OU Snorlax [GP 1/1]

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[SET]
name: Curse
move 1: Rest
move 2: Curse
move 3: Body Slam
move 4: Darkest Lariat
item: Leftovers
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Careful
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
Snorlax's great special bulk and ability Thick Fat allow it to run a capable Curse set in OU. It can use its bulk to set up on special attackers such as Clefable, Dragapult, and Rotom-A. Rest allows Snorlax to fully restore its health and cures it of any status ailments. Curse lets Snorlax take advantage of special attackers such as Hatterene and Hydreigon by boosting its stats to sweep. Body Slam is Snorlax's most reliable STAB attack, and the possibility of paralysis can deter sweepers such as Dragon Dance Tyranitar and Gyarados from trying to set up. Darkest Lariat hits Ghost-types super effectively and also hits Steel-types like Corviknight and Ferrothorn neutrally. Darkest Lariat also ignores Defense boosts, giving Snorlax an edge over Bulk Up Corviknight. The EV spread maximizes Snorlax's special bulk, allowing it to soak hits from special attackers and set up.

Snorlax appreciates teammates that can sponge powerful physical attacks, especially from Fighting-types. Aegislash and Clefable can help Snorlax by checking Fighting-types like Conkeldurr. Pokemon like Mandibuzz and Corviknight appreciate Snorlax's ability to handle Ice- and Fire-types; in return, they can help Snorlax set up with Taunt and U-turn. Snorlax is vulnerable to Haze users, so Pokemon like Hatterene and Hydreigon also make good teammates, since they are able to take advantage of Toxapex.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Chimp, 197439]]
- Quality checked by: [[jordy, 395754], [TPP, 260369]]
- Grammar checked by: [[Rabia, 336073]]
 
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[SET]
name: Curse
move 1: Rest
move 2: Curse
move 3: Body Slam
move 4: Darkest Lariat 
item: Leftovers
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Careful
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD

chimp the QC team would like this set to be used instead of the one you have right now. There's no real reason to run Facade because you have Rest anyways. Fire Punch doesn't really achieve anything; you beat Corviknight with Darkest Lariat anyways, assuming it's not Taunt.
 
Jordy said:
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[SET]
name: Curse
move 1: Rest
move 2: Curse
move 3: Body Slam
move 4: Darkest Lariat
item: Leftovers
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Careful
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD

chimp the QC team would like this set to be used instead of the one you have right now. There's no real reason to run Facade because you have Rest anyways. Fire Punch doesn't really achieve anything; you beat Corviknight with Darkest Lariat anyways, assuming it's not Taunt.
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I'm not QC in the slightest but you should probably replace the mention of Ferroseed with Ferrothorn...
 
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chimp said:
[SET]
name: Curse
move 1: Rest
move 2: Curse
move 3: Body Slam
move 4: Darkest Lariat
item: Leftovers
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Careful
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
Snorlax's large special bulk and ability Thick Fat allow it to run a capable Curse set in the OU metagame. It can use its bulk to set up on special attackers such as Clefable, Aegislash, Hatterene, Dragapult and all Rotom formes. I think the list was a bit excessive, so I just removed the ones that are the least relevant. Even with its poor physical bulk, it can also take hits from Choice Scarf Darmanitan thanks to Thick Fat. Rest allows Snorlax to fully restore its health and cures it of any status effects. Curse allows Snorlax to boost its Attack and Defense, allowing it to build up to a sweep. A few examples of Pokemon that Snorlax can take advantage of in order to start racking up Curse boosts would be useful. Body Slam is Snorlax's most reliable STAB attack and the possibility of paralysis can deter sweepers from trying to set up. I'd like for you to add one or two examples of sweepers here. Darkest Lariat cover's Ghost-type's immunity to Body Slam, and also hits Steel-types like Corviknight and Ferrothorn neutrally. It's worth noting that Darkest Lariat ignores Defense boosts, so it gives Snorlax an edge against Bulk Up Corviknight in particular. The EV spread maximizes Snorlax's special bulk, allowing it to soak hits from special attackers and set-up.

Snorlax appreciates teammates that can sponge powerful physical attacks, especially Fighting-types. Toxapex, Aegislash and Clefable can help Snorlax by checking Fighting-types like Conkeldurr. Pokemon like Mandibuzz and Corviknight appreciate Snorlax's ability to handle Ice- and Fire-types. Snorlax is vulnerable to Haze users, like Toxapex, so Pokemon like Rotom-Wash, Hatterene and Excadrill Hatterene and Hydreigon also make good teammates. Rotom-W and Excadrill are pretty bad at taking advantage of Toxapex, as they risk being poisoned or burned respectively.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Chimp, 197439]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
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Good job, 1/2.
 
