RU Passimian [QC 2/2] [GP 1/1]

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[SET]
name: Choice Scarf
move 1: Close Combat
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: Rock Slide / Earthquake
move 4: U-turn
item: Choice Scarf
ability: Defiant
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Passimian's Choice Scarf, coverage, and great Attack allow it to revenge kill a large portion of the RU metagame, including Salazzle, weakened Silvally formes, Ninetales, and Snorlax. It also punishes use of Defog and Sticky Web with its Defiant. Rock Slide hits common Rock-weak Pokemon such as Vikavolt and Charizard. Earthquake is an alternative that OHKOes the aforementioned Salazzle as well as Ninetales and Toxicroak. Knock Off hits threats that resist Close Combat such as Xatu, Jellicent, and Rotom. Lastly, U-turn allows Passimian to gain momentum against threats like Vileplume, Sableye, and Silvally-Ghost by bringing in a powerful wallbreaking teammate. Gunk Shot in place of Rock Slide or Earthquake can be used to nail Virizion as well as Fairy-types like Silvally-Fairy, Slurpuff, Whimsicott, and Aromatisse.

Since Passimian will want to use its powerful Close Combat to wallbreak or sweep, having a teammate like Silvally-Dark, Escavalier, or Steelix to dispose of Ghost-, Psychic-, and Fairy-types is appreciated. Having a powerful wallbreaker like Indeedee, Alolan Raichu, or Silvally-Steel to deal with common switch-ins to Passimian like Vileplume, Jellicent, and Silvally-Fairy puts less pressure on it. Pairing Passimian with a partner like Rotom or Alolan Raichu to form a VoltTurn core helps its team gain momentum. Lastly, partners that appreciate Steel-types being gone like Aromatisse and Vileplume are good to have so that these teammates can do their respective jobs.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Oathkeepre, 83980]]
- Quality checked by: [[bkdrew, 469610], [aVocado, 56549]]
- Grammar checked by: [[CryoGyro, 331519]]
 
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quality control check time ft. da bird keeper

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Blue: add this thing
Green: my comments

name: Choice Scarf
move 1: Close Combat
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: Rock Slide / Earthquake
move 4: U-turn
item: Choice Scarf
ability: Defiant
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Passimian's great Attack stat and Speed when equipped with a Choice Scarf allow it to use its powerful Fighting-type STAB and coverage moves to revenge kill a large portion of the RU metagame, including Salazzle, weakened Silvally formes, Ninetales, and Snorlax. Rock Slide does allow Passimian to OHKO checks to it like Charizard and Centiskorch. Rock Slide allows Passimian to revenge kill common Rock-weak Pokemon such as Centiskorch and Charizard. (reword this, it's pretty confusing how it appears) Earthquake is also alternative coverage over Rock Slide that allows Passimian to OHKO the aforementioned Salazzle as well as Toxicroak , as well as Ninetales and Toxicroak. Knock Off allows Passimian to hit threats that would otherwise wall or resist resist or are immune to (this flows so much better) Close Combat such as Jellicent, Rotom, and Xatu. Lastly, U-turn rounds out this moveset by allowing Passimian to pivot on threats like Vileplume, Sableye, and Silvally-Ghost and gain momentum. Slip something in here about Pokemon, namely wallbreakers, that can be brought in to take advantage of plume sab etc. stuff like indeedee, ninetales, centiskorch would go here Gunk Shot, on the other hand, is a nice alternative coverage move in place of Rock Slide or Earthquake that can be used to nail Virizion as well as Fairy-types like Silvally-Fairy, Slurpuff, Whimsicott, and Aromatisse.

Since Passimian will want to use Close Combat due to its breaking power, having a teammate like Silvally-Dark, Escavalier, and Steelix to dispose of Ghost-, Psychic-, and Fairy-types is appreciated to pave the way for a potential sweep. Having a powerful wallbreaker like Indeedee, Alolan Raichu, or Silvally-Steel to deal with common switch-ins to Passimian like Vileplume, Jellicent, and Silvally-Fairy puts less pressure on Passimian. Add something in here about volt-turn cores with stuff like rotom and alolachu. also what teammates benefit from passimian's persence on a team?

quality control approved, 1/2! get these implemented, well done :)

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amcheck :)

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Overall good writing, but watch out for repetitions. Generally, they aren't all that bad, but if you use the same wording and structure four times, the writing becomes clunky. Try to avoid reps on the same sentence too.

