Abomasnow (Physical Attacker)

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JellyOs

[SET]
name: Physical Attacker
move 1: Ice Shard
move 2: Wood Hammer / Seed Bomb
move 3: Protect
move 4: Leech Seed / Earthquake
item: Leftovers
ability: Snow Warning
nature: Adamant
evs: 188 HP / 252 Atk / 68 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

<p>When looking at Abomasnow's stat spread, "physical attacker" isn't the first thing that comes to mind. Despite this setback, the Frosted Tree Pokemon can use an extremely effective physical set that focuses on wearing the opponent down while sporting more bulk than a mixed set would have. The set's main selling points are priority Ice Shard, a powerful Wood Hammer or Seed Bomb, and reliable hail setup thanks to greater bulk than other sets.</p>

<p>Abomasnow can use its STAB moves to revenge kill or KO a slower opponent. Ice Shard is one of the reasons this set is so effective; being able to revenge kill Dragon- and Ground-types easily is a great asset. Ice Shard can severely dent, if not OHKO, Latios, Latias, Dragonite, Salamence, Landorus, and Gliscor, making the tree a great support Pokemon for teams that are weak to those threats. Wood Hammer is a powerful STAB move that is great for heavily damaging foes that take neutral damage from Grass-type attacks, though the recoil can sometimes be undesirable. If that is the case, Seed Bomb is an acceptable option to run instead. Protect is a great move for stalling the opponent and scouting, and can be used to increase Leech Seed's effectiveness. Protect and Leech Seed, in tandem with hail and Leftovers, is an excellent way to slowly wear down the opponent while recovering Abomasnow's own HP. Alternatively, Earthquake is a good option that can be used to hit and KO some of Abomasnow's more common counters. Incoming or unsuspecting Pokemon that think that they can safely switch into the the tree, such as Heatran and Ninetales, will be hit extremely hard by Earthquake. If one chooses to run Earthquake, they will also gain the advantage of being able to hit all permanent weather starters for serious damage.</p>

[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

<p>The given EV spread allows for near maximum bulk while still retaining enough Speed to outspeed most Tyranitar and Jellicent. 188 HP EVs also produces a HP stat that maximizes recovery from Leftovers and Leech Seed. HP can be maxed out—also a Leftovers number—to provide better bulk, but Abomasnow will miss the Speed. The Attack EVs are self-explanatory, as this Abomasnow wants to hit as hard as possible. An item swap is also viable for more power. Life Orb can be used to make Abomasnow's attacks much more powerful but it is generally unadvised because the recoil severely hampers Abomasnow's longevity. If you want a bit of both worlds, Expert Belt is a good choice as it provides more power for Ice Shard, while it does not deplete HP.</p>

<p>Because this set loses coverage by not packing Hidden Power, quite a number of Pokemon can wall it, the most notable of which are Steel- and Fire-types. Steel types such as Jirachi, Scizor, Skarmory, and Ferrothorn can all take Abomasnow's attacks with ease and retaliate with either STAB Steel-type attacks or other coverage moves they run. Fire-type Pokemon such as Ninetales, Heatran, and Chandelure also resist both of Abomasnow's STAB attacks and can net an OHKO with a 4x super effective STAB move of their own. Although Earthquake can help check these Pokemon, their harsh flames are just too overwhelming for poor Abomasnow. As a teammate, Tentacruel can help ease the tree's weaknesses with its numerous resistances, Rapid Spin support, and ability to lay Toxic Spikes. Pokemon that resist Abomasnow's weaknesses and can damage Steel- and Fire-types are also great team options. Two Pokemon that fill this role excellently are Gliscor and Heatran because they synergize well with Abomasnow. Finally, because a burn is so crippling to this set, a cleric can be of great use while also healing any poison and paralysis.</p>
 
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JellyOs said:
[SET]
name: Abomasnow (Physical Attacker)
move 1: Ice Shard
move 2: Wood Hammer/ Seed Bomb
move 3: Protect
move 4: Leech Seed / Earthquake
item: Leftovers
ability: Snow Warning
nature: Adamant
evs: 188 HP / 252 Atk / 68 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

<p>When looking at Abomasnow's stat spread, physical attacker isn't the first thing that jumps into one's mind. Despite its oddity, the Frosted Tree Pokemon can work an extremely effective set that focuses on wearing the opponent down while retaining more bulk than a mixed set would let you. The set's main selling points are its capabilities to pack a massive punch with priority Ice Shard, rip out chunks of the opponent's health with Wood Hammer or Seed Bomb,(add comma) and set up Hail hail more reliably due to having more bulk than other Abomasnow sets. Tone it down a little. Abomasnow isn't really packing a massive punch with Ice Shard so I suggest that you change that.</p>

