National Dex Hawlucha [Done]

[Zneon]

[SET]
name: Unburden Sweeper
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Close Combat
move 3: Acrobatics
move 4: Substitute
item: Electric Seed / Grassy Seed
ability: Unburden
nature: Adamant
evs: 96 HP / 252 Atk / 36 SpD / 124 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Hawlucha is a very potent setup sweeper in the National Dex metagame. Its decent STAB combination in conjunction with a good Attack stat, access to Swords Dance, and Unburden allows Hawlucha to outspeed and revenge kill even the most common Choice Scarf users in the metagame, such as Landorus-T, Jirachi, and Victini. Substitute allows it to take advantage of Pokemon such as defensive Landorus-T, Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Garchomp by forcing switches after getting its Speed doubled by Unburden. The EVs allow Hawlucha to always take a Moonblast from an uninvested Clefable and outspeed Excadrill under sand.

Hawlucha mainly fits on offensive teams, as they greatly enable Hawlucha's sweeping capabilities. Tapu Koko and Rillaboom are absolute necessities for Hawlucha, as the Terrains they set up are crucial for activating its ability via Electric or Grassy Seed, respectively, along with the fact that they are able to overwhelm almost all of Hawlucha's checks, such as Zapdos, Clefable, and Tapu Fini. Hawlucha appreciates entry hazard support from Pokemon such as Mew and Landorus-T, it allows Haluwcha to more easily offensively pressure Pokemon like Mega Scizor, Magearna, and Tapu Fini. Additionally, Hawlucha enjoys the presence of wallbreakers such as Mega Medicham that can aid it in its sweep Hawlucha struggles a lot with Fairy-types such as Clefable and Tapu Fini, as they can heavily threaten it due to Moonblast; thus, checks to them such as Magearna and Victini are very reliable teammates. Zapdos is a major problem for Hawlucha, as it resists its STAB combination, has access to reliable recovery to check it multiple times throughout a game, and it can threaten to KO Hawlucha with Discharge; thus, checks to Zapdos such as Weavile and Kyurem are great teammates.

[STRATEGY COMMENTS]
Other Options
=============

Stone Edge can be used over Substitute to hit Zapdos super effectively; however, it doesn't hit any other noteworthy Pokemon that Hawlucha's STAB combination doesn't, making it a worse option than Substitute overall. Taunt allows Hawlucha to deny any attempts at preventing it from sweeping, such as phazing attempts from Hippowdon and Haze from Toxapex. Throat Chop can be used to hit Aegislash super effectively, as it comfortably resists Hawlucha's STAB combination; however, it has very little use otherwise.

Checks and Counters
===================

**Fairy-types**: Pokemon like Clefable, bulky Magearna, and Tapu Fini can heavily threaten Hawlucha with their STAB moves while being able to take an Acrobatics from it at +2; however, once weakened enough, they become flimsy checks to it.

**Psychic-types**: Pokemon such as Tapu Lele, Reuniclus, and Mega Latias are able to KO Hawlucha with their STAB moves, the former being able to override Rillaboom and Tapu Koko's respective Terrains with its Psychic Terrain, and the latter two being able to always survive a hit from it even at +2.

**Priority Users**: Priority users such as Ash-Greninja, Weavile, and Rillaboom can stop Hawlucha's sweep by revenge killing it with their priority moves in Water Shuriken, Ice Shard, and Grassy Glide, respectively. However, Hawlucha needs to be weakened enough in order to be revenge killed by these Pokemon.

**Bulky Water-types**: Pokemon such as Slowbro, Tapu Fini, and Toxapex can slow down Hawlucha's progress. The former two are capable of always taking a hit at +2 and attempting to burn it with Scald or KOing it with Moonblast respectively. Toxapex can remove Hawlucha's boosts;however, it can be taken advantage of by Taunt or Substitute.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Zneon, 487629]]
- Quality checked by: [[Solaros & Lunaris, 471780], [Sputnik, 475916]]
- Grammar checked by: [[Milak, 262594]]

 

[Zneon]

this is ready

 

[Solaros & Lunaris]

