National Dex Substitute Serperior (done)

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[SET]
Substitute + Glare (Serperior) @ Leftovers
Ability: Contrary
EVs: 56 HP / 200 SpA / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Leaf Storm
- Hidden Power Fire
- Substitute
- Glare

[SET COMMENTS]
Serperior uses its good Speed stat and potential to snowball with Contrary and Leaf Storm boosts to become a threatening wincon against balance structures including defensive staples like Gliscor, Alomomola, and Ferrothorn. Serperior is also able to support its team by paralyzing foes with Glare to support slower wallbreakers and outspeed threats such as Tornadus-T and Zamazenta. Leaf Storm boosted by Contrary means Serperior can muscle past checks such as Zapdos and Melmetal over time, but its low PP means it cannot be recklessly used early on in a game. Hidden Power Fire allows Serperior to hit Steel-types such as Ferrothorn, Gholdengo, and Melmetal. Substitute takes advantage of passive Pokemon such as Gliscor, Slowbro, Alomomola, and Ferrothorn and can prevent status from the former three, making Serperior extremely threatening against balance and bulky offense teams that often rely on these Pokemon defensively. It also prevents revenge killers like Tapu Lele and Zamazenta from taking down Serperior safely lest they get paralyzed by Glare. Glare is a fantastic utility option, as it paralyzes dangerous offensive threats such as Ogerpon-W, Garchomp, and Mega Lopunny while making checks like Tornadus-T and Pecharunt much easier to overwhelm. 56 HP EVs allow Serperior to survive a +2 Ivy Cudgel from Ogerpon-W and prevent Ferrothorn’s Power Whip and Rotom-W’s Hydro Pump from breaking its Substitute.

Serperior fits primarily on bulky offense and offense teams, where its paralysis-spreading abilities are appreciated by wallbreakers such as Mega Medicham and Tapu Lele, which can exploit paralysis on otherwise faster foes such as Tornadus-T and Garchomp. In return, these Pokemon help take down foes such as Heatran, Toxapex, and Pecharunt as well as break down teams early in the game so Serperior can clean later. Other offensive partners such as Mega Lopunny and Dragonite pair well with Serperior due to it threatening walls such as Ferrothorn and Alomomola, with Mega Lopunny pivoting it in against Alomomola as well as threatening Heatran and Gholdengo, and Dragonite pressuring foes such as Mega Charizard Y and Volcarona. Serperior’s defensive utility as a check to Ground- and Water-types such as Ogerpon-W and Great Tusk is appreciated by teammates such as Volcarona and Raging Bolt. Defensive teammates such as Gliscor, Clefable, Garchomp, and Zapdos are also valuable as checks to threats that resist Serperior’s Leaf Storm such as Heatran, Dragonite, Tornadus-T, and Galarian Slowking. In return, Serperior threatens Ogerpon-W and Gliscor for them. Gholdengo is another good teammate, as it checks Galarian Slowking, Tornadus-T, and revenge killers such as Zamazenta and Tapu Lele for Serperior while also benefiting from Glare boosting the power of Hex.

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[SET]
Substitute + Glare (Serperior) @ Leftovers
Ability: Contrary
EVs: 56 HP / 200 SpA / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Leaf Storm
- Hidden Power Fire
- Substitute
- Glare

[SET COMMENTS]
Serperior uses its good speed stat, snowballing potential with Contrary and Leaf Storm, and ability to paralyze foes with Glare to become a threatening win condition against balance structures including defensive staples like Ferrothorn, Gliscor, and Alomomola. Briefly mention the team support that Glare offers as well here Leaf Storm boosted by Contrary means Serperior can muscle past checks such as Zapdos and Melmetal over time, but its low PP means it cannot be recklessly used early on in a game. Hidden Power Fire allows Serperior to hit Steel-types such as Ferrothorn, Gholdengo, and Melmetal. Substitute takes advantage of passive Pokemon such as Gliscor, Slowbro, Alomomola, and Ferrothorn ik four mentions is a lot but Mola is super relevant so I think its important to mention it and makes Serperior threatening against balance and bulky offense teams that often run these Pokemon. It also prevents revenge killers like Tapu Lele and Zamazenta from killing Serperior safely lest they get paralyzed by Glare. Glare is a fantastic utility option, as it paralyzes dangerous offensive threats such as Ogerpon-W, Garchomp, and Mega Lopunny and makes checks to Serperior like Tornadus-T and Pecharunt much easier to overwhelm. 56 HP EVs allow Serperior’s Substitutes to not break to Ferrothorn’s Power Whip and Rotom-W’s Hydro Pump, and allows it to survive a +2 Ogerpon-W Ivy Cudgel.