<p>Abomsnow Abomasnow can do a great deal of damage utilizing its STAB moves to revenge kill or KO a slower opponent. Ice Shard is one of the reasons this set is so effective; being able to revenge Dragon- and Ground- t(add the letter "t")ypes so easily is a great talent. It Ice Shard can severly dent, if not OHKO, Latios, Latias, Dragonite, Salamence, Landorus, and Gliscor,(add comma) making the tree a great support to teams weak to those Pokemon. Wood Hammer is a powerful STAB move great for heavily damaging a neutral opponent, although the recoil can sometimes be undesired. If that is the case,(add comma) Seed Bomb is also an acceptable option to run instead. Protect is a great move in general for stalling the opponent and for scouting while also making Abomasnow's Leech Seed startagey even better. Protect is a great move for allowing Abomasnow to stall an opponent when used in tandem with Leech Seed; Protect is also useful for scouting for super effective moves. Protect and Leech Seed, in tandem with Hail hail and Leftovers, give gives Abomasnow an excellent way of damaging the opponent while recovering your own health. If one finds this unpreferable for their own uses, Earthquake is a good option to hit and KO some of Abomasnow's more common counters. Incoming, or unsuspecting,(remove comma) Pokemon that come in on the tree,(add comma) such as Heatran and and Ninetails Ninetales,(add comma) will be hit extremely hard by a stray Earthquake. If one chooses to run Earthquake,(add comma) they will also gain the advantage of hitting all weather starters,(add comma) bar other Abomasnow and Hippowdon,(add comma) for serious damage.</p>

[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

<p>The given EV spread allows for near maximum bulk while still retaining some speed, enough to outspeed most Tyranitar and Jellicent. 188 HP EVs also gives a Abomasnow a convienant number for Leftovers recovery and Leech Seed. HP can be maxed out, also a Leftovers number, to provide better bulk, although Abomasnow will miss the speed Speed. The Attack EVs are self-explanitory, as this Abomasnow wants to hit as hard as possible. An item swap is also viable for more power. A Life Orb can be used to make attacks much mor epowerful more powerful,(remove comma) but it is generally unadvised due to the recoil severely hampering Abomasnow's longevity. If you want a bit of both worlds, Expert Belt is also a good item, as it provides providing more power to Ice Shards and not depleting doesn't deplete HP.</p>

<p>Steel-types can cause a lot of trouble for the snowy tree. Jirachi and Scizor are very notable examples of that, as they can take any attack (bar Earthquake for the former) and either heal the damage or KO Abomasnow, respectively. Choice Band Scizor must be wary of switching into Leech Seed though because two turns of Leech Seed damage and Hail can deplete his health quite a bit. Other noticable Steels that wall Abomasnow are Ferrothorn and Skarmory, who can deal massive amounts of damage with either Steel- or Flying-type attacks. In addition to Steels, Abomasnow must be wary of Fire types, as they have a 4x super effective STAB and resist both Grass and Ice. Notable examples of these Pokemon are Chandelure, Ninetails and Heatran. As far as teammates go, Tentacreul is an excellent one. He can take the super effective Fire, Bug, Steel and Fighting moves Abomasnow has trouble with as well as being able to remove entry hazards via Rapid Spin. Tentacruel can also add poison support through Toxic Spikes to aid a Leech Seed and Protect strategy. Heatran is also a good partner because it can lay down Stealth Rock, provide an answer for various Steel-types, and take Fire-type blows Abomasnow hates. Gliscor lies in the same realm, although he can take Fighting-type attacks unlike Heatran. Gliscor can also run Taunt to deal with Skarmory and Ferrothorn better. Finally, as this set is purely physical, a Burn will cripple this set for a match so clerics can provide helpful support for Abomasnow.</p> This entire section needs to be reworded. You go into great detail about all of Abomasnow's checks and counters, but that's the job of the "Checks and Counters" section. If you want to talk about all of the checks and counters in the Additional Comments section, I would phrase it something like this: "Heatran and Ninetales can defeat Abomasnow with their powerful Fire-type attacks. Thus, Tentacruel is an excellent partner for Abomasnow as the squid is able to check the aforementioned Fire-types. Additionally, Tentacruel can provide Rapid Spin support for Abomasnow which is useful due to Abomasnow's Stealth Rock weakness." I'm not going to rewrite this for you because it needs to be in your words for the analysis to flow better. Additionally, your writing got a lot lazier in the last section of the AC. I suggest you look ever the Spelling and Grammar Standards when you go back to rewrite this last paragraph.
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Took Sir's advice, shortened/redid last paragraph, calmed down the first one. Didn't implement any of his grammar corrections, waiting for an official GP for that.
 
