PU I Won't Say I'm In Love (Flame Orb Heracross) [QC 2/2] [GP 1/1]

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[SET]
Heracross @ Flame Orb
Ability: Guts
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Tera Type: Normal / Dark
Jolly Nature
- Close Combat
- Facade
- Knock Off
- Trailblaze / Swords Dance

[SET COMMENTS]
Guts Heracross is one of the scariest wallbreakers in PU. Flame Orb blocks status conditions from Pokemon like Bellibolt and Gligar and, along with Guts, powers up Facade, providing Heracross with a powerful attack to hit Pokemon that resist its STAB attacks, nailing Flying-types like Altaria and Fairy-types like Florges incredibly hard. Knock Off hits Psychic-types like Galarian Slowbro and Ghost-types like Golurk. Trailblaze gives Heracross a Speed boost, letting it outspeed the entire unboosted metagame, allowing it to clean up weakened teams. It can use the switches it forces on Pokemon like Wo-Chien and Scrafty to set up with Swords Dance, letting it net OHKOs on the likes of Florges, Bellibolt, and Altaria. Tera Normal gives Heracross a chance to OHKO Florges and 2HKO Gligar with Stealth Rock damage. Tera Dark gives STAB on Knock Off, letting it 2HKO Houndstone with Stealth Rock damage lets Heracrosss turn the tables on Psychic-types like Meloetta and Delphox. It makes Heracross weak to Fighting-type, attacks however, letting it be revenge killed more easily by Fighting-types like Pawmot and Paldean Tauros-W.

Heracross best fits on balance and bulky offense teams looking for a powerful wallbreaker. It can struggle to switch in, so pivots like Bellibolt and Scyther help bring it in and activate Flame Orb immediately. Priority attacks like Arcanine's Extreme Speed, Ambipom's Fake Out, and Decidueye's Shadow Sneak can easily take out Heracross, so physical walls like Mudsdale and Bellibolt are great teammates. Psychic-types like Meloetta and Galarian Articuno can hit Heracross super effectively, so defensive answers to them like Bronzong help Heracross greatly. In return, Heracross can deal with the Dark-types like Skuntank and Scrafty that Psychic-types struggle with. Fire-types like Salazzle and Delphox outspeed and OHKO Heracross, so checks like Milotic and Gastrodon are great additions to its team. Electric-types like Bellibolt and Rotom-H help deal with Flying-types that scare out Heracross and can bring it in with Volt Switch. Entry hazard stackers like Gligar and Gastrodon can easily chip foes like Florges and Mudsdale into range to be OHKOd be Heracross. Heracross' powerful Knock Off removes Heavy-Duty Boots, making the hazards from these Pokemon much more potent. Physical setup sweepers like Arcanine and Scyther greatly benefit from Heracross weakening walls, allowing them to sweep with ease.

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sinnabyss said:
[SET]
Heracross @ Flame Orb
Ability: Guts
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Tera Type: Normal / Dark
Jolly Nature
- Facade
- Close Combat
- Knock Off
- Trailblaze / Swords Dance (think i asked you to slash this in discord and you didnt so just fixing this up.)

[SET COMMENTS]
Heracross is one of the scariest wallbreakers in PU. Guts and Flame Orb gives it a free 1.5 attack boost, as well as an immunity to status conditions from Pokemon like Bellibolt and Gligar. (Good opening but needs some work, particularly dont like the "free 1.5 attack boost" part as that feels a bit too wordy and dexy. You can say Facade provides Heracross with a powerful attack to hit types that resist its STABs, nailing flying-types Flying-types like Altaria and Fairy-types like Florges incredibly hard. Close Combat is a powerful STAB attack that threatens Pokemon like Alolan Sandslash and Wo-Chien. (You dont need to explain STAB.) Knock Off hits psychic-types Psychic-types like Delphox and ghost Ghost-types like Houndstone Decidueye and Golurk. (overall more meta relevant examples.) Trailblaze hits Ground- and Water-type Pokemon like Mudsdale and Milotic super effectively and (Facade and CC does more) gives Heracross a speed boost, letting it outspeed the entire unboosted metagame (mention how it makes it a much scarier cleaner too.). Heracross can use the switches it forces (on Pokemon such as?) to setup Swords Dance, sending its Attack to the stratosphere. Tera Normal gives Heracross STAB on Facade, allowing it a possible OHKO on Florges and a 2HKO on Gligar with Stealth Rock damage. Tera Dark gives STAB on Knock Off (any rolls this helps with?) and makes Heracross immune to Psychic-type attacks, allowing it to turn the tables on Pokemon like Meloetta and Delphox. (Mention how both come at a cost of no longer having a fighting-type resist; this can be iffy into the opposing fighting types ie wetbull and pawmot.)

