A warstory that reminds me of GSC....

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My team:
Bronzong - Zapdos - Revenankh - Gyarados - Blissey - Deoxys-E
His team:
Crobat - Garchomp - Starmie - Dusknoir - Gyarados - Infernape

Leftovers will be erased aside from the first time it's shown... unless I forget.

Alright lets get this started....

Rules: Ladder Match, Sleep Clause, Freeze Clause, OHKO Clause, Evasion Clause, Species Clause, Strict Damage Clause
NiGeR sent out CrobaT (lvl 100 Crobat ?).
robertm sent out Iron Bell (lvl 100 Bronzong).

Is he going to hypnosis me or do something else? I've never been against a Crobat lead so I'll scout him with protect....

Iron Bell used Protect.
Iron Bell protected itself!

CrobaT used Hypnosis.
Iron Bell protected itself!

Yep. He's trying to sleep me. Luckily my sleep absorber can hit him with STAB Discharges.

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robertm switched in Spikey (lvl 100 Zapdos).
Spikey is exerting its pressure!

CrobaT used Confuse Ray.

Spikey became confused!

Confusion. Damnit.
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CrobaT used Hypnosis.

Spikey fell asleep!
Spikey is fast asleep!

As I expected, I'm now asleep.
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CrobaT used U-turn.

It's not very effective...
Spikey lost 6% of its health.

NiGeR switched in Garchomp (lvl 100 Garchomp ?).

Spikey woke up!
Spikey is confused!
Spikey used Sleep Talk.
But it failed!
Spikey's leftovers restored its health a little!
Spikey restored 6% of its health.


I woke up earlier than expected and now I've got a Garchomp threatening to Stone Edge me into oblivion. I'll send in my ever useful Bronzong.
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robertm switched in Iron Bell (lvl 100 Bronzong).
Garchomp used Dragon Claw.
It's not very effective...
A critical hit!
Iron Bell lost 39% of its health.
Iron Bell's leftovers restored its health a little!
Iron Bell restored 6% of its health.
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Iron Bell makes ground moves miss with Levitate!

Garchomp used Earthquake.
Garchomp's attack missed!

Iron Bell used Hypnosis.

Garchomp fell asleep!


I now know for sure that his Garchomp isn't choice scarfed or choice banded. So, he's probably using Swords Dance. I'll have to watch for that.
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Garchomp is fast asleep!

Iron Bell used Stealth Rock.
Pointed stones float in the air around your foe's team!

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robertm switched in Not-So Friendly Ghost (lvl 100 Revenankh ?).

Garchomp is fast asleep!

Since the incident with Crobat left my team without SR I figured this was a great time to set em up and switch to my stat upper.
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NiGeR switched in Starmie (lvl 100 Starmie).
Pointed stones dug into Starmie.
Starmie lost 12% of its health.

Not-So Friendly Ghost used Bulk Up.
Not-So Friendly Ghost's attack was raised.
Not-So Friendly Ghost's defence was raised.
Starmie's leftovers restored its health a little!

Starmie restored 6% of its health.


A free bulk up is nice. But the threat of STAB Psychic is not. I've got alot of SpDef EVS though and I've got rest... so I decide to risk it.
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Not-So Friendly Ghost used Shadow Sneak.
It's super effective!
A critical hit! !!!!

Starmie lost 94% of its health.
NiGeR's Starmie fainted.

Holy crap. That was useful.

Score: 6-5
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NiGeR switched in Dusknoir (lvl 100 Dusknoir ?).
Dusknoir is exerting its pressure!
Pointed stones dug into Dusknoir.
Dusknoir lost 12% of its health.

Not-So Friendly Ghost used Bulk Up.
Not-So Friendly Ghost's attack was raised.
Not-So Friendly Ghost's defence was raised.
Dusknoir used Pain Split.
Dusknoir restored 12% of its health.

Not-So Friendly Ghost lost 16% of its health.

Dusknoir can't do much to me after a few bulk ups. Time for yet another 6-0 sweep with Revenankh..... Revenankh = Curselax with immunities, recovery, and freaking awesome STAB.

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INSERT LENGTHY BULK UP STALL HERE.
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Not-So Friendly Ghost used Bulk Up.
Not-So Friendly Ghost's attack was raised.
Not-So Friendly Ghost's defence was raised.

Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.
It's super effective!
A critical hit! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!FUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!
Not-So Friendly Ghost lost 71% of its health.
robertm's Not-So Friendly Ghost fainted.
Dusknoir's leftovers restored its health a little!
Dusknoir restored 6% of its health.

God Damnit. There goes my easy win.


Score: 5-5
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robertm: gyah
NiGeR: i hax
NiGeR: :D
robertm: I guess thats for the CH on starmie
robertm: karka bit me on the ass
NiGeR: yup lol
robertm: *karma
robertm switched in Fluffy (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Fluffy's intimidate cut Dusknoir's attack!
Fluffy used Taunt.

Dusknoir fell for the taunt!
Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.
It's super effective!

Fluffy lost 38% of its health.


Fuck. How did I not see thunderpunch coming? I'll need to get a wish to Gyarados later...

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robertm switched in Iron Bell (lvl 100 Bronzong).

Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.

Iron Bell lost 11% of its health.


My floating bell takes another hit that would otherwise spell doom.
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NiGeR switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's intimidate cut Iron Bell's attack!
Pointed stones dug into Gyarados.
Gyarados lost 25% of its health.

Iron Bell used Protect.
Iron Bell protected itself!

Gyarados's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gyarados restored 6% of its health.


I wasn't sure of what to do here... When in doubt use protect.

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Gyarados used Dragon Dance.
Gyarados's attack was raised.
Gyarados's speed was raised.

Iron Bell used Gyro Ball.
It's not very effective...

Gyarados lost 22% of its health.


He's using Bronzong to set up... Hmmm.... Zapdos has some useful resistances and resttalk.

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robertm switched in Spikey (lvl 100 Zapdos).
Spikey is exerting its pressure!

Gyarados used Dragon Dance.
Gyarados's attack was raised.
Gyarados's speed was raised.


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druida hao has entered the room.
NiGeR: dont kno anything for fighting this (BAN ME PLEASE)
NiGeR switched in Garchomp (lvl 100 Garchomp ?).
Pointed stones dug into Garchomp.
Garchomp lost 6% of its health.

Spikey used Discharge.

It doesn't affect Garchomp...
Garchomp's leftovers restored its health a little!
Garchomp restored 6% of its health.


That was just plain lucky... Seriously. It would have been game over without this round here.

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robertm switched in Fluffy (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Fluffy's intimidate cut Garchomp's attack!

Garchomp is fast asleep!

Fluffy's leftovers restored its health a little!
Fluffy restored 6% of its health.


He'd have to be dumb not to switch. Crobat's Hypnosis or Gyarados's DD wouldn't be very fun. His Dusknoir would suck without the standard Pain Split and WoW. I'm going with taunt.
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NiGeR switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's intimidate cut Fluffy's attack!
Pointed stones dug into Gyarados.
Gyarados lost 25% of its health.

Fluffy used Taunt.

Gyarados fell for the taunt!


Gyarados, you are not permitted to DD here.


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druida hao has left the room.
Gyarados used Waterfall.
It's not very effective...

Fluffy lost 19% of its health.
Fluffy used Dragon Dance.
Fluffy's attack was raised.
Fluffy's speed was raised.
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Fluffy used Dragon Dance.
Fluffy's attack was raised.
Fluffy's speed was raised.

Gyarados used Ice Fang.

Fluffy lost 21% of its health.

Gyarados's taunt wore off!


My attack is up one stage and my speed is up two. If I ice fang and he DDs then I'll still be faster for a second Ice Fang to KO with.

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Fluffy used Ice Fang.

Gyarados lost 37% of its health.
Gyarados used Dragon Dance.
Gyarados's attack was raised.
Gyarados's speed was raised.

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NiGeR switched in Dusknoir (lvl 100 Dusknoir ?).
Dusknoir is exerting its pressure!
Pointed stones dug into Dusknoir.
Dusknoir lost 12% of its health.

Fluffy used Ice Fang.
Dusknoir lost 23% of its health.


Hmm, Dusknoir switch. Better taunt it to avoid WoW

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Fluffy used Taunt.

Dusknoir fell for the taunt!
Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.
It's super effective!

Fluffy lost 60% of its health.
Fluffy is paralysed! It may be unable to move!