You don't need the word of an official GP to implement changes. Use your own discretion when dealing with subjective edits.

Having said that, Sir, you've missed quite a few errors. In reading the AC alone, I've already found two spelling mistakes. I'll stamp this, but there are additional edits coming up.
 
,(add comma) bar other Abomasnow and Hippowdon,(add comma)

You can hit Hippowdon hard with Wood Hammer, just including bar other Abomasnow

Implemented Sir's check

EDIT: November Blue, Are you posting some edits before it's an official check?
 
[SET]
name: Abomasnow (Physical Attacker) Physical Attacker
move 1: Ice Shard
move 2: Wood Hammer(Space)/ Seed Bomb
move 3: Protect
move 4: Leech Seed / Earthquake
item: Leftovers
ability: Snow Warning
nature: Adamant
evs: 188 HP / 252 Atk / 68 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

<p>When looking at Abomasnow's stat spread, "physical attacker"(Quotes) isn't the first thing that jumps into one's comes to mind. Despite its oddity, the Frosted Tree Pokemon can work use an extremely effective physical set that focuses on wearing the opponent down while retaining sporting more bulk than a mixed set would let you have. The set's main selling points are capabilities to pack a decent punch with priority Ice Shard, hit hard with a powerful Wood Hammer or Seed Bomb(Comma) and set up Hail reliably due to more bulk than other Abomasnow sets reliable hail setup thanks to greater bulk than other sets.</p>

<p>Abomsnow Abomasnow can do a great deal of damage utilizing use its STAB moves to revenge kill or KO a slower opponent. Ice Shard is one of the reasons this set is so effective; being able to revenge kill Dragon- and Ground- ypes Ground-types so easily is a great talent. It Ice Shard can severly severely dent, if not OHKO,(Remove Comma) Latios, Latias, Dragonite, Salamence, Landorus, and Gliscor(Comma) making the tree a great support to Pokemon for teams that are weak to those Pokemon threats. Wood Hammer is a powerful STAB move that is great for heavily damaging a foes that take neutral opponent damage from Grass-type attacks, although the recoil can sometimes be undesired undesirable. If that is the case(Comma) Seed Bomb is also an acceptable option to run instead. Protect is a great move in general for stalling the opponent and for scouting(Comma) while also making Abomasnow's Leech Seed startagey even better and can be used to increase Leech Seed's effectiveness. Protect and Leech Seed, in tandem with Hail hail and Leftovers,(Remove Comma) give is an excellent way of damaging to slowly wear down the opponent while recovering your own health Abomasnow's own HP. If one finds this unpreferable for their own uses Alternatively, Earthquake is a good option that can be used to hit and KO some of Abomasnow's more common counters. Incoming,(Remove Comma) or unsuspecting,(Remove Comma) Pokemon that come in on the that think that they can safely switch into the tree(Comma) such as Heatran and and Ninetails Ninetales(Comma) will be hit extremely hard by a stray Earthquake. If one chooses to run Earthquake they will also gain the advantage of hitting being able to hit all permanent weather starters for serious damage.</p>

[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

<p>The given EV spread allows for maximum bulk while still retaining some speed, enough Speed to outspeed most Tyranitar and Jellicent. 188 HP EVs also gives a convienant number for Leftovers recovery and Leech Seedproduces a HP stat that maximizes recovery from Leftovers and Leech Seed. HP can be maxed out,(Remove Comma) also a Leftovers number, (Em Dash —)which also produces a Leftovers number(Em Dash —, no spaces) to provide better bulk, although but Abomasnow will miss the speed Speed. The Attack EVs are self-explanitory self-explanatory, as this Abomasnow variant wants to hit as hard as possible. An item swap is also viable for more power. A Life Orb can be used to make Abomasnow's attacks much more powerful, but it is generally unadvised due to because the recoil severely hampering hampers Abomasnow's longevity. If you want a bit of both worlds, Expert Belt is also a good item choice, providing more power to Ice Shards and not depleting HP.</p>