Heracross best fits on balance and bulky offense teams looking for a powerful breaker. Heracross can struggle to switch in, so pivots like Bellibolt and Bombirdier (not really a great pivot as it doesnt run pshot that much, mentioning something like gligar or scyther is probably better here.) help bring it in and activate Flame Orb immediately. Priority attacks like Arcanines Extreme Speed and Ambipoms Fake Out can easily take out Heracross (and wear it down faster for less flame orb turns, also mention Deci Shadow Sneak somewhere since thats the most common prio in the tier atm.), so physically defensive walls like Mudsdale and Bellibolt are great teammates. Psychic-types like Meloetta and Galarian Articuno can hit Heracross super effectively, so defensive answers to them like Bronzong and Coalossal help Heracross greatly. Fire types like Sallazle Salazzle and Delphox outspeed and OHKO Heracross, so checks like Milotic and Goodra (not rly a check to delphox, mention gastro here instead.) are great additions to Heracrosses team. Electric types like Bellibolt and Rotom-H help deal with flying-types Flying-types that scare out Heracross, and can bring it in with Volt Switch. Hazard stackers like Gligar and Gastrodon can easily chip opponents (such as?) into range to be OHKOd be Heracross. Physical setup sweepers like Arcanine and Scyther greatly benefit from Heracross weakening the opponents walls (once again, mention examples), allowing them to sweep with ease. Choice Scarf users like Staraptor and Meloetta (shit scarfer, migo is better here.) beat the fast offensive threats (such as?) that check Heracross, while Heracross can destroy the bulkier Pokemon (like?) that they often struggle with.
(The teammates section content wise is fine, but it needs some expansion. What does heracross do back for these teammates? What does it offer for them? For example, You mention how Bronzong is a good teammate for Hera as it checks Psychic-types Hera cant really deal with on its own. In turn, Heracross helps wear down the threats Bronzong cant reliably check, like Scrafty and Skuntank. Stuff like that should be mentioned here because atm it reads as a typechart thing and im trying to avoid that. You dont have to do it for every teammate sentence but at least 2-3 should be here.)
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[SET]
Heracross @ Flame Orb
Ability: Guts
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Tera Type: Normal / Dark
Jolly Nature
- Facade
- Close Combat
- Knock Off
- Trailblaze / Swords Dance

small nitpick but switch cc and facade, the stab move should come first

[SET COMMENTS]
Guts Heracross is one of the scariest wallbreakers in PU. Guts and Flame Orb gives it an immunity to status conditions from Pokemon like Bellibolt and Gligar, as well as powering up Facade, providing Heracross with a powerful attack to hit types that resist its STABs, nailing Flying-types like Altaria and Fairy-types like Florges incredibly hard. Knock Off hits Psychic-types like Delphox (you don't outspeed this mon before trailblaze is clicked and it's not coming in on you anyway, choose something slower like glowbro) and Ghost-types like Golurk. Trailblaze gives Heracross a speed boost, letting it outspeed the entire unboosted metagame, allowing it to clean up weakened teams. Heracross can use the switches it forces on Pokemon like Wo-Chien and Scrafty to setup Swords Dance, sending its Attack to the stratosphere (that's cool but what exactly does swords dance do over a coverage move? what pokemon are now ohkoed by hera at +2?). Tera Normal gives Heracross STAB on Facade, allowing it a possible OHKO on Florges and a 2HKO on Gligar with Stealth Rock damage. Tera Dark gives STAB on Knock Off, letting it 2HKO Houndstone with Stealth Rock damage and makes Heracross immune to Psychic-type attacks, allowing it to turn the tables on Pokemon like Meloetta and Delphox. It makes Heracross weak to Fighting-type attacks however, letting it be reveng killed more easily by Fighting-types like Pawmot and Paldean Tauros Aqua. (should be Paldean Tauros-W)

