Copyediting Eviolite Bisharp (Steel) [QC: 2/2] [GP: 0/1]

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[SET]
Bisharp @ Eviolite
name: Eviolite Swords Dance
Ability: Defiant
EVs: 80 HP / 232 Atk / 20 Def / 176 Spe
Adamant Nature
- Swords Dance
- Throat Chop
- Sucker Punch
- Low Kick / Iron Head

[SET COMMENTS]
When paired with an Eviolite, Bisharp is capable of taking on the role of a bulky setup sweeper that also discourages the use of Defog. Additonally, Bisharp's Dark typing allows it to ease the Ghost matchup by being able to take on their Ghost-type STAB moves better with its improved bulk. Throat Chop serves as Bisharp's primary Dark-type STAB move of choice and deals great damage to bulkier threats like Sinistcha and Gholdengo. Sucker Punch boosted by Swords Dance allows Bisharp to KO fast Pokemon like Dragapult, Hoopa-U, and Choice item Spectrier while Low Kick allows Bisharp to threaten the mirror matchup as well as doing good damage to Ting-Lu and defensive Heatran. Iron Head can also be ran as an option over Low Kick to shut down certain Fairy-types like Primarina and Clefable, that would otherwise check Bisharp. 80 HP and 20 Defense EVs paired with Eviolite allows Bisharp to get 3HKOd by Ogerpon-W's Ivy Cudgel, survive an Earthquake from most common Garchomp sets and survive a boosted Azumarill Aqua Jet. 176 Speed EVs allows Bisharp to outspeed Modest Magnezone.

Skarmory is one of Bisharp's greatest allies, as it can defensively switch into Ground and Fighting-types like Excadrill, Great Tusk, and Urshifu-R easily. Skarmory also sets Spikes, which chips down walls like Hippowdon and Archaludon into Bisharp's KO range and makes picking off frailer Pokemon with Sucker Punch easier. Gholdengo can check scary Fairy-types like Iron Valiant while also absorbing hits from threats like Sneasler and Hisuian Lilligant risk free thanks to Good as Gold blocking potential Switcheroos or Sleep Powders respectively. In return, Bisharp can remove opposing Ghost-types like an opposing Gholdengo and Choice Scarf Hisuian Zoroark. Heatran is a great partner for Bisharp as it's fire immunity allows it to take on threats like Volcarona, Iron Moth, and Ninetales while also being able to wear down or KO physical walls like Skarmory, Amoonguss, and Toxapex. Archaludon's utility allows Bisharp to break through its opponents easier with Stealth Rock while also letting it outspeed crucial Pokemon like the Ogerpon forms and Enamorus with Thunder Wave. Archaludon can also use Choice Scarf to help remove checks to Bisharp like Iron Valiant and wear down faster threats like Ogerpon-H so that they are in Bisharp's KO range. Iron Treads' access to Rapid Spin allows Bisharp to not get worn down by entry hazards, while checking potential threats to Bisharp like opposing Heatran and Landorus with Earthquake and Ice Spinner.


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[SET]
Bisharp @ Eviolite
name: whats the name of the set?
Ability: Defiant
EVs: 80 HP / 232 Atk / 20 Def / 176 Spe
Adamant Nature
- Swords Dance
- Throat Chop
- Sucker Punch
- Low Kick / Iron Head

[SET COMMENTS]
Bisharp's Dark typing paired with the extra bulk from Eviolite allows it to lure in unsuspecting checks to the non-Eviolite Bisharp set such as Ogerpon-H and Choice Specs Flutter Mane, and find setup opportunities on them with Swords Dance. (I would remove firepon here as we basically not ever luring it in as it doesnt want to come in on a throat chop into a sucker punch, creating unwanted/unnecessary 50 50s. even so fire vs dark is really dire in the long run where your not really getting an opportunity to setup ever. and then grass is ass. comp wise is weird as well to setup on as well. I think we can reword the sentence and remove the non-eviolite comparison since like LO / BG set just doink mane. I think overall honestly i would you make the intro about its compression in bulk + setup sweeping + defog dissuader is nice for steel teams. If you wanna talk about its dark typing as well i would highlight how it can ease the ghost mu) Throat Chop serves as Bisharp's primary Dark-type STAB move of choice and deals great damage to bulkier threats like Sinistcha and Galarian Slowking.(Not a threat at all since basically majority of steel just runs Glowking over. Maybe a different example instead or just keep it on Sucker Punch boosted by Swords Dance allows Bisharp to KO fast Pokemon like Dragapult, Hoopa-U, and Choice item Spectrier while Low Kick allows Bisharp to threatenwin (not winning as hamu sacred sword is a bitch, threatening here is more better.)the mirror matchup as well as doing good damage to Ting-Lu and Hisuian Goodra. Iron Head can also be ran as an option over Low Kick to shut down certain Fairy-types like Primarina and Galarian Weezing,(Geezing is gladly taking the trade via wisping it in return which is pretty meh in the longrun, deeming bisharp useless. we rather have Gholdengo deal with geezing since that basically just walls the hell out of it.) that would otherwise check Bisharp. 80 HP and 20 Defense EVs allows Bisharp to get 3HKOd by Ogerpon-W's Ivy Cudgel, and survive an Earthquake from most common Garchomp sets. 176 Speed EVs allows it to outspeed Azumarill and Raging Bolt while also surviving its their boosted priority moves thanks to the bulk granted by Eviolite. (Raging Bolt is running like 240 at most).

