Swords Dance Kartana. , while Thunderbolt gives Raging Bolt a consistent damaging attack into Clefable, Mega Scizor, and Iron Defense Zamazenta, as these Pokémon can take advantage of Thunderclap failing if they don’t attack Raging Bolt. these examples are fine but outplaying thunderclap is something that almost every mon can do that does not rely on prediction like Thunderclap Thunderbolt also has much more PP than Thunderclap while also having significantly higher PP, allowing Raging Bolt to use its STABs in longer-term games., Substitute is also an alternative option to nullify passive Pokémon that can’t touch Raging Bolt such as Rotom-W, Ferrothorn, and Zapdos and gives it more opportunities to set up. ,add a small section on taunt here Draco Meteor in tandem with Dragonium Z is used to hit Electric immune or resistant Pokémon such as Landorus-T, Gliscor, Clodsire, Ting-Lu, Serperior, and Tera Grass Heatran as well as others specially bulky Pokemon that can take on Raging Bolt such as Mega Tyranitar and Galarian Slowking. , alternatively Leftovers is also an option on sSubstitute sets to passively heal the chip taken from sSubstitute and gives Raging Bolt some form of recovery. If Raging Bolt decides to use Terastalization, this part is unnecesary, you can just start talking about the tera options Tera Grass can keep its Water and Grass resistance while also gaining a Ground resistance, which helps check Landorus-T and Gliscor and even use them as setup fodder. Tera Flying grants Raging Bolt a Ground immunity while giving a Fighting resistance that helps check against Great Tusk and Zamazenta. This Tera Type also helps check Serperior better, as it keeps its grass resistance while being immune to any Ground type coverage it may have. , while also avoiding potential Ground coverage from Serperior, Tera Fairy gives this same fighting resistance while giving Raging Bolt an immunity to Dragon type moves from the likes of Garchomp and Gouging Fire. The EV spread helps allows Raging Bolt to live a Choice Scarf Landorus-T Earthquake from full, have a chance to OHKO Mega Tyranitar after Stealth Rock and give a chance to OHKO Galarian Slowking with a boosted Devastating Drake, as well as OHKO Iron Valiant with a boosted Thunderclap after Stealth Rock chip. [Teammates like Great Tusk and Zamazenta appreciate Raging Bolt taking care of Flying types like Tornadus-T and Zapdos as well as bulky Waters like Rotom-W and Alomomola. In while in return, they help check Ferrothorn and Weavile. Great Tusk in particular is a good partner because it helps remove hazards which harm limit Raging Bolt greatly, particularly Spikes.] everything in brackets should go in the bottom, so as to have two seperate teammate and threats section, instead of the latter being slapped in the middle Raging Bolt struggles against fast Ground and Fairy types like Garchomp, Choice Scarf Landorus-T, Great Tusk,Tapu Koko, Iron Valiant, and especially Tapu Lele can give Raging Bolt some trouble as well. Tapu Lele greatly hinders Raging Bolt because, as its Psychic Terrain renders Thunderclap useless. Teammates like Mega Scizor, Ferrothorn, Rillaboom, and Galarian Slowking help beat these checks. Since Raging Bolt has no recovery, Alomomola is a good partner to pass huge HP wishes to it and pivot it in. Other pivots like Tornadus-T, Mega Scizor, and Landorus-T help bring Raging Bolt in safely.

the content is good, just way too many full stops where commas could be, also might need to reword a few more parts as it's still a bit long for an analysis
 
omarsgarciav thank you for doing my job for me but you dont have to (jokes aside focus on content and leave grammar to us)
1/1 GP Team done

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[SET]
Raging Bolt @ Dragonium Z / Leftovers / Booster Energy
Name: Great Neck or whatever other name actually, im not even sure if ur allowed to be informal here or not so probably change it
Ability: Protosynthesis
Tera Type: Flying / Fairy
EVs: 104 HP / 76 Def / 148 SpA / 180 Spe
Modest Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Thunderclap
- Thunderbolt / Substitute / Taunt
- Calm Mind
- Draco Meteor

