Quality Control I Cross-Break Ride Eradicator, Vowing Saber Dragon "Яeverse" (Bulk Up Ceruledge) [QC 1/2]

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[SET]
Ceruledge @ Covert Cloak
Ability: Flash Fire
EVs: 252 HP / 172 SpD / 84 Spe
Tera Type: Bug
Careful Nature
- Bulk Up
- Bitter Blade
- Shadow Sneak
- Taunt

[SET COMMENTS]
Ceruledge is a terrifying sweeper, particularly good against balance teams, with Bulk Up to increase both its bulk and power, and a unique set of traits catered to taking advantage of common balance team staples such as Garganacl and Alomomola. Bitter Blade allows Ceruledge to offset chip damage it may sustain throughout a battle.. Shadow Sneak allows Ceruledge to pick off faster targets like Dragapult and Deoxys-Speed. Taunt shuts down status moves that would otherwise deny a Ceruledge sweep, such as Gliscor’s Toxic, Zamazenta and Moltres’ Roar, and Alomomola’s Tickle. It also denies recovery from Garganacl and Pecharunt. With Covert Cloak, powerful secondary effects from moves such as Pecharunt’s Malignant Chain poison, Garganacl’s Salt Cure, and Alomomola’s Scald post-Tera are nullified, making it even harder to wear down Ceruledge. Tera Bug lets Ceruledge take on ground-types such as Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Gliscor while not being weak to their common coverage options. Flash Fire further complements Tera Bug. Nullifying its Fire weakness and most sources of burn that would otherwise cripple Ceruledge post Terastilization.The given EV spread lets Ceruledge outspeed Gliscor while maximizing Special Bulk to complement Bulk Up’s defense boosting.

Bulk Up Ceruledge is commonly found on Hyper Offense teams, most notably Veil teams that have a poor Balance team matchup. Ceruledge itself is a great support for these hyper offense styles because with Taunt, it denies Defog attempts from Weezing-Galar and Corviknight. With Aurora Veil, Ceruledge is given opportunities to get multiple boosts with the reduced damage. Special attackers such as Darkrai and Deoxys-Speed can apply pressure to Dondozo, which would give Ceruledge trouble. Hazard control, such as Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Hatterene, is required to ensure Ceruledge does not get worn down by hazards. In return, Ceruledge can defeat Alomomola, which walls Great Tusk and Iron Treads, and Slowking-Galar, which gives Hatterene trouble. Other physical attackers, such as Dragonite, Kyurem, Swords Dance Gliscor, and Ogerpon-W, complement Ceruledge’s balance-breaking capabilities by threatening checks to Ceruledge. Dragonite’s Multiscale and variety of sets; in particular, Tera Blast sets can find opportunities to set up and turn the tables on Zamazenta and Ogerpon-W. Kyurem can threaten Dragonite and Zapdos with its powerful Icicle Spear, especially after a Dragon Dance boost. Gliscor can take on Glimmora and Landorus-T, and Ogerpon-W can also break Glimmora and take on Dondozo with its Grass-type attacks. In return, they all appreciate their checks, such as Gliscor, Garganacl, and Pecharunt. Zamazenta provides speed control, outrunning most of the metagame bar Dragapult and Deoxys-Speed, allowing it to threaten Darkrai and Ogerpon-W, while in return, Ceruledge is a check to Pecharunt and Alomomola, which Zamazenta is walled by.

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Please let me know once it is implemented and I can give it another look, ty!

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[SET]
Ceruledge @ Covert Cloak
Ability: Flash Fire
EVs: 252 HP / 172 SpD / 84 Spe
Tera Type: Bug
Careful Nature
- Bulk Up
- Bitter Blade
- Shadow Sneak
- Taunt

