UUbers Kyurem-W (Choice Scarf) [DONE!]

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Choice Scarf (Kyurem-White) @ Choice Scarf
Ability: Turboblaze
Tera Type: Fire
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Draco Meteor
- Ice Beam
- Freeze-Dry
- Fusion Flare

[SET COMMENTS]
Kyurem-W is one of the most dangerous Pokemon in Ubers UU thanks to its combination of high Special Attack, good coverage options, and usable defensive profile, making it one of the tier's most dangerous revenge killers and special attackers. Draco Meteor + Ice Beam is a great STAB combination, hitting the majority of the tier. Freeze-Dry gives Kyurem-W coverage for Water-types like Palafin and Toxapex. Fusion Flare gives Kyurem-White coverage for Steel-types like Magearna, Solgaleo, and Zamazenta-C. Tera Fire allows Kyurem-W to boost Fusion Flare as well as provides it with a nifty resistance to Fairy- and Steel-type attacks from the likes of Zacian, Magearna, Dialga, and Solgaleo. Kyurem-W fits best on balance and offensive teams looking for a strong revenge killer and special attacker. Kyurem-W struggles to break through specially defensive walls like Blissey and Solgaleo, so Pokemon that can deal with these walls like Arceus-Fire, Zamazenta-C, and Landorus-T, make good partners. Entry hazard control from Pokemon like Great Tusk and Corviknight increases Kyurem-W's longevity.
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[SET]
Choice Scarf (Kyurem-White) @ Choice Scarf
Ability: Turboblaze
Tera Type: Fire
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Draco Meteor
- Ice Beam
- Freeze Dry
- Fusion Flare

[SET COMMENTS]
Kyurem-W is one of the most dangerous Pokemon in Ubers UU thanks to its combination of high special attack and good coverage options, and useable defensive profile, I would rephrase this opening bit a little. Kyurem-White and Chi-Yu compete for essentially the same role, and Chi-Yu is actually arguably better as it's faster and stronger. Where Kyurem-White stands out however, is that it resists jet punch, and just generally has much more useable bulk than Chi-Yu. I think it's worth mentioning that in the opening bit, as that's essentially Kyurem-White's main draw over Chi-Yu. making it one of the tier's most dangerous revenge killers and special attackers. Draco Meteor + Ice Beam is a great STAB combination, hitting the majority of the tier. Freeze Dry gives Kyurem-White coverage into Water-types like Palafin and Toxapex. Fusion Flare gives Kyurem-White coverage options into Steel-types like Magearna, Solgaleo, or Zamazenta-Crowned. Tera Fire allows Kyurem-White to boost its Fusion Flare as well as providing it a nifty resistance to Fairy- and Steel-type attacks from the likes of Magearna and Dialga, and Solgaleo. Kyurem-W fits best on balance and offensive teams looking for a strong revenge killer and special attacker. Kyurem-W struggles to break through against specially defensive walls like Blissey and Solgaleo, so Pokemon who can deal with these walls like Zacian, Zamazenta-Crowned, and Landorus-Therian all make good partners. Rapid Spin support from the likes of Great Tusk and Cyclizar can remove entry hazards, increasing Kyurem-W's longevity. Kyurem-White benefits a lot from hazard removal in general due to its weakness to stealth rocks. However, Cyclizar has fallen off a lot in the meta so I wouldn't recommend advertising Cyclizar as a good team mate in general. On the defog side of things, Giratina doesn't cover Kyurem-White's weaknesses, but Corviknight is a niche pick that can synergize well with Kyurem-White.
 
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[SET]
Choice Scarf (Kyurem-White) @ Choice Scarf
Ability: Turboblaze
Tera Type: Fire
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Draco Meteor
- Ice Beam
- Freeze Dry
- Fusion Flare