[SET COMMENTS]
With access to Calm Mind and a stellar base 137 Special Attack, Raging Bolt is able to act as an excellent bulky setup sweeper. Raging Bolt’s good typing allows it to break through defensive Pokémon Pokemon no like Corviknight and bulky Water-(AH)types like Alomomola, Toxapex, and Rotom-W, (RC) while also checking threats like Rillaboom, the aforementioned when did u mention this Ogerpon-W, and Kartana. Thunderclap offsets Raging Bolt’s subpar Speed stat, allowing it to revenge kill offensive threats such as Urshifu-R, Ogerpon-W, and Mega Lopunny and revenge kill as well as avoid "and" repeat and "revenge kill" repeat at the same time weakened setup sweepers like Iron Boulder, Volcarona, and Swords Dance Kartana, while Thunderbolt gives Raging Bolt a consistent damaging attack that doesn’t rely on prediction like Thunderclap and has significantly higher PP, allowing Raging Bolt to use its STABs Electric-type move STAB refers to the boost so it should be "STAB moves" but here im pretty sure ur just referring to the elec moves, if i got that wrong put "STAB moves" in longer games. Substitute is an alternative to nullify passive Pokémon that can’t touch Raging Bolt such as Rotom-W, Ferrothorn, and Zapdos and gives it more opportunities to set up, while Taunt can be used to deny setup from Garganacl and Mega Scizor but at the cost of a worse matchup against Galarian Slowking. Draco Meteor in tandem with Dragonium Z yes lets it break through Electric-(AH)immune Pokémon Pokemon no such as Gliscor, Clodsire, and Ting-Lu as well as other specially bulky Pokémon that can take on Raging Bolt such as Mega Tyranitar and Galarian Slowking. Alternatively, (AC) Leftovers is also an option on Substitute sets to passively heal the chip taken from Substitute and gives Raging Bolt some form of recovery. Tera Flying grants Raging Bolt a Ground immunity while giving a Fighting resistance that helps agaisnt against whoa whoa slow down when typing buddy Great Tusk and Zamazenta while also avoiding any Ground-(AH)type coverage from Serperior. Tera Fairy gives this same Fighting resistance while giving Raging Bolt an immunity to Dragon-(AH)type moves from the likes of Garchomp and Gouging Fire. The EV spread allows Raging Bolt to live a Choice Scarf Landorus-T Earthquake from full HP, have a chance to OHKO Mega Tyranitar after Stealth Rock, (AC) and give a chance to OHKO Galarian Slowking with a boosted Devastating Drake, (RC) as well as OHKO Iron Valiant with a boosted Thunderclap after Stealth Rock chip. hecker of a sentence, technically correct but you can also split it up with "EVs do this and this; they also do this and this" kinda structure Raging Bolt struggles against fast Ground-(AH) and Fairy-(AH)types like Garchomp, Choice Scarf Landorus-T, Great Tusk,(space)Tapu Koko, Iron Valiant, and especially Tapu Lele; (AS) It in particular <- feel free to discuss this one over cord cos it feels wonky to me can give Raging Bolt some trouble as well, as its Psychic Terrain Surge pterrain is the move, psurge is the ability that summons the terrain and still not the moverenders Thunderclap useless. just a note, listing sooooo many checks like that makes this great mon SEEM bad Teammates like Mega Scizor, Ferrothorn, Rillaboom, and Galarian Slowking help beat these checks. Since Raging Bolt has no reliable leftys is literally slashed recovery, Alomomola is a good partner to pass huge HP wishes to it and pivot it in. Other pivots like Tornadus-T, Mega Scizor, and Landorus-T also seems nice to add help bring Raging Bolt in safely. Teammates like Great Tusk and Zamazenta appreciate Raging Bolt taking care of Flying-(AH)types like Tornadus-T and Zapdos as well as bulky Waters like Rotom-W and Alomomola. In return, they help check Ferrothorn and Weavile. Great Tusk is a another good partner, (AC) because it helps remove entry first mention of hazards needs the word "entry" hazards, (AC) which harm Raging Bolt greatly, particularly Spikes.

[CREDITS]
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