Serperior fits primarily on bulky offense and offense teams, where its paralysis-spreading abilities are appreciated by wallbreakers such as Mega Medicham and Tapu Lele, which like faster foes such as Tornadus-T and Garchomp becoming slower. In return, these Pokemon help take down foes such as Heatran, Toxapex, and Pecharunt and break down teams early in the game so Serperior can clean later. Other offensive partners such as Mega Lopunny and Dragonite pair well with Serperior due to it threatening walls such as Ferrothorn and Alomomola, with Mega Lopunny pivoting it in on Alomomola. How do these two benefit Serperior? What do they threaten that Serp doesn't like? Serperior’s defensive utility as a check to Ground and Water-types such as Ogerpon-W and Great Tusk is appreciated by teammates such as Volcarona and Raging Bolt. Defensive teammates such as Gliscor and Zapdos are also valuable as checks to threats such as Heatran and Tornadus-T, and Serperior threatens foes such as opposing Gliscor and Ogerpon-W for them. Serperior struggles to break past foes that resist its Leaf Storm such as Galarian Slowking, Volcarona, and Dragonite, so teammates that can take them on such as Garchomp and Clefable form good pairs with Serperior. Can you combine the previous two sentences? They're saying basically the same thing just with different examples. Gholdengo is another good teammate, as it checks Slowking-Galar, Tornadus-T, and revenge killers such as Zamazenta and Tapu Lele for Serperior while also benefiting from Glare boosting the power of Hex.

This is really good, I was just nitpicking.

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[SET]
Substitute + Glare (Serperior) @ Leftovers
Ability: Contrary
EVs: 56 HP / 200 SpA / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Leaf Storm
- Hidden Power Fire
- Substitute
- Glare

[SET COMMENTS]
Serperior uses its good sSpeed stat and snowballing potential with Contrary and Leaf Storm to become a threatening win condition against balance structures including defensive staples like Ferrothorn, Gliscor, and Alomomola. good sentence only thing i'd say is that contrary + leafstorm doesn't break ferrothorn its the boost from contrary and then hp fire that lets it win out so maybe dont have ferro as the primary example. Serperior is also able to support its team by paralyzing foes with Glare so wallbreakers like Tapu Lele can break teams easier. think mentioning the fact that its specifically slower breakers couldn't hurt. small nitpick but i'm generally in favor of providing a line of thought to supplement examples, also fintans mentioned this line should get moved to second paragraph. I think you already mention that so maybe instead of bringing up the synergistic speed control aspect just try and mention what Glare does for Serp itself? i.e. crippling mons that would otherwise really harass Serp on the switch (rmoon most notably) Leaf Storm boosted by Contrary means Serperior can muscle past checks such as Zapdos and Melmetal over time, but its low PP means it cannot be recklessly used early on in a game. Hidden Power Fire allows Serperior to hit Steel-types such as Ferrothorn, Gholdengo, and Melmetal. Substitute takes advantage of passive Pokemon such as Gliscor, Slowbro, Alomomola, and Ferrothorn and makes Serperior extremely think just adding a small thing like that helps distinguish that with sub (as opposed to other moves) serp REALLY exploits these teams that it already tends to do very well into. also i'd like to see the role of sub expanded on a bit (dodging status or allowing serp to get a glare off against the incoming threat are the roads I'd take) threatening against balance and bulky offense teams that often rely on these Pokemon. It also prevents revenge killers like Tapu Lele and Zamazenta from killing Serperior safely lest they get paralyzed by Glare. Glare is a fantastic utility option, as it paralyzes dangerous offensive threats such as Ogerpon-W, Garchomp, and Mega Lopunny and makes checks to Serperior like Tornadus-T and Pecharunt much easier to overwhelm. 56 HP EVs allow Serperior’s Substitutes to not break to Ferrothorn’s Power Whip and Rotom-W’s Hydro Pump, and allows it to survive a +2 Ogerpon-W Ivy Cudgel. good stuff, but GP people have told me that moves should be discussed in the order they appear so just heads up