[SET COMMENTS]
Kyurem-W is one of the most dangerous Pokemon in Ubers UU thanks to its combination of high special attack and good coverage options, and useable defensive profile, I would rephrase this opening bit a little. Kyurem-White and Chi-Yu compete for essentially the same role, and Chi-Yu is actually arguably better as it's faster and stronger. Where Kyurem-White stands out however, is that it resists jet punch, and just generally has much more useable bulk than Chi-Yu. I think it's worth mentioning that in the opening bit, as that's essentially Kyurem-White's main draw over Chi-Yu. making it one of the tier's most dangerous revenge killers and special attackers. Draco Meteor + Ice Beam is a great STAB combination, hitting the majority of the tier. Freeze Dry gives Kyurem-White coverage into Water-types like Palafin and Toxapex. Fusion Flare gives Kyurem-White coverage options into Steel-types like Magearna, Solgaleo, or Zamazenta-Crowned. Tera Fire allows Kyurem-White to boost its Fusion Flare as well as providing it a nifty resistance to Fairy- and Steel-type attacks from the likes of Magearna and Dialga, and Solgaleo. Kyurem-W fits best on balance and offensive teams looking for a strong revenge killer and special attacker. Kyurem-W struggles to break through against specially defensive walls like Blissey and Solgaleo, so Pokemon who can deal with these walls like Zacian, Zamazenta-Crowned, and Landorus-Therian all make good partners. Rapid Spin support from the likes of Great Tusk and Cyclizar can remove entry hazards, increasing Kyurem-W's longevity. Kyurem-White benefits a lot from hazard removal in general due to its weakness to stealth rocks. However, Cyclizar has fallen off a lot in the meta so I wouldn't recommend advertising Cyclizar as a good team mate in general. On the defog side of things, Giratina doesn't cover Kyurem-White's weaknesses, but Corviknight is a niche pick that can synergize well with Kyurem-White.
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Zamazenta-C and Landorus-T are both right per GP standards, by the way.
I also changed useable to usable.
The rest is implemented! Kept Great Tusk too as a mention for hazard control.
 
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[SET]
Choice Scarf (Kyurem-White) @ Choice Scarf
Ability: Turboblaze
Tera Type: Fire
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Draco Meteor
- Ice Beam
- Freeze Dry
- Fusion Flare

[SET COMMENTS]
Kyurem-W is one of the most dangerous Pokemon in Ubers UU thanks to its combination of high special attack, good coverage options, and usable defensive profile. Making it one of the tier's most dangerous revenge killers and special attackers. Draco Meteor + Ice Beam is a great STAB combination, hitting the majority of the tier. Freeze Dry gives Kyurem-W coverage into Water-types like Palafin and Toxapex. Fusion Flare gives Kyurem-W coverage options into Steel-types like Magearna, Solgaleo, and Zamazenta-C. Tera Fire allows Kyurem-W to boost its Fusion Flare as well as providing it a nifty resistance to Fairy and Steel-type attacks from the likes of Zacian,(super nitpicky, but I do think Zac should get mentioned if Fairy types are mentioned)Magearna, Dialga, and Solgaleo. Kyurem-W fits best on balance and offensive teams looking for a strong revenge killer and special attacker. Kyurem-W struggles to break through against specially defensive walls like Blissey and Solgaleo, so Pokemon who can deal with these walls like Zacian Arceus-Fire(Solg is a pretty good check to Zac, so Arc-Fire is a good replacement.) Zamazenta-C, and Landorus-T all make good partners. Entry hazard control from Pokemon like Great Tusk and the niche (Though corv IS niche, you don't need to specify that in the analysis)Corviknight increases Kyurem-W's longevity.
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You're tearing right through these lol
 
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[SET]
Choice Scarf (Kyurem-White) @ Choice Scarf
Ability: Turboblaze
Tera Type: Fire
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Draco Meteor
- Ice Beam
- Freeze Dry
- Fusion Flare

[SET COMMENTS]
Kyurem-W is one of the most dangerous Pokemon in Ubers UU thanks to its combination of high special attack, good coverage options, and usable defensive profile. Making it one of the tier's most dangerous revenge killers and special attackers. Draco Meteor + Ice Beam is a great STAB combination, hitting the majority of the tier. Freeze Dry gives Kyurem-W coverage into Water-types like Palafin and Toxapex. Fusion Flare gives Kyurem-W coverage options into Steel-types like Magearna, Solgaleo, and Zamazenta-C. Tera Fire allows Kyurem-W to boost its Fusion Flare as well as providing it a nifty resistance to Fairy and Steel-type attacks from the likes of Zacian,(super nitpicky, but I do think Zac should get mentioned if Fairy types are mentioned)Magearna, Dialga, and Solgaleo. Kyurem-W fits best on balance and offensive teams looking for a strong revenge killer and special attacker. Kyurem-W struggles to break through against specially defensive walls like Blissey and Solgaleo, so Pokemon who can deal with these walls like Zacian Arceus-Fire(Solg is a pretty good check to Zac, so Arc-Fire is a good replacement.) Zamazenta-C, and Landorus-T all make good partners. Entry hazard control from Pokemon like Great Tusk and the niche (Though corv IS niche, you don't need to specify that in the analysis)Corviknight increases Kyurem-W's longevity.
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You're tearing right through these lol
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thanks, did
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Quick note regarding Freeze-Dry: It is hyphenated, so I edited that in on the set itself. I don't know if that will break the upload. If it will please ignore that change. It should be hyphenated in the paragraph, though.