God damnit I'm so fucking retarded. I forgot about ThunderPunch twice in one fight. Someone kill me so I don't produce offspring as retarded as me.
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robertm: I forgot about tpunch AGAIN >_<
NiGeR: lol

SR will kill me on my next switch in... Maybe I can KO before he KOs me. I'll run some damage calcs... 30% damage at max hp/def. Eh, its better than nothing.

Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.
It's super effective!

Fluffy lost 12% of its health.
robertm's Fluffy fainted.


Score: 4-5
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NiGeR: do sumthin
robertm: How did you outspeed +2 gyara?
robertm: I was running dmg calcs
NiGeR: i dunno

I need to start paying more attention. I didn't realize Gyarados was paralyzed from that last ThunderPunch. Zapdos can finish off Dusknoir better than the other crap I have on this team. Free switch in too.


robertm switched in Spikey (lvl 100 Zapdos).
Spikey is exerting its pressure!

NiGeR switched in Garchomp (lvl 100 Garchomp ?).
Pointed stones dug into Garchomp.
Garchomp lost 6% of its health.
Spikey used Discharge.

It doesn't affect Garchomp...

Garchomp blocks my Discharge and both my garchomp counters are dead...He's asleep at least though. Lets keep him asleep...

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robertm switched in Iron Bell (lvl 100 Bronzong).

Garchomp woke up!
Garchomp used Dragon Claw.
It's not very effective...

Iron Bell lost 18% of its health.

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Garchomp used Crunch.

Iron Bell lost 26% of its health.
Iron Bell's defence was lowered.
Iron Bell used Hypnosis.

Garchomp fell asleep!


Crunch? Never been hit with a Garchomp crunch before. TTar on the other hand... Well, he's asleep and my def is down one stage. Wishing time.

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robertm switched in Fatass (lvl 100 Blissey ?).

Garchomp is fast asleep!

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NiGeR switched in Infernape (lvl 100 Infernape ?).
Pointed stones dug into Infernape.
Infernape lost 12% of its health.

Fatass used Wish.
Fatass made a wish!

Infernape's leftovers restored its health a little!
Infernape restored 6% of its health.

This isn't good. Luckily the wish has been made.

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robertm switched in Iron Bell (lvl 100 Bronzong).

Infernape used Close Combat.

Iron Bell lost 43% of its health.

Infernape's defence was lowered.
Infernape's special defence was lowered.

The wish came true!
Iron Bell restored 50% of its health.


Is he using a choice item? Is he mixed? Is he using stat uppers? one way to find out.

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Iron Bell used Protect.
Iron Bell protected itself!
Iron Bell makes ground moves miss with Levitate!

Infernape used Earthquake.
Infernape's attack missed!

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NiGeR: shit
NiGeR: didnt mean to hit that

Doesn't matter, I protected. I think it's a physical Infernape since I've seen close combat and EQ. No choice item. I'm thinking the other two slots are fire blast for floaty steels and a stat upper. With Gyara down I only have 1 SE attack for Infernape. Zapdos's HP Ground. He resists Close Combat, is Immune to EQ, and can rest away damage. Perfect.
robertm switched in Spikey (lvl 100 Zapdos).
Spikey is exerting its pressure!

Infernape used Flamethrower.

Spikey lost 34% of its health.
Spikey was burned!
Spikey was hurt by its burn!
Spikey lost 12% of its health.

Burn is no big deal. I can rest it away and until then it prevents other worse statuses.
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Infernape used Flamethrower.

Spikey lost 34% of its health.
Spikey used Hidden Power.
It's super effective!

Infernape lost 100% of its health.
NiGeR's Infernape fainted.

Spikey was hurt by its burn!
Spikey lost 12% of its health.

Heh. Infernape is down.

Score: 4-4
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NiGeR switched in Garchomp (lvl 100 Garchomp ?).
Pointed stones dug into Garchomp.
Garchomp lost 6% of its health.


A sleeping garchomp? Perfect chance to rest off this damage.


Garchomp woke up!
Garchomp used Crunch.

Spikey lost 20% of its health.
robertm's Spikey fainted.

Fuck. Revenge kill time.

Score: 3-4
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robertm switched in Lightning (lvl 100 Deoxys-e).
Lightning is exerting its pressure!
NiGeR: wats -e?
robertm: speed
NiGeR: oo
robertm: emerald/speed/whatever
Lightning used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!

