RU Snorlax [QC 2/2] [GP 1/1]

Mavis

Banned deucer.
[SET]
name: CurseLax
move 1: Body Slam
move 2: Curse
move 3: Rest
move 4: Sleep Talk / Darkest Lariat
item: Leftovers
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Careful
evs: 188 HP / 152 Def / 168 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
Curse Snorlax is able to leverage its massive special bulk and decent attacking power to become one of RU's greatest setup threats. Sleep Talk is the primary fourth move, as it allows Snorlax to still pose a threat when asleep. However, Darkest Lariat can be used to surprise Ghost-types such as Rotom and Silvally-Ghost. Thick Fat further assists in checking Fire- and Ice- types like Ninetales, Salazzle, and Vanilluxe. The given EV spread allows Snorlax to take one Close Combat from Choice Scarf Passimian at full HP, and the rest of the EVs are put into Special Defense to further assist in checking special attackers.

Fighting-types are public enemy number one for Snorlax, so Ghost- and Fairy-type teammates such as Jellicent, Aromatisse, Silvally-Fairy, and Rotom can help Snorlax deal with them. Snorlax also appreciates Silvally formes, mainly -Dark, -Ghost, and _Fairy, because they are immune to Trick from Rotom and Indeedee attempting to cripple Snorlax. If not running Darkest Lariat, Dark-types or Pokemon that carry Knock Off like Silvally-Dark, Sableye, and Passimian can dispatch them. Sableye is a standout teammate to Snorlax, as it completely walls Fighting-types and appreciates Snorlax's ability to take on the special attackers that exploit its low Special Defense. Vileplume also consistently answers Fighting-types. Snorlax is a great check to Fire-types, which is appreciated by teammates that fear them, such as Vileplume, Virizion, and Decidueye.

[SET]
name: Choice Band
move 1: Double-Edge
move 2: Earthquake
move 3: Darkest Lariat
move 4: Heat Crash / Facade
item: Choice Band
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Adamant
evs: 212 HP / 252 Atk / 44 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Choice Band Snorlax turns Snorlax's impressive bulk into opportunities to wallbreak with its great coverage and staggeringly powerful Double-Edge. Earthquake is a great compliment to Double-Edge, as it hits many Rock- and Steel-type Pokemon, such as Copperajah, Steelix, and Rhydon. Darkest Lariat is used to hit Ghost-types such as Rotom and Dhelmise. Heat Crash is the primary fourth move, as it allows Snorlax to OHKO standard Vileplume, invalidating it as a switch-in. However, Facade can be chosen instead to make use Snorlax's tendency to get burned or poisoned. Thick Fat turns Fire-types like Charizard and Ninetales into easy entry points. 44 Speed EVs are used to outpace Mudsdale and threaten it with Double-Edge as it switches in.

Aromatisse makes a great partner to this Snorlax, as it can take on the Fighting-types Snorlax fears, and in return, Snorlax enjoys Aromatisse's Wish and can safely check Fire- and Poison-types that threaten Aromatisse. Other Pokemon that handle Fighting-types such as Jellicent, Vileplume, and Sableye also make good teammates, and all three enjoy Snorlax checking Ninetales. Jellicent doesn't fear any attack besides Darkest Lariat and can burn Snorlax, so include teammates that can deal with it, like Silvally-Dark, Alolan Raichu, and Drampa. Choice Specs Drampa and Choice Band Snorlax make for a good Normal-type offensive pairing, as they can work together to break through shared checks such as Copperajah, Steelix, and Rhydon. Drampa can also take on other Ghost-types like Rotom and Decidueye, easing prediction with Snorlax.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Mavis, 469610]]
- Quality checked by: [[banks, 379208], [Averardo, 409096]]
- Grammar checked by: [[CryoGyro, 331519]]
 
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Mavis said:
[SET]
name: CurseLax
move 1: Body Slam
move 2: Curse
move 3: Rest
move 4: Sleep Talk / Darkest Lariat
item: Leftovers
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Careful
evs: 188 HP / 152 Def / 168 SpD

