Rate my team

[puregenius]

Any comment is appreciated so thanks :)
I don't know how to put sprites in so sorry :(

Darkrai

Nature: Timid
EV's: 252 SpA/ 252 Spe/ 6 HP
Item: Leftovers
Ability: Bad Dreams

Dark Void
Dark Pulse
Will-O-Wisp
Thunder

Pretty self-explanatory.

Kyogre

Nature: Modest
EV's: 252 SpA/ 252 Spe/ 6 HP
Item: Choice Scarf
Ability: Drizzle

Water Spout
Thunder
Scald/Surf
Signal Beam/ Ice Beam

Rain is very helpful as it lessens the weakness of fire for Serperior and it helps Blastoise (Rain Dish).

Blastoise

Nature: Impish
EV's: 252 Def/ 252 SpD/ 6 Hp
Item: Leftovers
Ability: Rain Dish

Protect
Toxic
Rapid Spin
Dragon Tail

Works well on this team as a staller as he can take hits well, but he needs more HP which I don't know where i can take out from so please advise.

Ninjask

Nature: Adamant
EV's 252 Atk/ 252 Spe/ 6 HP
Item: Focus Sash
Ability: Speed Boost

Protect
Baton Pass
Swords Dance
X-Scissor

Focus sash allows at least one SD and +2 speed thanks to its ability. I really like Swords Dance on this set as it allows Ninjask to 2HKO Mewtwo which I seem to run into a lot or 0HKO after SD.

Serperior

Nature: Modest
EV's: 252 SpA/ 252 Spe/ 6 HP
Item: Leftovers
Ability: Contrary

Leaf Storm
Glare
Dragon Tail/ Substitute/ Leech Seed
Dragon Tail/ Substitute/ Leech Seed

Oh my god this is amazing if he can set up he can destroy practically anything. I was considering SubSeeding as a side thing, but it seems a bit odd on Serperior....

Cloyster

Nature: Adamant
EV's: 252 Atk/ 252 Spe/ 6 HP
Item: Focus Sash
Ability: Skill Link

Icicle Spear
Rock Blast
Shell Smash
Ice Shard

Boost as much as you can until you lose your sash or Arceus comes in Extreme Speed is a tad faster than Ice Shard so it's best to let the sash soak up Extreme Speed and KO it with Icicle Spear (if you have boosted already).

Any suggestions for improvements is appreciated.
Thanks again :)

 

[Bloo]

Welcome to Smogon; I'm glad you posted an RMT. Though,you're in violation of RMT rule #3, which you can view by looking through the RMT rules announcement located at the top of this forum.

3. Have some actual words in your post beyond your six Pokemon and their moves. Not following this makes your post quite boring to read and rate. All Pokemon should have a good reason for being in your team anyway, so why not post that reason? If you are having trouble with this one, start by giving an explanation for each team member. Why are they there? What role do they serve? How do you get them in? Then, give an explanation of how you would open with the team and how you would go about using it. All of these things help people rate your team and allow us to offer more helpful advice.

You need descriptions. If you wish to remedy this problem, explain your reasoning behind each Pokemon and why they work on your team in a thorough manner. The little tiny sentences you have at the bottom of your thread isn't sufficient. Try to aim for 3-4 well-formulated sentences with your descriptions. I recommend lurking through the RMT Archive in order to see examples of what we're looking for in an RMT! You can also take a look at other threads in this forum for examples if you'd like. Shoot me a PM once everything's been fixed up and I'll open this thread again.

You can insert pictures by using the insert image button, which looks like a mountain. The icon is located next to the insert hyperlink and quote buttons. Once you click on insert picture, a box will pop up prompting you to input the URL of your image. Once you have done that, press OK, and your image should show up.