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[SET]
name: Unburden Sweeper
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Close Combat
move 3: Acrobatics
move 4: Substitute
item: Electric Seed / Grassy Seed
ability: Unburden
nature: Adamant
evs: 96 HP / 252 Atk / 36 SpD / 124 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Hawlucha is a very potent setup sweeper in the National Dex metagame. Its decent STAB combination in conjunction with a good Attack stat, access to Swords Dance, and Unburden allows Hawlucha to outspeed and revenge kill even the most common Choice Scarf users in the metagame, such as Landorus-T, Jirachi and Victini. Close Combat is the preferred choice of Fighting-type STAB compared to High Jump Kick due to its high base power and especially its low risk. Filler (this isn’t really a reason to mention High Jump Kick imo) Substitute allows it to take advantage of Pokemon such as Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Garchomp by forcing switches after getting its Speed doubled from Unburden. The EVs allow Hawlucha to always live an uninvested Moonblast from Clefable and the Speed EVs allow Hawlucha to outspeed Excadrill in Sand.

Hawlucha mainly fits on offensive teams, as those types of teams greatly enable Hawlucha's sweeping capabilities. Tapu Koko and Rillaboom are absolute necesseties for Hawlucha, as the terrains they set up are crucial for Hawlucha for activating its ability via Electric and Grassy Seed respectively. Its worth mentioning that they also weaken or outright beat Hawlucha’s checks, like Zapdos, Clefable, and Tapu Fini. Hawlucha appreciates hazard support from Pokemon such as Mew and Landorus-T as the hazards they provide allow it to more easily offensive pressure Pokemon like Mega Scizor, Corviknight, and opposing Landorus-T. Additionally, Hawlucha enjoys the presence of of wallbreakers that can aid Hawlucha in its ability to sweep; Pokemon such as Choice Specs Tapu Koko, Rillaboom, and Cinderace make for great teammates. Hawlucha struggles a lot with Fairy-types such as Clefable and Tapu Fini, as they can heavily threaten Hawlucha due to Moonblast, thus checks to them such as Magearna, Victini, and Cinderace are very reliable teammates for Hawlucha. Zapdos is a major problem for Hawlucha, as it resists its STAB combination, has access to reliable recovery so it can check it multiple times throughout a game and it can threaten to KO it with Discharge, thus checks to it such as Weavile and Kyurem can help ease the matchup.

[STRATEGY COMMENTS]
Other Options
=============

Stone Edge can be used over Substitute to hit Zapdos super effectively, however it doesn't hit any other noteworthy Pokemon that its STAB combination doesn't, making it a worse option than Substitute overall.

Checks and Counters
===================

**Fairy-types**: Pokemon like Clefable and Tapu Fini can heavily threaten Hawlucha with their STAB moves while being able to take an Acrobatics from it at +2, however once weakened enough they become flimsy checks to it.

**Psychic-types**: Pokemon such as Tapu Lele and Mega Latias are able to KO Hawlucha with their STAB moves, the former being able to override the terrain of Rillaboom or Tapu Koko with its Psychic Terrain, and the latter being able to always live a hit from it even at +2.

**Priority users**: Priority users such as Ash-Greninja and Weavile can stop Hawlucha's ability to sweep by revenge killing it with their priority moves, Water Shuriken and Ice Shard respectively, and when weakened enough, Rillaboom's Grassy Glide can revenge kill it too. If Hawkucha is at full, it can’t actually be revenged by any of these moves. I think that point about “being weakened enough” should be applied to this whole section.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Zneon, 487629]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]

Excellent work, QC 1/2

 

[Sputnik]

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[SET]
name: Unburden Sweeper
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Close Combat
move 3: Acrobatics
move 4: Substitute
item: Electric Seed / Grassy Seed
ability: Unburden
nature: Adamant
evs: 96 HP / 252 Atk / 36 SpD / 124 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Hawlucha is a very potent setup sweeper in the National Dex metagame. Its decent STAB combination in conjunction with a good Attack stat, access to Swords Dance, and Unburden allows Hawlucha to outspeed and revenge kill even the most common Choice Scarf users in the metagame, such as Landorus-T, Jirachi and Victini. Substitute allows it to take advantage of Pokemon such as Defensive Landorus-T, Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Garchomp by forcing switches after getting its Speed doubled from Unburden. Defensive Lando should be mentioned; it is one of the most important reasons to run Sub. The EVs allow Hawlucha to always live an uninvested Moonblast from Clefable and the Speed EVs allow Hawlucha to outspeed Excadrill in Sand.