chimp said:
Snorlax appreciates teammates that can sponge powerful physical attacks, especially Fighting-types. Toxapex, Aegislash and Clefable can help Snorlax by checking Fighting-types like Conkeldurr.
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I don't think Toxapex is worth suggesting in order to handle Conkeldurr, mainly in part to Conk not caring about status + being able to KO Toxapex with EQ + Toxapex doing nothing back to Conk.
chimp said:
Pokemon like Mandibuzz and Corviknight appreciate Snorlax's ability to handle Ice- and Fire-types.
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I think this part could be a little more detailed/explained. Atm you could list any mon weak to Fire and/or Ice and have that sentence work, but I'd rather have it be a little more narrowed down. Maybe talk about what those mons do in return for Snorlax in order to classify as suggested teammates?
chimp said:
Snorlax is vulnerable to Haze users, like Toxapex, so Pokemon like Hatterene and Hydreigon also make good teammates.
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Also mention/group Hatterene and Hydreigon as mons that take advantage of Toxapex in order to establish why they are good teammates.

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[SET]
name: Curse
move 1: Rest
move 2: Curse
move 3: Body Slam
move 4: Darkest Lariat
item: Leftovers
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Careful
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
Snorlax's large great special bulk and ability Thick Fat allow it to run a capable Curse set in the OU metagame. It can use its bulk to set up on special attackers such as Clefable and Dragapult and all Rotom formes Clefable, Dragapult, and Rotom-A. Rest allows Snorlax to fully restore its health and cures it of any status effects ailments. Curse allows Snorlax to boost its Attack and Defense, allowing it to build up to a sweep by taking lets Snorlax take advantage of special attackers such as Hatterene and Hydreigon by boosting its stats to sweep. Body Slam is Snorlax's most reliable STAB attack,(AC) and the possibility of paralysis can deter sweepers such as Dragon Dance Tyranitar and Gyarados from trying to set up. Darkest Lariat cover's Ghost-type's immunity to Body Slam,(RC) hits Ghost-types super effectively and also hits Steel-types like Corviknight and Ferrothorn neutrally. Darkest Lariat also ignores Defense boosts, giving Snorlax an edge over Bulk Up Corviknight. The EV spread maximizes Snorlax's special bulk, allowing it to soak hits from special attackers and set up(RH).

Snorlax appreciates teammates that can sponge powerful physical attacks, especially from Fighting-types. Aegislash and Clefable can help Snorlax by checking Fighting-types like Conkeldurr. Pokemon like Mandibuzz and Corviknight appreciate Snorlax's ability to handle Ice- and Fire-types and;(semicolon) in return,(AC) they can open up the battle for help Snorlax to set up(spacing) with Taunt and U-turn. Snorlax is vulnerable to Haze users, so Pokemon like Hatterene and Hydreigon also make good teammates, since they are able to take advantage of Toxapex.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Chimp, 197439]]
- Quality checked by: [[Jordy, 395754], [TPP, 260369]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
gp 1/1 once done
 
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[SET]
name: Curse
move 1: Rest
move 2: Curse
move 3: Body Slam
move 4: Darkest Lariat
item: Leftovers
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Careful
evs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
Snorlax's large great special bulk and ability Thick Fat allow it to run a capable Curse set in the OU metagame. It can use its bulk to set up on special attackers such as Clefable and Dragapult and all Rotom formes Clefable, Dragapult, and Rotom-A. Rest allows Snorlax to fully restore its health and cures it of any status effects ailments. Curse allows Snorlax to boost its Attack and Defense, allowing it to build up to a sweep by taking lets Snorlax take advantage of special attackers such as Hatterene and Hydreigon by boosting its stats to sweep. Body Slam is Snorlax's most reliable STAB attack,(AC) and the possibility of paralysis can deter sweepers such as Dragon Dance Tyranitar and Gyarados from trying to set up. Darkest Lariat cover's Ghost-type's immunity to Body Slam,(RC) hits Ghost-types super effectively and also hits Steel-types like Corviknight and Ferrothorn neutrally. Darkest Lariat also ignores Defense boosts, giving Snorlax an edge over Bulk Up Corviknight. The EV spread maximizes Snorlax's special bulk, allowing it to soak hits from special attackers and set up(RH).

Snorlax appreciates teammates that can sponge powerful physical attacks, especially from Fighting-types. Aegislash and Clefable can help Snorlax by checking Fighting-types like Conkeldurr. Pokemon like Mandibuzz and Corviknight appreciate Snorlax's ability to handle Ice- and Fire-types and;(semicolon) in return,(AC) they can open up the battle for help Snorlax to set up(spacing) with Taunt and U-turn. Snorlax is vulnerable to Haze users, so Pokemon like Hatterene and Hydreigon also make good teammates, since they are able to take advantage of Toxapex.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Chimp, 197439]]
- Quality checked by: [[Jordy, 395754], [TPP, 260369]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
gp 1/1 once done
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Implemented. This is now done.
 
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