AAA Cheem-Pao (Sword of ruin Chien-Pao) [QC 2/2] [GP 1/1] [Done]

Hiusi guy

Hiusi guy

[SET]
Choice Band (Chien-Pao) @ Choice Band
Ability: Sword of Ruin
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Icicle Crash
- Crunch / Lash Out
- Ice Shard
- Sacred Sword

[SET COMMENTS]
Chien-Pao is a fast and hard-hitting attacker able to burst through many weakened teams with little struggle, with its strong Ice- and Dark-type STAB moves and a Choice Band to increase its already good Attack to threaten many popular defensive Pokemon such as Great Tusk, Mandibuzz, and Zapdos. Chien-Pao uses Sacred Sword in order to guarantee an OHKO on Pokemon like Kingambit, Heatran, and Hisuian Goodra, as well as heavily chipping Zamazenta-C. It can also use Lash Out over Crunch, which can 2HKO Intimidate Corviknight after Stealth Rock damage, though getting extra chip on Corviknight can help to guarantee the 2HKO. With Chien-Pao having one of the highest Speed tiers, it's able to pick up OHKOs on many frailer offensive Pokemon like Ogerpon-C and Gengar, it also works excellently as a revenge killer because of Ice Shard and it's its aforementioned high Speed able to take down weakened Pokemon or force out Pokemon like Ceruledge, Zapdos, and Azelf. Offensive Pivots such as Barraskewda and Hisuian Electrode appreciate Chien-Pao's presence, as they like being able to pivot into Chien-Pao to deal with Hisuian Goodra or Corviknight. Chien-Pao is weak to entry hazards, limiting how many times it can come in, so teammates like Corviknight, Mandibuzz, and Great Tusk can all help with it whilst also taking hits that Chien-Pao can't take and pivoting to get it in safely. Even with help from pivoting, Chien-Pao does have a hard time breaking through common foes such as defensive Corviknight, Unaware Scream Tail, and Quaquaval, which can all switch in on it fairly easily, but the help of teammates like Mixed Garchomp, Magic Guard Heatran, and Hisuian Electrode can help deal with its checks.

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hi Hiusi guy, slight change to the moveset of pao. it should be lash out slashed with crunch instead of sacred sword, so the set should look like:

- Icicle Crash
- Crunch / Lash Out
- Ice Shard
- Sacred Sword

since if you go mono stab you cant break other stuff like zamac, gambit and regen tinkaton, as well as losing an option to remove pao and weavile
 
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please add [SET] above your chien-pao, and make your chien-pao look like this: Choice Band (Chien-Pao) @ Choice Band
Chien-Pao is a fast and hard hitting attacker able to burst through many weakened teams with little struggle at times <-- can be said for any wallbreaker, with it's strong Ice/Dark coverage and a choice band to increase it's already good offense it's able to OHKO - 2HKO threaten many popular defensive Pokemon such as Defensive you already said defensive Great Tusk, Mandibuzz, and Goodra-Hisui, as well it uses Sacred Sword in order to Guarantee OHKO Pokemon like Kingambit, Heatran, and Goodra-Hisui, it can also use Lash Out over Crunch which can be less consistent but can lash out isnt really less consistent, it just has a lower damage output 2HKO Corviknight after Stealth Rock damage because of the Intimadate drop <-- might want to mention that its a roll when its from full taking rocks, meaning you need more external chip, and with having one of the highest speed tiers it's able to pick up OHKOs on many other Pokemon with less defense's like Ogerpon-Conerstone and Gengar. Offensive Pivots will usually usually is a strange word to use since they do consistently like chien as a partner appreciate Chien-Pao's presence such as Barraskewda and Electrode-Hisui who like being able to pivot into Chein-Pao to deal with Goodra-Hisui or Corviknight. Chien-Pao can be a little predicaton reliant at times though as once it clicks a move it's locked in <-- this does apply to every choice locked attacker so its not really worth noting and is weak to hazards limiting how many times it can come in which Corviknight, Mandibuzz, and Iron Treads Great Tusk can all help with whilst also pivoting into Chein-Pao to get it in safely, though Chien-Pao does have a hard time breaking through common Defensive Corviknight, Unaware Screem Tail, and Zamazenta zamac cannot switch into Sacred Sword, instead use Quaquaval who can all switch in on it fairly easly, but with Pokemon like Garchomp or Heatran they can help to deter these switch in's whilst also setting hazards. you are missing mentions of Chien-Pao being a revenge killer, good offensive partners that can deal with Chien-Pao's checks like gengar, the
implement these and ping me for a re-check

there are quite a few capitalization issues, spelling and grammatical errors, you might want to check out the spelling and grammar standards. this will help the QC and GP process greatly since we can easily help to find points you missed / don't need.
 