Garchomp lost 100% of its health.
NiGeR's Garchomp fainted.

Score: 3-3
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NiGeR switched in CrobaT (lvl 100 Crobat ?).
Pointed stones dug into CrobaT.
CrobaT lost 25% of its health.

Lightning used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!

CrobaT lost 71% of its health.
CrobaT used Hypnosis.

Lightning fell asleep!

CrobaT's leftovers restored its health a little!
CrobaT restored 6% of its health.

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robertm: wtf
NiGeR: lol
robertm: how the heck did crobat not die!?

I'm not leaving Deoxys in to die. I'll wait until Bronzong sleeps something and then try to get Deoxys awake. I'm assuming it's got air slash for Revenankh, in goes Blissey.

robertm switched in Fatass (lvl 100 Blissey ?).

CrobaT used Roost.
CrobaT restored 50% of its health.

Must be a tanky Crobat.
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NiGeR: he has a large dick
robertm: lol
CrobaT used Confuse Ray.

Fatass became confused!
Fatass is confused!
It hurt itself in its confusion!
Fatass lost 2% of its health.
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CrobaT used U-turn.

Fatass lost 14% of its health.

NiGeR switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's intimidate cut Fatass's attack!
Pointed stones dug into Gyarados.
Gyarados lost 25% of its health.

Fatass is confused!
It hurt itself in its confusion!
Fatass lost 1% of its health.

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robertm: goddamned confusion hax

When in doubt, protect.
Fatass snapped out of confusion!
Fatass used Protect.
Fatass protected itself!

Gyarados used Waterfall.

Fatass protected itself!

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Blissey can't take Gyarados.
robertm switched in Iron Bell (lvl 100 Bronzong).
Gyarados used Waterfall.

Iron Bell lost 43% of its health.

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I've got enough HP so that if I protect once, leftovers will give me just enough HP to survive a waterfall. Then I can hypnotize gyarados.
Iron Bell used Protect.
Iron Bell protected itself!

Gyarados used Waterfall.

Iron Bell protected itself!


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Gyarados used Waterfall.

Iron Bell lost 40% of its health.
Iron Bell used Hypnosis.

Gyarados fell asleep!

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NiGeR: god damn
NiGeR: screw confusion hacks
NiGeR: hypnoshit hax
robertm: lol
robertm: protect + lefties saves my ass all over the place

Phew. Now that that monster is out of the way I can try to scrape together a win.

NiGeR switched in CrobaT (lvl 100 Crobat ?).
Pointed stones dug into CrobaT.
CrobaT lost 25% of its health.


Bronzong has better stats to handle Crobat... But blissey has Ice Beam and better recovery. Plus I can reduce Crobat's speed to next-to-nothing.


robertm switched in Fatass (lvl 100 Blissey ?).


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CrobaT used Roost.
CrobaT restored 46% of its health.

Fatass used Thunder Wave.

CrobaT is paralysed! It may be unable to move!

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Fatass used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!

CrobaT lost 39% of its health.
CrobaT used Confuse Ray.

Fatass became confused!

CrobaT's leftovers restored its health a little!
CrobaT restored 6% of its health.

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Fatass is confused!
It hurt itself in its confusion!
Fatass lost 2% of its health.


Fucking confusion... I hate it.


CrobaT used Hypnosis.
But it failed!

Heh, you forgot about my Deoxys.

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Fatass snapped out of confusion!
Fatass used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!

CrobaT lost 40% of its health.
CrobaT used U-turn.

Fatass lost 15% of its health.

NiGeR switched in Dusknoir (lvl 100 Dusknoir ?).
Dusknoir is exerting its pressure!
Pointed stones dug into Dusknoir.
Dusknoir lost 12% of its health.

I... fucking... hate.... Dusknoir.... The only offense I have is asleep and Dusknoir will be happy to Pain Split blissey.

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Fatass used Wish.
Fatass made a wish!

Dusknoir used Will-o-wisp.
Fatass was burned!
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

I'm going to try and get Deoxys to wake up...

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robertm switched in Lightning (lvl 100 Deoxys-e).
Lightning is exerting its pressure!

Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.
It's super effective!

Lightning lost 76% of its health.
The wish came true!
Lightning restored 50% of its health.

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Lightning is fast asleep!

Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.
It's super effective!

Lightning lost 72% of its health.