Hawlucha mainly fits on offensive teams, as those types of teams greatly enable Hawlucha's sweeping capabilities. Tapu Koko and Rillaboom are absolute necesseities for Hawlucha, as the terrains they set up are crucial for Hawlucha for activating its ability via Electric and Grassy Seed, along with the fact that they are able to overwhelm almost all of Hawlucha's checks, such as Zapdos, Clefable, and Tapu Fini. Hawlucha appreciates hazard support from Pokemon such as Mew and Landorus-T as the hazards they provide allow it to more easily offensive pressure Pokemon like Mega Scizor, Corviknight, and opposing Landorus-T. Mention Fini and Mage here in particular; both need just a little bit of chip to get knocked into lucha range so hazards are very important. Additionally, Hawlucha enjoys the presence of of wallbreakers that can aid Hawlucha in its ability to sweep; Pokemon such as Choice Specs Tapu Koko, Rillaboom, and Cinderace make for great teammates. Maybe mention some other breakers that aren't the required teammates that you have already covered. Hawlucha struggles a lot with Fairy-types such as Clefable and Tapu Fini, as they can heavily threaten Hawlucha due to Moonblast, thus checks to them such as Magearna, Victini, and Cinderace are very reliable teammates for Hawlucha. Zapdos is a major problem for Hawlucha, as it resists its STAB combination, has access to reliable recovery so it can check it multiple times throughout a game and it can threaten to KO it with Discharge, thus checks to it such as Weavile and Kyurem can help ease the matchup. Mention a Zap answer that fits well on HO too.

[STRATEGY COMMENTS]
Other Options
=============

Stone Edge can be used over Substitute to hit Zapdos super effectively, however it doesn't hit any other noteworthy Pokemon that its STAB combination doesn't, making it a worse option than Substitute overall. Mention Taunt I think; it negates rare phasing attempts from Hippo, Haze and Baneful Bunker from Pex, and other such things while still denying things like Landorus; it just doesn't prevent Scald burns so it's not quite as reliable.

Throat Chop can be mentioned for Aegislash too
Checks and Counters
===================

**Fairy-types**: Pokemon like Clefable and Tapu Fini can heavily threaten Hawlucha with their STAB moves while being able to take an Acrobatics from it at +2, however once weakened enough they become flimsy checks to it. Bulkier Magearna sets also eat one (albeit barely) at +2 so mention it.

**Psychic-types**: Pokemon such as Tapu Lele and Mega Latias are able to KO Hawlucha with their STAB moves, the former being able to override the terrain of Rillaboom or Tapu Koko with its Psychic Terrain, and the latter being able to always live a hit from it even at +2. Reuniclus eats too

**Priority users**: Priority users such as Ash-Greninja, Weavile, and Rillaboom can stop Hawlucha's ability to sweep by revenge killing it with their priority moves, Water Shuriken, Ice Shard, and Grassy Glide respectively, however Hawlucha needs to be weakened enough in order to be revenge killed by these Pokemon.

Mention Bulky waters in general here; Slowbro is really annoying with Future Sight, Pex is a better matchup but still not fantastic due to it sometimes breaking subs with Scald and access to Haze and Baneful Bunker. Softer answers like Slowking and Tapu Fini (things that eat one hit, albeit barely) could be mentioned as well

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Zneon, 487629]]
- Quality checked by: [[Solaros & Lunaris, 471780], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]

Good work, QC 2/2

 

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[SET]
name: Unburden Sweeper
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Close Combat
move 3: Acrobatics
move 4: Substitute
item: Electric Seed / Grassy Seed
ability: Unburden
nature: Adamant
evs: 96 HP / 252 Atk / 36 SpD / 124 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Hawlucha is a very potent setup sweeper in the National Dex metagame. Its decent STAB combination in conjunction with a good Attack stat, access to Swords Dance, and Unburden allows Hawlucha to outspeed and revenge kill even the most common Choice Scarf users in the metagame, such as Landorus-T, Jirachi and Victini. Substitute allows it to take advantage of Pokemon such as Defensive defensive Landorus-T, Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Garchomp by forcing switches after getting its Speed doubled from by Unburden. The EVs allow Hawlucha to always live take (pokemon don't "live" attacks, they survive or take them) an uninvested Moonblast from Clefable and the Speed EVs allow Hawlucha to (redundant since you referenced all the EVs before) outspeed Excadrill in Sand under sand.