Snorlax reprises its role from previous generations as both an offensive and defensive behemoth, with its trademark CurseLax set returning once again to terrorize the myriad of special attackers in RarelyUsed. the opening line reads a bit like a spotlight or article, either remove or rework to give a brief yet specific idea to what this set does Curse boosts Snorlax's Attack and Defense and can be used to overpower a slew of physical attackers, such as Copperajah, Rillaboom, Silvally-Fairy, and Boltund. Sleep Talk is used as the primary fourth move, as it allows for Snorlax to still pose a threat when asleep. However, Darkest Lariat can instead be used to surprise Ghost-types such as Rotom and Runerigus Silvally-Ghost (you can add any ghost you want, runerigus just felt like a hyperspecific kinda irrelevant example) that would wall it otherwise. Thick Fat is chosen as the ability to further assist in checking Fire-types, as Rest means Snorlax doesn't fear Toxic. no mention of ice-types like vani? The given EV spread allows Snorlax to take one Close Combat from Choice Scarf Passimian at full HP, and the rest of the EVs are put into Special Defense to further assist in checking special attackers.

Fighting-types are public enemy number one for Snorlax, so Ghost- and Fairy-type teammates, such as Jellicent, Aromatisse, Silvally-Fairy, and Rotom can help Snorlax deal with them. Snorlax also appreciates ally Silvally formes, mainly of the Dark-, Steel, and Fairy-type varieties, that are immune to Trick from the likes of Rotom and Indeedee attempting to cripple Snorlax. If not running Darkest Lariat, Dark-types or Pokemon that carry Knock Off can help dispatch them, like Silvally-Dark, Sableye, and Passimian. Sableye is a very good teammate to Snorlax, as it completely blanks Fighting-types and appreciates Snorlax's ability to take on the special attackers that exploit its low Special Defense. Snorlax is a great check to Fire-types, meaning teammates who fear them, such as Excavalier, Vileplume, Virizion, and Decidueye appreciate Snorlax's ability to reliably take them on. Vileplume in particular works great with Snorlax, as it can also take on most Fighting-types well.

[SET]
name: Choice Band
move 1: Double-Edge
move 2: Earthquake
move 3: Darkest Lariat
move 4: Heat Crash / Facade
item: Choice Band
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Adamant
evs: 212 HP / 252 Atk / 44 Spe

Choice Band Snorlax turns Snorlax's impressive bulk into opportunities to wallbreak effectively, thanks to its great coverage and staggeringly powerful Double-Edge. Earthquake is a great compliment to Double-Edge, as it hits many Rock- and Steel-type Pokemon, such as Copperajah, Steelix, and Rhydon for high amounts of damage. Darkest Lariat is used to hit Ghost-types such as Rotom and Dhelmise that would otherwise be able to switch in. Heat Crash is the primary fourth move, as it allows Snorlax to OHKO standard Vileplume, invalidating it as a switch-in. However, Facade can be chosen instead to abuse Snorlax's tendency to get burned or poisoned, granting it access to an incredibly powerful STAB attack with no drawbacks. Thick Fat is taken as the ability of choice for ease of play against Fire-types like Charizard and Ninetales that make easy entry points. 44 Speed EVs are used to outpace Mudsdale and threaten it with Double-Edge as it switches in. The remaining EVs are put into HP to cushion Snorlax's bulk further.