There is a handful of subjective changes here that aim to fix reps hehe.

passimian.gif
passimian-s.gif

[SET]
name: Choice Scarf
move 1: Close Combat
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: Rock Slide / Earthquake
move 4: U-turn
item: Choice Scarf
ability: Defiant
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Passimian's great Attack stat and Speed when equipped with a Choice Scarf allow it to use its powerful Fighting-type STAB and coverage moves to revenge kill a large portion of the RU metagame, including Salazzle, weakened Silvally formes, Ninetales, and Snorlax. Rock Slide allows Passimian to revenge kill common Rock-weak Pokemon such as Centiskorch and Charizard. Earthquake is also an alternative coverage option over Rock Slide that allows Passimian to OHKO OHKOes (repetition) the aforementioned Salazzle, as well as Ninetales and Toxicroak. Knock Off allows Passimian to hit hits (repetition) threats that resist or are immune to Close Combat such as Jellicent, Rotom, and Xatu Xatu, Jellicent, and Rotom (match prev phrase). Lastly, U-turn rounds out this moveset by allowing allows (fluff) Passimian to pivot on threats like Vileplume, Sableye, and Silvally-Ghost, (AC) and gain momentum, (AC) and bring in a powerful wallbreaking teammate. Gunk Shot, on the other hand, is also a nice alternative coverage move in place of Rock Slide or Earthquake that can be used to nail Virizion as well as Fairy-types like Silvally-Fairy, Slurpuff, Whimsicott, and Aromatisse. Passimian also takes advantage of Defog users with its Defiant ability and creates more offensive pressure.

Since Passimian will want to use Close Combat due to its breaking power, having a teammate like Silvally-Dark, Escavalier, and or Steelix to dispose of Ghost-, Psychic-, and Fairy-types is appreciated to pave the way for a potential sweep. Having a powerful wallbreaker like Indeedee, Alolan Raichu, or Silvally-Steel to deal with common switch-ins to Passimian like Vileplume, Jellicent, and Silvally-Fairy puts less pressure on Passimian it. Pairing Passimian with a partner to form a VoltTurn core, (AC) such as Rotom or Alolan Raichu, (AC) helps its team gain momentum and gain get (optional) the upper hand on the opponent opposing Pokemon. Lastly, partners that appreciate Steel-types being gone like Aromatisse and Vileplume are appreciated good to have so that these teammates can do their respective jobs.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Oathkeepre, 83980]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
 
kt3 said:
amcheck :)

add/replace, remove, (comments)

Overall good writing, but watch out for repetitions. Generally, they aren't all that bad, but if you use the same wording and structure four times, the writing becomes clunky. Try to avoid reps on the same sentence too.

There is a handful of subjective changes here that aim to fix reps hehe.

passimian.gif
passimian-s.gif

[SET]
name: Choice Scarf
move 1: Close Combat
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: Rock Slide / Earthquake
move 4: U-turn
item: Choice Scarf
ability: Defiant
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Passimian's great Attack stat and Speed when equipped with a Choice Scarf allow it to use its powerful Fighting-type STAB and coverage moves to revenge kill a large portion of the RU metagame, including Salazzle, weakened Silvally formes, Ninetales, and Snorlax. Rock Slide allows Passimian to revenge kill common Rock-weak Pokemon such as Centiskorch and Charizard. Earthquake is also an alternative coverage option over Rock Slide that allows Passimian to OHKO OHKOes (repetition) the aforementioned Salazzle, as well as Ninetales and Toxicroak. Knock Off allows Passimian to hit hits (repetition) threats that resist or are immune to Close Combat such as Jellicent, Rotom, and Xatu Xatu, Jellicent, and Rotom (match prev phrase). Lastly, U-turn rounds out this moveset by allowing allows (fluff) Passimian to pivot on threats like Vileplume, Sableye, and Silvally-Ghost, (AC) and gain momentum, (AC) and bring in a powerful wallbreaking teammate. Gunk Shot, on the other hand, is also a nice alternative coverage move in place of Rock Slide or Earthquake that can be used to nail Virizion as well as Fairy-types like Silvally-Fairy, Slurpuff, Whimsicott, and Aromatisse. Passimian also takes advantage of Defog users with its Defiant ability and creates more offensive pressure.