[SET COMMENTS]
Ceruledge is a terrifying sweeper to balance teams with Bulk Up to increase both its bulk and power, and a unique set of traits catered to taking advantage of common balance team staples such as Garganacl and Alomomola. Bitter Blade allows Ceruledge to offset chip damage that balance teams will attempt to wear it down with. Focus on attempts at chipping it down overall, its not exclusive to balance teams Shadow Sneak allows Ceruledge to pick off faster or weakened targets like Dragapult and Deoxys-Speed. Taunt shuts down common anti-setup options such as Ting-Lu’s Whirlwind, Moltres’ Roar, and Gliscor’s Toxic. It also denies recovery from Alomomola and Garganacl, which would otherwise wall out Ceruledge endlessly. Anti setup can mean a lot of things; try to separate them by categories: Phazing moves like Ting-Lu’s Whirlwind and Moltres’ Roar; status moves like Gliscor and Toxapex's Toxic; recovery moves like Alomomola's Wish and Garganacl's Recover yes, but all categories are arguably as important not just recovery moves; attempts at matching boosts from Curse Garganacl, and others that remove your own boosts like Alomomola's Tickle and Toxapex's Haze. Covert Cloak further exploits these passive walls by ignoring Garganacl’s Salt Cure, Alomomola’s Scald, Hatterene’s Psychic Noise and Nuzzle, along with various other secondary effects that would otherwise cripple Ceruledge. Its better to mention them if they are relevant, notably Pecharunt's Malignant Chain and Alomomola's Scald after Tera Flash Fire is the preferred ability as it doesn’t lower Defense, allowing Ceruledge to sustain its Bulk Up defense boosts and have a passive Fire immunity. More below The given EV spread lets Ceruledge outspeed standard Gliscor while maximizing Special Bulk to complement Bulk Up’s defense boosting. Tera Bug lets Ceruledge set up Ground-types such as Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Ting-Lu, which is also complemented by Flash Fire, ensuring Fire-types such as Moltres and Cinderace can’t threaten it. Try to reorder the text to Flash Fire and Tera Bug are next to each other and really emphasize how they complement each other; right now it reads like not getting the def drop is the main appeal, rather than how good it complements Tera Bug. Wrt to Tera Bug, you can also mention how it turns the tables on Ground-type moves.

Bulk Up Ceruledge finds its home on Aurora Veil I would remove this so the text does not restrict the builder as much, specially since it is not clear why this would be the case. If you want to add something like "particularly Aurora Veil teams" thats fine hyper offense teams, where it covers the matchup against balance teams for them. Alolan Ninetales is the premier Veil setter that gives Ceruledge opportunities to set up with both Aurora Veil and Encore. This Ceruledge struggles against fast-paced offense teams with sweepers such as Ogerpon-Wellspring and Raging Bolt, where it will find difficulty setting up from repeated pressure. All of this is correct but its all worded in a really weird way. Part of why it fits on Veil is cause yeah, it helps them against balance, but also exactly cause Veil gives it enough room to set up against stronger foes. Not super strong ones but it is important to emphasize that in the initial sentence rather than later. The word covers is a bit strong cause you still have issues against the likes of Dragon Tail Dragonite, or faster Encore Pokemon. So anti-offense attackers such as Zamazenta and Dragonite are much appreciated with Ceruledge. Reader should not be expected to know what anti offense means, mention what threats these Pokemon handle or in what way. In return, Ceruledge dismantles Alolomola and Terastalized Garganacl, which they would otherwise struggle with. Pending depending on what Pokemon you choose to mention in the previous sentence Hazard control, such as Hatterene and Iron Treads, allows Ceruledge to preserve its health to sustain a sweep. Hatterene and other special attackers, such as Darkrai, can eliminate Dondozo, Ceruledge’s greatest difficulty. Ceruledge, in return, can utilize Ting-Lu as setup fodder, which walls these special attackers. Odd mention cause in Veil both of them can pressure Ting-Lu enough while not caring that that much about what it does

I get the teammates section might be a bit more limited. Hence you should use the space to really go in depth about the few partners you can. Do any of them help against Glimmora? Ogerpon-W could be a good add that does well against it. Kyurem is also usually seen on these teams and can help against annoying Pokemon like Dragonite and Zapdos.

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Please let me know once it is implemented and I can give it another look, ty!