<p>Because this set loses coverage by not packing a Hidden Power, quite a number of Pokemon can wall it.(Remove Period)(Comma) The the most notable of which are Steel- and Fire-types. Steel types such as Jirachi, Scizor, Skarmory and Ferrothorn can all take Abomasnow's attacks with ease and retaliate back with either STAB Steel-type attacks or other coverage moves they run. Fire-types Pokemon like such as Ninetails Ninetales, Heatran(Comma) and Chandelure also resist both of Abomasnow's STAB attacks and can net an OHKO with a 4x super effective STAB move of their own. Although Earthquake can help check these Pokemon, it is often too overwelming their harsh flames are just too overwhelming of a situation for poor Abomasnow. As a teammate, Tentacruel can help ease the tree's weaknesses with its numerous resistances, Rapid Spin support, and ability to lay Toxic Spikes. Pokemon that resist Abomasnow's weaknesses and can damage Steel- and Fire-types are also great team options. Two Pokemon that fill this role excellently are Gliscor and Heatran, both with their individual pros and cons. Finally, because a burn is so crippling to this set, a cleric can be of great use while also stopping healing any poison and paralysis.</p>

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No blue i didnt check the second paragraph because i told him to rewrite it. Ik he spelt ninetales incorrectly but once again i didn check tht part of the analysis

Im on my ipod so excuse any typos
 
JellyOs said:
[SET]
name: Physical Attacker
move 1: Ice Shard
move 2: Wood Hammer / Seed Bomb
move 3: Protect
move 4: Leech Seed / Earthquake
item: Leftovers
ability: Snow Warning
nature: Adamant
evs: 188 HP / 252 Atk / 68 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

<p>When looking at Abomasnow's stat spread, "physical attacker" isn't the first thing that comes to mind. Despite its oddity, the Frosted Tree Pokemon can use an extremely effective physical set that focuses on wearing the opponent down while sporting more bulk than a mixed set would have. The set's main selling points are priority Ice Shard, a powerful Wood Hammer or Seed Bomb, and reliable hail setup thanks to greater bulk than other sets.</p>

<p>Abomasnow can use its STAB moves to revenge kill or KO a slower opponent. Ice Shard is one of the reasons this set is so effective; being able to revenge kill Dragon- and Ground-types so easily is a great talent asset. Ice Shard can severely dent, if not OHKO, (add comma)Latios, Latias, Dragonite, Salamence, Landorus, and Gliscor, making the tree a great support Pokemon for teams that are weak to those threats. Wood Hammer is a powerful STAB move that is great for heavily damaging foes that take neutral damage from Grass-type attacks, although the recoil can sometimes be undesirable. If that is the case, Seed Bomb is an acceptable option to run instead. Protect is a great move in general for stalling the opponent and scouting, and can be used to increase Leech Seed's effectiveness. Protect and Leech Seed, in tandem with hail damage and Leftovers is an excellent way to slowly wear down the opponent while recovering Abomasnow's own HP. Alternatively, Earthquake is a good option that can be used to hit and KO some of Abomasnow's more common counters. Incoming or unsuspecting Pokemon that think that they can safely switch into the the tree, such as Heatran and Ninetales, will be hit extremely hard by a stray Earthquake. If one chooses to run Earthquake, they will also gain the advantage of being able to hit all permanent weather starters, apart from Hippowdon and Politoed, for serious damage.</p>

[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

<p>The given EV spread allows for near maximum bulk while still retaining enough Speed to outspeed most Tyranitar and Jellicent. 188 HP EVs also produces a HP stat that maximizes recovery from Leftovers and Leech Seed. HP can be maxed out—also a Leftovers number—to provide better bulk, but Abomasnow will miss the Speed. The Attack EVs are self-explanatory, as this Abomasnow wants to hit as hard as possible. An item swap is also viable for more power. Life Orb can be used to make Abomasnow's attacks much more powerful but it is generally unadvised because the recoil severely hampers Abomasnow's longevity. If you want a bit of both worlds, Expert Belt is a good choice as it provides more power to Ice Shard and, while not depleting Abomasnow's HP.</p>