[SET]
Choice Scarf (Kyurem-White) @ Choice Scarf
Ability: Turboblaze
Tera Type: Fire
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Draco Meteor
- Ice Beam
- Freeze-[add hyphen]Dry
- Fusion Flare

[SET COMMENTS]
Kyurem-W is one of the most dangerous Pokemon in Ubers UU thanks to its combination of high [capitalize] Sspecial Aattack, good coverage options, and usable defensive profile.[RP],[AC] making it one of the tier'[add apostrophe]s most dangerous revenge killers and special attackers. Draco Meteor + Ice Beam is a great STAB combination, hitting the majority of the tier. Freeze-[add hyphen]Dry gives Kyurem-White coverage into Water-types like Palafin and Toxapex. Fusion Flare gives Kyurem-White coverage options into Steel-types like Magearna, Solgaleo, or Zamazenta-C. Tera Fire allows Kyurem-W to boost its Fusion Flare as well as and providinges it with a nifty resistance to Fairy- and Steel-type attacks from the likes of Zacian, Magearna, Dialga, and Solgaleo. Kyurem-W fits best on balance and offensive teams looking for a strong revenge killer and special attacker. Kyurem-W struggles to break through against specially defensive walls like Blissey and Solgaleo, so Pokemon who that can deal with these walls,[AC] like Arceus-Fire, Zamazenta-C, and Landorus-T,[AC] all make good partners. Entry hazard control from Pokemon like Great Tusk and Corviknight increases Kyurem-W's longevity.
[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/bella.567483/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/finchely.642468/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/nap00.610920/
Grammar checked by:
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Quick note regarding Freeze-Dry: It is hyphenated, so I edited that in on the set itself. I don't know if that will break the upload. If it will please ignore that change. It should be hyphenated in the paragraph, though.


[SET]
Choice Scarf (Kyurem-White) @ Choice Scarf
Ability: Turboblaze
Tera Type: Fire
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Draco Meteor
- Ice Beam
- Freeze-[add hyphen]Dry
- Fusion Flare

[SET COMMENTS]
Kyurem-W is one of the most dangerous Pokemon in Ubers UU thanks to its combination of high [capitalize] Sspecial Aattack, good coverage options, and usable defensive profile.[RP],[AC] making it one of the tier'[add apostrophe]s most dangerous revenge killers and special attackers. Draco Meteor + Ice Beam is a great STAB combination, hitting the majority of the tier. Freeze-[add hyphen]Dry gives Kyurem-White coverage into for Water-types like Palafin and Toxapex. Fusion Flare gives Kyurem-White coverage options into for Steel-types like Magearna, Solgaleo, or and Zamazenta-C. Tera Fire allows Kyurem-W to boost its Fusion Flare as well as and providinges it with a nifty resistance to Fairy- and Steel-type attacks from the likes of Zacian, Magearna, Dialga, and Solgaleo. Kyurem-W fits best on balance and offensive teams looking for a strong revenge killer and special attacker. Kyurem-W struggles to break through against specially defensive walls like Blissey and Solgaleo, so Pokemon who that can deal with these walls,[AC] like Arceus-Fire, Zamazenta-C, and Landorus-T,[AC] all make good partners. Entry hazard control from Pokemon like Great Tusk and Corviknight increases Kyurem-W's longevity.
[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/bella.567483/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/finchely.642468/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/nap00.610920/
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/sunny004.197240/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/ken.594478/

  • Overall, you did great, and especially you did a good job with finding the punctuation and capitalization that was needed!
  • When checking, try to avoid putting back to back edits (red-blue-red-blue), and just remove the whole phrase and re-type it
    • For example: as well as and providinges it with /// to make it easier to implement, you could as well as providing it and provides it with
    • This is especially considerate for changing single letters, since one swift keystroke and they end up yeeting the change + the removal (or you can just delete the single letter, replacing it with the blue)
  • The only real "GP-specific" comments I have are where you missed keeping the plurality of the conjunction with the reference consistent at one point
    • Steel-types like Magearna, Solgaleo, or Zamazenta-C should be and, since Steel-types is plural (and = plural; or = singular)
  • Lastly, this is definitely a personal preference, but for removing punctuation, you can either bold & highlight it like you did, or remove it and leave the [RC]; the former is obviously more clear for what changed, but the latter makes it easier for writers to implement
 
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