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robertm: WAKE UP DAMNIT!
robertm switched in Fatass (lvl 100 Blissey ?).

Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.

It doesn't affect Fatass...

Can blissey outlast Dusknoir? May aswell try.
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Fatass used Wish.
Fatass made a wish!

Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.

Fatass lost 17% of its health.

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Fatass used Ice Beam.

Dusknoir lost 14% of its health.
Dusknoir used Will-o-wisp.

Fatass was burned!
The wish came true!
Fatass restored 20% of its health.
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

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Fatass used Protect.
Fatass protected itself!

Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.

Fatass protected itself!
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

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NiGeR switched in CrobaT (lvl 100 Crobat ?).
Pointed stones dug into CrobaT.
CrobaT lost 25% of its health.

Fatass used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!

CrobaT lost 9% of its health.
NiGeR's CrobaT fainted.

Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

Fuck yea. No more sleeping.

Score: 3-2
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robertm: this is gonna take all day.....
NiGeR switched in Gyarados (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's intimidate cut Fatass's attack!
Pointed stones dug into Gyarados.
Gyarados lost 25% of its health.

hybridherp has entered the room.
Gyarados is fast asleep!

Fatass used Ice Beam.

Gyarados lost 14% of its health.
NiGeR's Gyarados fainted.

Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

Yes. Now I have three pokes to take on dusknoir. To bad one is asleep, one has no offense, and one has 11% of his HP left.

Score: 3-1
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hybridherp has left the room.
NiGeR switched in Dusknoir (lvl 100 Dusknoir ?).
Dusknoir is exerting its pressure!
Pointed stones dug into Dusknoir.
Dusknoir lost 12% of its health.

Fatass used Ice Beam.

Dusknoir lost 14% of its health.
Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.

Fatass lost 15% of its health.
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

Ice beam has a 10% chance of freezing. I know for a fact that blissey can live long enough to use all 16 ice beams. I'll go for a freeze, then I can take all day to kill Dusknoir. It's not like it has flame wheel and I'm definately not attacking it with a fire attack. I've got about a 60% chance to get a freeze from my remaining Ice Beams. Otherwise It's just game over. Stall Time!

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Fatass used Wish.
Fatass made a wish!

Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.

Fatass lost 16% of its health.
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

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Fatass used Protect.
Fatass protected itself!

Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.

Fatass protected itself!
The wish came true!
Fatass restored 50% of its health.
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

Protect + Wish = Owns. Wish and softboild may heal more but protect has far more uses.

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Fatass used Wish.
Fatass made a wish!
Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.
Fatass lost 16% of its health.
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

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Fatass used Ice Beam.
Dusknoir lost 14% of its health.
Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.
Fatass lost 16% of its health.
The wish came true!
Fatass restored 50% of its health.
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

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Fatass used Wish.
Fatass made a wish!
Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.
Fatass lost 18% of its health.
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

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Fatass used Protect.
Fatass protected itself!
Dusknoir used Thunderpunch.
Fatass protected itself!
The wish came true!
Fatass restored 50% of its health.
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

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Fatass used Ice Beam.

Dusknoir lost 15% of its health.
Dusknoir was frozen solid!
Dusknoir is frozen solid!

Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

FUCK YEAH!!!!!!!!!!! GG man, it's over. I'll throw in Deoxys-E and have him wake up. Then I'll just use his ice beam to kill Dusknoir.

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robertm: lol
robertm: that was fucking lucky
NiGeR: god damn
robertm switched in Lightning (lvl 100 Deoxys-e).
Lightning is exerting its pressure!

Dusknoir is frozen solid!


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Lightning is fast asleep!

Dusknoir is frozen solid!

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Lightning woke up!
Lightning used Ice Beam.

Dusknoir lost 20% of its health.
Dusknoir is frozen solid!

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Lightning used Ice Beam.

Dusknoir lost 21% of its health.
Dusknoir is frozen solid!

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Lightning used Ice Beam.
A critical hit!

Dusknoir lost 39% of its health.
Dusknoir is frozen solid!

Hahaha! This is so over. The critical hit is just rubbing it in....



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Lightning used Ice Beam.
Dusknoir lost 23% of its health.
Dusknoir was defrosted!
Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.
It's super effective!
Lightning lost 2% of its health.
robertm's Lightning fainted.