Serperior fits primarily on bulky offense and offense teams, where its paralysis-spreading abilities are appreciated by wallbreakers such as Mega Medicham and Tapu Lele, which like faster foes such as Tornadus-T and Garchomp becoming slower. personal writing nitpick but sentence feels a little chunky. maybe instead of "which like faster foes becoming slower" could be something like "mega medicham and tapu lele, which can exploit paralysis on otherwise faster foes such as Torn-t and garchomp." In return, these Pokemon help take down foes such as Heatran, Toxapex, and Pecharunt and break down teams early in the game so Serperior can clean later. synergy is a two way street this is great Other offensive partners such as Mega Lopunny and Dragonite pair well with Serperior due to it threatening walls such as Ferrothorn and Alomomola, with Mega Lopunny pivoting it in on Alomomola as well as threatening Heatran and Gholdengo, [AC] and Dragonite pressuring foes such as Moltres and Volcarona. dnite pressuring molt is nyehhhhhhh since it hates accruing burns but yard could be a good mention! great stuff otherwise Serperior’s defensive utility as a check to Ground and Water-types such as Ogerpon-W and Great Tusk is appreciated by teammates such as Volcarona and Raging Bolt. Defensive teammates such as Gliscor, Clefable, Garchomp, and Zapdos are also valuable as checks to threats that resist Serperior’s Leaf Storm such as Heatran, Dragonite, Tornadus-T, and Galarian Slowking, and in return Serperior threatens Ogerpon-W and Gliscor for them. Gholdengo is another good teammate, as it checks Slowking-Galar, Tornadus-T, and revenge killers such as Zamazenta and Tapu Lele for Serperior while also benefiting from Glare boosting the power of Hex.
good stuff overall but get those resolved and it looks good 2/2

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good stuff couple of things to get resolved but looks good otherwise 2/2 approved by fintans
 
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[SET]
Substitute + Glare (Serperior) @ Leftovers
Ability: Contrary
EVs: 56 HP / 200 SpA / 252 Spe
IVs: 0 Atk
Timid Nature
- Leaf Storm
- Hidden Power Fire
- Substitute
- Glare

[SET COMMENTS]
Serperior uses its good Speed stat and snowballing potential to snowball with Contrary and Leaf Storm boosts to become a threatening win condition wincon ("win condition" refers to a circumstance in which a game can be won, thus it can never refer to a Pokemon) against balance structures including defensive staples like Gliscor, Alomomola, (AC) and Ferrothorn. Serperior is also able to support its team by paralyzing foes with Glare to support slower wallbreakers and outspeed threats such as Tornadus-T and Zamazenta. Leaf Storm boosted by Contrary means Serperior can muscle past checks such as Zapdos and Melmetal over time, but its low PP means it cannot be recklessly used early on in a game. Hidden Power Fire allows Serperior to hit Steel-types such as Ferrothorn, Gholdengo, and Melmetal. Substitute takes advantage of passive Pokemon such as Gliscor, Slowbro, Alomomola, and Ferrothorn (RC) and can avoid harmful prevent status (Substitute itself is not avoiding the status + "harmful status" is redundant as all status effects are harmful) from the former 3 three, making Serperior extremely threatening against balance and bulky offense teams that often rely on these Pokemon defensively. It also prevents revenge killers like Tapu Lele and Zamazenta from killing taking down (Pokemon are not killed in battle) Serperior safely lest they get paralyzed by Glare. Glare is a fantastic utility option, as it paralyzes dangerous offensive threats such as Ogerpon-W, Garchomp, and Mega Lopunny and makes while making (changed to prevent successive repetition of "and") checks to Serperior like Tornadus-T and Pecharunt much easier to overwhelm. 56 HP EVs allow Serperior’s Substitutes to not break to survive a +2 Ivy Cudgel from Ogerpon-W and prevent Ferrothorn’s Power Whip and Rotom-W’s Hydro Pump (RC) and allows it to survive a +2 Ogerpon-W Ivy Cudgel from breaking its Substitute. (reworded to improve flow of the sentence)

Serperior fits primarily on bulky offense and offense teams, where its paralysis-spreading abilities are appreciated by wallbreakers such as Mega Medicham and Tapu Lele, who which can exploit paralysis on otherwise faster foes such as Tornadus-T and Garchomp. In return, these Pokemon help take down foes such as Heatran, Toxapex, and Pecharunt and as well as (changed to prevent successive repetition of "and") break down teams early in the game so Serperior can clean later. Other offensive partners such as Mega Lopunny and Dragonite pair well with Serperior due to it threatening walls such as Ferrothorn and Alomomola, with Mega Lopunny pivoting it in on against Alomomola as well as threatening Heatran and Gholdengo, and Dragonite pressuring foes such as Mega Charizard Y and Volcarona. Serperior’s defensive utility as a check to Ground- and Water-types such as Ogerpon-W and Great Tusk is appreciated by teammates such as Volcarona and Raging Bolt. Defensive teammates such as Gliscor, Clefable, Garchomp, and Zapdos are also valuable as checks to threats that resist Serperior’s Leaf Storm such as Heatran, Dragonite, Tornadus-T, and Galarian Slowking (RC). (AP) and (sentence was getting long so i split it here) In in return, (AC) Serperior threatens Ogerpon-W and Gliscor for them. Gholdengo is another good teammate, as it checks Slowking-Galar Galarian Slowking, Tornadus-T, and revenge killers such as Zamazenta and Tapu Lele for Serperior while also benefiting from Glare boosting the power of Hex.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by: https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/ineros.658067/
Quality checked by: https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/sputnik.475916/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/slopcat.661238/
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