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Chien-Pao is a fast and hard hitting attacker wallbreaker and cleaner able to burst through many weakened teams with little struggle, with it's strong Ice/Dark coverage Ice- and Dark-type STAB moves stab isnt really coverage, theres a difference and a choice band <-- capitalize this to increase it's already good offense Attack, it's able to threaten many popular defensive Pokemon such as Great Tusk, Mandibuzz, and Hisuian Goodra, as well it uses Sacred Sword in order to Guarantee OHKO Pokemon like Kingambit, Heatran, and Hisuian Goodra Zamazenta-C zamac is one of the key things that sacred sword needs to hit; otherwise, chien is walled by it. It can also use Lash Out over Crunch which can 2HKO Corviknight after Stealth Rock damage because of the Intimadate drop though this is a range so extra chip will help guarantee it <-- looking at the part i bolded only, you can say that it hits Intimidate Corv harder (you dont need to explain why lash out does more, thats dex info), and rephrase the second part to be more clear; you want as much extra chip to secure the 2hko since 2 Lash Outs arent guaranteed to 2HKO it. With Chien-Pao having one of the highest speed tiers it's able to pick up OHKOs on many other Pokemon with less defense's frailer offensive Pokemon like Ogerpon-C and Gengar. It also works excellently as a revenge killer because of with Ice Shard and it's aforementioned high speed able to take down weakened Pokemon or force out Pokemon like Ceruledge, Zapdos, or Azelf to be able to force a KO on somthing else this is subjective, they could have a healthy corviknight at the back and it wouldnt be forcing an ohko on it, instead, youll want to leave it as just forcing them out. Offensive Pivots such as Barraskewda and Hisuian Electrode will appreciate Chien-Pao's presence as they like being able to pivot into Chein-Pao to deal with Hisuian Goodra or Corviknight. Chien-Pao is weak to hazards limiting how many times it can come in which Corviknight, Mandibuzz, and Great Tusk can all help with whilst also pivoting into Chein-Pao to get it in safely. <-- rephrase this to add that they also live the hits that chien-pao cant Even with help from pivoting Chien-Pao does have a hard time breaking through common Defensive Corviknight, Unaware Scream Tail, and Quaqaval who can all switch in on it fairly easly, but with the help of Pokemon teammates like Mixed Garchomp, Magic Guard Heatran, or Hisuian Electrode can help deal with it's checks.
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[Set]
Choice Band (Chien-Pao) @ Choice Band
Ability: Sword of Ruin
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Icicle Crash
- Crunch / Lash Out
- Ice Shard
- Sacred Sword

[Set Comments]
Chien-Pao is a fast and hard hitting attacker able to burst through many weakened teams with little struggle, as with its it's strong Ice- and Dark-Type STABs and a Choice Band to increase it's already good Attack it's able to threaten many popular defensive Pokemon such as Great Tusk, Mandibuzz, and Zamazenta-C Zapdos. (add period) as well it Chien-Pao uses Sacred Sword in order to Guarantee OHKO Pokemon like Kingambit, Heatran, and Hisuian Goodra as well as heavily chip Zamazenta-C. It can also use Lash Out over Crunch which can 2HKO Intimdate Corviknight after Stealth Rock damage though this is a range so extra chip will help guarantee it. With Chien-Pao having one of the highest speed tiers it's its able to pick up OHKOs on many frailer offensive Pokemon like Ogerpon-C and Gengar. It also works excellently as a revenge killer because of Ice Shard and it's aforementioned high speed able to take down weakened Pokemon or force out Pokemon like Ceruledge, Zapdos, or Azelf. Offensive Pivots such as Barraskewda and Hisuian Electrode will appreciate Chien-Pao's presence as they like being able to pivot into Chein-Pao to deal with Hisuian Goodra or Corviknight. Chien-Pao is weak to entry hazards limiting how many times it can come in which Corviknight, Mandibuzz, and Great Tusk can all help with whilst also taking hits hit's for Chien-Pao that it couldn't and pivoting into Chein-Pao to get it in safely. Even with help from pivoting Chien-Pao does have a hard time breaking through common Defensive Corviknight, Unaware Scream Tail, and Quaqaval who can all switch in on it fairly easily, but with the help of teammates like Mixed Garchomp, Magic Guard Heatran, or Hisuian Electrode can help deal with its it's checks.