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What the fuck? Ice Beam isn't a fire move....

upoppo has entered the room.
robertm: Fuck, how'd you defrost??
upoppo has left the room.
robertm: I don't have a fire move on my team anywhere
NiGeR: i guess it defrosts after a while
NiGeR: otherwise itd be cheap
robertm: fuck... I didn't know that >_<
NiGeR: me neither lol
robertm: When did they change it?
NiGeR: i dunno lol

My only hope now is an unbearably long stall war... Ice Beam is low on PP... My chance of getting another freeze are very low... If I can just pass a wish to bronzong then maybe he can help out.


robertm switched in Fatass (lvl 100 Blissey ?).
Fatass used Ice Beam.

Dusknoir lost 15% of its health.
Dusknoir used Pain Split.
Dusknoir restored 86% of its health.

Fatass lost 39% of its health.

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Fatass used Wish.
Fatass made a wish!

Dusknoir used Will-o-wisp.

Fatass was burned!
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

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Fatass used Protect.
Fatass protected itself!
Dusknoir used Will-o-wisp.
Fatass protected itself!
The wish came true!
Fatass restored 50% of its health.
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.

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NiGeR: how much pp wish have?
robertm: 9 left
NiGeR: :(
Fatass used Ice Beam.
Dusknoir lost 14% of its health.
Dusknoir used Will-o-wisp.
But it failed!
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.


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Fatass used Wish.
Fatass made a wish!
Dusknoir used Will-o-wisp.
But it failed!
Fatass was hurt by its burn!
Fatass lost 12% of its health.


Why the hell is he using WoW? May aswell take advantage of it.

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robertm switched in Iron Bell (lvl 100 Bronzong).
Dusknoir used Will-o-wisp.
Iron Bell was burned!
The wish came true!
Iron Bell restored 50% of its health.
Iron Bell was hurt by its burn!
Iron Bell lost 12% of its health.

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robertm: Fuck yea
Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.
Iron Bell lost 20% of its health.
Iron Bell used Hypnosis.
Dusknoir fell asleep!
Iron Bell was hurt by its burn!
Iron Bell lost 12% of its health.

This would be great... But Bronzong is far to low of HP. I'll pas him a wish and repeat this again.

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robertm switched in Fatass (lvl 100 Blissey ?).

Dusknoir is fast asleep!

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Fatass used Wish.
Fatass made a wish!

Dusknoir is fast asleep!

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robertm switched in Iron Bell (lvl 100 Bronzong).
Dusknoir is fast asleep!
The wish came true!
Iron Bell restored 50% of its health.
Iron Bell was hurt by its burn!
Iron Bell lost 12% of its health.

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Dusknoir is due to wake up any second now....

Iron Bell used Protect.
Iron Bell protected itself!
Dusknoir woke up!
Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.
Dusknoir's attack missed!
Iron Bell was hurt by its burn!
Iron Bell lost 12% of its health.

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Hypnotize him and take the win.


Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.

Iron Bell lost 18% of its health.
Iron Bell used Hypnosis.
Iron Bell's attack missed!
Iron Bell was hurt by its burn!
Iron Bell lost 12% of its health.

NOOOOOO!!!!

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Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.
Iron Bell lost 18% of its health.
Iron Bell used Hypnosis.
Dusknoir fell asleep!
Iron Bell was hurt by its burn!
Iron Bell lost 12% of its health.


Back at square one except now I have less PP..... Hypnosis: always failing when it's most needed.

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NiGeR: god damn
NiGeR: lol
NiGeR: hax
robertm switched in Fatass (lvl 100 Blissey ?).

Dusknoir is fast asleep!

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Fatass used Wish.
Fatass made a wish!
Dusknoir woke up!
Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.
It doesn't affect Fatass...

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Blissey's outta Ice Beams.... Looks like I gotta Gyro Ball it.


robertm switched in Iron Bell (lvl 100 Bronzong).
Dusknoir used Shadow Punch.
Iron Bell lost 17% of its health.
robertm's Iron Bell fainted.

Fuck....

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robertm switched in Fatass (lvl 100 Blissey ?).
NiGeR: yes
robertm: my blissey's ice beam is outta PP.
robertm: gg man
NiGeR: gg
robertm: best one i've had in awhile
NiGeR: lol same
NiGeR: never been so close
robertm: think this would be a good warstory?
NiGeR: hellz ya lol
NiGeR: i might save this log

We cut it off at this point since I could stall all day with Wish/Protect and I'd have to run out of PP to use struggle so I'd get stuck with thunder wave while he has thunderpunches to use. I loose no matter what at this point and theres no need to have a stall war all day to prove it.