Aromatisse makes a great partner to this Snorlax, as it can take on the Fighting-types Snorlax fears, and in return, Snorlax enjoys Aromatisse's Wishes and can safely check the Fire- and Poison-types that threaten Aromatisse. Other Pokemon that handle Fighting-types, such as Jellicent, Vileplume, and Sableye also make good teammates, and all three of these enjoy Snorlax checking Ninetales. Jellicent doesn't fear any attack besides Darkest Lariat and can burn Snorlax, so teammates that can deal with it, like Silvally-Dark, Alolan Raichu, and Drampa make for good partners. Choice Specs Drampa and Choice Band Snorlax make for a good Normal-type offensive pairing, as they can work together to break down shared checks, such as Copperajah, Escavalier, Steelix, and Rhydon. Drampa can also take on other Ghost-types like Rotom and Decidueye, easing prediction on Snorlax.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[bkdrew, 469610]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
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sup Mavis! i'm procrastinating my exam review and figured I'd leave you an amateur gp check.

additions in green, subtractions in red, explanation in purple

[SET]
name: CurseLax
move 1: Body Slam
move 2: Curse
move 3: Rest
move 4: Sleep Talk / Darkest Lariat
item: Leftovers
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Careful
evs: 188 HP / 152 Def / 168 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
Curse Snorlax is able to leverage it's [its is a possessive, and it's is a contraction of "it is". whenever you use "it's", "it is" should also work there -- if "it is" doesn't make sense there, use "its"] massive special bulk and decent attacking power to become one of RU's best offensive and defensive setup threats. Curse boosts Snorlax's Attack and Defense and can be used to overpower a slew of physical attackers, such as Copperajah, Rillaboom, Silvally-Fairy, and Boltund. Sleep Talk is used as the primary fourth move, as it allows for Snorlax to still pose a threat when asleep. However, Darkest Lariat can instead be used to surprise hit Ghost-types such as Rotom and Silvally-Ghost that would wall it otherwise. Thick Fat is chosen as the ability to further assist in checking Fire- and Ice- types like Ninetales, Salazzle, and Vanilluxe, as Rest means Snorlax doesn't fear Toxic and thus does not benefit from Immunity. [this is optional but I had to think "why is Toxic mentioned in this sentence", so associating toxic with Immunity helps this sentence make more sense]. The given EV spread allows Snorlax to take one Close Combat from Choice Scarf Passimian at full HP, and the rest of the its EVs are put into Special Defense to further assist in checking special attackers.

Fighting-types are public enemy number one for Snorlax, so Ghost- and Fairy-type teammates, such as Jellicent, Aromatisse, Silvally-Fairy, and Rotom, can help Snorlax deal with them. [you need to either put a comma before and after "such as ... Rotom" or not use a comma before or after "such as ... Rotom"; you can't do just one comma there. here, it is correct to do a comma before and after since the clause is nonrestrictive, meaning the sentence would still be accurate if the phrase were not there. further reading here]. Snorlax also appreciates ally any of the Silvally formes, mainly of especially the Silvally-Dark-, Silvally-Steel-, and or Silvally-Fairy-type varieties, as an ally, [I add the Silvally prefix each time so that you don't need to repeat "formes" two clauses in a row, which i stylistically prefer; I use "or">"and" because you can only use one Silvally on a team] that since they ["since they" > "that" because all silvally formes are immune to trick; thus, you don't need to use "that" to specify which formes are immune to trick] are immune to Trick from the likes of Rotom and Indeedee attempting to cripple Snorlax. If not running Darkest Lariat, Dark-types or Pokemon that carry Knock Off, like Silvally-Dark, Sableye, and Passimian, [moved this next to "Dark-types or Pokemon that carry Knock Off" from the end of the sentence so that it's easier to see what these Pokemon are examples of] saying" can help dispatch them [it is unclear whether "them" refers to the Trick users (Rotom and Indeedee) mentioned in the previous sentence or to the Ghost-types that cannot be hit by Snorlax lacking Darkest Lariat. if it is the latter, change "them" to "Ghost-types".], like Silvally-Dark, Sableye, and Passimian. Sableye is a very good teammate to for Snorlax, as it completely blanks Fighting-types and appreciates Snorlax's ability to take on the special attackers that exploit its low Special Defense. Snorlax is a great check to Fire-types, meaning that teammates who fear them, such as Excavalier Escavalier, Vileplume, Virizion, and Decidueye, [see above comment on using commas before AND after phrases] appreciate Snorlax's ability to reliably take them on. Vileplume in particular works great with Snorlax, as it can also take on most Fighting-types well.