Hawlucha mainly fits on offensive teams, as those types of teams they greatly enable Hawlucha's sweeping capabilities. Tapu Koko and Rillaboom are absolute necesseties necessities for Hawlucha, as the terrains they set up are crucial for Hawlucha for activating its ability via Electric Seed and or Grassy Seed, respectively, along with the fact that they are able to overwhelm almost all of Hawlucha's checks, such as Zapdos, Clefable, and Tapu Fini. Hawlucha appreciates entry hazard support from Pokemon such as Mew and Landorus-T,(AC) as the hazards they provide allow it to more easily offensive offensively pressure Pokemon like Mega Scizor, Magearna, and Tapu Fini. Additionally, Hawlucha enjoys the presence of of wallbreakers that can aid Hawlucha in its ability to it in its sweep; Pokemon such as Mega Medicham and Cinderace make for great teammates. Hawlucha struggles a lot with Fairy-types such as Clefable and Tapu Fini, as they can heavily threaten Hawlucha it due to Moonblast, thus checks to them such as Magearna, Victini, and Cinderace are very reliable teammates for Hawlucha. Zapdos is a major problem for Hawlucha, as it resists its STAB combination, has access to reliable recovery so it can to check it multiple times throughout a game and it can threaten to KO it Hawlucha with Discharge, thus checks to it Zapdos such as Weavile and Kyurem can help ease the matchup, as Pokemon such as Cinderace can heavily pressure Zapdos on hyper offensive teams. (how is the cinderace part linked to this sentence? did you mean to say weav, kyu, and ace can all pressure zap?)

[STRATEGY COMMENTS]
Other Options
=============

Stone Edge can be used over Substitute to hit Zapdos super effectively,(RC);(ASC) however,(AC) it doesn't hit any other noteworthy Pokemon that its Hawlucha's STAB combination doesn't, making it a worse option than Substitute overall. Taunt allows it Hawlucha to deny any attempts at preventing it from sweeping, such as phazing attempts from Hippowdon and Haze from Toxapex. Throat Chop can be used to hit Aegislash super effectively,(AC) as it comfortably resists Hawlucha's STAB combination, however it has very little use otherwise.

Checks and Counters
===================

**Fairy-types**: Pokemon like Clefable, Bulky bulky Magearna, and Tapu Fini can heavily threaten Hawlucha with their STAB moves while being able to take an Acrobatics from it at +2,(RC);(ASC) however,(AC) once weakened enough,(AC) they become flimsy checks to it.

**Psychic-types**: Pokemon such as Tapu Lele, Reuniclus, and Mega Latias are able to KO Hawlucha with their STAB moves, the former being able to override the terrain of from Rillaboom or Tapu Koko with its Psychic Terrain, and the latter 2 two being able to always live survive a hit from it even at +2.

**Priority users Users**: Priority users such as Ash-Greninja, Weavile, and Rillaboom can stop Hawlucha's ability to sweep by revenge killing it with their priority moves,(RC) in Water Shuriken, Ice Shard, and Grassy Glide,(AC) respectively,(RC).(AP) however However,(AC) Hawlucha needs to be weakened enough in order to be revenge killed by these Pokemon.

**Bulky Water-types**: Pokemon such as Slowbro, Tapu Fini, and Toxapex can slow down Hawlucha's progress. The former two are capable of always taking a hit at +2 and capable of burning attempting to burn it with Scald or KOing it with Moonblast,(AC) respectively. Toxapex can remove Hawlucha's boosts,(RC);(ASC) however,(AC) it can be taken advantage of by Taunt or Substitute.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Zneon, 487629]]
- Quality checked by: [[Solaros & Lunaris, 471780], [Sputnik, 475916]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

Note: I noticed you tried to avoid repeating Pokemon names too many times, especially Hawlucha. However, this made your sentences actually more confusing and repetition-heavy, since it was more difficult to understand who did what to who. Be careful about that and try to proofread your analysis to prevent that.

 

[Milak]

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mucha lucha

[SET]
name: Unburden Sweeper
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Close Combat
move 3: Acrobatics
move 4: Substitute
item: Electric Seed / Grassy Seed
ability: Unburden
nature: Adamant
evs: 96 HP / 252 Atk / 36 SpD / 124 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Hawlucha is a very potent setup sweeper in the National Dex metagame. Its decent STAB combination in conjunction with a good Attack stat, access to Swords Dance, and Unburden allows Hawlucha to outspeed and revenge kill even the most common Choice Scarf users in the metagame, such as Landorus-T, Jirachi,(AC) and Victini. Substitute allows it to take advantage of Pokemon such as Defensive defensive Landorus-T, Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Garchomp by forcing switches after getting its Speed doubled from by Unburden. The EVs allow Hawlucha to always live take (pokemon don't "live" attacks, they survive or take them) an uninvested a Moonblast from an uninvested Clefable and the Speed EVs allow Hawlucha to (redundant since you referenced all the EVs before) outspeed Excadrill in Sand under sand.

