AAA Roaring Noob (Banded Roaring Moon) {QC: 2/2} [GP: 1/1] (DONE)

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[SET]
[Choice Band] Roaring Moon @ Choice Band
Ability: Strong Jaw
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Crunch
- Fire Fang
- Thunder Fang
- U-turn
[SET COMMENTS]
Choice Band Roaring Moon is a fierce wallbreaker that dents large holes in balance teams and has specific coverage to beat its would-be checks. Strong Jaw-boosted Fire Fang threatens Zamazenta-C and Fluffy Corviknight attempting to tank Crunch while Thunder Fang OHKOes Galarian Zapdos and 2HKOes defensive Quaquaval. U-turn allows it to maintain momentum in the face of hard counters like Hippowdon and a healthy Corviknight while also being a midground option for predicted switch-ins. An Adamant nature gives Roaring Moon a chance of OHKOing Hisuian Goodra and is guaranteed to 2HKO Corviknight and Quaquaval, while a Jolly nature allows it to outspeed and threaten Azelf and Iron Moth. Roaring Moon pairs well with other physical wallbreakers like Swords Dance Chien-Pao and Meowscarada that can clean up teams after checks like Zamazenta-C and Quaquaval have been removed. Pivots like Zapdos, Regieleki, and Hisuian Electrode form a VoltTurn core with Roaring Moon that wears down each other's checks. Roaring Moon's unimpressive physical bulk and weakness-laden typing mean that it is a prime target of revenge killers like Slither Wing and Triage Enamorus-T; walls like Corviknight and Hisuian Goodra pair well with Roaring Moon, as they absorb revenge killing attempts while providing defensive utility that Roaring Moon lacks.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
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Choice Band Roaring Moon is a fierce wallbreaker that dents large holes in balance teams and uses has specific coverage to beat its would-be checks. Strong Jaw boosted Fire Fang threatens Zamazenta-C and Fluffy Corviknight attempting to tank Crunches, Earthquake OHKOes Diancie and Well-Baked Body Kingambit after Stealth Rock minor chip ATP you might as well unslash EQ since WBB Gambit technically isn't a set anymore, also makes this sentence less clunky, Thunder Fang OHKOes Galarian Zapdos and 2HKOes Defensive Intimidate Quaquaval even though fluffy quaq has fallen off a cliff, I still think you should specify Intim, and U-Turn <- the t isn't capitalised in U-turn allows it to maintain momentum in the face of hard counters like Hippowdon and a healthy Corviknight while also being a midground option for switchins. Roaring Moon pairs well with other physical wallbreakers like Swords Dance Chien-Pao and Kingambit that can clean up teams after checks like Unaware Scream Tail Zamazenta-C and Quaquaval has been removed. Talk about some pivots that help get it in on the field like Zapdos or Htrode, they also form a Voltturn core with it to wear down Rmoon checks with Rocks up. Roaring Moon's unimpressive physical bulk it actually has some nice defensive utility vs special stuff like pweathers and can use that to instantly snatch back momentum and weakness-laden typing means that it is a prime target of revenge killers like Slither Wing and Therian Enamorus Triage Enamorus-T; walls like Corviknight and Hisuian Goodra pair well with Roaring Moon as they absorb revenge killing attempts while making up for the lack of defensive utility that Roaring Moon has.

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Choice Band Roaring Moon is a fierce wallbreaker that dents large holes in balance teams and uses has specific coverage to beat its would-be checks. Strong Jaw boosted Fire Fang threatens Zamazenta-C and Fluffy Corviknight attempting to tank Crunches, Earthquake OHKOes Diancie and Well-Baked Body Kingambit after Stealth Rock minor chip ATP you might as well unslash EQ since WBB Gambit technically isn't a set anymore, also makes this sentence less clunky, Thunder Fang OHKOes Galarian Zapdos and 2HKOes Defensive Intimidate Quaquaval even though fluffy quaq has fallen off a cliff, I still think you should specify Intim, and U-Turn <- the t isn't capitalised in U-turn allows it to maintain momentum in the face of hard counters like Hippowdon and a healthy Corviknight while also being a midground option for switchins. Roaring Moon pairs well with other physical wallbreakers like Swords Dance Chien-Pao and Kingambit that can clean up teams after checks like Unaware Scream Tail Zamazenta-C and Quaquaval has been removed. Talk about some pivots that help get it in on the field like Zapdos or Htrode, they also form a Voltturn core with it to wear down Rmoon checks with Rocks up. Roaring Moon's unimpressive physical bulk it actually has some nice defensive utility vs special stuff like pweathers and can use that to instantly snatch back momentum and weakness-laden typing means that it is a prime target of revenge killers like Slither Wing and Therian Enamorus Triage Enamorus-T; walls like Corviknight and Hisuian Goodra pair well with Roaring Moon as they absorb revenge killing attempts while making up for the lack of defensive utility that Roaring Moon has.