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[SET]
Ceruledge @ Covert Cloak
Ability: Flash Fire
EVs: 252 HP / 172 SpD / 84 Spe
Tera Type: Bug
Careful Nature
- Bulk Up
- Bitter Blade
- Shadow Sneak
- Taunt

[SET COMMENTS]
Ceruledge is a terrifying sweeper to balance teams with Bulk Up to increase both its bulk and power, and a unique set of traits catered to taking advantage of common balance team staples such as Garganacl and Alomomola. Bitter Blade allows Ceruledge to offset chip damage that balance teams will attempt to wear it down with. Focus on attempts at chipping it down overall, its not exclusive to balance teams Shadow Sneak allows Ceruledge to pick off faster or weakened targets like Dragapult and Deoxys-Speed. Taunt shuts down common anti-setup options such as Ting-Lu’s Whirlwind, Moltres’ Roar, and Gliscor’s Toxic. It also denies recovery from Alomomola and Garganacl, which would otherwise wall out Ceruledge endlessly. Anti setup can mean a lot of things; try to separate them by categories: Phazing moves like Ting-Lu’s Whirlwind and Moltres’ Roar; status moves like Gliscor and Toxapex's Toxic; recovery moves like Alomomola's Wish and Garganacl's Recover yes, but all categories are arguably as important not just recovery moves; attempts at matching boosts from Curse Garganacl, and others that remove your own boosts like Alomomola's Tickle and Toxapex's Haze. Covert Cloak further exploits these passive walls by ignoring Garganacl’s Salt Cure, Alomomola’s Scald, Hatterene’s Psychic Noise and Nuzzle, along with various other secondary effects that would otherwise cripple Ceruledge. Its better to mention them if they are relevant, notably Pecharunt's Malignant Chain and Alomomola's Scald after Tera Flash Fire is the preferred ability as it doesn’t lower Defense, allowing Ceruledge to sustain its Bulk Up defense boosts and have a passive Fire immunity. More below The given EV spread lets Ceruledge outspeed standard Gliscor while maximizing Special Bulk to complement Bulk Up’s defense boosting. Tera Bug lets Ceruledge set up Ground-types such as Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Ting-Lu, which is also complemented by Flash Fire, ensuring Fire-types such as Moltres and Cinderace can’t threaten it. Try to reorder the text to Flash Fire and Tera Bug are next to each other and really emphasize how they complement each other; right now it reads like not getting the def drop is the main appeal, rather than how good it complements Tera Bug. Wrt to Tera Bug, you can also mention how it turns the tables on Ground-type moves.

Bulk Up Ceruledge finds its home on Aurora Veil I would remove this so the text does not restrict the builder as much, specially since it is not clear why this would be the case. If you want to add something like "particularly Aurora Veil teams" thats fine hyper offense teams, where it covers the matchup against balance teams for them. Alolan Ninetales is the premier Veil setter that gives Ceruledge opportunities to set up with both Aurora Veil and Encore. This Ceruledge struggles against fast-paced offense teams with sweepers such as Ogerpon-Wellspring and Raging Bolt, where it will find difficulty setting up from repeated pressure. All of this is correct but its all worded in a really weird way. Part of why it fits on Veil is cause yeah, it helps them against balance, but also exactly cause Veil gives it enough room to set up against stronger foes. Not super strong ones but it is important to emphasize that in the initial sentence rather than later. The word covers is a bit strong cause you still have issues against the likes of Dragon Tail Dragonite, or faster Encore Pokemon. So anti-offense attackers such as Zamazenta and Dragonite are much appreciated with Ceruledge. Reader should not be expected to know what anti offense means, mention what threats these Pokemon handle or in what way. In return, Ceruledge dismantles Alolomola and Terastalized Garganacl, which they would otherwise struggle with. Pending depending on what Pokemon you choose to mention in the previous sentence Hazard control, such as Hatterene and Iron Treads, allows Ceruledge to preserve its health to sustain a sweep. Hatterene and other special attackers, such as Darkrai, can eliminate Dondozo, Ceruledge’s greatest difficulty. Ceruledge, in return, can utilize Ting-Lu as setup fodder, which walls these special attackers. Odd mention cause in Veil both of them can pressure Ting-Lu enough while not caring that that much about what it does

I get the teammates section might be a bit more limited. Hence you should use the space to really go in depth about the few partners you can. Do any of them help against Glimmora? Ogerpon-W could be a good add that does well against it. Kyurem is also usually seen on these teams and can help against annoying Pokemon like Dragonite and Zapdos.