Hawlucha mainly fits on offensive teams, as those types of teams they greatly enable Hawlucha's sweeping capabilities. Tapu Koko and Rillaboom are absolute necesseties necessities for Hawlucha, as the terrains Terrains they set up are crucial for Hawlucha for activating its ability via Electric Seed and or Grassy Seed, respectively, along with the fact that they are able to overwhelm almost all of Hawlucha's checks, such as Zapdos, Clefable, and Tapu Fini. Hawlucha appreciates entry hazard support from Pokemon such as Mew and Landorus-T,(AC) as the hazards they provide allow it allows Haluwcha to more easily offensive offensively pressure Pokemon like Mega Scizor, Magearna, and Tapu Fini. Additionally, Hawlucha enjoys the presence of of wallbreakers such as Mega Medicham and Cinderace that can aid Hawlucha in its ability to it in its sweep;(RSC) Pokemon such as Mega Medicham and Cinderace make for great teammates. Hawlucha struggles a lot with Fairy-types such as Clefable and Tapu Fini, as they can heavily threaten Hawlucha it due to Moonblast,(RC) ;(ASC) thus,(AC) checks to them such as Magearna, Victini, and Cinderace are very reliable teammates for Hawlucha. Zapdos is a major problem for Hawlucha, as it resists its STAB combination, has access to reliable recovery so it can to check it multiple times throughout a game,(AC) and it can threaten to KO it Hawlucha with Discharge,(RC) ;(ASC) thus,(AC) checks to it Zapdos such as Weavile and Kyurem can help ease the matchup, as Pokemon such as Cinderace can heavily pressure Zapdos on hyper offensive teams. (how is the cinderace part linked to this sentence? did you mean to say weav, kyu, and ace can all pressure zap? -> yea this makes no sense, either add cinderace to the list of zapdos checks or remove the sentence entirely)

[STRATEGY COMMENTS]
Other Options
=============

Stone Edge can be used over Substitute to hit Zapdos super effectively,(RC);(ASC) however,(AC) it doesn't hit any other noteworthy Pokemon that its Hawlucha's STAB combination doesn't, making it a worse option than Substitute overall. Taunt allows it Hawlucha to deny any attempts at preventing it from sweeping, such as phazing attempts from Hippowdon and Haze from Toxapex. Throat Chop can be used to hit Aegislash super effectively,(AC) as it comfortably resists Hawlucha's STAB combination,(RC) ;(ASC) however,(AC) it has very little use otherwise.

Checks and Counters
===================

**Fairy-types**: Pokemon like Clefable, Bulky bulky Magearna, and Tapu Fini can heavily threaten Hawlucha with their STAB moves while being able to take an Acrobatics from it at +2,(RC);(ASC) however,(AC) once weakened enough,(AC) they become flimsy checks to it.

**Psychic-types**: Pokemon such as Tapu Lele, Reuniclus, and Mega Latias are able to KO Hawlucha with their STAB moves, the former being able to override the terrain of from Rillaboom or and Tapu Koko's respective Terrains with its Psychic Terrain, and the latter 2 two being able to always live survive a hit from it even at +2.

**Priority users Users**: Priority users such as Ash-Greninja, Weavile, and Rillaboom can stop Hawlucha's ability to sweep by revenge killing it with their priority moves,(RC) in Water Shuriken, Ice Shard, and Grassy Glide,(AC) respectively,(RC).(AP) however However,(AC) Hawlucha needs to be weakened enough in order to be revenge killed by these Pokemon.

**Bulky Water-types**: Pokemon such as Slowbro, Tapu Fini, and Toxapex can slow down Hawlucha's progress. The former two are capable of always taking a hit at +2 and capable of burning attempting to burn it with Scald or KOing it with Moonblast,(AC) respectively. Toxapex can remove Hawlucha's boosts,(RC);(ASC) however,(AC) it can be taken advantage of by Taunt or Substitute.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Zneon, 487629]]
- Quality checked by: [[Solaros & Lunaris, 471780], [Sputnik, 475916]]
- Grammar checked by: [[Milak, 262594]]