Since Passimian will want to use Close Combat due to its breaking power, having a teammate like Silvally-Dark, Escavalier, and or Steelix to dispose of Ghost-, Psychic-, and Fairy-types is appreciated to pave the way for a potential sweep. Having a powerful wallbreaker like Indeedee, Alolan Raichu, or Silvally-Steel to deal with common switch-ins to Passimian like Vileplume, Jellicent, and Silvally-Fairy puts less pressure on Passimian it. Pairing Passimian with a partner to form a VoltTurn core, (AC) such as Rotom or Alolan Raichu, (AC) helps its team gain momentum and gain get (optional) the upper hand on the opponent opposing Pokemon. Lastly, partners that appreciate Steel-types being gone like Aromatisse and Vileplume are appreciated good to have so that these teammates can do their respective jobs.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Oathkeepre, 83980]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
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Implemented! Thank you =)
 
GP 1/1
[SET]
name: Choice Scarf
move 1: Close Combat
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: Rock Slide / Earthquake
move 4: U-turn
item: Choice Scarf
ability: Defiant
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Passimian's Choice Scarf, coverage, and great Attack allow it stat and Speed when equipped with a Choice Scarf allow it to use its powerful Fighting-type STAB and coverage moves to revenge kill a large portion of the RU metagame, including Salazzle, weakened Silvally formes, Ninetales, and Snorlax. It also punishes use of Defog and Sticky Web with its Defiant. Rock Slide allows Passimian to revenge kill hits common Rock-weak Pokemon such as Centiskorch and Charizard. Earthquake is an alternative coverage option over Rock Slide that OHKOes the aforementioned Salazzle, (comma) as well as Ninetales and Toxicroak. Knock Off hits threats that resist or are immune to Close Combat such as Xatu, Jellicent, and Rotom. Lastly, U-turn allows Passimian to pivot on gain momentum against threats like Vileplume, Sableye, and Silvally-Ghost, (comma) gain momentum, and bring by bringing in a powerful wallbreaking teammate. Gunk Shot, (comma) on the other hand, is also a nice alternative coverage move in place of Rock Slide or Earthquake that can be used to nail Virizion as well as Fairy-types like Silvally-Fairy, Slurpuff, Whimsicott, and Aromatisse. Passimian also takes advantage of Defog users with its Defiant ability and creates more offensive pressure.
(knock off should be talked about BEFORE rock slide/eq if you wanna match the set)

Since Passimian will want to use its powerful Close Combat due to its breaking power to wallbreak or sweep, having a teammate like Silvally-Dark, Escavalier, or Steelix to dispose of Ghost-, Psychic-, and Fairy-types is appreciated to pave the way for a potential sweep. Having a powerful wallbreaker like Indeedee, Alolan Raichu, or Silvally-Steel to deal with common switch-ins to Passimian like Vileplume, Jellicent, and Silvally-Fairy puts less pressure on it. Pairing Passimian with a partner like Rotom or Alolan Raichu to form a VoltTurn core, such as Rotom or Alolan Raichu, helps its team gain momentum and get the upper hand on the opposing Pokemon. Lastly, partners that appreciate Steel-types being gone like Aromatisse and Vileplume are good to have so that these teammates can do their respective jobs. (you don't always have to put 'lastly,' yknow)

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Oathkeepre, 83980]]
- Quality checked by: [[bkdrew, 469610], [aVocado, 56549]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
 
Replaced Skorch with Vikavolt when mentioning Rock Slide's uses. Hopefully that works. If so, this is now ready for upload!
 
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