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made a lot of changes mind checking it now?

 

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Please let me know after it is implemented and I can look at it again, sorry for the trouble

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[SET]
Ceruledge @ Covert Cloak
Ability: Flash Fire
EVs: 252 HP / 172 SpD / 84 Spe
Tera Type: Bug
Careful Nature
- Bulk Up
- Bitter Blade
- Shadow Sneak
- Taunt

[SET COMMENTS]
Ceruledge is a terrifying sweeper to balance teams with Bulk Up to increase both its bulk and power, and a unique set of traits catered to taking advantage of common balance team staples such as Garganacl and Alomomola. Bitter Blade allows Ceruledge to offset chip damage it may sustain throughout a battle.. (RP) Shadow Sneak allows Ceruledge to pick off faster targets like Dragapult and Deoxys-Speed. Taunt shuts down things status moves that would otherwise deny a Ceruledge, What do you mean here? such as Gliscor’s Toxic, Zamazenta and Moltres’ Roar, and Alomomola’s Tickle. With Covert Cloak, powerful secondary effects from moves such as Pecharunt’s Malignant Chain poison and Garganacl’s Salt Cure are nullified, making it even harder to wear down Ceruledge. Covert Cloak becomes even more important after Tera, as it prevents burns from Alomomola’s Scald. I would not highlight this in a different sentence, try to write it alongside the previous one, or just in a way that says its something that happens, not a crucial thing. Examples of recovery moves are a must add. Consider adding Garganacl's Curse but up to you Tera Bug lets Ceruledge take on ground-types such as Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Gliscor while not being weak to their common coverage options. Flash Fire further complements Tera Bug. Nullifying its Fire weakness and most sources of burn that would otherwise cripple Ceruledge post Terastilization.The given EV spread lets Ceruledge outspeed standard You could say defensive instead but either that or nothing in particular works Gliscor while maximizing Special Bulk to complement Bulk Up’s defense boosting.

These are all nitpicks the first paragraph is already fine

Bulk Up Ceruledge is commonly found on Hyper Offense teams that have a poor Balance team matchup. Sticky Web and Aurora Veil Support from Ribombee, Araquanid, and Alolan-Ninetales, respectively, cover up this set’s lack of speed or bulk and let it find opportunities to set up. Not common in Sticky Web. In my earlier check I mentioned removing the Aurora Veil part from the first sentence, but what I mean is that you can say "... on hyper offense teams, notably in Aurora Veil teams..." just something that does not completely restrict the set to Veil Ceruledge itself is a great support for these hyper offense styles because with Taunt, it denies Defog attempts from Weezing-Galar and Corviknight while being a Ghost-type to block Rapid Spin for Sticky Web teams. Also rather specific and not notable since it is not common in Webs. Instead use this space to mention how Veil gives Ceruledge enough room to safely setup multiple boosts Fast special attackers such as Darkrai and Deoxys-Speed can apply pressure to Dondozo and Dragonite, which would give Ceruledge trouble. Why do you need special attackers specifically to handle Dragonite? Is Deoxys-S a common presence on these teams? Hazard control, such as Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Hatterene, is required to ensure Ceruledge does not get worn down by hazards. This is fine; do they do something else for each other? Other physical attackers, such as Dragonite, Kyurem, and Swords Dance Gliscor, complement Ceruledge’s balance-breaking capabilities by being threats to Offense teams that Ceruledge may struggle against. Same comment as last check. Reader should not be expected to know why these Pokemon are good into offense. Is it cause of priority moves or good matchups into offense staples? What about Zamazenta that was present in the last version of the text, and Ogerpon-W that was in the check?