[SET]
name: Choice Band
move 1: Double-Edge
move 2: Earthquake
move 3: Darkest Lariat
move 4: Heat Crash / Facade
item: Choice Band
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Adamant
evs: 212 HP / 252 Atk / 44 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Choice Band Snorlax turns uses Snorlax's impressive bulk into to gain opportunities to wallbreak effectively, thanks to with its great coverage and staggeringly powerful Double-Edge. Earthquake is a great compliment complement [complement = work well alongside something, compliment = nice thing you say to a friend] to Double-Edge, as it hits many Rock- and Steel-type Pokemon, such as Copperajah, Steelix, and Rhydon, [commas before&after such as phrases] for high amounts of damage. Darkest Lariat is used to hit Ghost-types, such as Rotom and Dhelmise, that would otherwise be able to switch in. Heat Crash is the primary fourth move, as it allows Snorlax to OHKO standard Vileplume, invalidating it as a switch-in. However, Facade can be chosen instead to abuse Snorlax's tendency to get burned or poisoned, granting it access to an incredibly powerful STAB attack with no drawbacks recoil. [mentioning the specific drawback that Double-Edge has draws a clearer contrast between DEdge and Facade] Thick Fat is taken as the ability of choice for ease of play against Fire-types like Charizard and Ninetales that make easy entry points. Thick Fat is chosen as Snorlax's ability to let it switch in against Fire-types like Charizard and Ninetales without taking much damage, giving Choice Band Snorlax more opportunities to wallbreak. [extremely awkward sentence pre-edits. a comma before and after "like Charizard and Ninetales" might be technically correct, but it's a long sentence so I don't put commas there in order to make it easier to read / less choppy]. 44 Speed EVs are used to outpace Mudsdale and threaten it with Double-Edge as it switches in. [this logic is unclear to me; speed doesn't matter when a mon switches in. do you threaten to 2HKO it without taking damage back if it switches in? if that is true, phrase it more like that]. The remaining EVs are put into HP to cushion improve Snorlax's bulk further. [you can keep further if you want, either works]

Aromatisse makes is a great partner to for this Snorlax set, as it can take on the Fighting-types Snorlax fears and pass Wishes to Snorlax; in return, Snorlax enjoys Aromatisse's Wishes and can safely check [or "KO"] the Fire- and Poison-types that threaten Aromatisse. Other Pokemon that handle Fighting-types, such as Jellicent, Vileplume, and Sableye, [commas before/after "such as" phrases] also make good teammates, and all three of them enjoy appreciate Snorlax checking Ninetales. Jellicent doesn't fear any attack besides Darkest Lariat and can burn Snorlax, so teammates that can deal with it, like Silvally-Dark, Alolan Raichu, and Drampa, [commas before/after "such as" phrases] make for good partners. Choice Specs Drampa and Choice Band Snorlax make for a good Normal-type offensive pairing core, as they can work together to break down shared checks, such as Copperajah, Escavalier, Steelix, and Rhydon. Drampa can also take on other Ghost-types like Rotom and Decidueye, easing prediction on Snorlax. ensuring that Snorlax will not need to take significant chip damage any time its user predicts incorrectly.
 
GP 1/1
[SET]
name: CurseLax
move 1: Body Slam
move 2: Curse
move 3: Rest
move 4: Sleep Talk / Darkest Lariat
item: Leftovers
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Careful
evs: 188 HP / 152 Def / 168 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]
Curse Snorlax is able to leverage its massive special bulk and decent attacking power to become one of RU's best offensive and defensive greatest setup threats. Curse boosts Snorlax's Attack and Defense and can be used to overpower a slew of physical attackers, such as Copperajah, Rillaboom, Silvally-Fairy, and Boltund. Sleep Talk is used as the primary fourth move, as it allows for Snorlax to still pose a threat when asleep. However, Darkest Lariat can instead be used to surprise Ghost-types such as Rotom and Silvally-Ghost that would wall it otherwise. Thick Fat is chosen as the ability to further assists in checking Fire- and Ice- types like Ninetales, Salazzle, and Vanilluxe, as Rest means Snorlax doesn't fear Toxic. The given EV spread allows Snorlax to take one Close Combat from Choice Scarf Passimian at full HP, and the rest of the EVs are put into Special Defense to further assist in checking special attackers.