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Hiusi guy said:
[Set]
Choice Band (Chien-Pao) @ Choice Band
Ability: Sword of Ruin
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Icicle Crash
- Crunch / Lash Out
- Ice Shard
- Sacred Sword

[Set Comments]
Chien-Pao is a fast and hard hitting attacker able to burst through many weakened teams with little struggle, as with its strong Ice- and Dark-Ttype STABs and a Choice Band to increase it's already good Attack to threaten many popular defensive Pokemon such as Great Tusk, Mandibuzz, and Zapdos. Chien-Pao uses Sacred Sword in order to Gguarantee OHKO Pokemon like Kingambit, Heatran, and Hisuian Goodra, (AC) as well as heavily chip Zamazenta-C. It can also use Lash Out over Crunch which can 2HKO Intimdate Corviknight after Stealth Rock damage, (AC) though extra chip will help guarantee it (think this is worded a little awkwardly could try rewording it). With Chien-Pao having one of the highest speed tiers its able to pick up OHKOs on many frailer offensive Pokemon like Ogerpon-C and Gengar. It also works excellently as a revenge killer because of Ice Shard and it's aforementioned high speed able to take down weakened Pokemon or force out Pokemon like Ceruledge, Zapdos, or Azelf (maybe just combine this with the last setence). Offensive Pivots such as Barraskewda and Hisuian Electrode will appreciate Chien-Pao's presence as they like being able to pivot into Chein-Pao Chien-Pao to deal with Hisuian Goodra or Corviknight. Chien-Pao is weak to entry hazards limiting how many times it can come in, (AC) which Corviknight, Mandibuzz, and Great Tusk, (ac) can all help with whilst also taking hits for Chien-Pao that it couldn't and pivoting into Chein-Pao Chien-Pao to get it in safely. Even with help from pivoting Chien-Pao does have a hard time breaking through common Defensive Corviknight, Unaware Scream Tail, and Quaqaval Quaquaval, (AC) who can all switch in on it fairly easily, but the help of teammates like Mixed Garchomp, Magic Guard Heatran, or and Hisuian Electrode, (AC) can help deal with its checks.

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[Set SET]
Choice Band (Chien-Pao) @ Choice Band
Ability: Sword of Ruin
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Icicle Crash
- Crunch / Lash Out
- Ice Shard
- Sacred Sword

[Set Comments SET COMMENTS]
Chien-Pao is a fast and hard-(AH)hitting attacker able to burst through many weakened teams with little struggle, with its strong Ice- and Dark-type STABs STAB moves and a Choice Band to increase it's its already good Attack to threaten many popular defensive Pokemon such as Great Tusk, Mandibuzz, and Zapdos. Chien-Pao uses Sacred Sword in order to guarantee an OHKO on Pokemon like Kingambit, Heatran, and Hisuian Goodra, as well as heavily chip chipping Zamazenta-C. It can also use Lash Out over Crunch,(AC) which can 2HKO Intimdate Intimidate Corviknight after Stealth Rock damage, though getting extra chip on Corviknight can help to guarantee the 2HKO. With Chien-Pao having one of the highest speed Speed tiers its ,(AC) it's able to pick up OHKOs on many frailer offensive Pokemon like Ogerpon-C and Gengar, it also works excellently as a revenge killer because of Ice Shard and it's its aforementioned high speed Speed able to take down weakened Pokemon or force out Pokemon like Ceruledge, Zapdos, or and Azelf. Offensive Pivots pivots such as Barraskewda and Hisuian Electrode appreciate Chien-Pao's presence,(AC) as they like being able to pivot into Chein Chien-Pao to deal with Hisuian Goodra or Corviknight. Chien-Pao is weak to entry hazards,(AC) limiting how many times it can come in,(AC) which so teammates like Corviknight, Mandibuzz, and Great Tusk,(RC) can all help with it whilst also taking hits for Chien-Pao that it couldn't Chien-Pao can't take and pivoting into Chien-Pao to get it in safely. Even with help from pivoting,(AC) Chien-Pao does have a hard time breaking through common Defensive foes such as defensive Corviknight, Unaware Scream Tail, and Quaquaval, who which can all switch in on it fairly easily, but the help of teammates like Mixed mixed Garchomp, Magic Guard Heatran, and Hisuian Electrode,(RC) can help deal with its checks.

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