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[SET]
[Choice Band] Roaring Moon @ Choice Band
Ability: Strong Jaw
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature / Adamant Nature i dont actually see any benefits of running ada, it still 2hkos most of the walls its meant to dent
- Crunch
- Fire Fang
- Thunder Fang removed eq
- U-turn

[SET COMMENTS]
Choice Band Roaring Moon is a fierce wallbreaker that dents large holes in balance teams and has specific coverage to beat its would-be checks. Strong Jaw boosted Fire Fang threatens Zamazenta-C and Fluffy Corviknight attempting to tank Crunches, Thunder Fang OHKOes Galarian Zapdos and 2HKOes Defensive Quaquaval, U-turn allows it to maintain momentum in the face of hard counters like Hippowdon and a healthy Corviknight while also being a midground option for switchins. Adamant OHKO's Hoodra with Crunch, can 2HKO Intim Corv with fire fang, and reliably 2HKOing intim Quaq, all of these are significant enough to at least warrant a mention. Roaring Moon pairs well with other physical wallbreakers like Swords Dance Chien-Pao and Meowscarada Kingambit that can clean up teams after checks like Zamazenta-C and Quaquaval has been removed. Pivots like Zapdos, (add comma) Regieleki, and Hisuian Electrode form a VoltTurn Voltturn core with Roaring Moon that wears down each other's checks. Roaring Moon's unimpressive physical bulk and weakness-laden typing means that it is a prime target of revenge killers like Slither Wing and Triage Enamorus-T; walls like Corviknight and Hisuian Goodra pair well with Roaring Moon as they absorb revenge killing attempts while making up for the lack of defensive utility that Roaring Moon has.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/natcrozma.580765/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/karpesan.536333/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/tranquility.475288/
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/






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[SET]
[Choice Band] Roaring Moon @ Choice Band
Ability: Strong Jaw
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature / Adamant Nature i dont actually see any benefits of running ada, it still 2hkos most of the walls its meant to dent
- Crunch
- Fire Fang
- Thunder Fang removed eq
- U-turn

[SET COMMENTS]
Choice Band Roaring Moon is a fierce wallbreaker that dents large holes in balance teams and has specific coverage to beat its would-be checks. Strong Jaw boosted Fire Fang threatens Zamazenta-C and Fluffy Corviknight attempting to tank Crunches, Thunder Fang OHKOes Galarian Zapdos and 2HKOes Defensive Quaquaval, U-turn allows it to maintain momentum in the face of hard counters like Hippowdon and a healthy Corviknight while also being a midground option for switchins. Adamant OHKO's Hoodra with Crunch, can 2HKO Intim Corv with fire fang, and reliably 2HKOing intim Quaq, all of these are significant enough to at least warrant a mention. Roaring Moon pairs well with other physical wallbreakers like Swords Dance Chien-Pao and Meowscarada Kingambit that can clean up teams after checks like Zamazenta-C and Quaquaval has been removed. Pivots like Zapdos, (add comma) Regieleki, and Hisuian Electrode form a VoltTurn Voltturn core with Roaring Moon that wears down each other's checks. Roaring Moon's unimpressive physical bulk and weakness-laden typing means that it is a prime target of revenge killers like Slither Wing and Triage Enamorus-T; walls like Corviknight and Hisuian Goodra pair well with Roaring Moon as they absorb revenge killing attempts while making up for the lack of defensive utility that Roaring Moon has.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/natcrozma.580765/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/karpesan.536333/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/tranquility.475288/
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/


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Choice Band Roaring Moon is a fierce wallbreaker that dents large holes in balance teams a comma might make this read better and has specific coverage to beat its would-be checks. Strong Jaw boosted Fire Fang threatens Zamazenta-C and Fluffy Corviknight attempting to tank Crunches, while Thunder Fang OHKOes Galarian Zapdos and 2HKOes Defensive Quaquaval,. remove comma, add period since U-turn serves a different purpose than the coverage moves, this reads better when it's a separate sentence U-turn allows it to maintain momentum in the face of hard counters like Hippowdon and a healthy Corviknight, (add comma) while also being a midground option for switch-ins. An Adamant Nature allows Roaring Moon to have a chance of OHKOing Hisuian Goodra and is a guaranteed 2HKO on Corviknight and Quaquaval, while a Jolly Nature allows it to outspeed and threaten Azelf and Iron Moth. Roaring Moon pairs well with other physical wallbreakers like Swords Dance Chien-Pao and Meowscarada that can clean up teams after checks like Zamazenta-C and Quaquaval has have been removed. Pivots like Zapdos, Regieleki, and Hisuian Electrode form a VoltTurn core with Roaring Moon that wears down each other's checks. Roaring Moon's unimpressive physical bulk and weakness-laden typing means mean that it is a prime target of revenge killers like Slither Wing and Triage Enamorus-T; walls. Walls these clauses are unconnected, no reason to be a single sentence like Corviknight and Hisuian Goodra pair well with Roaring Moon, (add comma) as they absorb revenge killing attempts while making up for the lack of defensive utilityproviding defensive utility that Roaring Moon haslacks.
 