Slops:
-Me for fucking up on multiple occasions. Especially the fucking thunderpunch on Gyarados, damn that was a stupid mistake.
-Revenankh for wasting 10 minutes stat-upping and then dieing to a critical hit.
-Bronzong missing when I need it most.
-Deoxys' lazy ass for sleeping so long.
-Me again for not understanding freeze fully.

Props:
-Blissey for being unkillable
-Deoxys revenge killing Garchomp, preventing a sweep.
-Fucking hax taking care of Starmie and buying me time with a freeze
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Revenankh was the second CAP Project.

I went through so much trouble trying to make it look good.... that color coded stuff takes forever. How do you suggest I fix it?
 
The only main problem is that it is not enticing. A long log + no story generally drives people away. As good as of battle as it might be you have to incorperate a story. And to be honest I find stories all in red + blue + bold to be harmful to the eyes. Plain text is not a bad thing.
 
Seriously, what is with everyone just making "warstories" with just 1 quick comment after each move. warSTORY.

I could have sworn I was supposed to say what i was thinking at the time...

If you want me to tell you a story I know one about a priest and a rabbi.

I'll fix the text.
 
Some things to remember:
-No one cares what trendy nickname you or your opponent decided on for Pikachu. Do not include them in stories because it makes them difficult to follow.
-When you watch tennis, do you watch it to see the ball move back and forth or do you watch it for what the players do that mixes it up and the commentary that follows? Warstories should have some level of excitement to them, not 40 lines of back-and-forth with bulk-up stalls or the like. The commentary on plays is especially important, since the reader doesn't even actually see what each Pokemon is doing (not that the 6-7 frames of attack animation lead to much entertainment, but it's much better than a wall of text listing attacks used).
-Don't post it if it sucks. If you don't know whether or not it sucks, ask someone before posting it; someone who has written awesome war stories, a mod, someone. If they tell you to fuck off, if they tell you it sucks, if they don't respond, chances are you shouldn't post it.
-Pictures at the start of a warstory colorize and draw the reader in. They're not available throughout most war stories, but it does offer some imagery to go with what will be a long story.
-Don't suck. I cannot emphasize this enough. If you are a bad writer, cannot scribble out more than one sentence about what you put into your battle, your opponent or you play like shit, your battle is not interesting, your battle does not have some merit that would make someone want to hear about it over picking their nose or checking their trade thread's status, you do not have a close enough battle or anything else I did not just list that people will complain about for, you should not post your story because no one will care enough to do more than tell you it was bad and that you should feel bad for posting it.

Other things to add that make your story better:
Scores: this includes remaining pokemon, HPs of remaining pokemon, status inflicted, recaps every now and again of who has what and what's going on with it.
Bold/Color/Plaintext: Bold comments, color-coded battle text, plaintext scores, chatlog, etc.
SGP: Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation- have these.

Last but not least:
If you want me to tell you a story I know one about a priest and a rabbi.
Don't be a cockbite. If people walk away from your story not knowing who won or lost (as is the case in your story), you've failed on some epic degree. Do not do that. It is not interesting, fun or cute. No one wants to waste their time reading that. You will waste your time for writing it. If you manage to accomplish this, which is to say failing that greatly is an accomplishment, take your lickings and gather whatever constructive criticism you can from your audience, who will be as nice or brutal as they deem fit.
 
Eh, I failed... best to just let this die I guess.

I'm going to go through the warstory archives to see how to improve next time. I'd prefer this to be locked since it's not that good...

It was just a random CAP match that I thought was interesting because of the twists towards the middle-end.
 
Also, I don't think warstories involving the CAP pokemon really have a place in Stark Mountain. This is the forum for the discussion of the D/P metagame, which Revenankh is not a part of. I think this would probably be better suited to the CAP forum. Anyway, regarding the actual post, I'm going to have to agree with everybody in saying it was a little too log intesensive. Especially in such a long battle, you really need some indepth insights to keep the reader from becoming bored. Pictures at the beginning also help. It's not really the worst warstory, but I think it could have been alot better
 
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