Skarmory is one of Bisharp's greatest allies, as it can defensively switch into Ground and Fighting-types like Excadrill, Great Tusk, and Urshifu-R easily. Skarmory also sets Spikes, which chips down walls like Hippowdon and Archaludon into Bisharp's KO range and makes picking off frailer Pokemon with Sucker Punch easier. Gholdengo can check scary Fairy-types like the aforementioned Galarian Weezing and Iron Valiant while also absorbing hits from threats like Sneasler and Hisuian Lilligant risk free thanks to Good as Gold blocking potential Switcheroos or Sleep Powders respectively. In return, Bisharp can remove opposing Ghost-types like an opposing enemy Gholdengo and Choice Scarf Hisuian Zoroark. Heatran is a great partner for Bisharp as it's fire immunity allows it to take on threats like Volcarona, Iron Moth, and Ninetales while also being able to wear down or KO physical walls like Skarmory and Amoonguss.(maybe a pex mention as well?? trapping pex and removing it for bisharp is nice as well.) Bisharp's ability to check Ogerpon-H with Eviolite and minor bulk investment is of great value to Heatran as its removal allows Heatran to be more effective against both Grass and Fire teams. Archaludon's utility allows Bisharp to break through its opponents easier with Stealth Rock while also letting it outspeed crucial Pokemon like the Ogerpon forms and Enamorus.(I'd mention the scarf set for arch here as well, being able to remove iron valiant while wearing down the ogerpon-h so bisharp can revenge kill it.) Iron Treads' access to Rapid Spin allows Bisharp to not get worn down by entry hazards, while checking potential threats to Bisharp like opposing Heatran and Landorus Okidogi with Earthquake and Ice Spinner. Hisuian Goodra acts as a sponge to special attacks from threats like Hydreigon that can otherwise handle Bisharp even with its improved bulk. (Hoodra is competing for that 6th slot with bisharp and scizor. cant pair it together since steel is just set and stone with 5 slots already.)


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will relook after this tyyy. info is great, just alot of comments i had haha :D
 
Just implemented this review, only comment I have is that it was hard to find another example for throat chop since the next best example is Pecharunt and that is giga sketchy for a Steel-type analysis. Let me know if there is a better one besides sinistcha. Otherwise I agree with the rest of the points and implemented as requested!
 
Sharp fella.
When paired with an Eviolite, Bisharp is capable of taking on the role of a bulky setup sweeper that also discourages the use of Defog. Additonally, Bisharp's Dark typing allows it to ease the Ghost matchup by being able to take on their Ghost-type STAB moves better with its improved bulk. Throat Chop serves as Bisharp's primary Dark-type STAB move of choice and deals great damage to bulkier threats like Sinistcha and Gholdengo. Sucker Punch boosted by Swords Dance allows Bisharp to KO fast Pokemon like Dragapult, Hoopa-U, and Choice item Spectrier while Low Kick allows Bisharp to threaten the mirror matchup as well as doing good damage to Ting-Lu and Hisuian Goodra (Hoodra is already terrified of +2 Throat Chop reducing its ability to check Scarf ghold/arch and the mirror matchup already covers steel in my opinion. If you still want one there, I think Defensive Heatran would be a better choice personally). Iron Head can also be ran as an option over Low Kick to shut down certain Fairy-types like Primarina and Clefable, that would otherwise check Bisharp. 80 HP and 20 Defense EVs allows Bisharp to get 3HKOd by Ogerpon-W's Ivy Cudgel, and survive an Earthquake from most common Garchomp sets. 176 Speed EVs allows it to outspeed Jolly Azumarill and Modest Magnezone while also surviving its boosted priority move thanks to the bulk granted by Eviolite.