Be more specific about what teammates specifically handle. I get wanting to mention they handle general "offenive partners" but it is important to mention them, specially since there are not that many that you can safely say annoy Ceruledge counting Tera and Veil, so the ones you can actually mention go a long way. Glimmora and Zapdos are examples I brought up last time, Kyurem can do well into Zapdos, Dnite, while Ogerpon-W can do well into Glimmora as well as the Dondozo you mentioned earlier. Kyurem itself, as well as Zamazenta and Dragonite can help against Ogerpon-W. Mention how these Pokemon and other you mention appreciate Ceruledge taking on certain bulky Pokemon like Garganacl, Alomomola, and Gliscor.

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Just a couple of nitpicks but all good, QC 1/2 after implemented, ty for taking the time.

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[SET]
Ceruledge @ Covert Cloak
Ability: Flash Fire
EVs: 252 HP / 172 SpD / 84 Spe
Tera Type: Bug
Careful Nature
- Bulk Up
- Bitter Blade
- Shadow Sneak
- Taunt

[SET COMMENTS]
Ceruledge is a terrifying sweeper, particularly good against to balance teams, Just rewording it to make it less specific with Bulk Up to increase both its bulk and power, and a unique set of traits catered to taking advantage of common balance team staples such as Garganacl and Alomomola. Bitter Blade allows Ceruledge to offset chip damage it may sustain throughout a battle.. Shadow Sneak allows Ceruledge to pick off faster targets like Dragapult and Deoxys-Speed. Taunt shuts down status moves that would otherwise deny a Ceruledge sweep, such as Gliscor’s Toxic, Zamazenta and Moltres’ Roar, and Alomomola’s Tickle. It also denies recovery from Garganacl and Pecharunt. With Covert Cloak, powerful secondary effects from moves such as Pecharunt’s Malignant Chain poison, Garganacl’s Salt Cure, and Alomomola’s Scald post-Tera are nullified, making it even harder to wear down Ceruledge. Tera Bug lets Ceruledge take on ground-types such as Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Gliscor while not being weak to their common coverage options. Flash Fire further complements Tera Bug. Nullifying its Fire weakness and most sources of burn that would otherwise cripple Ceruledge post Terastilization.The given EV spread lets Ceruledge outspeed Gliscor while maximizing Special Bulk to complement Bulk Up’s defense boosting.

Bulk Up Ceruledge is commonly found on Hyper Offense teams, most notably Veil teams that have a poor Balance team matchup. Ceruledge itself is a great support for these hyper offense styles because with Taunt, it denies Defog attempts from Weezing-Galar and Corviknight. With Aurora Veil, Ceruledge is given opportunities to get multiple boosts with the reduced damage. Fast They do not need to be fast to handle Dondozo. You can remove this or add a way in which their speed helps Ceruledge in some other way special attackers such as Darkrai and Deoxys-Speed can apply pressure to Dondozo, which would give Ceruledge trouble. Hazard control, such as Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Hatterene, is required to ensure Ceruledge does not get worn down by hazards. In return, Ceruledge can defeat Alomomola, which walls Great Tusk and Iron Treads, and Slowking-Galar, which gives Hatterene trouble. Other physical attackers, such as Dragonite, Kyurem, Swords Dance Gliscor, and Ogerpon-W, complement Ceruledge’s balance-breaking capabilities by threatening checks to Ceruledge. Dragonite’s Multiscale and variety of sets; in particular, Tera Blast sets can find opportunities to set up and turn the tables on Zamazenta and Ogerpon-W. Kyurem can threaten Dragonite and Zapdos with its powerful Icicle Spear, especially after a Dragon Dance boost. Gliscor can take on Glimmora and Landorus-T, and Ogerpon-W can also break Glimmora and take on Dondozo with its Grass-type attacks. In return, they all appreciate their checks, such as Gliscor, Garganacl, and Pecharunt. Zamazenta provides speed control, outrunning most of the metagame bar Dragapult and Deoxys-Speed, allowing it to threaten Darkrai and Ogerpon-W, while in return, Ceruledge is a check to Pecharunt and Alomomola, which Zamazenta is walled by.

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