<p>Because this set loses coverage by not packing Hidden Power, quite a number of Pokemon can wall it, the most notable of which are Steel- and Fire-types. Steel types such as Jirachi, Scizor, Skarmory and Ferrothorn can all take Abomasnow's attacks with ease and retaliate with either STAB Steel-type attacks or other coverage moves they run. Fire-type Pokemon such as Ninetales, Heatran, and Chandelure also resist both of Abomasnow's STAB attacks and can net an OHKO with a 4x super effective STAB move of their own. Although Earthquake can help check these Pokemon, their harsh flames are just too overwhelming for poor Abomasnow. As a teammate, Tentacruel can help ease the tree's weaknesses with its numerous resistances, Rapid Spin support, and ability to lay Toxic Spikes. Pokemon that resist Abomasnow's weaknesses and can damage Steel- and Fire-types are also great team options. Two Pokemon that fill this role excellently are Gliscor and Heatran, both with their individual respective pros and cons. Finally, because a burn is so crippling to this set, a cleric can be of great use while also healing any poison and paralysis.</p>
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JellyOs said:
-Didn't include damage, not really necessary IMO



-Wood Hammer

Other than that I put in your changes
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My only point about that second check was that it sounded that you were saying that Earthquake hit all permanent weather starters for heavy damage. Otherwise this looks fine.
 
good work

<p>When looking at Abomasnow's stat spread, "physical attacker" isn't the first thing that comes to mind. Despite its odditythis setback<oddity is not the word for this, setback seems more appropriate>, the Frosted Tree Pokemon can use an extremely effective physical set that focuses on wearing the opponent down while sporting more bulk than a mixed set would have. The set's main selling points are priority Ice Shard, a powerful Wood Hammer or Seed Bomb, and reliable hail setup thanks to greater bulk than other sets.</p>

<p>Abomasnow can use its STAB moves to revenge kill or KO a slower opponent. Ice Shard is one of the reasons this set is so effective; being able to revenge kill Dragon- and Ground-types so easily is a great asset. Ice Shard can severely dent, if not OHKO, Latios, Latias, Dragonite, Salamence, Landorus, and Gliscor, making the tree a great support Pokemon for teams that are weak to those threats. Wood Hammer is a powerful STAB move that is great for heavily damaging foes that take neutral damage from Grass-type attacks, althoughthough the recoil can sometimes be undesirable. If that is the case, Seed Bomb is an acceptable option to run instead. Protect is a great move in general for stalling the opponent and scouting, and can be used to increase Leech Seed's effectiveness. Protect and Leech Seed, in tandem with hail and Leftovers,(comma) is an excellent way to slowly wear down the opponent while recovering Abomasnow's own HP. Alternatively, Earthquake is a good option that can be used to hit and KO some of Abomasnow's more common counters. Incoming or unsuspecting Pokemon that think that they can safely switch into the the tree, such as Heatran and Ninetales, will be hit extremely hard by Earthquake. If one chooses to run Earthquake, they will also gain the advantage of being able to hit all permanent weather starters for serious damage.</p>

<p>The given EV spread allows for near maximum bulk while still retaining enough Speed to outspeed most Tyranitar and Jellicent. 188 HP EVs also produces a HP stat that maximizes recovery from Leftovers and Leech Seed. HP can be maxed out—also a Leftovers number—to provide better bulk, but Abomasnow will miss the Speed. The Attack EVs are self-explanatory, as this Abomasnow wants to hit as hard as possible. An item swap is also viable for more power. Life Orb can be used to make Abomasnow's attacks much more powerful but it is generally unadvised because the recoil severely hampers Abomasnow's longevity. If you want a bit of both worlds, Expert Belt is a good choice as it provides more power tofor Ice Shard, while it does not depletingdeplete Abomasnow's HP.</p>

<p>Because this set loses coverage by not packing Hidden Power, quite a number of Pokemon can wall it, the most notable of which are Steel- and Fire-types. Steel types such as Jirachi, Scizor, Skarmory,(comma) and Ferrothorn can all take Abomasnow's attacks with ease and retaliate with either STAB Steel-type attacks or other coverage moves they run. Fire-type Pokemon such as Ninetales, Heatran, and Chandelure also resist both of Abomasnow's STAB attacks and can net an OHKO with a 4x super effective STAB move of their own. Although Earthquake can help check these Pokemon, their harsh flames are just too overwhelming for poor Abomasnow. As a teammate, Tentacruel can help ease the tree's weaknesses with its numerous resistances, Rapid Spin support, and ability to lay Toxic Spikes. Pokemon that resist Abomasnow's weaknesses and can damage Steel- and Fire-types are also great team options. Two Pokemon that fill this role excellently are Gliscor and Heatran, both with their respective pros and consbecause they synergize well with Abomasnow<?>. Finally, because a burn is so crippling to this set, a cleric can be of great use while also healing any poison and paralysis.</p>
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