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1/1 GP Team done
[SET]
[Choice Band] Roaring Moon @ Choice Band
Choice Band (Roaring Moon) @ Choice Band
Ability: Strong Jaw
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Crunch
- Fire Fang
- Thunder Fang
- U-turn
[SET COMMENTS]
Choice Band Roaring Moon is a fierce wallbreaker that dents large holes in balance teams and has specific coverage to beat its would-be checks. Strong Jaw boosted Jaw-boosted Fire Fang threatens Zamazenta-C and Fluffy Corviknight attempting to tank Crunches, Thunder Fang OHKOes Galarian Zapdos and 2HKOes Defensive defensive Quaquaval, and U-turn allows it to maintain momentum in the face of hard counters like Hippowdon and a healthy Corviknight while also being a midground option for switchins predicted switch-ins. (you could also choose to split the sentences up like in the amcheck but that's up to you) An Adamant Nature allows Roaring Moon have nature gives Roaring Moon a chance of OHKOing Hisuian Goodra and is guaranteed to 2HKO Corviknight and Quaquaval, while a Jolly Nature nature allows it to outspeed and threaten Azelf and Iron Moth. Roaring Moon pairs well with other physical wallbreakers like Swords Dance Chien-Pao and Meowscarada that can clean up teams after checks like Zamazenta-C and Quaquaval has have been removed. Pivots like Zapdos, Regieleki, and Hisuian Electrode form a VoltTurn core with Roaring Moon that wears down each other's checks. Roaring Moon's unimpressive physical bulk and weakness-laden typing means mean that it is a prime target of revenge killers like Slither Wing and Triage Enamorus-T; walls like Corviknight and Hisuian Goodra pair well with Roaring Moon, (AC) as they absorb revenge killing attempts while making up for the lack of defensive utility that Roaring Moon has. (feel free to sue teh wording change in the amchecl here too but up to you)
[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/natcrozma.580765/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/karpesan.536333/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/tranquility.475288/
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/

Gimmickyasitgets I went over your check below, let me know if you have any questions. If you're interested in looking into GP more, join the GP server and assign yourself the amchecker role!
Choice Band Roaring Moon is a fierce wallbreaker that dents large holes in balance teams a comma might make this read better and has specific coverage to beat its would-be checks.
- No comma is correct here. Commas before 'and' 'but' 'or' are only needed when both clauses are independent (meaning they would make sense as standalone sentences without the other part)."Has specific coverage to beat its would-be checks" isn't an independent clause, so a comma doesn't need to be added

Strong Jaw boosted Fire Fang threatens Zamazenta-C and Fluffy Corviknight attempting to tank Crunches, while Thunder Fang OHKOes Galarian Zapdos and 2HKOes Defensive Quaquaval,. remove comma, add period since U-turn serves a different purpose than the coverage moves, this reads better when it's a separate sentence
- Strong Jaw-boosted should be hyphenated as a compound adjective
- Set names and playstyles (for example, offensive, defensive, bulky offense, stall etc) aren't capitalised, so it should be "defensive Quaquaval"

U-turn allows it to maintain momentum in the face of hard counters like Hippowdon and a healthy Corviknight, (add comma) while also being a midground option for switch-ins.
- As GP, you don't remove content from analyses ever. By removing "a healthy Corviknight," you've removed the nuance of the sentence that implies that weakened Corv can lose to Roaring Moon.
- There's no need to add a comma here. Commas before "while" are only needed when ti means "whereas" / shows contrast. If "while" means "at the same time as" then a comma isn't needed. "While also" will never mean "whereas" so a comma would be incorrect here

An Adamant Nature allows Roaring Moon to have a chance of OHKOing Hisuian Goodra and is a guaranteed 2HKO on Corviknight and Quaquaval, while a Jolly Nature allows it to outspeed and threaten Azelf and Iron Moth.
- The word "nature" isn't capitalised

Roaring Moon pairs well with other physical wallbreakers like Swords Dance Chien-Pao and Meowscarada that can clean up teams after checks like Zamazenta-C and Quaquaval has have been removed. Pivots like Zapdos, Regieleki, and Hisuian Electrode form a VoltTurn core with Roaring Moon that wears down each other's checks.
- "Wear down" would be correct here because it's referring to the VoltTurn core as one singular thing. A core wears down an opposing team

Roaring Moon's unimpressive physical bulk and weakness-laden typing means mean that it is a prime target of revenge killers like Slither Wing and Triage Enamorus-T; walls. Walls these clauses are unconnected, no reason to be a single sentence like Corviknight and Hisuian Goodra pair well with Roaring Moon, (add comma) as they absorb revenge killing attempts while making up for the lack of defensive utilityproviding defensive utility that Roaring Moon haslacks.
 
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