Fighting-types are public enemy number one for Snorlax, so Ghost- and Fairy-type teammates, (comma) such as Jellicent, Aromatisse, Silvally-Fairy, and Rotom can help Snorlax deal with them. Snorlax also appreciates ally Silvally formes, mainly of the Dark-, Steel, and Fairy-type varieties, that -Dark, -Steel, and -Fairy, because they are immune to Trick from the likes of Rotom and Indeedee attempting to cripple Snorlax. If not running Darkest Lariat, Dark-types or Pokemon that carry Knock Off can help dispatch them, like Silvally-Dark, Sableye, and Passimian can dispatch them. Sableye is a very good standout teammate to Snorlax, as it completely blanks walls Fighting-types and appreciates Snorlax's ability to take on the special attackers that exploit its low Special Defense. Vileplume also consistently answers Fighting-types. Snorlax is a great check to Fire-types, meaning which is appreciated by teammates who that fear them, (comma) such as Excavalier, Vileplume, Virizion, and Decidueye appreciate Snorlax's ability to reliably take them on. Vileplume in particular works great with Snorlax, as it can also take on most Fighting-types well.

[SET]
name: Choice Band
move 1: Double-Edge
move 2: Earthquake
move 3: Darkest Lariat
move 4: Heat Crash / Facade
item: Choice Band
ability: Thick Fat
nature: Adamant
evs: 212 HP / 252 Atk / 44 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Choice Band Snorlax turns Snorlax's impressive bulk into opportunities to wallbreak effectively, thanks to with its great coverage and staggeringly powerful Double-Edge. Earthquake is a great compliment to Double-Edge, as it hits many Rock- and Steel-type Pokemon, such as Copperajah, Steelix, and Rhydon for high amounts of damage. Darkest Lariat is used to hit Ghost-types such as Rotom and Dhelmise that would otherwise be able to switch in. Heat Crash is the primary fourth move, as it allows Snorlax to OHKO standard Vileplume, invalidating it as a switch-in. However, Facade can be chosen instead to abuse make use of Snorlax's tendency to get burned or poisoned, granting it access to an incredibly powerful STAB attack with no drawbacks. Thick Fat is taken as the ability of choice for ease of play against turns Fire-types like Charizard and Ninetales that make into easy entry points. 44 Speed EVs are used to outpace Mudsdale and threaten it with Double-Edge as it switches in. The remaining EVs are put into HP to cushion Snorlax's bulk further.

Aromatisse makes a great partner to this Snorlax, as it can take on the Fighting-types Snorlax fears, and in return, Snorlax enjoys Aromatisse's Wishes and can safely check the Fire- and Poison-types that threaten Aromatisse. Other Pokemon that handle Fighting-types, (comma) such as Jellicent, Vileplume, and Sableye also make good teammates, and all three of these enjoy Snorlax checking Ninetales. Jellicent doesn't fear any attack besides Darkest Lariat and can burn Snorlax, so include teammates that can deal with it, (comma) like Silvally-Dark, Alolan Raichu, and Drampa make for good partners. Choice Specs Drampa and Choice Band Snorlax make for a good Normal-type offensive pairing, as they can work together to break down through shared checks, (comma) such as Copperajah, Escavalier, Steelix, and Rhydon. Drampa can also take on other Ghost-types like Rotom and Decidueye, easing prediction on with Snorlax.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Mavis, 469610]]
- Quality checked by: [[banks, 379208], [username2, userid2]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
 
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