Also in Paragraph 2, remove the mention of Weezing-G for a gholdengo target, mon is hard checked by both ghold and Heatran and just sucks into steel.
2/2 Good stuff Nam.
 
same over here fam
176 Speed EVs allows it to outspeed Jolly Azumarill and Modest Magnezone while also surviving Azumarill's boosted priority move thanks to the bulk granted by Eviolite.

same over here fam just remove outspeeding jolly azu and keep it on just outspeeding modest magnezone while also................
 
GP Team done

add remove highlight comment

[SET]
Bisharp @ Eviolite
name: Eviolite Swords Dance
Ability: Defiant
EVs: 80 HP / 232 Atk / 20 Def / 176 Spe
Adamant Nature
- Swords Dance
- Throat Chop
- Sucker Punch
- Low Kick / Iron Head

[SET COMMENTS]
When paired with an Eviolite, Bisharp is capable of taking on the role of a bulky setup sweeper that also discourages the use of Defog. Additonally, Bisharp's Dark typing allows it Eviolite (changed the subject because from how I interpret the sentence, the typing and held item work in tandem to let Bisharp withstand STAB Ghost-type moves) to ease the matchup against Ghost matchup teams by being able to letting Bisharp take on their Ghost-type STAB moves better with its improved bulk. Throat Chop serves as Bisharp's its (reduces repetition of name) primary Dark-type STAB move of choice and deals great damage to bulkier threats like Sinistcha and Gholdengo. Sucker Punch boosted by Swords Dance allows Bisharp to KO fast Pokemon like Dragapult, Hoopa-U, (Hoopa-U's base Speed is 80. Is it using Choice Scarf, or do you actually mean "faster Pokemon" instead?) and Choice item Spectrier, (AC) while Low Kick allows Bisharp it to threaten the mirror matchup opposing Bisharp as well as doing good damage to Ting-Lu and defensive Heatran. Iron Head can also be ran as an option over Low Kick to shut down certain Fairy-types like Primarina and Clefable, that which would otherwise check Bisharp. 80 HP and 20 Defense EVs paired with Eviolite allows allow Bisharp to get 3HKOd 3HKOed (might be better to rephrase this as "avoid getting 2HKOed") by Ogerpon-W's Ivy Cudgel (RC) and survive a boosted Azumarill's Aqua Jet (in what way is Azumarill boosted?) and an Earthquake from most common Garchomp sets and survive a boosted Azumarill Aqua Jet. 176 Speed EVs EV allows Bisharp to outspeed Modest Magnezone.

Skarmory is one of Bisharp's greatest allies, as it can defensively switch into Ground- (hyphen) and Fighting-types like Excadrill, Great Tusk, and Urshifu-R easily. Skarmory also sets Spikes, which chips down walls like Hippowdon and Archaludon into Bisharp's KO range and makes picking off frailer Pokemon with Sucker Punch easier. Gholdengo can check scary Fairy-types like Iron Valiant while also absorbing hits from threats like Sneasler and Hisuian Lilligant without risk free thanks to Good as Gold blocking a potential Switcheroos Switcheroo or Sleep Powders Powder, (AC) respectively. In return, Bisharp can remove opposing Ghost-types like an opposing Gholdengo and Choice Scarf Hisuian Zoroark. Heatran is a great partner for Bisharp, (AC) as it's its Fire immunity allows it to take on threats like Volcarona, Iron Moth, and Ninetales while also being able to wear down or KO physical walls like Skarmory, Amoonguss, and Toxapex. Archaludon's utility allows Bisharp to break through its opponents easier foes more easily with Stealth Rock while also letting it outspeed crucial Pokemon like the Ogerpon forms formes and Enamorus with Thunder Wave. Archaludon can also use Choice Scarf to help remove checks to Bisharp like Iron Valiant and wear down faster threats like Ogerpon-H so that they are in Bisharp's KO range. Iron Treads' Treads's access to Rapid Spin allows Bisharp to not get worn down by entry hazards, while checking and it also checks potential threats to Bisharp like opposing Heatran and Landorus with Earthquake and Ice Spinner.


[SET CREDITS]
Written by: https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/namranan.353292/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/boomp.637295/
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Grammar checked by:
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I'd like to take a second quick look at this once the above has been addressed.

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