Heracross best fits on balance and bulky offense teams looking for a powerful breaker. Heracross can struggle to switch in, so pivots like Bellibolt and Scyther help bring it in and activate Flame Orb immediately. Priority attacks like Arcanines Extreme Speed, Ambipoms Fake Out and Decidueyes Shadow Sneak can easily take out Heracross, so physically defensive walls like Mudsdale and Bellibolt are great teammates. Psychic-types like Meloetta and Galarian Articuno can hit Heracross super effectively, so defensive answers to them like Bronzong help Heracross greatly. In return, Heracross can deal with the Dark-types like Skunktank and Scrafty that Psychic-types struggle with. Fire types like Sallazle and Delphox outspeed and OHKO Heracross, so checks like Milotic and Gastrodon are great additions to Heracrosses team. Electric types like Bellibolt and Rotom-H help deal with flying-types that scare out Heracross, and can bring it in with Volt Switch. Hazard stackers like Gligar and Gastrodon can easily chip opponents like Florges and Gligar (you don't need to mention the same mon twice in a sentence) into range to be OHKOd be Heracross. Heracrosses powerful Knock Off removes the Heavy-Duty Boots making the hazards from these Pokemon more potent. Physical setup sweepers like Arcanine and Scyther greatly benefit from Heracross weakening the opponents walls, allowing them to sweep with ease. Choice Scarf users like Staraptor and Flamigo beat the fast offensive threats that check Heracross such as Delphox and Salazzle, while Heracross can destroy the bulkier Pokemon like Belibolt and Bronzong that they often struggle with. (starting to get a bit too long)

clean up grammar please, especially in second paragraph, it's not too bad but i saw a handful of missing apostrophes and poor spelling. for example, it's not Heracrosses, but Heracross' when you're using a possessive noun.

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[SET]
Heracross @ Flame Orb
Ability: Guts
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Tera Type: Normal / Dark
Jolly Nature
- Close Combat
- Facade
- Knock Off
- Trailblaze / Swords Dance

[SET COMMENTS]
Guts Heracross is one of the scariest wallbreakers in PU. Guts and Flame Orb gives it an immunity to blocks status conditions from Pokemon like Bellibolt and Gligar and, along with Guts, powers (remove comma) as well as powering up Facade, providing Heracross with a powerful attack to hit types Pokemon that resist its STAB attacks STABs, nailing Flying-types like Altaria and Fairy-types like Florges incredibly hard. Knock Off hits Psychic-types like Galarian Slowbro and Ghost-types like Golurk. Trailblaze gives Heracross a Speed speed boost, letting it outspeed the entire unboosted metagame and (remove comma) allowing it to clean up weakened teams. It Heracross can use the switches it forces on Pokemon like Wo-Chien and Scrafty to set up with setup Swords Dance, sending its Attack to the stratosphere, netting ,(comma)letting it net OHKOs on the likes of Florges, Bellibolt, and Altaria. Tera Normal gives Heracross STAB on Facade, allowing it a possible gives Facade a chance to OHKO on Florges and a 2HKO on Gligar with Stealth Rock damage. Tera Dark gives STAB on Knock Off, letting it lets Knock Off 2HKO Houndstone with Stealth Rock damage and makes Heracross immune to Psychic-type attacks, allowing it allows Heracross to turn the tables on Pokemon Psychic-types like Meloetta and Delphox. It makes Heracross weak to Fighting-type attacks, (comma) however, letting it be reveng revenge killed more easily by Fighting-types like Pawmot and Paldean Tauros-W.

Heracross best fits on balance and bulky offense teams looking for a powerful wallbreaker. It Heracross can struggle to switch in, so pivots like Bellibolt and Scyther help bring it in and activate Flame Orb immediately. Priority attacks like (add apostrophe after all three of these pokemon ->) Arcanine's Extreme Speed, Ambipom's Fake Out, (comma) and Decidueye's Shadow Sneak can easily take out Heracross, so physically defensive walls like Mudsdale and Bellibolt are great teammates. Psychic-types like Meloetta and Galarian Articuno can hit Heracross super effectively, so defensive answers to them like Bronzong help Heracross greatly. In return, Heracross can deal with the Dark-types like Skuntank Skunktank and Scrafty that Psychic-types struggle with. Fire-types (hyphen) like Salazzle Sallazle and Delphox outspeed and OHKO Heracross, so checks like Milotic and Gastrodon are great additions to its Heracross' team. Electric-types (hyphen) like Bellibolt and Rotom-H help deal with flying Flying-types that scare out Heracross (remove comma) and can bring it in with Volt Switch. Hazard Entry hazard stackers like Gligar and Gastrodon can easily chip opponents foes like Florges and Mudsdale into range to be OHKOed by OHKOd be Heracross. Its Heracross' powerful Knock Off removes the Heavy-Duty Boots, (comma) making the hazards from these Pokemon more potent. Physical setup sweepers like Arcanine and Scyther greatly benefit from Heracross weakening the opponents walls, allowing them to sweep with ease.

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